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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: .SilentPrincess




Aapki baaton main kaafi gehraiy hain.. bohat he aam baat bhi aap kuch aise kehti hain k parhne wala partha he reh jaata hain. Kya yeh ek achcha writer ki nishani hain yah kuch aur?

About the title.. hum samjh sakte hain..title ka kahani say koi to talluq hoga na.. haan ek khauf zaror tha.. agar yeh ardhangini ka sequel hain toh kya humein pehle ardaghini pehle parhni chahiye.. parichey samjhne k liye?

Haan.. agar nahi add kiya toh, hum update nahi parhne wale.. yaad rakhiye gha. 😉

Hmm.. kaafi dilchaps hain.. wwu say bohat alag hai, par hain bohat achchi. Jaise aap kahani ka ek ek panna kholti hain, aur kuch baatein raaz rakhti hain. Aapka likhne ka andaaz he kuch aisa hain, k na pasand karna namumkin hain. :)

Waise update kab kar rahi hain?



lolz... shukriya..yeah apk dekhny k nazariya hai shayd...warna mein tu sirf woh likhti hoo jo dil mein ata hai bus... kuch aur hai pata nhi ..

nhi apko Ardhangni parhy ki zaroorat is lyan nhi hai k apko Parichey samhjna ho..han wasy hi parhna chay tu most welcum ...lol

insaan ki fitrat hai yeah...jistojoo...jab tak woh na hoo tu kise cheez ko jany ki chaha itni nhi hoti... tu agar khani mein ya na ho tu shayd parhny walo ki bhi itna maza na aay...

aj nhi...per InshaAllah kal zaroor update keray ga...Apny dono hi ffs ek sath keray ga...aj net k deemgh kuch thik nhi hai... tu nhi ho pay ga

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Posted: 13 years ago
Main kal se wait kar rahi ke aj update milega...🥺
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -Anila-

Main kal se wait kar rahi ke aj update milega...🥺



mera bacha teen din tu hoay hain

aur aj mein dayti per kya kero net kafi prblm ker raha hai..
kal dono ffs ek sath kerdo gi update thik hai

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: SujaLuvsMayur

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very nice update Fiza.

mayur past was soo nice ... u written it beautifully.

nupur was alwz scared of her mother ... that not good. but i love when she was with mayank. she just forgot all the world that time, n enjoyed wiht mayank.

loved that couple teasing session ... it hilarious ...loved it.

again present is so scary.

dnt wht what God ll reserve for her!!! kya prents hai ... apne beti ki jagah reputation ki pari hai!! hate them!!

waiting for next upte.


















thnks alot dear
i know how u all are feeling abt tai jaan
n i agree
hope u like it further to

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Posted: 13 years ago
RPLY TO U ALL...thnks for all ur love at this ff..thnku
n pls pardon errors . haven't checked tu usual se zayda hi hongy 😳😕


Chapter: 5

Haal( present)

Gunjna: kaha jarahy hoo

Samrat: woh agaya hai us k lay ker aoo

Gunjan: ab tu dair hogi hai smarat…buhat dair hogai…. iddat k waqt kahtam hogaya aj

Samrat: janta hoo per itni dair nhi hoi hai …abhi woh zinda hai… aur humain us ki zaroorat hai… nupur ko waps sirf wohi la skata hai…aur koi nhi… tum

Gunjan: woh hosh mein aai gi tu yeah baradhst ker pay gi..k sab kuch us k hoker bhi khabi usk nhi hoskata

Samrat: khuda hi jany ker pay gi k nhi… per abhi tu bus us k hosh mein ana hi important hai… baqi baad mein yeah dono ekasat jeeyay ga kasay… woh bad mein khuda hi kcuh keray tu hoga… mein chlata hoon…abhi woh bhi bekhabbar hai in sab se….

….

Mazi Past:

Nupur: apki sari packing hogai nah

Shilpa: han beta..apny khud tu sari ki hai…. Idhar aao meray pass bahito…

Mayank: ami pls is ki tension kam kero warna exams mein likhy gi…meri choti ami kaha gai…

Nupur: choti ami is ko smajhy humain tang na keray..

Shilpa: mayanak ap na.. kayal rekhna hai ap dono ko is k buhat achy se

Samrat: aray ab bifikar rahy ..humari valda(mother) motharma( ma'am) tu gai hooi hain… so is ko pershan kerny wala koi nhi…

Shilpa: nupur beta ap kyun itni fikar ker rahin hain 15 din mein ajay gay… aur aplogo ny khwub dil se parhna hai… Samrat khass ker k apny…samjhy ap… wasy yeah kal kaun araha hai…

Mayank: Gunjannn…..

Nupur: humari dossst hai…samrat ki bhi hai….

Shilpa: ohhh… tu yeah achnak kyun bola rahi ho..aplog tu baad mein bola rahy thy…

Mayank: woh kya hai na ami k hum ny socha k ap bhi mil lay gunjan se…

Shilpa: kya baat hai seedha seedha bolo….

Mayank: aray kuch nhi hai ami…ap bhi nah… Gunjan ki mother kahin jarahi hain..lagta hai parents week out hai aj kal.. khir tu woh ghar se nhi apay gi tu hum ny ek session kal rekh liya aur agay ek aur rekh lay gay….simple..per ab tu aj hi jarahi hain

Shilpa: acha ji..thik hai… chalo hum tu chaly jay ga aj raat ap log achy se kayal rekhna bachi k… thik hai…

Samrat: ji ap befikar rahy ..

Nupur: haan kal k khana bhi Samrat banay ga… wah…

Samrat: kya masla hai….

Shilpa chukled knowing there sumthing more to it… yet she ignored it as when the time will cum they will tell her, she knew it…

It was 1 am in morning and sumone was fast asleep.. but the alarm rung and he hit it and again went to sleep, to his bad luck another and louder one strt to rung and he looked around with his hand but couldn't find it out…he place pillow on his ear no use.. and then he with annoyance got up and was looking for it….

The alarm clock was placed on his study table…

Mayank: nupur… tumhain hum nhi choray gay…

He griped it and look at the time…oh freak, and heard the knock on door…

Mayank: kya hai..

Nupur: shukar humain tu lag tha pora mohala utha jay ko ap nhi…

Mayank: ek baj gaya aur hum ny tu kapray bhi iron nhi kiay…

Nupur: kya

Mayank: han nah woh office k kam kertay keraty bhool gaya.. nupurr

Nupur: bulkily nhi

Mayank: pls nah… dekho phir ami ki flight miss hojay gi

Nupur: kya hai… thik hai hum kertay hain….

Mayank: good hum shower layny jarahy hain tum kapray khud hi nikalo….

Nupur: mayank raat k 1 bajy shower kaun layta hai

Mayank: jab apko pata hai k hum ghar se bahar qadam nhi rekhy ga shower liya baghir tu behass k kya faida…

Saying so he went to the washroom and Nupur open his cupboard…

Nupur: ya khuda… is mein humain kuch bhi kasay milay ga… mayankk

Mayank: ab kya hai… he came out.. with cloths (stop over imagining)

Nupur: is mein se kuch kasay niklo sab gir jay ga

Mayank: han tu girny do wapas daal dayna…

Nupur: kya

His cupboard was no less than a perfect mess.. seems like all cloths are just collected and thrown inside…

Mayank: uff.. dekho… jeans kaha hai… he was throwing all the cloths down..yeah lo… aur white shirt iron hoi hai wohi pehan lo ga…

Nupur: aur yeah jo sary kapray nechy daly hain woh…she had a huge frown her face…

Mayank: simple ..he collect the heap in his hand, pushed them inside without arranging them and close the door before they came back on floor….. done…

Asa kya dekh rahi hoo jao iron kero… dair horahi hai…

Nupur: ya khuda..ahmed khandan ki bari bahu( mayan's wife) ko himat takat (strength) aur sabar ata kerna.. us ko andaza nhi hai woh kis k sath pehasy gi…

Mayank: tumhain haina… bus done…

Nupur: KYA done..

Mayank: flight hai… nupur ya khuda waqt nikala araha hai aur tum ho..bye…

…..

Samrat: woh aay humaray ghar mein khuda ki qudrat hai..khabi hum unko aur khabi hum apny khareeb khany ko dekhty hain….

( she came to my house its blessing of Lord..at times I see her beauty and at atimes to my old house)

Mayank who was siting in lounge, played a pretty loud beat on table..

Samrat: abay kya ker raha hai

Mayank: back ground score day raha hoon.. wahid murad ki film chal rahi hai… zahi naseeb aj ap ny humain mulakat k sharaf baghsha… agay tu yeah boly ga…

( its my fortune tht u grace my house with ur presence…u were abt to say so)

Gunjan: yar pls Samrat yeah filmi bhi nhi lagra hai… ksi radio show ki Rj ki tarah baat ker rahy hoo…

Samrat: had hai yaar… matlab gentleman ki koi qadar nhi hai

Nupur: gunjan pls andar ajao warna yeah dono tumhain bahar ki gara rekhy gay

Gunjan arrived at the Ahmed's mansion for the first time and she was quite surprise with kinda lavison interior and exterior it has, being with all three of them and being so down to earth …

Gunjan: wao beautiful home… asa lgarah hai sab kuch is per hi lagaya hai

Mayank: mein tai jaan k character mein samjhata hoon is ko…

Nupur: perfect….

Mayank: han … aao aao gunjan… yeah jo marble tum dekh rahi hoon na…khas turkey se mangaya hai..u know its almost extinct…. Aur yeah jo patterns hai u wont believe hum ny inty mahinay karach kiyaya thy is per taky yeah ek dam perfect ay… ek baar tu pora pattern humain passnd nhi aya tu hum ny pora torwa diya na made it new…

Gunjan: KYA..turkey k marble ko torwa diya…. Hay hay… mjjy day ty…

Mayank: itni tacky baatein maat kero… aur yeah furnisher Italy k hai designer mark it… aur yeah shangril yeah

Gunjan: pairs k hai

Mayank: bingo… tumhain kitna idea hai

Gunjan: she was feeling so weird at the lavish expense uselessly spended on this house… aur tum log kaha k hoo

Mayank: aray hum,.hum dahry paky Karachi waly… mast life….

Gunjan: tum kya galti se is family mein paida huay hoo..

Mayank: honestly han lagta tu asay hi hai..per humain kam na samhjy

Gunjan: kyun ap kitny ki asami hain

Mayank: mein 50 core ki aur yeah dono 25 25 ki hain…

Gunjan: mayank hum ny yeah nhi pochta

Mayank: aray mazak ker raha hoo …

Samrat: yeah mein ny gunjan ko apny sath time betanay k liya dawat di thi…yeah kyun flirt ker raha hai

Nupur: bhi jaan mein hoon nah ap tension na lay

Hoagie meri maa ki boriyana.. chalo gujan mein tumhain apna room dekho…

Samrat: pehly kuch pani shani tu peelo

Gunjan: haan pls…kuch danda pilo meri kuch katir kero…

Nupur: aray Samrat tum dekho tu lo kitchen mein ko tum bana rahy tu woh sahib hi hai k nhi

Gunjan: kya tumhain cooking ati hai…

Samrat: jaanb… aj khass apk liyan kuch special baanya hai… I try ker k batao kasa hai…

Gunjan: chalo…

Mayank: yaar yeah tum larkiyan bavarchiyoon (cooks) per itna marti kyun ho

Nupur: kyun k har mard ki ana k sawal hota hai kitchen mein kadam na rekhna

Mayank: plss…

Nupur:a ur dosra amm halat mein koi larka cooking ker zara alag baat hai..plus special lagta hai…

Mayank: special kya hai..

Nupur: dkeho saray nakur hony k bawajood Samrat ny ek cheesy apny tareqay se sirf gunjan k liyan bani

Mayank: special hai…point… in ki privacy mein bhang dalay…( spoil keray)

Nupur: mayank…galata baat hai

Mayank: aray hatoo… maza aay ga…

Kay hora hai janab..he entered kitch deliberately announcing he is entering to make them know his presence

Gunjan: bhi yeah tu kamal hai yeah itna tasty hai

Mayank: KYA… Samrat.. had hai…acha hai mein ny awz laga di warna…

Samrat: tu apn zaban ko lagam day

Gunjan: kya hua… mein ny tasty hi tu kaha hai

Mayank: pls ap log apni is kism ki baato ko meray samany na shoro keray. Meray masoom kaan…istahkfar( god forgive me).. ya Allah mein ny asa kuch nhi sona…

Samrat: tu meray ga aj paka…

Gunjan: kyun lar rahy hoo had hai

Gunjan was referring to the dish to be tasty and mayank was referring Samrat being tasted…and Samrat pretty well knew his double meaning talks…

Mayank: kya maro ga… aray he looked to the door…tai jan ap kasay agay…

Samrat and gunjan who were standing quite close not noticing it at all, looked at each other and sprang apart… and gunjan was trtying to hide herself…a bit blushing to…and Samrat was looking at her mischeviouly and than turned to door door ….

Nupur n mayank strt laughing and tagged each other

Nupur: kya Samrat tum bhi janty nhi ho kya is ko…

Mayank: wasy Samrat daar samjh aya…gunjan tum kyun dari samjh nhi aya

Gunjan: aray tum logo ny dara hi itna rekhana hai…tu kya kero…pata nhi kay samjhti mjhy woh

Mayank: tia jaan tumhai kuch bhi samjhy is se farak parta hai kya… he asked mischievously

nupur touch her nose not to smile looking at the blushed n fumbled expression ,Samrat threw a flying kiss to him

Mayank: Samrat yeah naziba harktein( cheap talks) maat kiya kero plss….

Nupur: chalo nah yaha kyun hain hum sab..andar chalo…

They were having fun no way studying at all, playing play station, having ice creams, watching movies…

Gunjan: kya yaar fasool se thriller hai yeah tu

Mayank: fasool se kyun…tumhain romantic film dekhni thi….

Samrat: mayank…

Mayank: kya im serious…wasy samart ko bhi nhi pasand tum dono kissi din cinema jao dekhny kya hai na k abhi hum family k sath hai tu u know…

Gunjan cant finda place to hide herself, and nupur put a pillow on face to stop laughing..

Nupur: mein coke lay kerati hoo.rukho…

Mayank: han sahi baat hai kya rokhi soki film dekh rah hain…

Mayank came out to attend a call and saw nupur laughing loud

Nupur: mayank kyun tang ker rahy hoo indono ko itna…

Mayank: mein ny kya kya janab baatein hi asi kerti hain… maza arha hai wasy…

.samrat and gunjan were not at all looking at them selfs they donot know wht to do and wht not…

Just than mayank n nupur entered with chips n coke… and he threw cans to everyone…

Nupur: meri white drink kaha hai

Mayank: kaun se white drink nupur tumahra bhai sab black laya hai

Nupur: kya…samrat…she pouted..ab mein kya piyo gi

Gunjan: aray for a change black pee lo

Mayank: haan har baat k nakhray hain bus aur kuch nhi…

Nupur: mayank meir drink do sharafaat k sath…

Mayank: sharaffat k sath.. sharafat tu London gaya parhi k liyan….aur tum us ki yaad mein ghum ho..nupur kafi bekar choice hai tumahri tia jaan nhi many gi… itny ajeeb lakry kyun pasand kerti ho tum..khabi adhiraj khabi sharaffat

Sharafaat is their neighbor whom they bring sumhow in their talks specially for nupur and make loads of fun…

Nupur: MYANK… I will kill u… she threw a pillow one by one on his face… do meri drink…

Mayank: yeah pakro lo..uff meray baal … yaar ab ek ghata lag jay ga in ko set kerny mein….

Nupur: bhaloo jasay baal hain..

Gunjan: mayank nupru ki shadi hogi tu kya hoga…

He was sipping his coke and stoped with frown..

Mayank: wohi jo sab k sath hota hai..u really wana me to tell u.. he said mischievously referring to the thing

Gunjan: mayank mein woh baat nhi ker rahi thi… I mean,,she was fumbling

Mayank: aray tum itna Sharma kyun rahi hoo yaar common kafi factual se baat hai

Gunjan: han.hmm

Mayank: shadi k baad valima tu sab k hi hota hai….

She look at him at wht the…and he was wht did u thought n mayank burst in to laughter..

Gunjan: mayankk..tu pagal ho…is ko bardhst kasay kerty hoo tum log…

Mayank: mein kya kero tum baat hi asai ker rahi hoo tu

Gunjan: mein ny pocha yeah chali jay gi tu kis ko tang kero gay….

Mayank: he smiled… us k ghar ja ker is k tang kero ga…wasy is shadi keray ga kaun….asay marti hai ajeeb kism k baatein kerti hai… aur is k ingliyan bhi tari hain

Nupur: KYA meri ingliyan tari hai tumhar tu deemgh hi tara hai..

Samrat: ek nmin pls yeah dobara nhi.. khuda k wasata hai yaar….. chup hum enjoy kerny k plan hai fight k nhi

Haal ( Present) :

Samrat: mein air port per hoon kah hai tu

Teray samny se tu araha hoon…. Kaha dekh raha hai… ya tu bhi nhi pehcnata mjhy ab

His breth got stucked looking at him cuming out from the airport… he was not the person he knew, not at all.. a person who has msihcve on his face always.. dodnt even have a smile… who always use to hate him n nupur to frown a bit.. and a huge annoyed one..as if he was ahting evrtyhing around him.. his eyes were not giltering yet they were meoty so empty that they were scaring him… but the scaresd part was when they are gonna face each other…

He reached to him and Samrat hugged him tight…

Samrat: kasa hai

Mayank: hmm.. kya hua hai yaha ….

Samrat: tu chal bus… mein bata ta hoon….








Edited by drfizaahmed - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Awesome update...
loved d Past...
Beautifully written...
dis present is sooo...arhhh
i mean ok sometimes i think ke yeh Mayank hi hain jjisse Nupur ki shadi huyi hain den lagta hain ki nhi...
bt den again jesa ki aj Gunjan ki baaton se laga ke han its Mayank jisse Nupur ki shadi huyi hain n of course uski wajah Tai Jan hi hongi...
bt again lagta hain kya pata...arhhh
i dont know...m srsly!! worried wid der Present...
der past is sooo damn fun...
i jst loved it...
loved it to d coreee...
d way Mayank took care of her is jst too Adorable...
n jaise Nupur always knew ke wht she want Mayank will get her dat for sure...like her likings n all...
n wen Mayank said tumko pata hain na done!! i was like he loves her...
i know dey both do...of course..
bt den why is der present is like dis...
yeh Talaq n iddat...
as aj akhri din hain n aj hi Mayank ki wapsi Gunjan ka kehna ke ab bht der ho gayi hain...n all
it sooo seemed like Mayank se hi huyi hain shadi den yeh talaq kyun!!
n agar Tai jan ki wajah se shadi huyi hain toh akhir yeh shadi tooti kyun!! n agar nhi huyi den yeh iddat n all...m jst all meesed up...
bt srsly!! m loving dis fact too much dat m all caught up wid dis ff...By God!!
dis feels gr8!!
bt d way Mayank had made his situation was looking sooo terrible,...
pata nhi kya hoga jab woh Hospitala ayega...
can i hope ke iddat wali baat next part mein clear ho jayega...
n plzzz kuch toh accha dikhao Present mein bhi...
Nupur ko thik karo n yeh jo kaha hain ke abhi agar woh uthi bhi den sab hokar bhi uska kuch nhi hoga...dis line is really making me upset...
kash ke sab thik ho jaye..
n ya abt d title i know its somewhere related wid d story...so kya Nupur sab kuch bhul jayegi like Mayank from Ardhangini though mujhe asa lagta nhi as Mayank jiss haal mein hoon usse Nupur se juri batein acche se yaad thi...sigh!!!
really want to read asap!!😳😆
loved it lodsss...
loved Mayank here...
he is d best!!!!!! his double meaning lines were too much fun...🤣
bt jab Gunjan asked him abt Nupur's marriage...
i was wishing to see something different in Mayank jo dikha nhi as he hided it...
loved it to d coreee
love u API...🤗🤗🤗
Edited by -Anila- - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
you have ended it at very crucial point..
asusual past was beautiful but cant say anything about Present
really waiting to see Mayank reaction at Nupur condition
continue soon
Edited by Maria. - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
its just a cliuff hanger situation...
very very nice part Fiza :)
OMG the past is soo good...i am just hating the present...i am just clueless what will happen next
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Posted: 13 years ago
Beautiful part dii...
The past ws so colorful nd full of life n laughter...aaj dekhu toh kisiko jeene ke bhi khwaish nahi hai...
Its really painful to see mayank in this lifeless condition...aur kya hoga jab usse nupur ka haal pata chalega..aur vaise nupur ko yeh sab hua bhi kaise...jaane ke lie main bekarar hoon...
And the way they fight nd tease im wondering how they'll fall in love with each other...ques of the century...lol
Loved this part dii...aab bohut sare ques hai...plz jaldi jaldi reveal kare..
Cont soon..
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Posted: 13 years ago
awesome updt fiza
past was cute...present is tense...con't wait to read more
cont soon
thanks for the pm

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