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ZJ...I feel so terrible right now for doing this. I had RESd my place ages ago. I am so sorry for not commenting soon. I wasn't able to find the proper time to read and comment. And I require a lot of concentration to read your brilliant story. And school was feasting on my brain cells. I sincerely apologize for being so late with my comment. I really am sorry.
Now...without any further delay...I am going to comment.
Chapter 10
So Mr.Irani wanted to talk to the boys before they left. I could sense the crackling tension between the three men throughout the dinner.
I absolutely loved the conversation between the four. They talked like friends. And the story of Mr. Ickyface. Hahahahaha...I loved that! They drove him out of town! Hahahahaha...
And this line right here when Madhura tells him that the guy messed with her...
'Abhinav frowned quite clearly Madhura said she had been troubled, though the emotions emanating from her were saying otherwise, like it was a happy memory for her.'
Does this mean something? I just thought I sensed a tinge of light jealousy from Abhinav's side. Or I am misinterpreting.
Liked that little conversation between Madhura and Abhinav where he questions her if he was that bad an impression. I could imagine how cute Abhinav might have looked while questioning her.
Sanaya doesn't miss any details does she? She immediately questioned Barun when he talked about Abhinav being considered Mr. Arrogant.
I see Abhinav is in a dilemma between the girls. It's definitely going to be a difficult task for him to choose between the two.
Poor Barun. You wrote the change in him so well, I could so vividly imagine him going through all that pain. And he is mad at Abhinav again. Well, I don't blame Barun this time. I am sure Barun wanted to keep a few things to himself and not let anyone else know about Shilpa.
Madhura still feels guilty considering Barun. She's a sweet and caring girl.
The conversation between the boys and Mr. Irani had me on my toes. Mr. Irani's anger is justified. And Barun is right...Abhinav is too good with people. Well, Abhinav has already cast a spell on poor me. Thanks to you. Hehehehehe...
I can't even begin to tell you the effect the last part had on me. Sallow skin, smoke-like slaves, razor sharp teeth, dark black blood and that diary. I am so intrigued and so much in awe at how brilliantly you wrote that part.
Chapter 11
Phew! That was one hell of a chapter! Gosh! I loved it! The truth, the experiment, the war, the good, the bad, the Slaves, the Guards...
You are a pure genius! This series is an epitome of awesomeness and pure geniusness!
I can't get over how brilliantly you have written this chapter. Brilliant is an understatement. Abhinav and Mohit's narration, Barun's curiosity, their dialogues, the story, the past...you carved it all perfectly. Perfectly!
I am glad there is no rift between Barun and Abhinav and that all's OK.
Gosh! I can't get over this chapter! I just can't! It was B.R.I.L.L.I.A.N.T!
LOVED IT DAMMIT!
I am so sorry for the late comment ZJ. I really am.
LOVE YOU DAMMIT!
Manal <3<3<3
Edited by -Manal.A- - 12 years ago
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