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FANTASY
CHAPTER-4
" Geet, you're burning. Tumhe toh bohut tez bukhaar hai", he held her waist tightly and pinned her to himself. " Tum aapna khayal kyun nahin rakh sakti? Dekho kya halat banake rakkhi hai! Aisa koi karta hai kya?", he continued, with worry and concern lined on his face.
That was it. She mustered the last of her strength and with all her might, pushed him away from her.
" Aapko kya farq parta hai Maan, main jiyun ya marun? Aapne toh mujhe marne keliye hi chora thana? Toh phir, yeh jhoota dikhava kyun? Maine aapse kaha na,main wapas nahin aaungi. Mazak bana ke rakh diya hai aapne. Jab chaye paas bula liye, jab chahe bich raste mein chor diya!! Samaj te kya hai aap?",she said, crying out loud.
Her eyes were filled with pain and anguish, which made Maan hate himself even more. He tried to lift his hands to wipe her tears, " JAAN", he said softly, but she jerked his hands away.
" Mat kahiye mujhe Jaan!! Aap who haaq bohut pehle kho chuke hai Maan. Uss raat ko sab khatam hogaya. Aapne sab kuch khatam kar diya. Mera pyaar, mera vishwaas, meri izzat, mera aatma sammaan sab kuch. Mar gayi Geet Maan.. Who Geet jo aapse pyaar karti thi who mar gayiii Maan!!!"
" Nahin Geet, aisa mat kaho. Tum mujhse naraz ho na, toh mujhpar chikho, chillao, mujhe maaro lekin aisa mat kaho. Main tumhare bina nahin rehsakta.",pleaded Maan, unable to take her words anymore.
Geet continued crying, and suddenly she walked up to him and held him by his collar.
" Kya kaha tha Maan aapne? Main toh besharam hoon na? Main lalchi hoon, maine aapse sirf paiso ke liye shaadi ki na? Maine ek paraye mard ke saath raat bhi guzari na? Aisi ladki ke saath aap kaise rehsakte hai? Main toh aapke layak hi nahin hoon. Aap itne aamir hain, acche hain lekin main? Mera to iss duniya mein koi nahin hai, mere maa papaji bhi nahin hai mere saath. Mere aage piche koi nahin hai. Aisi ladki ki taraf dekhna bhi aapko shobha nahin deta, Mr. Maan Singh Khurana!!!", she sobbed uncontrollably shaking him weakly by his collar.
" Lekin iss ladki se zyaada pyaar Maan Singh Khurana ko koi nahin karsakta Geet", Maan whispered softly.
She was shaking vigorously, as spasms of grief and pain hit her and made her chest constricted, and she found it difficult to breathe. She continued holding on to him, with a very weak grip and continued talking,
Ayan mera dost tha. Lekin aap toh mere pati ho na? Manti hoon ke maine uss raat ko aapse yeh nahin kaha ke main uske saath thi, lekin aapne iska yeh matlab nikala? Aapne mujhse," she lowered her eyes, as she recalled the words he threw at her, " You asked me whether… whether… he.. was good in… chi Maan. Isse accha hota aap mujhe maar dalte.Kyun Maan, Kyun kiya aapne yeh Kyun Kyun???", she panted heavily, as tears rolled down her cheeks, clouding her vision and making her head throb. She let go of Maan and held her head in her hands. Her head was spinning, and she was aware of Maan saying something, but the last thing she heard was his voice saying, " GEET" before her eyes rolled close and she fainted.
"GEET!! GEET!!", he screamed loudly. Her body was burning with fever and her face and eyes were red from crying. Maan scooped her up in his arms immediately, and was caught by shock to see how light she was. Maybe she didn't even eat properly, maybe she doesn't sleep properly, maybe.. he trailed off.
His eyes never felt her face, as he carried her down to his car. He felt half of himself being burnt away as he saw her lay limp in his arms, and knowing that he was the reason behind it made things even more worse.
" I will kill myself if something happens to her, I swear!!", he thought furiously, as he entered Khurana Mansion with his wife in his arms.
Pari and Vicky were absorbed in Vicky's laptop, gazing intently at the presentation layouts when they saw Maan walk in with an armful of Geet. They immediately jumped up and followed Maan, as he walked towards the bedroom, screaming for Nakul to be on the look out for the doctor who was on the way.
" Bhai, you found bhabi. Whats wrong with her? How did this happen? Is she fine?"
" Maan, Geet behosh kyun hain? And why does she look like hell? Kya hua isse?"
" Please guys, I will explain everything later. Just go and see whether the doctor is here. Aur Vicky, Dadima kaha hain?"
" Woh Bhai, woh Amritsar gayi hai aapne Lata aunty ke paas kuch din rekne. Woh bimar hai isiliye!!"
The doctor came in and checked her pulse. A look of worry crossed her face.
" Inhone last kab khana khaya tha?"
" Woh… Woh…actually Doc.." Maan stammered.
" Dekhiye, inki halat bohut nazuk hai. She is very weak. Inka bohut blood loss ho chukka hai and bukhaar bhi kaafi tez hai. Shayed yeh bohut stress mein thi. Mujhe kuch tests karne parenge lekin dekhkar lagta hai ki inhone atleast 48 hrs mein kuch bhi na khaya hai. She has very little strength and resistance power left in her.
I will give the medicines, lekin main nahin bata sakti ki kitna time lagega inhe recover karne mein. Inka bohut kheyal rakhna parega.Aur aap, aap inke paati hai na? Aap ek kam kijiye, get her changed and give her a sponge bath. Aur kuch bhi ho just give me call. Ok?"
Maan kept looking at Geet, with an inexplicable emotion in his eyes, and when he didn't reply to the doctor, it was Vicky who offered to escort her out. Maan was still staring at Geet, who lay on his bed, no THEIR bed, a lifeless body, who had taught him to live. It was Pari's voice that shook him out of his reverie.
" Maan, aap Geet ko sponge bath de dijiye main niche wait karti hoon."
" No wait. Pari, sponge bath tum dogi main nahin."
" Lekin Maan…"
" Please Pari.", he said and then softly added, " Shayed main yeh haaq kho chukka hoon!!"
PRECAP: Main tumhare layak nahin hoon Geet. You deserve a much better person than me. Lekin, tumhari yeh halat meri wajah se huyi hai. Please stay with me,till you recover. I promise I wont ask you to stay back with me or give me a second chance. Ek bar tum thik ho jao, phir tum jo chahti ho wahi hoga, jaisa tum kahogi main waisa hi karunga.
A big hug and thank you to the 34 people who liked the last chapter. And thank you to all the commenters, and my silent readers. It feels great to know that you like my feeble attempts to entertain you. I will be posting the next chapter soon since I wont be in the country from 1st July to 8th July.
But please leave me long comments to relish. And I know many of you may be sad about the current track but guys just bear with me. I promise you the reunion will *Ahem Ahem 😳* make up for it!!!
PLEASE HIT THE LIKE BUTTON AND LEAVE ME LONGGG COMMENTS!!!
Love
Sarzah
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Posted: 14 years ago
#52
hiii sarzah...
chalo der se hi sahi..maan mein sadbuddhi aa hi gayi😆
its painful for any wife to hear such chep accusations from her husband...
geet's pain was portrayed fabulously...
maan needs to repent a lot...
wud like to kno how maan discovered the truth and who was the person behind framing geet and their motives...
each and every emotion and geet's pain is well captured...
the precap is giving me mixed feelings...
i want maan to repent a lot and realise the significance of geet and geet to take her own sweet time to forgive maan...
hope this bittersweet moments will add a lot of zing to this ff..
simply fabulous writing
BTW...i wanted to ask any particular reason behind naming this ff as FANTASY...as i cudnt relate the title and the concept of this ff,..will be waiting for ur reply
keep writing
love u and ur ff

reva
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Posted: 14 years ago
#53




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Posted: 14 years ago
#54
superb part !!!
Geet suffering all alone..
eagerly waiting for next part.
please continue soon n thank for PM:)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#55
hey i read ur ff and its really amazing do update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: Dreamy_Mystique

hiii sarzah...
chalo der se hi sahi..maan mein sadbuddhi aa hi gayi😆
its painful for any wife to hear such chep accusations from her husband...
geet's pain was portrayed fabulously...
maan needs to repent a lot...
wud like to kno how maan discovered the truth and who was the person behind framing geet and their motives...
each and every emotion and geet's pain is well captured...
the precap is giving me mixed feelings...
i want maan to repent a lot and realise the significance of geet and geet to take her own sweet time to forgive maan...
hope this bittersweet moments will add a lot of zing to this ff..
simply fabulous writing
BTW...i wanted to ask any particular reason behind naming this ff as FANTASY...as i cudnt relate the title and the concept of this ff,..will be waiting for ur reply
keep writing
love u and ur ff

reva

Thank you so much Reva for your comment.😃 I really loved it!!! Glad you are liking the story!!! And about naming this FF, there is no particular reason and it just came to my mind randomly. I wasnt even sure at first whether I will be able to continue this FF since I was scared about the response I will get. There are such talented writers on this forum ,and I am nowhere even close to that!!! So, I had prepared myself that maybe I will have to stop as soon as I started.
And I dont know whether you will trust me or not, I would have asked you guys for a new title after updating chapter-5.😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thank you... ur usually the one commenting on my updates first. So I have noticed in the last chapters...😆 Thank you o much for liking this FF!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
#58
Thank you so much!!!😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks so much!!!😊
sarzah thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
#60
Thank you sweetheart!! And ur most welcome!!!😃

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