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@-happilyunknown

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Posted: 12 years ago

#271

OK I just finished reading chapter 8. Zee you seriously have no idea how much i missed you and unnatural. Truly.

The chapter i read was fabulous! :) I feel really sorry for abhinav and thankful to Mohit. Abhinav has a tough job. He is doing something which he hates. He is recruiting people for something he so dearly wishes he wasn't a part of. I am sure the guilt goes deep. And since he can sense their feelings it is just..:/

And Mohit's story was a very well thought of one. I doubt whether there is something more to it. I dont know about that but i am sure they really were true gems.I am glad that Barun felt guilty for being a smidge self centered. I really hope he behaves more pleasantly from now on :)

And now for the twist...Sanaya and Madhura are unnatural?>??!!!! I never saw that coming reallly!! Whoaa!! :D Things are going to get interesting all right> i have a feeling its Sanaya.

Awwh the sisters convo in the room was so sweet! ;D <3 They really love each other. And Mr.Irani seems like the Jovial kind. One big happy family about to be brought into the shadows of a war.

Sound mean but i cannot wait :D

Love you Zeee!! :D <3

And i hope you dont mind that i am commenting like this. I mean you just finished your 11th chapter and i am commenting for 8th.. :(

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soni_md

@soni_md

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Posted: 12 years ago

#272

Loved the update, love you, and absolutely adore where this story line is going .. thank you SO much for the PM's, and thank you for allowing me to comment later than usual ... I can't wait for the next update, and you can take as long as you need, because when you finally post, it's always as mindblowing as the one before 😃

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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#273

Originally posted by: additive_monaya
finally the truth is out i was waiting for this part ever since you told me about it

getting more and more interestinng

cont soon

Priyanka, another review on the same chap :) Thank you, You are very kind 😳

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priyanka/pari

@ProngsPadsMoony

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Posted: 12 years ago

#274

Originally posted by: TheWandmaker

Priyanka, another review on the same chap :) Thank you, You are very kind 😳

thanks zee but the first one was for chapter 10

Edited by additive_monaya - 12 years ago

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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#275

Originally posted by: -happilyunknown
OK I just finished reading chapter 8. Zee you seriously have no idea how much i missed you and unnatural. Truly.
Hiee Gayu !! 🤗 Welcome Back :D You know i think i might have, I missed you loads !
Lemme move to Chap 8 with you then :)
The chapter i read was fabulous! :) I feel really sorry for abhinav and thankful to Mohit. Abhinav has a tough job. He is doing something which he hates. He is recruiting people for something he so dearly wishes he wasn't a part of. I am sure the guilt goes deep. And since he can sense their feelings it is just..:/
Thanks, as always you have grasped the situation perfectly, Abhinav is facing the brunt of his own powers. However, he understands that he is the best for the task. He understands the responsibility that falls on him. I know one feels bad...though find peace in knowing that Abhinav is very brave and mature with his own set of struggles, I Love writing him :)

And Mohit's story was a very well thought of one. I doubt whether there is something more to it. I dont know about that but i am sure they really were true gems.I am glad that Barun felt guilty for being a smidge self centered. I really hope he behaves more pleasantly from now on :)
Actually I did put a lot of thought in it, particularly coz i am dealing with two generations i had to be careful about dates. The convo's b/w Abhinav, Barun and Mohit assure trust.
And now for the twist...Sanaya and Madhura are unnatural?>??!!!! I never saw that coming reallly!! Whoaa!! :D Things are going to get interesting all right> i have a feeling its Sanaya.
Yeah they are :D Glad you didn't see it coming, would have killed the surprise. Thanks for revealing your guess on who it's gonna be, not many have done that, i dun knw y :P
Awwh the sisters convo in the room was so sweet! ;D <3 They really love each other. And Mr.Irani seems like the Jovial kind. One big happy family about to be brought into the shadows of a war.
Madhura Sanaya are each others confidante, You know the love that bonds sisters, it's very different. A sister is a guide, teacher, friend, lover, enemy(haha) Everything! :D
Glad you got the feel good family vibe, that was my intention :)
Sound mean but i cannot wait :D
It does, you are right. The idea of a war is cruel.
Love you Zeee!! :D <3
Luv u tooo !! :DD
And i hope you dont mind that i am commenting like this. I mean you just finished your 11th chapter and i am commenting for 8th.. :(
No kidding, i thought you would sum up four chaps into one comment, and look at you, doing individual reviews for each chap! Can there be anything better? I don't think so :D I will keep up with you, don't read others reviews :P No spoilers for you! 😆

Lots of Love Zee :D

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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#276

Originally posted by: additive_monaya

thanks zee but the first one was for chapter 10

Oh Oh now i noticed...Sorry got confused. 😳

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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#277

Originally posted by: soho19
Loved the update, love you, and absolutely adore where this story line is going .. thank you SO much for the PM's, and thank you for allowing me to comment later than usual ... I can't wait for the next update, and you can take as long as you need, because when you finally post, it's always as mindblowing as the one before 😃

Thanks a million soho ! :) 😳 Truly means a lot..I wouldn't want to put my readers in an uncomfortable spot by asking for regular reviews. If you guys would like my work, you would comment, that's how its supposed to be i feel...And given the work schedules and particularly for those schooling, it's one hell of a busy life out there. In return thank you so much for being understanding regarding the time troubles. It's once a week, I promise.

Once again thanks a lot, you are very kind :)

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AnotherAdmirer

@AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#278

Originally posted by: PoojaSheth
loved it.. :)

Originally posted by: PoojaSheth
wow..awesome upd.. :-)

Thanks a bunch Pooja :)

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Pooja

@kweetrockstar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#279

Helloozzz and Sorrriiieeezzz dearest Zee
I had exams, and just cudn't remain in touch...
Really sorry for not informing earlier...
I wrote down the comment before leaving for exams, bt in haste, forgot to post it...
So am starting right from that comment, which i wrote after Ch 4...

I plan to write a comment for every chapter that i've lost, please put up with my late comments...

Chapter 4

Ok Zee, my mind has finally stopped working...
Dude, the more and more deep i want to dive in the depth, the more and more dizzy do i feel...
God! Now i feel i just want to sit back and enjoy the story unfold itself, rather than plunging my mind in every scene, looking out for some scene...
But unfortunately, my deceptor of a mind, it doesn't stay in peace until i've had my fill...

This time, yes, i was waiting eagerly for an update, no wonder i reached the thread at just the right time...

About the lengths of the review, i'm just telling u again...
I might not be able to give the same lengths for the next few days, or maybe none at all...
That's because i'm headed towards exams...
So in case of lack of a comment, please don't feel i've left, because i may not comment even if i manage to read the part...
I'll try my best for sure, but i promise to compensate later, just in case i can't make it...
I know you'll understand, but a, still informing you just so you know...

Your grin is somehow giving me goosebumps...
You naughty chick :p
Yeah, am seriously now dying to know whose the 'He' in the summary...
From now on there shall be only one He, the summary wala, because obviously, Barun isn't the He... Lol
Yep, KaranVir's example is dot to the point...
And i feel u're gonna make that He somewhat way tooo evil...
I feel dead excited...
Zee, bring him in asap...

Naah! Honestly all fun would be lost if any one of us gets hold of the mystery beforehand...
Moreover u're too good to let us get on to the real thing :P

About people relating to existing tales and novels, it's because our minds are fixed, that's why?
Our imagination goes only till vampires, werewolves and fullstop...

But knowing you, i am so sure you're gonna give the story a 'bang on' twist...
We'll be left wid gaping mouth as to yeh ho kya gaya, and Zee shall be long done with her story...
Hahahaha...
Right now am not inclined to thinking what Barun and Abhinav are, except the fact that they are slaves...

I am totally clueless as to why is Barun is being trained...
And even the title of the story doesn't ring any bells except UNNATURAL!

I totally loved ur compliment!
''you are a writers dream you know that? Surely mine :D''
I just updated my fb status with this...
Not modest, i know, bt man, coming from u, it means way too much...

Now coming to the chapter...
An insight into Barun's life is like wow!
He has too much planted in himself...
Clearly, he shares a stressed relationship with Abhinav...
What Barun is going through, is totally understood...
He's frustrated at the fact that he's going through so much, without a hint what it really is...
And when Abhinav refuses to tell him anything at this point, it really makes things tough...
All those physical changes...
Omg! What exactly is up wid poor Barun???
You know what, Barun seems like a collegiate as of yet...
Obviously he's in college, bt what i'd meant was that even before he talked of college, it showed in his character that he was still childlike, unlike the grown up Abhinav...

The conversation between Barun and Abhinav reminded me of San and Dean's conversation in Supernatural...
These two could've been almost brothers, lol...
But that still reflects whatever Abhinav is hiding, is something big..
Like bigey big...

The next you introduced the friends...
I totally liked it...
Simple, and with the flow..
The way a bunch of idiots in college shud be...
Nia and Karan, hard to believe them as siblings, but i can so very well picture Nia and San as the gossip lovers...
Anyways, now am waiting for Sobti's entry in college...

Next one after Chapter 5...

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Pooja

@kweetrockstar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#280

Chapter 5

Woah!
Didn't realize that chapter 5 would finish so soon...
Can't seem to have enough of your story, lol

The chapter was seemingly nice...
All the college air, pleasantly unpleasant...
Due to the 2 guys ofcourse..

Now, Em, Akshay, San, Karan and Nia are like normally normal..
All good, and enjoying collegiates...
I liked the headmaster scolding them..
Tells they ain't all tht boooring..

Abhinav is actually class...
The guy's really something i must say...
Walking through the college, did he buy it or something..
Lol
Him and his airs...

But Barun is even classier...
I can so much picture the boyish Barun slumped lazily in class...
Ooohhh... San was staring, out of curiosity, lol
Don't worry, am expecting no love angles any soon...
The greyish of the skin huh??? Do they belong to some animal clan???
Barun definitely saw sth outside, tht had him hurried...
Maybe someone did something to his car, because he seemed angry...
Or could he have seen Abhinav in the premises???

Poor others, who had to face his wrath, or super wrath must i say...
Though now am curious as to what did he actually see???

To the next chapter now...

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