MG[SS]-The Yellow Dot of Eternal Joy[IMP Note Pg 1 & Pg 72]

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jazzerette

@jazzerette

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Posted: 13 years ago

#241

Part 6

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Edited by jazzerette - 3 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

#242

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Originally posted by: jazzerette
First things first.. I love Vicky.. as long as he wont use that body spray on me of course.. ah how much i hate the smell! You know when me and bhai fight, he would not say a thing instead he would spray that sickening thing in MY room and I would obviously get out of my room. 😆 I went random! AGAIN! Mera kuch nahi ho sakta! Sigh!

You could do all this and more.

Anything and everything I am, is yours to color.

And yet you elude me of your sunny warmth. Even after you have reduced me to nothing but a shade in your palette. Why must we be separated by two different spaces? Just let me stay immersed in one single shade of that place that your presence graces.

Color me off limits, color my boundaries, color my extremes, color my unceasing infinities, color my endless sleep, color my peace and color even the creases of my dreams.

Color my amazement of you; color away every moment that my eyes find themselves looking at you. Color the awe that I hold you in; color the want that I keep within.

Come paint the desires of my heart too, and my hopes of having a life with you.

And if you can't find it in yourself to grant me this one wish, forget not to paint our separation and the curse of living alone. Because even with the pain of being apart, I must live on. For as long you live, my breath won't leave my body. Color my dare to carry on.

Yellow dot of mine, is this yellow your own real color? I know for sure it is mine from now. Because you have become my journey and the companion I travel with. My genesis and my end. You are my owner and my dearest friend.

The single most special entity of my life. Nanhi.

If I ever uttered her true name, I shall risk the chance of no longer being her closest friend. I may simply become a man waiting in askance, for the woman who means my all.

Because how does a man claim his woman?

No elaborate gestures, no expensive attempts, no explicit words.

Simply by the way he takes her name.

Ethers of my essence lay subservient to You
Yellow in every shade, yellow in every hue

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I was grinning through out. One sentence where I actually understood where this is heading is .."She calls me her best friend. But I have always simply called her special."

How simple yet how effective.. He calls her Special. Not defining their relationship. Not defining what she is to her. Aww!

That reminds me Jazz what do you call me? 😳

Apart from Jalebi bai baby parjhai.. nautanki rani, DQ, etc,. etc, and not to forget.. that annoying little name BABY.😡🤣

Chaddo!😕

Oh BTW i did prepare notes from this update as well..

A jubilant shout of glittering gold

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All I knew that my heart was all blue in absence of a feeling so profound. All I knew that my essence was now cloaked in saffron unbound. Every ether soaked in yellow.

I tried to color the word yellow in yellow par woh dikh nahi raha tha😆

I loved it how you described how he felt in her absence by a color. Show me your brains. I want to give aarti to it😆

BTW Maan has turned a poet. Aaye Haayyee! 😆

I loved one line BTW "Because like a stubborn fool, it was my own want that sought this stain on my soul." Beautiful!! Oh in Jazzy style, "Bloody Beautiful!!"😆

This update was one of the beautiful updates of TYDEJ. I entirely loved the update. The poetic style was to die for and hence i have quoted them but more than that, the ones in blue stole the show. I could actually imagine her name on his lips. How simple but how beautiful! Hayye!

You did clear everything.. and I am glad most of my guesses were right.. kind of. Except of course the main one.. rofl. I always thought Sameera is Nanhi.😆

I read the last para over and over and over and over again and the underlined line gave me goosebumps. Haayyee!!

And dont be surprised if this comment lacks continuity. This is what happens when you write exams over a longgg longg time🤣

Edited by Cloud9. - 13 years ago

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Saba

@Eccentric.Being

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#243

Can I also reserve? 😈

...EDITED...

HUH..., Shikha beat me to it with micro seconds difference 😡

Hey Jazz,

Maan was trying to divert his mind with physical exertion so that he does not have to think about the things he did not wish to face.

Vicky is glittering gold with some orange tinges as well but our focus is more on Maan's brown color all the while him focusing on his yellow dot.

This Ghazal Part describes Maan's condition & his wish.

"Tumhein Jab Kabhi Milen Fursatien, Meray Dil Se Bojh Utar Do

Mein Kai Dinon Se Udas Hun, Mughay Koi Shaam Udhar Do

Mughay Apnay Roop Ki Dhoop Do k Chamak Saken Meray Khal-o-Khad

Mughay Apnay Rang Mein Rang Do, Meray Saray Zang Utar Do"

It might sound strange that I believe in love but not a romantic soul & this update made me love "the Love" even more. It's the feeling that counts & Maan's thought, taking the name of ur beloved tells the depth, was beautiful.

Zindagi Younhi Teri Chahat K Naam Kardi

Jaisay Ghanay Darakht K Neeche Sham Kardi

Laut Jate Hain Parinde Shaam Hote Hi

Hamne To Har Shaam Hi Tere Naam Kardi

Want More UPDATE Soon.

Edited by serenelove - 13 years ago

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mechantefille

@mechantefille

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Posted: 13 years ago

#244

aashooo u res'd right b4 me!!

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Jazz - I have to say that I must be one of the most unfeeling humans, who hasn't many romantic bones or fibres in her. I tend to remain unaffected by most things, sentimental. But you, have managed to bring out that side in me, with that update.

How dare you not call yourself a writer. Anyone who can write what you just wrote, can only have a soul so bright and vibrant, it'll turn the morning sunshine pale.

I literally had tears in my eyes after reading that. It's so beautiful a plea, a confession - it's almos tlike a lover's benediction. My gosh, any guy who says all of that to me - like ever - I'll be had - good and true...wow that's 'Wowed' me good and true!!

Muah!! 🤗

Edited by mechantefille - 13 years ago

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Loquacious_Aash

@Loquacious_Aash

Stunner

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Posted: 13 years ago

#245

Originally posted by: jazzerette

I had to ask this...what does this mean?? i am alla westucfk!

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see the tumult of my emotions😳😳 i cane even expres myself

And I had to make Meera a motherly figure to Maan...serves you right!!! Your Meera is too touchy-feely for all the goodness of her heart🤣

noways😡 meera is meera...maan ki chandramukhi😈 abh soch aage kya hoga SOL me😉😉

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Loquacious_Aash

@Loquacious_Aash

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#246

hey saut...kaisi hai tu!!

new yr kaisa hoing tera?

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ritzy09

@ritzy09

Rocker

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#247

wow just lovely...so finally the relationships are clear or rather confirmed.

But I wonder how can thye not meet for so long...

really hoping to see them together in one frame and also maybe understand her POV somewhere in all this

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Loquacious_Aash

@Loquacious_Aash

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#248

A jubilant shout of glittering gold ...

The sky was permeated in deep orange lined with traces of yellow...

All I knew that my essence was now cloaked in saffron unbound. Every ether soaked in yellow. ...

well this time this was it...discounting the hazels and blues😆😆

"It must be around six now I believe. With my hand I swept away the black of few stray hairs away from my forehead, ..."..errr..when did the WIG start to move😲😲😲😲 the extra strenghth gel does hold it tight u kno...

loved it...baby...dont tell me one more separation😡 u are worse than me...teri FFs me wo dono kabhi saath kyu nahi hote😡😆😆😆😆😆