'STAR STRUCK'--AN ARHI FF (CHAP 10 UPDTD)

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princess_avani

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Posted: 12 years ago

#181

Originally posted by: MrsSanayaBSobti

Its a nice story

to befact based except sachin..mostly the young players or even thepast veterans like dravid and ganguly had lot of sex escapades in their career.

Their playboy image is not that out. VIrat Kohli is the latest one,,

comin back to ur story

its well written but u hv been streching the Flash back for eternity..

I mean it shud hv been over in last update fully about what happened..

Actually it leads to jerk and continuity flow while reading...as its being elongated for too long.I prefered the entire Flashback of what went wrong wud be over in non stop updates...I dont complain of a cliff hanger but it has been overdone here in this FF i feel.

Other thing is some remians of past can be made to use again.

Like in first meet arnav angrily tells how she doesnt carry good looks,She is not beautiful.

In reality women do take such things at heart and doubt thmselves always..It leads to inferiority complex

So i wud want arnav to clarify her that he always considered her beautiful

hope to check ur update sooner

THANKS A LOT FOR READING WITH SUCH INEREST AND POINTING OUT MY SHORTCOMINGS!I AM A BUDDING WRITER AND IT IS GREAT OF YOU TO TELL ME WHERE I LACK!😳😳

I WILL DEFINITELE WORK ON ALL MY ERRORS AND TRY TO CORRECT THEM!!

AND YA...ARNAV HAS TO CLEAR A LOT OF THINGS...ALL THE TIMES HE MISBEHAVED AND CALLED HER STUFF!!

AS FOR THE FLASHBACK...I WILL GET SOME PIECES IN BETWEEN EVEN NOW AS THEY ARE MEMORIES RELATED TO WHAT IS CURRENTLY HAPPENING...BUT NOW THAT THE BASIC TRUTH IS OUT, THEY WILL BE LIKE THE MOMENTS WE HAD IN THE SHOW WHERE A CERTAIN EVENT REMINDS YOU OF A SIMILAR HAPPY MEMORY FROM THE PAST...WITHOUT IT ARNAV'S PLAN OF GETTING HER WOULDN'T SUCCEDDED BECAUSE SHE HAS TO REMEMBER WHAT THEY USED O HAVE!!

BUT...I WILL TRY NOT TO TAMPER WITH THE FLOW OF THE STORY AND SEE THAT IT DOESN'T BECOME JERKY...!!

THANKS FOR TAKING THE TIME OUT!!👏👏

LOVE,

AVANI

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Crazy4IPK

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Posted: 12 years ago

#182

first I beg you an apology for reading late.

I was very busy with real world and some pending work.

Lovely update.

So Arnav is the reason of their break up. He actually did it, coz Shyam instigated him. Arnav did bad with Khushi. But as he is remorseful, I think they should talk and clear their MU. moreover he should apologize to Khushi.

Lovely reading this chapter.

Update soon.

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Preet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#183

First of all sorry for being so late but to repair my mistake I'm going comment after each chapter so please don't panic if you see a lot of my comments.

Okay comming to the prologue, wow Khushi got the post as Arnav's manager, and now she is going to meet him 😳 But Khushi seems sad in this one I don't know but I feel it in this way.

I like Payal's character is seem's more freely and more modern

What say about Karan, he just said few things and he run away, but I feel that he has soft corner toward Payal and not Khushi, let's see if my guess it right or not 😉

Coming to Arnav, wha the ... he slept with two girls Princess do you want me to have an heart attack 💔 I can't imagine that, my Khushi's Arnav doing IT with random girls and that too two at a time, Arnav is shemless here.

Okay stopping with my craziness 😆 This Arnav in not that much punctual as Karan was saying he will make Khushi wait for him, and I feel that Khushi will brust on him for this.

Loved the chapter too too much🤗 🤗

beautifully written👏 👏 👏 , great job 👍🏼

P.S. Unres the post on the intro here is the link

https://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3149260&PID=73366116򳇝16

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Preet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#184

I knew that Khushi will be angry on Arnav, what 😲 he is 4 hours late, what man made wait a beautiful girl like Khushi for so long😲 but I think agar Arnav ko pata hota je uski new manager is a girl thab woh itna late nahi hota😉 I'm damn sure about this 😳

Loved Aakash's character, he has really a strong personality, it took to Arnav fully two hours to make him calm down and now he has to attend a party that he doesn't like, he doesn't like because there are no girls, what a lusty Arnav we have here 😆 he is always behind girls 😳

But I think know after meeting Khushi Kumari Gupta he is going to forgert about any other woman and start to dream about her😉

Their incounter was trully lovely🤗, first meeting and she almost fall in his arms 😳

Lovely update very well written

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Preet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#185

what happened, first meeting and they fought like a cat and a mouse. I can understand tha Khushi did a mistake soiling his jaket, but he has behaved like a maron. What the 😲 he said that she is a secretary and not a manager and she will just dream to work with him 😡. Arnav is really an arrogant jerk.

"she was like a dormant looking volcano ready to burst if provided with the slightest of spark and Arnav came armed with a thunderbolt" 🤣 and she really ended up in exploding

"Bimbo's are at least beautiful...you lack in the looks category too..." how dare he 😡 😡 say that she is not beautiful, Arnav argh!!! Take off the ham from your eyes and looks better, she is the most beautiful and innocent girl that you ever seen in your like😊, and stop behaving like an idiot.

"Mr.Arnav "stuck up" Singh Raizada" 😆 Nice name Khushi, I think it suit him well 😉

"Sorry Mr.Raizada...but I don't think I can be the manager of an arrogant, big-shot, manner less pig like yourself...please go find someone who can listen to your nonsense because Khushi Kumara Gupta doesn't work with egoistic ba***rds..." well said, he doesn't deserve a good looking and high talented girl like you😊, let him work someone like him, arrogant and selfish 😡

"Sorry ASR...when people talk I usually stay and listen but I turn a deaf ear when donkey's bray you see" 🤣 🤣 she give him a donkey, even I think that he was really bray like a donkey 😆

Loved the update too too much

Their meeting was like a zoorka jatka, this should be Arnav's state

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Preet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#186

chapter 3

superb, awesome

what Arnav want Khushi's boss to punish her, now he is really a jerk 😡 hope that Karan will convince his dad to not punish Khushi in any way because she is not at foult, any person would have lost hi temper talking with Arnav, even Gandhi 😆

Wow he was not able to do anything and was continuosly thinking about her, Arnav bitwa yeh to sirf shorwat hai age age dekho hota hai kya 😉😆.

Loved the way Aakash convinced him to go to the party with him and I think Sameer's daughter is none other then Khushi or maybe she is a friend of his daugther, I really feel that Arnav is gona meet her in the party.

Loved the chapter too much 🤗 🤗

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Preet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#187

Chapter 4

confusing, suprising, shoking and a lot more 😊

Khushi and Arnav know each other, they were in love, but he as always being a jerk, has hurt her and she left him, and now he is missing her like hell, it is true that he come to know the importance of a person in our life when it is too late.

You know what is hunting me😕, is why the didn't reconize each other😕, are they changed? I mean one of them had an accident and lost his/her memory.

I'm damn curious to know what is Anjali and Krya's plan to made that they become one again 😊

Loved too too much the part when Arnav was thinking about Khushi and was saying how much she was important in his life, feeling beautifully written, awesome job.

This chapter was superb.

LOVED IT TOO TOO MUCH

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Preet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#188

Chapter 5

now I start understanding the story 😳😆

so the story start from the past and here I was thinking that it was the future 😳.

I liked that Khushi made that story to make him uderstand that what he did was wrong that with he acts he ruined someone's life and dreams.

Poor Khushi, she is feeling so said, she is broken, and she doesn't even have someone's shoulder on which she can cry her heart out.

I'm feeling terribly bad for her 🥺

Finally he come and repaired to his demage, but what a way to make things well, he made it see that it was all her foult and now he is just doing her a favour to made her his manager, what a man he is 😒.

I simply loved teh way you wrote Khushi's feeling, it was heart touching❤️, really to emotional 😭

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Preet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#189

Chapter 6

Love Kate she really cares for Khushi and she is trying her best to make her happy and above all to pair her someone, but little she know that she's heart is beathing on some else's name.

Wow Arnav and Khushi are trying to make each other's life a living hell 😆 but till now the score are equal.

Khushi asked for a date so Krya could organize a surprise birthday party for Arnav. And here Arnav is thinking that she asked him for a date beacuse she likes him, Arnav try to fly a little lower 😆.

The dress scene was lovely, like the way he made her wear the short red dress.

What the 😲 😲 😲 she wanted him to kiss her, and that too senselessy, I think Khushi ke maam me ladoo put rahe hai 😆

kuch to hone la ga hai 😳😉

A mind blowing update loved it immensely 🤗 🤗

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Preet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#190

chapter 7

what to say too much emotional 😭 really heart touching ❤️

both of them had a sad past, but Khushi's past is more pinful

she lost her mom and dad whe she was too small, i really can't imagine how she manage to face the world alone 😭 for her dad she start singing, what a sweet thought.

Arnav also lost his dad and he became a cricket player thanks to him, because his dad's dream give him the strength and courage to play putting his heart in it and it give nice results, now he is a famous and well know person.

Loved the way he comforted her, just amazing, finally come to see the soft side of the great ASR.

Arnav kamal karta hai sometimes, really he thought that she had been to call the paparazzi so she could have those five minutes of pubblicity by being seen with him, but I feel sorry for him, because she is really a girl outside of the lines.

I liked too much the way Arnav has realized that she was different from the others, and that he would not let her go.

SIMPLY LOVED IT TO THE CORE ❤️