SS/FF - With Or Without You - chp 38/pg144 - Page 44

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--Nargis-- thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
😲 OMG...5 updates!!!!

Wow...damn good...just read all 5 updated...loved him. Overall...I like the progress...especially the truce that seems to have been established between them, since he realized that Aakash has eyes only for Payal..and not Khushi.

Loved Arnav's style of apology...kya andaaz hai...kameena...sorry bhi bola toh aise...zabardasti thobha uspe...leaving her no chance to even say anything!!!

I would have loved to hear him say a a sher...though its not like him at all...and we all know for whom those words would have been!!!

I loved the whole ambiance of Lucknow...the sher, shayari, the takkias, the gaddis, the lamps, the hookahs, the paan...splendid...loved it!!👏 I could picturize the room...i could see her in her White lengha...coming down the stairs...lost in her eye lock with Arnav...beautifully depicted in words!!!⭐️

I loved his natural reaction...as he sees her miss a step...and how dread fills his heart as soon as his mind registers that she is about to fall...and his body springs to action on its own accord...running, jumping, sprinting to go and catch her...to save her from harm...but this time he cannot reach in time...so he grabs her lifeless body and comes to a realization that she is badly hurt.

So me thinks that like almost all attendees of the sangeet...La too has witnessed this...the STOIC COLD Arnav Singh Riazada's outburst at seeing Khushi fall...and lay lifeless in his arms!!!

Dying for the next update...


Edited by --Nargis-- - 13 years ago
..Anita.. thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
Thank you so much for the update!!!!
the ending is so good, i can't wait for the next update
Now i can do my homework in peace for a while. but i will be thinking of that ending...
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Posted: 13 years ago
ha ha!!

anita...

go do homework..

ye kahaniyan toh chalti raheingi...

mein kahan jaa rahi hoon..

sirf meri ungliyaan toofan mail se compete kar rahi hai!!


and nagz...

yeah our conversation of half hour..has done this to me!

ab bhuktoh
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Posted: 13 years ago
this was really an interesting part.finally he said it n everyone heard.
Waiting eagerly 4 more d next time
Raunika
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Posted: 13 years ago
omg.. 5 updates.. 😲 dis is really a treat 4 d readers.. :-):-)
brilliant writing as always..:-):-)
thnx a lot vrushali..:-)
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: --Nargis--

😲 OMG...5 updates!!!!

Wow...damn good...just read all 5 updated...loved him. Overall...I like the progress...especially the truce that seems to have been established between them, since he realized that Aakash has eyes only for Payal..and not Khushi.

yep dimaag toh hai na...bas usse dekh kar cloud mein chala jaata hai...


Loved Arnav's style of apology...kya andaaz hai...kameena...sorry bhi bola toh aise...zabardasti thobha uspe...leaving her no chance to even say anything!!!


yeah he is our kameena hai na?

I would have loved to hear him say a a sher...though its not like him at all...and we all know for whom those words would have been!!!

i had thot of a moment like that where he instead of looking at Lavanya looks at Khushi..but... to me that is not his character... so i left it alone...
woh toh chori ke sher bhi nahi bol sakta..romantic hi nahi hai...bas...galati se pyar kar beithaa hai..

I loved the whole ambiance of Lucknow...the sher, shayari, the takkias, the gaddis, the lamps, the hookahs, the paan...splendid...loved it!!👏 I could picturize the room...i could see her in her White lengha...coming down the stairs...lost in her eye lock with Arnav...beautifully depicted in words!!!⭐️


thanks..took me to time back in TMBA... and Maan and Abs' wedding...hee hee...ab bolna mat ki woh FF bhi khatam kar...woh meri pending file mein top par hai

I loved his natural reaction...as he sees her miss a step...and how dread fills his heart as soon as his mind registers that she is about to fall...and his body springs to action on its own accord...running, jumping, sprinting to go and catch her...to save her from harm...but this time he cannot reach in time...so he grabs her lifeless body and comes to a realization that she is badly hurt.

Thanks yaar...now here is something i like to read...you telling what you like...was there nothing that you did not? or am i asking for a can of worms to be opened here??

So me thinks that like almost all attendees of the sangeet...La too has witnessed this...the STOIC COLD Arnav Singh Riazada's outburst at seeing Khushi fall...and lay lifeless in his arms!!!

now this is something i want to see in the show too!! him affected when she is hurt... and that desperation he should show...not yet..but sometime in near future...
pyar hai...maanta nahi hai..par..kabhi kabhi..jhalak toh jaayega..na

ishq aur mushq chipaaye nahi chipte

Dying for the next update...

Ah abhi toh nahi lekin tomorrow is another day...kya pata..phir ek conversation..and

Chalaa murari...lanka dhaane ( i donno the exact saying..so making one up... after all writer hain...creative liberty and all?



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Posted: 13 years ago
rush after reading i had to comment now itself
a big hug for all the updates 🤗

i loved the way you made them say no to marriage 👏
not at all complicated, but you have put so much of complications in their relationship 😆

i love the way you describe the things and do some small symbolic things like putting shagun's mehendi on kushi and then rubbing it on Arnavs neck 😲 ☺️

good that you did not drag the misunderstanding of Arnav about akash , so typical arhi they understand and do not need third element have a passion encounter or a fight dono hi kaffi hai
aww kya jodi hai


i seriously wish CVs borrow your ideas 😍

i want to specifically pick some lines and comment them.
Which i will do later.

yes i am trying to get used to the cliffhanger. but when is again training is going start and run 😍

will lavanya say no to marriage and save both kushi and arnav from saying anything.
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Posted: 13 years ago
Sharu


now you i think are getting too close to reading me..hai na??

but..something's gotta give...

lets see kya hota hai?

waiting for the lines..

and yes..i get drawn by symbolism and inferences... be it in set up...paintings in the background... or nuances..in a series..which happened in Geet

here it happens...but i am not talking about it much..for i like to see something profound rather than the obvious things..

though my writing is not that profound...

lekin expectations ka kya hai

jitni lambi chaho utni lambi building

agar foundation theek hai to tikegi
nahi toh sarr par aa kar giregi
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Posted: 13 years ago
OMG 5 updates... 😛😃
Vrushu i had asked for 1 and u gave me a surprise package of 5... wowie... yipee...
all 5 were amazing updates... the build up was superb...
the patch up between arnav - khushi post his realisation that aakash n payal r a thingie was awesome... arnav is forgetting that she is the daughter of the lady who ruined his life n whom he killed...
last part where khushi fell and became unconscious was really nice... arnav saying he wont let anything happen to her...she cant leave him like that ... n whole of his family and lavanya's family seeing all that...just awesome...
muah muah muah to u vrush...
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Posted: 13 years ago
My God Vrushy ... bachhi (as in moi 😆) ki jaan legi kya ...itne saare updates ...and MY what fabulous updates👏 ...kitna kuchh ho gaya inn dono ke beech ...shagun ki mehndi bhi laga li dono ne , in their own interesting way of course 😆...and the lucknawi setting and sher aur shairi was just superb ...more like mesmerizing 😃 u know i knew something deadly was gonna happen and it did ...she fell and brought him to his senses ...the way he saw her falling and running to her overcoming the gaddis and takias...hai main mar jaawan ..😳 i can just about imagine the looks on the faces of all present there ...😲 😲
Vrushy ...do i need to tell u to update ASAP ...ab toh raha nahi jata ...😊
Edited by Jes75 - 13 years ago

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