FF : Where Dreams Come True : Chapter 1 : pg 6 - Page 11

Originally posted by: Havvii

Shana amazing story,or i say fully paiisa wasool bollywood movie type stoy. Action romance friendship suspence everything. Loved it. Update soon

Originally posted by: chitra_rao

Hey Shana, I just read the prologue yesterday and the chapter now, seems to be interesting and quite different concept. Shana because of time constraint I have stopped reading any new ff's.I just read the ones I have been reading so far. And even those ff's the moment I find it predictable, I just leave it there. Now this is an exception for its novel concept. I will analyse this ff in terms of what I found new and interesting.

Analysis:

Part 1: Prince Udayveer introduced-there is more than what meets the eyes: UV hot, sexy suave, rich, irresistible we all know. but here he is portrait-ed as the "People's king". A man who things of people and their betterment.Who takes a rivalry with an underworld don just for the sake of people. So far different, new and interesting. Again What caught my mind was the though that he cant be all so goody goody, if he is then your scope of experimenting and exploring his character gets very confined. I somehow want him to have two faces, the goody face that he shows, and his cunning, meticulous business self.Again just my thoughts.

Part 2: Prince Udayveer-the true royal: There is no doubt that he is a true royal with the previous introduction and the amazingly chalked out temple scene and his pathetic cowardly attack😡. So Udayveer is a religious believer, again something different or something unexplored before.

Part 3: Robinhood - the righteous thief: Dramatic, intense and majestic entry this character had. Fell in love with him. He defines robinhood down to T. The whole Yuvraj Udaveer Singh rescue operation was well written. You also brought in the religion and his initial hesitation to fore. Loved the detailing of the scene 👏

Part 4: Manyata and Henna;Jai-veeru ki jodi: Shana a correction it is "VADA PAV" not bada pav.

A deep friendship has been portrait-ed here. Also the fact that Manyata is probably engaged to "Anupam".

Part 5: Manyata-Flame and the candle go together:Manyata here is a girl with brains and also very ambitious , traveled all the way from jaigadh, to make something out of her life and to help her people too; which is again very new and interesting.This girl plans to have a face-off with Yuvraj and get answers from him and somewhere deep down plans to take him back home. If Manyata is the flame of hope then UV is the candle, she need him to give light to the people of Jaighad. This also explains her extra concern for UV and the jaigadh people, they just need him. Loving him is different but needing that person adds a different dimension to love .

Part 6: Maneena-(Manyata-heena) palgalpanti: Loved this part, it brought a cute smile on my face, these girls are really mad, no doubt.

Part 6: The fire meets the explosive: and the result was explosion. One question shana, you have mentioned about her wet skirt and hair, when did she get wet? Did I miss something, coz I read the update like 3 times already and If I have missed something then I really need specs!

Part 7: Robinhood and his lady Marian: again a very interesting part, loved the whole encounter.Robin, Henna both are well defined characters so hopefully they will have a track running parallel with Manveer.

Strange what charm does this man have,thought Robin that I as well as these brainless girls cant stop loving him.

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Nice work shana,loved the super long first chapter👍🏼.

Originally posted by: shana0127

Hey Chtra thanks u pointed out my editing mistake... .Actully when girls came to hospital gates it was raining and they stood their in rain fighting with security to get in after which Heena got that faint fall idea ...i accidentally deleted this line while editing

plus thanks again ...yes its Vadsa Pao...actually i did not much remember the name...I have visited Mumbai two times ...once with my father as a tourist and once for attending a seminar...during these two visit I saw mumbai and tried to grasp most of its things...I traveled lot through taxi in its most posh areas ,by auto in dingy roads and in local trains too just to see how crowd crush u down if u r not careful enough...plus i still remember the taste of Vada Pao and pao bhanji though forgot its name😆.Yes how can I forget Mareen Drive.Well now M will travel all these places dont worry 😊

Thanks to me I have a full mumbaiya reader coz in next update I have full on mumbai locals and machhi wali bai ...well have planned lot of mumbai in this FF...so my purple commentator fasten ur seat belts coz this shana is gonna give horrible dreams by her own interpretations of mumbai she saw in three weeks full of mistaken names and wrongly interpreted meanings (as most tourists do 😆) be their to correct my mistakes pls pls pls 👍🏼

Now at last coming to UV .Yes dear as u said he is not what meets the eye u just saw his one face the face which has is hidden deep.Coz he is not at all which my first chapter portrays him to be .

He looked like this coz he was in temple which brings humbleness,coz he met Robin ,a man who thinks of people,coz he met Mnayata who reminded him of his riyasat jaigad .

But then he is not what many of my readers assume him from first chapter ...actually he is just opposite he is damn ruthless man ,shrewd business man and a manipulative diplomat plus a man who never forgives his enemies.

U will see his real face in second chapter where Mastan bhai will have his jahanuum ki sair forever...well its these characteristics that will be the major restraint for Manayat liking UV.Coz for her he is a king who is engaged, heartless and cruel yet powerful and only way to his people's happiness

Originally posted by: chitra_rao

Hey Shana, thanks for clearing all by doubts. and dont worry, I will be there to correct you😳, at the end of the day, I want my buddy writers work to be faultless 😉. And greatful that I caught UV's character essence so well,so he is the evil ruthless, money minded king. So here begins the jouney of Manyata's and robinhood's UV ko sudharo and right track par lao andolan😆

Originally posted by: shana0127

plus thanks again ...yes its Vadsa Pao...actually i did not much remember the name...I have visited Mumbai two times ...once with my father as a tourist and once for attending a seminar...during these two visit I saw mumbai and tried to grasp most of its things...I traveled lot through taxi in its most posh areas ,by auto in dingy roads and in local trains too just to see how crowd crush u down if u r not careful enough...plus i still remember the taste of Vada Pao and pao bhanji though forgot its name😆.Yes how can I forget Mareen Drive.Well now M will travel all these places dont worry 😊