(M&G) Bandit Queen-thread 1

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Remya

@Remya_Pillai

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Posted: 13 years ago

#251

oh god..

geet jealous for calling him handsome?

I must say meera s a gud observer..

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Posted: 13 years ago

#252

awesome update
loved it
haayyee maan getting wierd thoughts abt geet lol!
omg geet jealous good observation meera
geet trusts him too much
maan delays their arrest lovely
cont soon!

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Zubi

@misssmily

Voyager

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Posted: 13 years ago

#253

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Nice part ! 😊

First scene was funny 😆 , geeet meera and pari trying to speak to each other...without speaking... 😆 LOL and maan noticing it Exellent ! How a guy is supposed to react when 3 girls are acting weird 😉 ( or according to geet :
trying to act normal 🤣 ) Poor maan stucks between an indifferent meera, a flirt pari and an intriguiing geet 😈 ! The situation was giving the impression that something big was going to happen : as maan thought "It made him curious..what is going to happen now?" Like some war will start 🤣 !!! I was so engrossed in the scene that i was imagining a ticking clock in the background !!! 🤣 hahaha I really liked this scene ! 👏

Oh and there is one thing u managed really well ( among others ^^ ):
The fact that Maan is paranoid is so realistic !! Like you know jab tum koi galat kam karti ho ya kuch chupa rahi hoti ho, to you are always alert, and to some extent paranoid... even if the person in front of you doesn't know anything, you are convinced that he knows evrything... even you feel like his behavior is strange, halake he is behaving as he always did... but you are convinced of the contrary ! 😆
And maan is behaving exactly in that way... it is really realistic !!! hats off for that ! 👏 👍🏼

I dont know why i liked the scene where maan crushed the medication and blew it on the air... It was original ! 😊

Oh and maan, god this guy don't miss a chance to spy on the girls... he can't stay in place more than 10 mins !
And what a timing yaar ! Just when she was doing exercises ! But one thing you didn't do yaar, it would have been good to have a self talk from maan regarding her looks... like a sexy description from head to toe 😉 ... ( like u did with her legs, while maan was on the terrace )... or may be u did it on purpose as u felt like it was too soon...

Then the kitchen scene was good ! The question on her fighting skills was indeed not expected but... pleasently amazing. 👏 And last line from maan: "A mystery women...hmm looks like I will be enjoying this case"... u ticked my imagination girl ! 😈

Then on the terrace... well done you didn't show too much emotions from geet after meera's remark on maan ! But i didn't understand the last lines of the chap, what intrigued meera ??? What i understood is that there was 2 plants on th terrace, one was missing which i suppose to be the one maan broke as meera stares at the broken pices... ^^ Or may i didn't understand well and apart from the broken one, the other was missing as well ??? CONFUSING ! 😕

Great part ! Me really enjoyed it ! waiting for more ! 😳 😊
Oh and yeah had an idea concerning a source of inspiration for geet's character, will pm you ! Because am giving you ideas but if i post them here, it will spoil the story for other readers ^^ ! 😉

Love ya ! 😊 🤗

Edited by misssmily - 13 years ago