SWARON FF:Moving on together - Page 2

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ShrutikaSwaRon thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
#11
Loved it
very well written
update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
#12
loved it!
if the intro was so great then how would the rest the parts turn out to be?
simply in love with your FF!
i've to say just like swaron is a terrific couple you too are a terrific writer..
update it soon! can't wait to read more!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#13

Undoubtedly one of the best intro I have ever read...exceptionally well expressed emotions...loved the way u have penned down the inner turmoil of sharon...simply beautiful 😊

Seems like this FF is gonna be one of the intense ones n I hope that it turns out to be the same 😊

Awesomeee start to the FF 👍🏼

Update soon n don't forget to pm me 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#14
U hav a unique style and ur play of words always ensures that u convey exactly what u intend to, nothing less and giving nothing away either...if the intro is anything to go by, I am SURE i am hooked to this one, and an update is awaited ASAP... thanks for the PM and pls excuse a delayed response if that happens, but I am luking forward to the next part of this one nevertheless😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Contrary to Sharon's set in concrete belief that Swayam would do some soul searching,Swayam didn't want to do it.He was a perfect gentleman not a perfect human!He didn't want to badger himself with uncomfortable questions and come to even more uncomfortable conclusions.So deciding it was just another of their fights and that they would get over it and begin their cycle of flirting(Swayam's side),denial(Sharon's side) jealousy(both the sides) and generally feeling irritated and fustrated till their next fight or till Sharon expressed her feelings.Swayam personally thought Sharon would confess under the influence of alcohol.But discarding all thoughts of Sharon and fights,Swayam went to take a shower.
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It wasn't until Swayam had finished showering,watching tv,eating,surfing the net,playing some video game,sleeping and finally sitting down to study for his Chem test that Swayam actually start thinking about the fight.But he supressed it telling himself that he was just finding an excuse to get out of studying,but gave up after a rather feeble fight and sat down on his couch to think.
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When Swayam had been in the ninth standard his father had hired a private tutor for him.The tutor had been a small man with a booming voice and a deep interest in history and philosophy.Oneday after rapping Swayam's knuckles with a scale for doodling plaits on Plato,he had launched into advice giving mode.Swayam still remembered his words.The tutor had said,"Now Swayam you are growing up and I want to give you some advice.Remember there are a lot of people in this world who will stuff your head with pretty candy floss thoughts to either get their way or to ruin you.You have to be stern and unforgiving with yourself.Ask yourself questions and get answers too,that is the only way you'll ever know who you are and what you are capable of.Or else you will end up before God after a miserable life full off missed opportunities and dissapointments."Swayam had nodded and had remembered the advice knowing that it was important.
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And the tutors advice had been completely right.No matter what Rey and Kriya told him and no matter how many "hang on their' looks he got from his friends regarding his love he knew that nothing was going to happen unless Sharon stopped denying and fighting.And his self respect took a repeated beating from her.Swayam loved and respected her,but he wanted a relationship based on equality and understanding.The moment he thought this he wondered if all his attempts at wooing and making her realize her love was futile.He realised he wanted to woo her and not make her jealous by talking to a stuffed toy or cherish her by maintaing a scrapbook or dancing with her cutout.He wanted to be her lover not her admirer or just a boy having a crush on her.
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Heart and mind cleared Swayam went to his desk,sat down and began studying for his Chem test seriously without any other thought disturbing him.
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The next day Sharon sent a message to Swayam asking him to meet him in abandoned corridor.Rey who had been with her when she had typed out the message immediately sent out a message to Kriya asking her to meet him their since Swaron were having a confrontation.
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Rey and Kriya watched with bated breath as Sharon came in and stood infront of Swayam."I'm sorry for all the horrible things I said yesterday"she said without preamble."I'm sorry too Sharon,I forgive you,hope you forgive me too."'I do" Sharon said.Both of them looked at each other for a moment and then walked out.
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Rey was the first to recover and banged his head against the wall in fustration and then hissed immediately at the pain."Are you okay?",Kriya asked worriedly rubbing his forehead."Yeah,I'm all right.That was the lamest confrontation ever."he said."Yeah,but we'll do something",Kriya said and they both got lost in each others eyes.
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I rolled my eyes at Rey and Kriya's behaviour and then flew out of the corridor to watch Swayam and Sharon.They were walking away in the opposite direction,each already lost in their own world.To Rey and Kriya this would be alarming but like all humans they failed to understand that this was the turning point of Sharon and Swayam's relationship.Theirs hearts were free of all prejudices,doubts and grudges.Even if they were in denial their hearts knew the truth.Even though they were walking away from each other now,their hearts, free of all baggage were moving together towards a common destination of love.They were going to begin a new cycle of wooing,dates,confessions and love which would end with them living happily together.So in a sense they were moving into a new plane of their relationship.And they were moving on together.
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THE END.
Edited by bluehawkblaze01 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#16
Awesome. Fabulous update. One of the most beautifully penned chapter. If the way you presented Sharon's inner turmoil in the first chapter was fabulous then Swayam's pov is nothing else than epic. I loved the way the lesson of his teacher. Its really very correct and meaningful. Rey and Kriya may have thought the confrontration to be lame but to be honest it packs a solid punch and says many things without even speaking. It gived us hope that everything won't be same and change is bound to happen. It gave us the hope for better future.

And in the end loved the cupid's pov too. That was an awesome touch to this FF. Waise btw is this the end ? Or you plan to extend it ?
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Posted: 13 years ago
#17
Awesome update. Loved how you described Swayam's condition in this chapter and Sharon's in the first. And the idea of portraying it from cupid's point of view is brilliant.

Thank you for the PM
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Posted: 13 years ago
#18
Fabulous update,this.I LOVED the way you described Swayam's state of mind.Love the cupid angle.:)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#19
u have described swayam's emotions very beautifully
thanks for pm
Edited by swaronland - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#20
Emotional turmoil of Swayam was beautifully described by you..thnx for the PM.

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