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vaishali

@Vaish24

Trailblazer

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#11

to be true- missed ur writing so much. the descriptions are so perfect. the word u use r so perfect to describe. nothing better can be written.

one complaint. y did u stop here. plz jaldi se continue it.

hi i am vaishali, so friends?

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21Neha21

@21Neha21

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#12

it was amazing...

it was so touching...

u write beautifuly..i could realy feel her pain..

waiting for d next part...

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Yogini

@yogini64

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#13

Awww . . . . She's in so much pain... & so are we,,, she's gone...
I hope she continues dancing & ends up in rey's arms... Hehehe... I'm a crazy fan...

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farah sharmin

@sweetshine

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#14

OK first of all YAYYY i can comment on your OS properly 😃😆hahaha dat too lamba wale nd yipppeee sooo damn happy to read ur work coz i jus love all of dem😳

ready to get up on channe ka jhad aftr looong tym🤣🤣

omg dis was really one of d BEST thing i have read😳⭐️...the way you wrote every step it jus perfectly moves with the song😳

hehe i din hear the song before but as soon as i strtd reading i played it on and damn with the music and the words filling up the imaginary picture WOW😳 😃it was sooo BEAUTIFUL nd soo Heartt-touching😳

and with that the curtains rose up...slowly and stealthily...crawling up with the music, unveiling the thin swan. Clad in a white Indian attire stomping her foot on the dilapidated stage with the ghungru tied on her feet..synched with the high pitched commotion...she looked up; the swollen eyes with smudged kohl around the eyes spoke of the misery...and the stern expression engraved the dire need of her soul!

Jus Love wat u wrote here it created the perfect image😳 nd hehehe yess totally imagined in a white churidar hahaha😆😃

she stepped forward and tapped her foot on the ground keeping up with the thump of the beats and made the classic mudra with those fingers dipped in the Red ALTA of auspiciousness..

this was Ah-mazing the way you have written out abt the step and the movements its jus perfect with the music👏😃👏

With flashes of him tracing her cheek...looking at her with the eyes-filled with love..the sparks of aggressiveness grew in her..dancing through the widespeard area...her eyes caught the Band she wore..the Louian feign..her eyebrows twitched up and she spinned her body and removed the now unearthly band and wedged away the memories of him making her wear that with swiftly ducking down and up.

The pain which jus synced beautifully with the beats and then the flashbaks the way u have put it out in words it totally connected and soo touching😭😳

Driving away the thoughts of him touching her...tying the dori of her choli..the moments it held..taking a handfull of the red color lying ahead..she traced her arms with the same..and felt the cold blood pass through her veins in a quick manner. Dancing through the tears she kept on thumping her feet aganist the ground as if punishing herself for her deeds...

The aggressiveness and the pain u wrote here is jus mindblowing 👏👏👏

spinning around with the music trying to escape from her past...the past she adored but left her all drained depicting the same with the red color spread all across her ensemble as if showing her stained figurine through it..

Its Beautiful seriusly words r very less to xpress😳 but the way its written wid the pain it connects soo well and touches ur heart😃😳

it is such an AH-MAZING OS the whole song and the dance its all perfect👏👏⭐️

plzzz continueee soon hehehe now dat u hav holidays hehehehe continue soon hehehe 😳😆

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Anyaa_012

@Anyaa_012

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#15

wowww AWESOME!!!
I luvvv it yaa!!!;);)
ur writing is damn good yr !!:)
the way u wrote ..ahh!!:):)
plzzz update sooon!!:):)
an plzz add me in ur PM list!!:)

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chetna

@crazysky

Rocker

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#16

aart its too gud...
n love the pain n dance u showed
its incredible dude
waiting u to continue

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Snigdha

@Snigs.

Sparkler

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#17

luvly update u r very gud in xpressing d emotions...

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Somebody

@BebaakBegum

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: shaffy_arsha
arti its good to see to on forum after long tym😊
n da way u describe kriya's feeling is jst mindblowing...my eyes are moist...n its too beautiful
n pls pm me wen u update nxt part of dis😊

helloo😊

yeah even m happy to be back 😆
oh m touched that it made u SENTI😛

m more of a SAD writer and if i see people crying reading my work then that i guess is a sign that my writing was effective😆
thanku so much😃

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Somebody

@BebaakBegum

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: namylovkriyansh
loved it aarti..cont..😊

thanku namy...😃..lovely DP i must say😊

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Somebody

@BebaakBegum

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: magical_mania
Aarti its simply awsm..m in love wid song too...d startng narratn was so beautiful n her dance esthatic...putn red colour al around her n dn remincisng d earlier past is another xample of comendblty...d best part was wen she turnd round n fell on d floor shedng her tears to pour down her heart...ah-mazing..try to continue it asap

OH MANIA *hugs*

kinna tym hua gappe shape mare hue😆

but u know na my classes😭

and thanku so much mania...isshhh 😳

i wanna say one thing i generally don't like my work much but i like it lol😆
that red color thing is my fav...thats so painful yet so poignant...she feels stained..😭
m gonna continue it very soon...have holi holidays wth HUMONGOUS homework😡

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