Mirage #4 NEW NOTE Pg 146 18/2/2013

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Gayathri

@GayuArnav

Sparkler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#71

I was only crying when Arnav told about his future plans to Aman! It was so heart wrenching! I hope Nothing happens to Arnav and khushi.I seriously Hope Aman doesn't betray Arnav!

And Abhaas found the will? What is he gonna do now? Will he try to ask Arnav about the will just to check whether he knows about it?

Loved it Rach! It was beautifully written!

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LittlePrincess8

@LittlePrincess8

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#72

Wow ...this FF is too good...how come you can describe a character so close to realty...i am speechless...i am feeling so many emotion altogether that cant be described...each character has own story to tell, own path to follow...right and wrong is so relative here...i dont knw whether i am happy after reading this or sad...please PM ur next update and once again really really heart touching FF..thank you

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-Raichu-

@-Raichu-

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#73

Originally posted by: lilly205

and you asked about marriage so many times maybe you are expecting to get the answer by mistake 😆😆😆

Lol yep I want some spoilers 😆😆 or some TB article !!

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Amina Mahmood

@Amina87

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#74

I have just finished reading the whole story uptil now!
I have no words!
I'm still in a daze!
I just luved it!
I know my comment may seem lame!
But i can't explain, i truly loved it!
Hope u update really soon!

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Nikita

@ipkknd1989

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#75

AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME!!!!! 😃 👏 👏 😃

I can't find the right words to describe this great FF. Anything I would say would be an understatement. I recently found this FF and read it all in the last 2 days and I'm completely in LOVE with it. It includes everything -- love, romance, mystery, suspense, crime - EVERYTHING. 👍🏼 👏

Initially, I didn't like the idea how Arnav is a gangster, but as I started reading it I enjoyed it more and more with every update. Your style of writing is just too good, I could actually imagine the scenes in my head while reading the chapters. So many chapters even made me emotional and while reading them, I ended up crying like a baby. 😳

Please keep up the good work. Can't wait to read the next chapter and I REALLY hope nothing happens to Khushi or Arnav! 😊

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mysterious_maze

@mysterious_maze

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#76

hi!

how are you and how is your mother? I hope she is in good health now. God bless her with healthy life.

I read your story and I must say it is superbly written. The whole plot is good and very well woven. All the characters from Divyani to Guddi are close to reality.I didn't find two extremes.Writers usually portray bad persons extremely bad and good persons extremely good. But your characters has good and bad both sides.I can't decide what i like the most; the descriptive part, the narration or the dialogues. You are equally good at all of them. Didn't feel that it is your first attempt to write a full fledged story.

The only flaw i found is that all the elders in this story are being fooled by their younger. Maybe being a mother am not able to digest the fact that children can make their parents fool so easily. Trust me it's not that easy. You must be my daughter's age so I can understand why you portrayed parents in that way.

How is it possible that Divyani did not know about what Aarti was hiding from her? I can ignore every other lie; khushi's lies to Madhumati, Lavanya's lies to Kashyap, Abbas's lies to Malik, Aarti hiding her affair but i actually can't digest the fact that Aarti managed to hide her pregnancy from her mother.

I hope you don't mind my criticism.

You are indeed a brilliant writer. God bless you.

lilly's mom (i didn't like your username lilly :P)

Rubi

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N0306

@N0306

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#77

congrates for the new thread..

oh my god.. Aman is planning to kill arnav on wednesday.. abbas will be after his own son's life for property soon.. It is so bad that Arnav told all his plans to Aman includinig where he is going to go after marriage; so in case if survives on wednesday.. Aman would know where he is.. I know it is not Aman's fault.. what would anyone do in his place? his whole family's life is at risk and then he has arnav on the other side who is the reason his family is alive..

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-Raichu-

@-Raichu-

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#78

Originally posted by: lilly205
hi!
how are you and how is your mother? I hope she is in good health now. God bless her with healthy life.

I read your story and I must say it is superbly written. The whole plot is good and very well woven. All the characters from Divyani to Guddi are close to reality.I didn't find two extremes.Writers usually portray bad persons extremely bad and good persons extremely good. But your characters has good and bad both sides.I can't decide what i like the most; the descriptive part, the narration or the dialogues. You are equally good at all of them. Didn't feel that it is your first attempt to write a full fledged story.
The only flaw i found is that all the elders in this story are being fooled by their younger. Maybe being a mother am not able to digest the fact that children can make their parents fool so easily. Trust me it's not that easy. You must be my daughter's age so I can understand why you portrayed parents in that way.
How is it possible that Divyani did not know about what Aarti was hiding from her? I can ignore every other lie; khushi's lies to Madhumati, Lavanya's lies to Kashyap, Abbas's lies to Malik, Aarti hiding her affair but i actually can't digest the fact that Aarti managed to hide her pregnancy from her mother.
I hope you don't mind my criticism.
You are indeed a brilliant writer. God bless you.

lilly's mom (i didn't like your username lilly :P)
Rubi

Lol Reading the comment I was like What the !!!

What happened to Lilly 😕😕

Then I saw that it's Lilly's mother who wrote it 😆😆

That's great !!! 😃😃

I would love to share this FF with my mom but the thing is that she doesn't know that I'm watching hindi serial 😆😆

And she won't like it because she never loves what I love 😉😉

We always have a completely different POV !!

Wow Rachel even moms are reading your FF !! that shows how much it's wonderful !!!

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tata_tata

@tata_tata

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#79

Thread 4.. really!!! outstanding work ML.. Congrats to you and to us readers.. we love this story, dont we!

Tough tough life Khushi.. very tough! to leave all that one had.. such unconditional love!!

I must say about your Arnav.. the character has grown very subtly and beautifully in the story.. from a strong silent types to the lover in despair to the enthusiast lover boy.. i like how his character has changed.. i just think he uses too many words to express his feelings.. true love/romance is best expressed in actions.. many times words just make it too filmy..a simple deep-look-into-her-eyes-followed-by-a-slow-hug will be so much more than lines and lines of declaration of love..

Aman.. i still dont get him..I mean I do.. I understand his situation, but maybe the best way out is to talk to your bro man.. the 2 of you together can come up with a good plan to save your sister and parents..Younger brother has anyways been released.. Now tell me, there has to be a reason why you did that right.. why? Will he bump into Arnav and tell him the situation.. why?? why?? I have been wondering now..but dont tell me yet.. I want the story to tell me..

Abbas.. what a jerk!! such animosity with your own brother.. dude, if you have a problem, go talk to him.. I cant wait till he finds out that Arnav is his son!!

Shyam.. tell me this.. have you told us what his motive to kill Arnav is? Is it simply power?? sad.. very sad this Mafia world!! Power corrupts!!

Good show ML.. keep it up.. May you have many more threads..

PS: tell me, is this your first FF? Have you written more? Do you have any index? Please share 😊