Humari Daastan FF Updated Part 7B Page 40 - Page 11

Originally posted by: neetusidhu

wowo...part three was fantastic queenofhearts...i cant wait to read what happens next...great work...

Originally posted by: mohini4u

Haaye😍! Tough line to start off with babz😕! Heart is already beating faster in anticipation❤️!

'Kab hotein hain pyar ke raaste aasaan, suniye ek mohobat ki kahani, Humari Daastan'

Haha - I can't even begin to explain how hard it is to make my inner Ghalib wake up 😆

It is such a revolutionary feeling to see a lighter and more talkative side of the male protagonist after having seen a series of serious angry young men served in a platter. Of course Arnav was quick to get annoyed at the phone ringing, but which guy likes getting interrupted while uniting with his loved one? Let alone meeting that person for the first time in 3 years😳.

I wanted to show a much lighter male protagonist so thank you so much for appreciating that monz!! 😃

Khushi's concern was justified. But why did she take the phone😕? Kha-ma-kha bechari ko taane sunne pad gaye na🤔. Waise Mami ka character is stemming out really well👍🏼. She seems like the perfect vamp😈. Sort of reminds me of current khushi's bua😆. Let's wait and see how similar the character sketches turn out.

Vodku is right here (thanks vodku 😉) - I showed Khushi taking the phone in order to convey the comfort level between ArShi as well as their 'haq' over each other 😊

It's great to see you hate Mami so much!! 😆

Who doesn't love being cuddled into the warmth, protection and affectionate possessiveness of at least one person in their lives❤️? I know I do😳. It could be friends, family or any special relationship of the likes. Of course, if that someone is the one you are romantically associated with, the overall attraction level raises many notches up. If I were Khushi in the scene where Arnav notices the change in her expressions and immediately takes the phone away concluding that it is Mamiji, I would be reliving that moment, that act of protectiveness from this man, probably all night and many more to come☺️. These small sweet gestures in life are what become fuel that keeps any relationship alive and burning. Such sweetness and power of love was in that small action of Arnav. The pair's understanding of each other's actions and reactions is stupendo-fantabulously-fantastical like Geeta ma always says👏. In fact the couples in both your FFs share this divine bond☯️.

Awww - thats so sweet monz!! 😃 It's amazing the kind of small nuances you pick up in my stories - they really never fail to blow me away!!

By the way I love how all lead men in your stories are very sharp and blatantly aware of their surroundings. They may be clueless and novice romancers but skillful at picking nuances of subtlety in personalities and conflicts. It's hard to find this. Oh no here I go stereotyping men again😡. It's just that I know so many men in my family who are clueless about clashes between females of the house. Whether they are truly ignorant or choose to blissfully overlook it, is unknown to me. All I know is that where I come from, unfortunately it's not widely practiced to expect this. So seeing this trait in the men of all your stories delights me dil se⭐️.

Haha thanks monz - I like my leads to be a little more perceptive than they are shown on tv and even how they actually are in reality! Again - you're spot on with your comment about men choosing not to get involved with family disputes regarding women!

Moving on..

I went on describing a man's battles between pyar and parivaar but then it got too boring so scratched that! Jo imagine karna ho kar lena Baba ROFL! 🤣

I'm positive it wasn't boring monz!!!! 😉

Arnav made a note in his mind to ensure he didn't leave Khushi alone with Mami, and made a point to tell mami sternly that BOTH of us are coming home. Here he goes, protecting her again. So poignant na! He very tactfully handled and silenced mami. Loved it! 👍🏼

I'm glad his tact came across as I wanted to show him handling the situation maturely and despite the fact that the Arnav in my FF has a temper I wanted to convey the fact that he wouldn't disrespect any of his close ones.

By the way curiosity killed the cat🤢🤣. What kind of face did Arnav make at Khushi😕? I want to know no! Was it, cute and naughty😉? Was it, shut up and let me handle it😵? Was it, don't worry darling I got this? I am telling you girl I need to imagine every single thing in your FFs now a days warna mujhe neend nahi aati. 😳🤣

I'm glad you asked - I should have made it clear in the FF! Well, I imaging Arnav making a sweetly angry face at Khushi 😃

Jaan Chuti, he jokes! How wicked and mischievous of him🤪! Again, I am enjoying this side of the male lead, knowing full well that I am a sucker for all of those angry young men😳.

Haha - you me both hun 😆

Just as khushi opened her mouth.. mujhe laga Chup Bilkul Chup jaisa koi scene hone wala tha😆! Lekin aap ne toh mera hi mooh bandh kar diya😲. Predictability ki toh dhajjiya! Shaabash Baba👏!

Honestly - once again you've picked up on things I didn't even realise

A glass of water! Hmm! He went looking for her medicines then? Somehow my heart is pacing faster at the thought of the scene that will follow next.

Dhak dhak...dhak dhak... 😆

Aww khushi has no hint of what her man is up to does she😳? Her concern was soo sweet😛. She knew and understood that his mom must be dying to see her son, and vice versa. She also refers to her as Ma😕? How endearing is that😍!

I wanted to show the closeness between Arnav's mother and Khushi and I thought this would be a good way to display it before introducing the character 😊

Haaye raam tadapa tadapa ke maroge aap hame writer Saab🤢! Arnav ki flirting wali line sunke hum ko bhi blushing ho gayi☺️❤️. Waise that one line itself that he had used only jokingly with her, had so much depth and significance to it. I won't indulge since I am currently hypnotized by the ongoing romance😆☺️! Baaki bacha tha toh besharam ne aankh bhi maar di😈.

Oh ho blushing blushing haan? 😆 Imagine kar lena ki voh aapko hi keh rahe the 😃

The next two lines, SUPERB! "Hai Yeh sharm ek din..!" "agar apni jaan ke bare mein kuch bola toh!" Brilliant work Tinz. So much passion, love, security, concern, care, comfort, and sheer beauty of vast emotions. The entire sequence, where he held his ears and apologized cutely, her scolding back, and melting immediately by his infectious laugh! Right here Right now I want to say another long adjective: supercali-fragilistic-expialidocious!!! Yummy!!!😳🤗☺️☢️

Awww - so sweet!!! I'm amazed at the depth you see in a couple of lines - amazing monz, really amazing!

And then came the question. "Where is Dawa?" Such is the knitted intricacy of your writing Tinz, you made me visualize her tucking a strand of her hair behind her ears in nervousness. My heart is now racing even faster.

Dhak dhak...dhak dhak... 😆 Blood pressure agar badh jaye toh humein dosh mat dena monz 😆

She lied and he caught it immediately. She tried to make excuses but he kept catching on. Haaye Sweetness personified😍😍😍😍😍.

Kaka's interruption was much needed for the story progression I bet🤢. Sad but true😔.

Yes - Kaka was needed in order to move ArShi out of the chawl - though I would keep them both locked in there if I could 😆

The contemplation in both of their minds about the other was wonderfully weaved! And the fact that he decided he was going to do something about her chawl's hoodlums regardless of Khushi's pleas was alluring😍. Smart and protective enough was the man that he wasn't going to let her be any part of his plot😳😈.

I'm so glad that you got all this from that section - this is exactly what I was aiming for!!

😲😕 How in the world, did you manage to invoke so many emotions in your viewers by just a small sequence like- he looked at her reassuringly, she felt at peace, grabbing on to his hand slowly and shyly, and he tightened his grip. It was pouring sheer magic baba😍❤️! Simply magical and out-worldly👍🏼!

You're just too kind

The story flowed fabulously! I thought since aaj the story is not divided into sections, I can expect my analysis to be pretty short😆. Why does your writing always prove me wrong😕? The star of the show was the dawa sequence👏. Aap bas lage raho😳. I think aap ko roz ek naya naam milega⭐️. Aap mar-tina baba nahi. Mardala baba ho🤢🤣!

Forget my part monz - your analysis is always so incredible and heart warming!

Thank you so much monz!!! - from the bottom of my dhak dhak dil 😆 ❤️ 🤗

Jay ho! ☯️

Originally posted by: happybrar

awesomeee

update soon

Originally posted by: sweet1210

Very nice ff...plz pm me 😃

Originally posted by: kdg129

HAI! Aapki kahaaniyan tho ek din hamaari jaan hi le lengi! 😉😉

Awesome update as usual! ⭐️ Khambakkt Mami 😡

Originally posted by: MeetPremeer

loved it

Originally posted by: Naina_Mishal

Hey dear.!

Its just an amazing FF please add me to your PM list too...waiting eargly for the next update...love the consept of your story...

upload asap...

Originally posted by: mohini4u

I just stumbled upon this one again and realized... 😲 Oh My God there is sooo much symbolism in these lines

Do you mean - You are missing us and we are missing you😍?

Do you mean - You come when we go and you go when we come😒?

Do you mean - You miss us so you come but we go and we come because we miss you but by then you go?

🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 this is what happens when both of you leave me alone, aur mujhe akele akele talli hona padta hai ... both you sickos ne mujh changi bhali innocent si bacchi ki kyaa haalat bana di hai - DevDaasi (remember that one baba?) 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣