Virman FF : Ek Duje Ke Vaaste..DISCONTINUED.. - Page 6

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Posted: 13 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: alicemath

Amazin...😊!!!!
luvd the way u r weavin up the story n blendin additional characters in it...👏👏👏
well...seems 2 b n entirely diff one...
njoyed readin evry bit of it...
gud 2 c more imp given to vanshika unlike the show so far...⭐️
thnx a loot 4 the pm...n plz do try 2 update more oftn...
waitin for ur next pm...😍



Thanks a lot.. glad you liked it.. I will try n update often now on.. 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: EHMMBH_fan1

Good job..👍🏼.I like the depth of Vanshika's character which is not at all shown in the show!!!!!! Would love to see the story resolving further...I dunno why but the character of the girl reminds me a bit of Riddhima from DMG...


Thnx for the pm and waiting for the next part 😊



Thanks.. glad you liked it.. ohh.. you're reminded of Riddhima? Thats nice.. That'll help me shape up the character well.. 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#53
Oooh a girl for my Prem babu ? 😳
Don't tell me her name's Heer 🤣 Hona chahiye. Perfect hoga 😎
Nice twist dearie !! Behna to bhaiya's rescue !! And along with VirMan comming together, I've a strong feeling Prem ki love ishtory ka bhi happiiees endings hoga ☺️ Am I right or am I right ? 😆

Vaise, love where the story's going 😉 Thanks for the PM 🤗
Update sooon !! And more of VirMan, Prem(eer if that's her name 😉) next time please 😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: hs7071

I really enjoued it and i wonder who this new character is seems
Inetresting as long as she doesnt intervene between VirMan
In a bad way is she helps VirMan unite then perfect
Continue soon and please virman scenes in the next part
Pm
Me when u update



Hey.. glad you enjoyed it.. yupp she might be a catalyst in Virman's relationship.. good or bad.. can't say.. haven't thought of it yet.. 😊 😉
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Posted: 13 years ago
#55

Originally posted by: Monu_Deewani

Oooh a girl for my Prem babu ? 😳

yeh kisne kaha?😕

Don't tell me her name's Heer 🤣 Hona chahiye. Perfect hoga 😎

Ho bhi sakta hai!!😉

Nice twist dearie !! Behna to bhaiya's rescue !! And along with VirMan comming together, I've a strong feeling Prem ki love ishtory ka bhi happiiees endings hoga ☺️ Am I right or am I right ? 😆
Maybe 😆

Vaise, love where the story's going 😉 Thanks for the PM 🤗
Update sooon !! And more of VirMan, Prem(eer if that's her name 😉) next time please 😳
Yupp this I can surely do.. 😉

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Posted: 13 years ago
#56
Great Update!. Fantastic work..
Thanks for the PM..😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
#57
thanx for the pm:)
eagerly waiting for the next part!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#58
All i can say is
AMMAAAZZZIIINNNGGG! awwwsoommme
pleasseee continue it
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Posted: 13 years ago
#59
soo lovelyy update
liked it
continue sooon plzzz
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Posted: 13 years ago
#60
Hey guys, thank you soo much for all your lovely comments and likes.. Loved them.. Here's part 4. No major revealations here.. Just a progession of the story.. Hope you guys like it..

Part 4


Feeling herself engulfed in a soft warm embrace, Manvi slowly opened her eyes. "Aap theek hain?", his eyes and voice full of concern as he made her stand up on her feet. "Huh.. Haan..thank you", she smiled at the stranger and was lost in his chocolate brown eyes until she heard a familiar dramatic voice.. "Maanvi Di? aap theek toh hain na.. Mujhe laga ab toh aap pakka giri. Aur phir agar aapki taang toot jaati toh??".. Kya.. meri taang toot jaati.. rukk teri taang abhi tod deti hoon.. She glared at him angrily and was almost ready to pounce on poor Dabbu, when Gayatri held her arm, "Shukar hai Bhagwan ka ki mere Prem ne tumhara haath thaam liya..Waise, Canada mein pala-badha hai mera beta, lekin dil se hai poora Hindustani."

Prem nodded his head and motioned his father for help. His mother's only wish was to get him married to a nice, homely Indian girl and stop him from going back to Canada. "Arre arre Gayatriji, baatein toh hoti rahengi.. Chaliye chalte hai..", Mr. Singhania literally dragged his wife to the car. Manvi was slightly amused looking at the family.. They were weird but very nice people, She thought..

Prem was just about to hit the accelerator when Dabbu yelled from the backseat, "Rukiye, rukiye.. Hum log koi bhi naya safar shuru karne se pehle, kuch kehte hai". He looked at Manvi, who got off her seat, raised her hands in the air and cheered, "Jai Ganga Maiya." Crazy!!! Prem thought..

He began driving towards Hrishikesh.. He loved the scenery, beautiful farms, hills and peace.. Peace, he could only wish for!!.. He could hear her continuous chatter. She was narrating stories to his parents, who seemed to be completely mesmerized by the girl.. Yaar kitna bolti hai yeh ladki!!

"Dad, waise aapne bataya nahi ki hum Hrishikesh kyun jaa rahein hai? Mumbai mein land karte hi aapne wahaan jaane ki zidd ki.. Aisa hai kya Hrishikesh mein??"
This was it.. Little did he know that the chatterbox would now turn to him..

"Kya hai?? Ganga.. pavitrata ka prateek.. Ganga Maa ki god mein basa hai humara Hrishikesh.. Yahaan pattharon mein bhi Bhagwan baste hain..Kehte hai ki Ganga Ghat par aakar koi agar shraddha se Ganga mein dupki lagaye, toh uske saat janmon ke paap mit jaate hai.. Yahaan ki har subah shuru hoti hai Mandir ki surili ghantiyon ki awaaz se aur din khatam hota hai Triveni Ghat pe Maha Aarti ke saath.. Hum yahaan vishvaas ke deeye jalaakar Ganga mein baha dete hai, yeh maankar ki Ganga Maa humare vishvaas aur sapnon ko kabhi tootne nahi dengi.. Bilkul saaf suthra, seedhe saadhe logon se bhara, aisa hai humara Hrishikesh.."

The entire Singhania family stared at Manvi with open mouths while Dabbu beamed proudly at his Di and started clapping.. "Arre waah Manvi Di, aapne kya describe kiya hai Hrishikesh ko, maine toh kabhi yeh sab socha hi nahi.."

She glared at him and shifted back in her seat and they resumed their journey with occasional Dabbu-Manvi fights, Mr. and Mrs. Singhania and Prem amused at them..

Chandigarh

Vanshika was resting in her room, when Kadambari entered with a few sarees, "Bhabhi, aap hi batayiye na, main kal in mein se kaunsi wali pehnoon? Yeh Shloku ke papa toh kuch kehte hi nahi hai..aur hai ni Virat, aaj kal toh usse bhi apni Chachi ki koi fikar nahi rahi..Bhabhi.. Bhabhi, aap sunn to rahi hai hai na..". She looked at Vanshika who was staring at her, but was engrossed in her own thoughts.. Kadambari held her hand and shook her.. "Haan, tum kuch keh rahi thi.. arre wah.. saariyan.. bohot pyaari hai.. tum na yeh neeli wali peheno, bohot sundar lagogi.." And as always, she managed to mask her thoughts and worries behind a fake smile.. Only, this time Kadambari had managed to see it.. Bhabhi ko jaroor koi baat pareshaan kar rahi hai.. Unhe itni tension mein maine aaj tak nahi dekha.. "Jee Bhabhi, main bhi na itni raat ko apni dukan leke aa gayi aapke paas.. aap na aaram kariye, Good night." And she walked away.

Kya main jo kar rahi hoon woh sahi hai.. Haan, bilkul sahi hai.. Tum ek ladki ko uske parivaar se mila rahi ho.. Kahin agar uske aane se mera parivaar bikhar gaya toh.. Lekin yeh to ek din hona hi hai.. Aakhir kabhi na kabhi toh sabko pata chalna hi hai.. And she shut her eyes to leave her worries for another day..

Here, in another room in the house, Virat was sitting on his arm-chair and was lost in his thoughts.. Kal toh Bhai-Bhabhi ki 1st wedding anniversary hai.. Kya Manvi yahaan aayegi? Ab toh woh Hrishikesh bhi laut rahi hai.. Kya yaar partner, itni bhi kya naraazgi ki tumne mujhse itni door ho gayi.. And he fell asleep and was lost in his dreams.

Hrishikesh

Beeji, Chachu and Chachi were sitting in the verandah and having a chat before retiring to their rooms. "Beeji, kal subah, hum sabko Chandigarh jaana hai.. Lekin Manvi, usse toh saath nahi le ja sakte na.. Aapko lagta hai ki woh maan jayegi? Aur phir uski tabiyat bhi toh theek nahi hai .. Aisi halat mein usse akele chodke kaise jaa sakte hain hum?", Pinky Chachi said with her trade-mark pout..
You could clearly make out lines of concern on Beeji's forehead.. "Manvi ko maine mana liya hai.. Woh humare saath Chandigarh nahi chalegi.. Pichli baar Swamini ji ne joh uski beizzati ki thi, uske baad toh bilkul bhi nahi.. Unka ek-ek shabd aaj tak mere kaanon mein goonj raha hai.. Lekin hum, hum majboor hai, woh humari beti ka sasural hai.. aur phir kal Jeevika aur Viren ki zindagi ka itna ahem din hai.. Humein jaana hi hoga.. Aur raha sawaal, Manvi ki tabiyat ka, toh meri Dr. Manan se baat ho gayi hai.. Woh kal humare jaane ke baad hospital se ek nurse ko bhej rahein hai.. jo poora samay Manvi ke saath hi rahegi.. Aur woh khud har do ghante, Manvi se phone par baat karte rahenge..".
"Lekin Beeji, agar Jeevika ne humse poocha ki hum Manvi ko saath kyun nahi le aaye, toh usse kya kahenge? Aap toh jaanti hai na, ki Manvi ke bina uski khushiyaan adhoori hain.."..
"Haan lekin Madan, hum usse Manvi ki bimari ke baare mein kuch bata bhi toh nahi sakte.. woh poori tarah se toot jayegi.. uski basi-basayi grihasthi bikhar jayegi.. Woh bhi toh uss raat vahin maujood thi na.. Usse sab pata hai, who samajhdaar hai.. samajh jayegi.. Aur phir, hum sab ne Manvi se bhi toh vaada kiya hai na.. Isliye, humein unn dono bacchiyon ki khatir apne aap ko sambhalna hoga..". She placed a hand on their hands and walked to her room.

Next morning..

Manvi, Dabbu and the Singhania's had reached Hrishikesh.. Before heading towards her house, she and Dabbu got off at the Ghat.. She thanked them and invited them home. But they refused politely coz they had to attend an important pooja in a few hours and promised her that they would surely visit her before leaving Hrishikesh..
"Oye Dabbe, tu yeh saara saaman lekar ghar chala ja.. Main abhi aai, Mumma-Papa se milke.." and leaving poor Dabbu with loads of luggage, she hopped her way towards the Ghats. Finally, it felt good to be back home..

"Mumma-Papa, dekhiye I am back.. haan haan, maine bhi aapko bohot miss kiya.. Ab meri aaj ki request ka time.. Bhagwanji, aaj meri Jeevika Di anur Jeeju ki zindagi mein bohot hi khushi ka din hai.. Aap dono unhe humesha issi tarah saath rakhna.. Unka aapsi pyaar humesha badhta rahe.. Unke beech mein dooriyan, galatfamiyaan kabhi bhi na aane paaye.. Aur Jeeju jitna pyaar aaj Di se karte hai na, kal usse kahiin zyada karein, mere hisse ka bhi.. mera kya pata.. main rahoon ya na rahoon!!"

She wiped off her tears, made her way to the bridge, held out a coin in her palm and wished all the happiness in the world for her sister, kissed it and threw into into the sacred waters of the river.

On reaching home, she found three worried faces staring at her.. "Kya yaar aap log bhi.. Aapki beti itne dinon ke baad ghar lauti hai.. aur aap sab ho ki gusse se mujhe ghoor rahe ho."
"Manvi, kahaan thi tum, tumhe pata hai mujhe kitni chinta ho rahi thi.. seedhe-seedhe ghar nahi aa sakti thi Dabbu ke saath.." "Beeji.. Beeji, maine aapko aur aapki daant ko bohot miss kiya.. Wahaan ke doctors aur nurses to itne pyaar se baat karte the, ki mujhe laga cancer se bhale hi nahi, lekin sugar ki bimaari se toh main pakka mar jaungi..".. "MAANVI.. chup kar.. kuch bhi bole jaa rahi hi.. humne tujhe wahaan treatment ke liye bheja tha taki tu theek hoke laute aur tu hai ki aisi bakwas kiye jaa rahi hai.. Chal ab andar.."

Sometime later, they stood at the door, ready to leave when Beeji moved forward and hugged Manvi, "Manvi bte, tu toh samajh sakti hai na, humari majboori.. Please humein maaf kar de.. Hum chaahkar bhi tujhe apne saath nahi le jaa sakte..".. She fought back her tears, "Arre Beeji, koi baat nahi.. Main wahaan nahi hoon, toh kya hua.. aap log to Di ke saath honge na.. Mumma-Papa bhi toh Di ke saath humesha hai.. Aur phir mere dher saare gifts bhi toh aap log le jaa rahein hai na.. Aap meri chinta mat kijiye.. Aur ab jaldi jaiye, warna bus nikal jaayegi.. Aur Dabbe sunn, dher saari photos kheenchna aur mujhe live updates dete rehna.. Warna, tera sarr hoga aur meri jooti.. They bade her goodbye and left for Chandigarh. She stood there waving to them and silently prayed for her Di's happiness for the nth time in the day..

Chandigarh Airport
A girl dressed in a pretty pink salwar suit was waiting at the arrivals area.
Tada.. tada? here you go..



No surprises there, had to be Aditi, i guess.. Anyway.. Hope you guys liked the part..


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Edited by mohabbatgirl - 13 years ago

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