OS: Apshakun (Ill-Fated One) WRITER's NOTE PG 15 - Page 2

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Posted: 13 years ago
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You said my OS made you want to weep, but this was just... In so few words you've managed to make my stomach lurch, my heart clench and my eyes prickle.

This was absolutely- I can't breathe it was so touching. Each scene was so vivid and in each one, it was the word "Apshakun" which tied it together and almost summarised the unfairness and the injustice of what Khushi and her unborn baby were suffering. In the end, Arnav's regret... It made me angry. I don't know if that's what you were going for but the teenage side of me I try to keep a reign on wanted to come out and kick him in the groin. I hope he DOES touch that damn gravestone, I hope he touches it and some rogue super sticky bird shit makes his hand stick to it forever.

Acting in haste and destroying other peoples' lives without a second thought has consequences Arnav, you inconsiderate prick.


It brought to mind Agneepath, the remake with Hrithik- not the hot mess that was the original. The scene at the very end where he kills Kancha and recites the poem in the background. The word 'Apshakun' had the same power. The same mountain of meanings behind it.


This was fantastic. As per usual.

And I wrote you an essay to plough through.

Also as per usual. 😆


Edited by arisai - 13 years ago
kvarsha thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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nice one ...
thnx 4 pm😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Its very easy for me to shed tears in the name of Khushi and Arnav. But this one gave that very uncomfortable lump in my throat. I couldnt exactly cry nor swallow. Such events are norm in certain societies yet reading about them still brings me to standstill and be awe at human mind. To always be blamed for everything ill-fated events around you and not have ANYONE to say that its not your fault is burdensome and atrocious. Khushi had everyone yet they left her all alone to defend herself. Against the people who are more ill-fated than she was.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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This was heart wrenching ...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Do you derive some kind of sick joy from making me cry? I can't even hate you for doing this to me. It only makes me love you and your writing even more! 😭
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Beautifully written piece. My heart breaks for Khushi.
I especially loved this image:
The smaller cross, just next to the bigger one was jagged and crooked too, so he reached over, as if to straighten the grave markers, as if to right the wrong.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awww
tht was too sad
in tears now
:)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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that was so well written and so sad 😭

Arnav is such a 🤬

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Omg I'm in tears. How sad! How could you?? :( poor Khushi
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Posted: 13 years ago
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That was extremely poignant. Really beautiful in a painful kind of way.

Just saying...even though it's hard to ignore and get past the thoughts of the society, they aren't worth it.

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