*Completed* Th#2 ArHi SS:Unconditional

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Risha J

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+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#711

This was just beautiful! I love how you've described Khushi's sub-conscious, keeping in mind that she is not really aware of the things going around her. Very well described.

Just one question though, when she is afraid of the black water, are the two soothing touches of Aman and the doctor?

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indeedisa

@indeedisa

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Posted: 13 years ago

#712

Oooh. Very interesting indeed. That has woken my inner detective.
Lots of Love
Celiza xox

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hatathbristi

@hatathbristi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#713

Like a Stream of Consciousness...I loved your writing..👏👏

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angeldream14

@angeldream14

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+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#714

awesome

scared of pain

she loves to live in darkness

cnt react to light

as it only makes her feel burn

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Kiely

@Kiely

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Posted: 13 years ago

#715

😭khushi

fab update

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henamani

@henamani

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Posted: 13 years ago

#716

the way you have penned khushi's anguish is great. thanks for the pm

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Smitakshi Guha

@SimiSays

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+ 8

Posted: 13 years ago

#717

This was brilliant! 👏

Khushi's POV was depicted beautifully.. and the contrast came so smoothly as I read every paragraph..!

Really waited for this update and it was good..

Plzz update this asap :)

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dorindakate

@dorindakate

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Posted: 13 years ago

#718

Thanks for the pm...

Thank you for the insight into what Khushi is thinking and feeling...now I can understand how and why Khushi is not relating Arnav only as the source of all her pain and misery...I was kinda stuck there...

NOT because of a failure in your writing but because each of us perceives life through the filter of our own life's experiences...good or bad, rational or irrational...

It was very beautifully and tastefully written...

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Nehasupnfan

@Nehasupnfan

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Posted: 13 years ago

#719

I thought this chapter was great!! It showed Khushi's willingness to get better...just Arnav's incapability to do so right now. I'm sure he'll get through! He has to! It'll just take time! I liked Khushi's POV.

Thank you for the PM :) I can't wait to read more!

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AllSmiles86

@AllSmiles86

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Posted: 13 years ago

#720

Originally posted by: lazyleaves
I finally reach the lights, but I cannot pass the threshold from darkness to light. The lights which looked like a huge halo, is actually like a sieve. I try to peek inside one of the holes to see the life beyond it. It is beautiful. The footfalls try to tear down that sieved curtain so that I can go over the other side. But the footfalls fail again and again'..

That paragraph sums up Arnav's redemption. You cannot undo your mistakes but maybe you can stand by the mistakes and own it. The footfalls will always fail unless he steps back and let Khushi take down the sieved curtain.