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Posted: 13 years ago
I've always been a silent reader of ALL your fics, but I feel it is high time I cut the crap and comment!

EEEKS! You just completed BTLSS yesterday and now you've started another fic! Fan-freaking-tastic! To be honest, I hate not having any of your stories to read! I hound your blogs more than I hound twitter or FB, waiting for a new update!

I must say, my all time favourite fic of yours till date has been Genesis. Not to deny the fact that Pandora's Box and BTLSS weren't awesome, but you know what I mean!

Coming to the first chapter..I loved it! Anchal reminded me of a younger version of Khushi and honestly, when the entire slip-trip-catch-eyelock+dupatta flying onto Arnav's face took place, I almost envisioned Khushi in that scene, but obviously it wasn't..and a deceased Khushi? I can make out that most of this fic is going to be in the form of a flashback, but a deceased Khushi? Really? 😭

Can I do an Ekta Kapoor and wish and hope that she's alive somewhere, but has lost her memory? Or that her soul has entered Anchal's? Or that she's in some Godforsaken corner of the world, hiding in fear cause someone is threatening the Raizadas/Guptas? Or she's done a plastic surgery? Or..or..or?! Ughhh the Ekta Kapoor in me is thinking of all sorts of obnoxiously hopeless ideas to reincarnate Khushi! But IK for a fact that either she's dead, or you have an even better idea to bring her back to life!

But for some reason, I do have a feeling that she's really dead, and Arnav will move on and marry Anchal, cause she seems like a spitting image of Khushi to me!

I shall stop the jabbering now (what to do, this is what happens when I'm commenting on your fic for the first time! Even though you're like my favourite ArHi author!) and get back to my work!

Looking forward to the rest of the fic! I'd be glad if you could add me to your PM list, if you have one!

Cheers,

Ritchelle
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Posted: 13 years ago
no twists n turns that mns khushi is really dead
so is going to be arnav n anchal love story??
not fair
after breaking so many hearts by killing arnav in last one why r u punishing us wid this
cant see arnav wid anyone else...sorry cant handle this one now
whoever this anchal is...even if she resembles khushi
plsss dont do this dont let her cum between them
say khushi is not dead n anchal is here to make them meet again
Edited by nia252 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
very interesting munchy!!
and khusi is dead , atleast thats what they think :P (you always surprise me )
cant wait to read more !! loved it
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Posted: 13 years ago
heya

interesting start munchy..

wea is khushi now?

will soo look forward to reading further..

btw my middle name is anchal so i could imagine arnav saving me..haila..mera sapna sach ho gaya tumhare ff mein hi sahi...you made my day..:)
many thanks for the pm..:)

continue real soon..
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Posted: 13 years ago
Great FF munchy! <33

And keep us updated on your book, man! :D

And oh! Aanchal and Arnav :O Don't make them fall for each other :/ And Khushi's not really dead, is she? :O
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Posted: 13 years ago
what munchy dear you killed arnav in BTLSS and now khushi in this FF in first chapter itself 😭 i still coudnt get that lump out of my throat reading the last chapter of BTLSS so im commenting on this lately.. 😊
woww cant wait for another journey with you dear bring it on babes 👍🏼
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Posted: 13 years ago
New fanfic yayayayayayyayayayay :D
Khushi cannot be dead I just refuse to believe it . Nice start looking forward to the the next part of this as well as fools gold. I want it all :p
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Posted: 13 years ago
wow another one from you, sounds great .
hmmm khushi is alredy killed ore is just hiden.
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Posted: 13 years ago
I love you!

Seriously...Im so dependent on your wonderful daily updates like they are a daily fix!

I feel like such a twat cos I have not been commenting as regularly as I used to...mainly because I never use my laptop anymore and commenting from my phone takes too damn long! But I'm gonna comment on btlss ending (which actually made me cry it was that beautifully written) and FG soon I promise.

Pathetic apology over! Yayyy a new one from you :):)

It's quite good so far! I'll probably have a more useful comment when I've read a bit more

Anaya xx
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Posted: 13 years ago
Chapter Two: The Girl In The Looking Glass

"Namaste Dadi ji," Aanchal said bending to touch the old matriarch's feet, who placed a genial hand on the young girls head, trying hard to catch her bearings. Anjali understood how Divyani must be feeling, because when Payal had walked in with Aanchal her heart had leapt in her throat because for a minute there she felt that Khushi had come back, bouncing on her toes, her infectious smile warming up the cold confines of Shantivan, just like she had that day when she was carrying a big bundle of chicken kari saree.

"Thank you so much for having me," the girl said beaming at them as she took a seat by Payal's side, stooping low again to snatch up one year old Prem and placing him firmly on her lap, "You must be Prem, I'm Aanchal Masi," she said extending a finger which Prem grabbed in a firm grip, giving Anjali and Divyani the opportunity to observe the ghost girl.

She had the same hazel eyes, the delicate face structure, but her chin was a little more pointed than Khushi's, her lips fuller, her nose slightly upturned, her hair more brown than black; if you looked closely she looked nothing like Khushi, just that her slight figure, her fair complexion and the hazel eyes were similar. But when she talked, her voice, her mannerisms resembled those of Khushi, but only slightly.

And why wouldn't they, Anjali thought looking at the young girl with a special smile, they were first cousins.

"Is your daughter asleep?" Aanchal asked Anjali and she nodded.

"She's a heavy sleeper," Anjali said with a fond smile, "and I like her to be well rested before Chhotay gets home so she isn't cranky when they have their play time together."

"Chhotay?" Aanchal asked quizzically then looked pointedly at Prem.

"No, bitya," Divyani said laughing. "We call Arnav Chhotay, you met him at the door," Divyani said helpfully when Aanchal looked flabbergasted. Aanchal tried her best to hide her smirk but failed. Divyani felt her heart melt. So like Khushi yet not, she thought with a heavy sense of doom resting at the pit of her stomach, what have we brought upon ourselves; protect Chhotay Devi Maya, protect him from himself.

*

I have always loved you, Arnav ji, never Shyam ji, always you.

Arnav fingered the pearls in his palm, their smooth surface cool against his heated palm, the cheap lacquer shining in the overhead lights. It would be two years this Friday since she had bled in his arms, her usually pale face becoming as white as the sheet they wrapped her in at the hospital, saying she had died long before he had rushed her in.

His fingers curled around the pearls till they dug in to his palm, the small pain a relief from the all-consuming emptiness that had been his fare since his mother had died, a tragic, brutal death, somehow the women he loved always met a tragic demise leaving him in shattered traumatic pieces.

The bedroom door creaked open and he looked up sharply at who had dared intrude upon his private time, but his eyes softened as they took in the tumbling curls on his niece's tiny head, as she rubbed her sleep riddled eyes, her baby pink blanket clutched in one hand.

"Hey, Rakhi," Arnav said sitting down on his knees on the floor, holding his arms out for the only reason he was still sane. Rakhi walked forward till she was in her uncles arms, resting her head on his shoulders she promptly went to sleep again. "Lazy bones," Arnav chuckled but patted her in to a deeper slumber, laying down next to her for a small nap.

He had just about drifted off when the colorful dupatta from a half an hour ago intruded in to his sleep filled head and he sat up straight, shaking his head, not wanting to think about the girl who had just entered his life, much like Khushi had, and how she reminded him of her.

"I should kick her out," he mumbled picking up his watering can. "No," he shook his head as soon as the thought had entered his head and began to water the plants to gain some peace. His cell phone buzzed in his pocket and he picked it up. "Yes," he said curtly.

"What do you mean he filed for appeal?!" Arnav roared sending the half full watering can crashing in to the French windows. Rakhi's terrified screams added to the chaos in Arnav's head. He threw the cell phone in his hand at the ground so it broke in to neat pieces and began to head in to calm Rakhi down, to calm himself down and think when a blur of yellow with a banner of the rainbow rushed in to the room and scooped Rakhi up in to a tight embrace.

"Hush," she soothed, the girl who was Khushi, but wasn't. Rakhi's sobs began to peter out as the girl sang and jumped on the balls of her feet, shooting accusing glares at Arnav who shot them right back. Once Rakhi was calm the girl started to walk out, her feet leaving a wide berth between herself and Arnav, her mouth closed in a thin line of disapproval but Arnav could care less.

He had bigger things to think about, this Aanchal was just an irritating fly, annoying, unwanted but harmless.

*

"She's tall for her age," Aanchal said sitting on Anjali's bed sipping at her cup of tea.

"Yes," Anjali said, "She gets that from her mama ji," Anjali said pinching her daughter's cheeks. Anjali then set Rakhi down amongst the mess of wooden blocks and toys where Prem was busy bashing a toy car in to a dolls head.

"No, Chhotay!" Rakhi said sternly to Prem, her index finger pointing threateningly while Prem ignored her. Aanchal burst in to peals of laughter at the cute sight. "You guys are so lucky to have kids in the house, I bet there is never a dull moment," Aanchal beamed.

"There is never a sane moment," Anjali said and Aanchal laughed harder. "So what are you studying at Delhi University?" Anjali asked settling back in to the pillows, putting her feet up and stretching.

"Art," the vivacious girl said settling in as well. "I always liked to sketch and draw but then a few years ago my brother took me to a gallery and I fell in love with oil!" Aanchal clasped her hands in front of her dramatically her eyes big shining saucers.

"Oil?" Anjali said.

"Yes," Aanchal said sitting back down. "Oil paints! The smell, the feel, the texture and the way the brush slides on the canvas," Aanchal made such a wistful face that Anjali wished she could see firsthand what she was talking about. "So the day Babu ji asked me what I wanted to be when I grew up I told him 'Babu ji I want to be a painter,' and he made sure I became one," she said.

"And what does your Babu ji do?" Anjali asked.

"He has a growing chicken kari business back in Lucknow," Aanchal said. "Bhai joined the family business around two years ago and now they had enough money to afford my masters in Delhi."

"Aren't you too young for a masters degree, I mean, how old are you?" Anjali asked taking a closer look at the girl who didn't look more than eighteen.

"Oh I was very young when I started school and then I was promoted twice," Aanchal said with a hint of pride. "I'm twenty one, just as old as Khushi Di would have been if she were alive."

"You remind me so much of her," Anjali said with a pained smile and Aanchal squeezed her hand.

"Well of course I do," she said sitting up on her knees as she began to narrate her family history. "Our fathers were twins you know," she said as if it was a widely known fact. "And Khushi Di and I were born just a couple of months apart but she still insisted I call her Di," Aanchal smiled fondly at the memory. "But you see, Khushi Di took after Baray Babuji, and she looked nothing like Bari Ma, which is why she doesn't resemble Jiji, and resembles me instead."

"I see," Anjali said fascinated.

"And then when Barray Babuji and Ma ji died, Babuji wanted to adopt Khushi Di," Aanchal said coloring up a little, "but Ma didn't want her around, and well Babuji chose domestic harmony, only because he knew Khushi Di was going to a good home," Aanchal added hastily, making excuses for her father as well as showing in her tone that she held a grudge against him.

"I can understand," Anjali said laying a hand on Aanchal's thigh just as Payal walked in.

"Your room is all set Aanchal," Payal said, picking up Prem who was about to snatch at Rakhi's curls in frustration because she kept taking his toys away. "I even unpacked for you."

"Thank you Jiji," Aanchal said hopping off the bed, and giving Payal a hug.

"Go freshen up," Payal said and Aanchal ambled out the room. She was about to go down the stairs when a set of framed miniature paintings along the landing caught her eye. She stood frozen before them, inspecting the careful, delicate lines, admiring the time and effort that must have gone in to each stroke. She was so consumed with the study of the works of art before her that she didn't hear the heavy footfalls, only turning around when the tall figure was upon her, his solid form colliding with hers sending her toppling. Luckily she hit the wall a few steps down, instead of falling down the stairs, slightly rattled but physically fine.

"Watch it!" he roared down at her, glaring at her as if it was her fault when she had been stationary.

"You watch it," she roared back getting up on her two feet. The man was an ogre, far more than a rakshas, he was Ravan incarnated! "I was standing perfectly still when you came like a typhoon and bumped in to me! You should apologize rather than scream at me," she said pointing her finger at him, her eyes blazing, like eyes that had blazed at him all those years ago, saying the same words, the same hand movements, it left him deeply rattled.

"Stay away from me," he threatened, his jaw tight and his forbidding, a spark of fear lurking deep within, and then he was gone just as fast as he had come.

"Off to eat some hapless innocent no doubt," Aanchal mumbled as she made her own way to her room.

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