IPKKND FF | Broken Strings (ON HOLD) - Page 38

*Oh shit! Avi is going to kill me! Sorry Avi! I got a bit too excited 😆. *runs off to read update before furious Avi gets her* 😆

*So yeh will come back tomorrow actually. I am currently very sleepy :(. I will be back soon 😆 x

Okay editing--

Omg Shay! This was f**king fanatastic! This was like such a perfect chapter! The pace, your amazing style of writing, their emotions, the setting! Everything was just perfect!

So at the beginning I was really annoyed and angry with Arnav because well he was being an inconsiderate bas***d! It's his best friend, it's late at night and he's left her out on her own (omg I've lost my chain of thought because my annoying flatmate keeps on distracting me! urgh!). So anyway trying to continue on! So yes I was really angry with Arnav in the beginning but by the end of the story I think I had forgiven him because the true impact of all that he had done has finally hit him and hit him in the face like a wet fish indeed!

Okay I love love love Aakash! Why is this guy so sweet and caring yet funny at the same time? Aah he is such a perfect man! Can I have him pretty please? lol

I love your utilisation of Aakash's character in this chapter, he is the one that keeps the whole flow of this chapter and I'm glad that instead of Arnav realising that Khushi was out alone it was Aakash that put this thought into his head. It certainly shows a lot more of Arnav and I hope the way I've figured it out is correct. I think it shows where all of Arnav's problems actually stem from; his inability to think rationally when he is faced with a problem. This is why he left her to think he was dead in the first place because when he was put in front of the fact that his parents had passed away all he wanted to do was save his fathers business and attempt to fix the wrong that happened there. But in all of that he lost out on Khushi's feelings, her loss, he didn't for once think from her point of view. Therefore he wasn't thinking rationally, that's not an ability he seems to possess. And this fact is re-iterated here. All he is thinking about is how to win her over, what he could do next, why she is not responding to his current technique that he completely forgets to look out for her. I don't see it as him being selfish, I see it as his stubbornness over-ruling his coherent thoughts and maybe just maybe he's realised what he's doing wrong at the end of this chapter.

But he is an idiot and if he was real I would have slapped him senseless 😆.

Okay Shay I am at a loss of words as to describe how absolutely mind-blowing your description of the tattooed beast and what he does to Khushi was! From your description of him to his every action was written out so painstakingly brilliantly that aah I don't even know what to say! It was just brilliant 👏.

I could feel Khushi's pain, her fear was tangibly real at this point and then at the other end Arnav and Aakash's panic. I was panicing with Arnav, I could see it all unravel in my head as if I was actually watching this and not reading it!

Aah it was just fantastic!

Omg and then the end bit, his revelation, his anger and then when his hard walls finally completely crumble and he's left in more of a mess than her.

I feel so so bad for Khushi I really hope she is okay and I hope she still continues to not talk with Arnav. I hope he gets a good telling off from Khushi's parents and goes home and repents on his own for a while. You know drowning in his own sorrows and all because well he was sort of being a complete douchebag all along and he kinda needs to pay for that 😛. Am I being too mean? Lol there's the evil side of me coming out again 😆.

Now just a lil again on how much I love Aakash! I love him man! And haha! Good on you Aakash for beating up that piece of trash and calling the police up at the same time. My hero! Lol

So Shay wonderfully written as always! I am always left in awe of your writing! It's just so amazing! And this chapter was no different! I loved how this whole incident was what led to Arnav's revelation! It was just so apt and innovative as always!

I love you! 🤗

Please update soon if you can :P xxx

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SGISKNGELGNE

I was f**king scared Shay -.- Never ever do that to me again please? Okay? Yeah, okay.

But fear aside, the entire thing was written masterfully. From the way her attack was described, and then the futility of the act was just amazing. You mindblasting writer :')

I got the heebie jeebies when the guy licked the blood off. Still shuddering. I dont know if you realize, but with that action you made the guy not only a murderer and rapist, but a psycho as well. 😲 The fear was so so palpable that I could actually feel it, no joke. Just...wow 👏

Oh god Arnav Why are you such an idiot sometimes? And Akaash, you sweetheart. But honestly, I dont even want to imagine what must have gone through Arnav when he heard that scream. No just no. That absolute...fear. Oh god.

And the feelings that raced through him at that very moment, when he saw his Khushi being violated in that disgusting manner; amazing Shay! Just amazing!

Oh god. Intense. His anger just exploded, didn't it? Like everything came pouring out.

Honestly though, I am so glad Arnav beat the motherf**king shit out of that rapist. Really. My poor baby Khushi 😭

I am speechless.

The way Arnav reacted when Akaash took Khushi's name was just...I have no words. You've done it amazingly Shay. Just amazingly. Everything that just erupted in his mind, and he forgot about all except her. Because she's the only thing that matters. Amazing. 👏

Oh lord, my poor baby. She's had to go through so much in the past few days, and she was almost molested. I feel so horrendous. Arnav must heal her. He must.

JSFSFJ.

I am out of words. But this was brilliant. 👏

Love it like I love you :*

Avi

thanks for the PM