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emistry

@emistry

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#21

wow! This was beautifully written!!

You wrote about father- daughter bond so nicely and khushi observing them.. Kya baath hain!!

Bohut ache!!

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HeadOverHeels

@HeadOverHeels

Inactive

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#22

Aahhh soft, soothing, gentle... What a lovely flow. The slow build up.. everything.

I like that you're descriptive, and that you give attention to deeper emotions while the scene continues to play out... Nicely done!

You have a great story here, but take your time with it.

Love and huggles!!

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inajnar

@inajnar

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#23

First love ..Lost love ..Nostalgic memories.

On the whole simply magical !!

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arushi05

@arushi05

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#24

Superb story. So well written. Please continue yaar

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JerryTheMouse

@JerryTheMouse

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#25

Very swet OS. I definitely want to read more!

And I led how you described the rains... I have always loved the rain and your description just took me back to Mumbai.

Thank you!

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KKKA

@KKKA

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#26

I STARS ...CONTINUE PLEASE

PM ME WHEN YOU UPDATE

IT WAS AWESOME JUST LIKE THE MAUSAM

KKKA

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Abi

@PepsiGirl101

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#27

AWWW! The connection of hearts is so mindblowingly beautiful. It's at times like these when I'm reading that I feel like magic can overpower reality.

Beautiful OS!

and yaar you better continue!!!

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blck234

@blck234

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#28

Awww it was so heartwarming.:) The father daughter duo touched my heart. And tugged at its strings. The picturization was beautiful. And the girl's yearning, very nicely depicted. Pls continue Thank you for the pm. And lots of wishes to Mr and Mrs inspiringstars!May you stay happy and together and in love always <3

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Vee

@reflorated

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#29

To think I wanted a first RES. 😆

First up, I am in love with the song. Like... I was singing while reading the OS.

This OS was the cutest ever Pankti, the cutest ever. What I loved was how you focussed on Khushi's emotions, AND kept the sorrounding in mind. How you made us smile, by taking us back to the days when mum's used to run after us for getting wet in the rains. This was an absolute treat to read and cherish. what I especially loved was how you brought something else, towards the end... like I thought this was going to be an OS about the unmindful relationship we form with strangers on the street. Maybe smiling at other... after having liked the same pair of jeans... you get what I mean, right?

Well, I thought this was going to be an OS about something like that, but I LOVED how you brought another factor in, not something I would have expected.

You are a brilliant writer! Keep writing. Thankoo phar da scrap, frnxx ❤️

-V

PS- you brought back the earthy smell of rain :') You bought back all the happy memories, which now bring me a very happy pain. :')

🤗

This is proabably the longest I have commented ever on IF, LOL! 😆

Edited by V323 - 13 years ago