Hi smitzy!
Was away and so could not read/reply.
Have just finished reading the last scenes and all I can say is, please, would you please pay a visit to the the CVs and explain to them how to save IPKKND? In fact, just give them your scenes! Better yet, join the team. That way, at least we know we'll get IPKKND instead of a B grade run of the mill thriller or mystery or whatever else takes their fancy at that time!
Your scenes were great, since I watched them altogether, I'll just make one comment. Which might be pretty long and all over the place. Sorry!
Loved how the press conference was handled by ASR (YAH!!! Got to see his shatir dimaag - that seems to have gone for lunch in reel life! I mean every body and their dog seems to have a one up on poor ASR in the show. Now he's going to be made a fool of by a woman. That he hasn't seen for God knows how many years! Ah! But let's not taint your story with that crap!) The ring! Brilliant! And he made sure she was watching!! Ah! SHATIR DIMAAG!!! MUAAHHH!!! Especially loved the way he rescued her and took care of her. And how he controlled himself. Brownie points! Enjoyed the almost amusing scene in the morning when she got up and was completely spaced out! Haha! The way you describe that and her mutterings, that was so classic.
Now, I've said this before, perhaps many times, but I'll say it again - you have a very eloquent way of describing things that makes the environment so real. I felt the surroundings. The sun in her eyes...
And then you did it again! Left me hanging! After giving him an enormous, gigantic drop of hope, she runs away! And I die! Yah! I think cliffhangers should be banned!
So.
Now he knows that she did not want to end things with him. Now what?
I still don't want him to forget that he left her at the altar!!
That he discarded her with no more than a second thought. With a complete disregard to her feelings and emotions. And her reputation.
Discarded like an old t-shirt. Without a second thought.
How? How the hell can he redeem himself of that? As far as I am concerned, there is nothing he can do or say that will atone him. And to add fuel to the fire, what if Dad's diary was never found? Would he still go after her? Is his love unconditional?
So I'm really intrigued to find out how you do this. Because I do want them to be together. And yeah, if you love someone you forgive them anything, blah, blah, blah! ... (still seems like a copout to me!)
Ahh! But Kushi being Kushi...
Must say though, he gets an A for effort!
OK, I'll end my essay here! Thanks for the PMs. 😃 Waiting to see what happens next!
Edited by kbtr - 12 years ago
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