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Originally posted by: PurplePetal

That was an interesting update Lena. It had everything...

Everything...im think very pervy rite now 😆

I loved the way you said that he was taking her heart, and she was taking his. That they both had each others. It was just sweet and romantic. Bu that Geet realized what she was doing...

lolz romantic and so cheesy 🤣

Maan is right. They cant be separated. As much as they try.

u mean, as much as SHE tries. he's been trailing behind her since ever 😛

And Geet's attempt to escape was priceless. Maan caught her, and probably will every single time...

yep, unfortunately the fact that he's stronger than her hasnt clicked in her head yet. 😆

and they made love...OMG..was not expecting that!!!!!! Craziness...

i was debating a lot, whether i shud or shud not add it in. but i felt like the story has reached such a point that making love was necessary and crucial to the chars.

Geet submitted because, hopefully, she loves him as much as he does to her. And Maan just seems a little, actually who am i kidding. violent. Scariness...but when he said that it will be all right, it was very sweet...

lmao, he's not violent. he's just aggressive 😳.he still cares u noe. so ofcause he's going to say it'll b ok 😆

but than i remember that maan wasnt a virgin, but this was Geets first time and it just made me sad...😭

oh chill. wats the big deal 😛😛

Geet can never seem happy can she. She always waits for that other shoe!!!!

always, that's her problem. she cant liv in the moment

BTW..loved the way you incorporated the title in this update. My Only Exception.

lolz. i jus realized how many times i kept using exception. im jus like y not jus incorporate the title in here. maybe the ppl who stil hav no clue y i used the title may get a hint 😆

Anyways...Fantastic Update...With all the ups and downs...👏 promised u a sad one 😉

Originally posted by: KaSh-Maneet-Fan

hiii

awesome update

loved it

loved maaneet

i hope geet can soon stand out 4 her love

cant wait 4 more

con soon

thanks 4 da pm

Originally posted by: undisclosed

chapter 28 is officialy the best chapter you have ever written☺️

Originally posted by: luvabbybaby

OMG they did it? 😊
yes, thanks for the declaration, jaanu 😛
AHHH how I feel contended at the moment! ☺️ It was sooo hot I am burning right now 🤣 u want me to cool u down with my LOOOVE 🤣
So to begin, it was angsty as SHI🤬 WELL it broke my heart at the beginning . . . It was so sad, so heavy and depressing.
isnt it always? 😛
I wanted to kill the ASHAS stupid BITC🤬
oof. such heavy language. jaanu, ur goin to hav to watch ur mouth in front of me.
Poor, poor Geet. So they made love . . . ON A SWING? 😆 It's okay I LOVED IT 😳 He fought her, she fought him. He made her give in . . . Not only physically but mentally. SO he showed her his love? AHHH the total and complete physical and mental love . . . ! 😆
what's wrong with a swing 😭...that sounds romantic ☺️. but i hope mine is a sofa bed 🤣
yep, thats the thing. her approval was tacit so its easy to argue, she was raped.
It was beautiful, and I have few words with ur update. I am breathless and shocked that a new level had been taken in this ff and in MG's relationship. I am so happy . . . I CANT EVEN WRITE IT! 😆
u shud b feeling bad for geet, chee chee. shame on u 😆
I feel for Geet and her concern for Maan . . . !
sure u do 😉
AWW POOR BABY Maan was crying! I thought it was a wonderful aspect in the ff . . . And he finally seemed more human to me.
ur saying he's inhumane 😲
The love scene was proper (ahem ahem 😳) and I thought it was executed wonderfully! AMAZING BABE! LOVEDDD IT!!!
u hav NO IDEA how hard it was for me to NOT use profane words, but i tried somehow. 🤔
To my Jaan an awesome writer!!!!
an a great girlfriend 😉😆
Love
luv u more ❤️
Liz

P. S. Why were you cranky? Are you okay?
no sleep. tired as hell. wrote a part that i HATED writing but NEEDED to write. so yep, that's y.
im still tired today but, hey that's the fallback for students...PIECE OF CRAPPY A🤬 SH🤬 SCHOOL...anyways i am fine 😃😆
LOVE U 🤗

Originally posted by: jyoti_l

CONGRATS on the new thread...🥳

awesome part...👏

finally they became one...that was expected...coz he knew this was the only way to she will realize her n his love...

she always listens to others...not that they r wrong...but he is her only exception...n she herself doesnt know sometimes what she is doing or saying...

now waiting to know what is in store for them next...

continue soon...

thnx for PM...

Originally posted by: krati5

congrats for the new thread... awesome update... i think there ws a need of this nd maan hs took the r8 decision... afterall he loves her a lot

Originally posted by: sweet scorpio

awesome!

now geet will understand that its impossible to go away from maan!

but i am shocked with the fact that they became one!

continue soon!

Originally posted by: chubzy

M simply speechless, only u would have done justice in writing such intence scene n u have done it... Loved the way u wrote abt d inner turmoil of geet. Amazing update

Originally posted by: serenelove

Hey Lena,

It was quite unexpected kind of update. though it's always different cause story is unique but yes it was totally unprovided for.

lolz but hey u cant use the unique concept as an excuse all the time 😛 That is no excuse missy, this is something that I think, not necessary 4 u to agree with me 😉😆

lolz, ofcourse, ur entitled to ur opinion 😆

Geet's summarizing the events was interesting & a little different from what was perceived from the start.

i actually had no idea how to start. this update ate my brains 😆 but still good job with less or no brains😆

Oh I hate Ashas 😡😡, double standard creatures😡😡Maaneet are going through so much pain cause of them

oh but we cant jus blame the Ashas for evrythin. her insecurities wud b triggered one day. secret love cant always stay a secret b/c if it does, it means its ended. Right, her insecurities are emerging but still can't help my -ve feelings toward them.

dont blame u. hated them since the very beginning of Geet, forget bout my ff.

At the time only Maan's stubbornness & his control on Geet is the only harbor. But physically forcing her 😲😲😲

think what u may 😉😆 That' what I am doing 😆

"I fell asleep with my lover beside me, until I would have to awaken to the catastrophe that anticipated my arrival." this is the highlight 4 me. so many ideas are swirling in mind

believe me, ideas r swirling thru me too. idk wat to write until i start writing. & I hope that it will be different again 😆(believe it or not😉)

i already thought of it. wat i can guarantee is it will be maan's pov. 😊

Continue Soon

Originally posted by: ajenn

Beautifully written every part of this. Fully from Geet POV.
She had to bear the overwhelming violent passion of Maan.
Am so shocked as Maan took such a big step into their relationship.
He was about to lost his love of life and he to make Geet realize about his unconditional love.
I hope Maan will never be regret over his action.
Eager to read next update. Thx for the pM

Originally posted by: hindu4lyf

Congrats on the new thread!

AMAZINGGG UPDATE!!! Totally unexpected but omg it was awesome. I loveee the characterisation of both Maan and Geet in this FF!

Can't wait for the next update!

Originally posted by: basicquestion1

Yaara I'm on my phone now so I'm not going to reply bck to ur comment... Will do that later. But the thing is... Well the thing is... Ur ff has been on my mind... And it's disturbing me!
Geet thinking that her relation with maan is impure is one thing but I think... The problem that's obsecuring her judgement is lack of her worth in her eyes. I think she thinks she is unworthy of a man like maan. She is hurting herself every moment and she is going to hurt maan with her insecurities. Damn maan's mom. Real biatch... Sorry for my anger. But I sincerely luv geet and more than their affair and luv relation to take off , I want maan to help geet so her confidence soars to tremendous heights. Maan and Lena plzzz don't dissappoint me. Plzz let geet come out of her delusional state of mind.

Originally posted by: basicquestion1

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Edited by WhiteFantasy - 14 years ago

Originally posted by: WhiteFantasy

Originally posted by: Maya_P

Hello Lena

this is my first post in ur FF...i read MOE from chapter 1 to chapter 28 in one shot...MOE was highly recommended by one of my B2B buddy...
nd im guessing it was undisclosed cuz she liked this post 😆

u have really a unique way of writing which has a depth in the characters(i'm a MG FF freak so i have read and reading many FF...and ur style is totally different from the rest of the writers)...
lolz, glad to know u can find something new with my writing

now MOE is really a roller coaster ride for me...the various emotions u experience during a roller coaster ride could be felt while reading MOE...
thats actually b/c im very emotional and spontaneous. idk what im writing half the time 😆

chapter 28 left me in shock and mixed emotions...i feel for Geet (as one way or another everything is violent or disturbing when it comes to her)...i was expecting the love to heal her wounds...but it looks like it just created more wounds for her(i'm saying this from the last line in chapter 28)...but u know something their first consummation is just like their love...not rosy and ideal ..their love is a turmoil and so was their first consummation....can't wait for chapter 29...pls update soon
wow, thats a beautiful simile. nd yes ur write. there whole love nd circumstance nd actions nd words r bumpy nd mixed with sadness and hint of happiness.

btw chapter 28 must have been a real challenge for u...it only makes u a good writer...and i love ur little poetic paragraph at the start of each chapter summarizing the emotions that r awaiting...

yes...sicne i nvr experience it...nd writing it makes me NOT want to experience it 🤢
thats y i put it there. to summarize 😆

if i could permit to make one request i would like u to incorporate in one of the future up comings chapters a consumption depicting warm love.for the sake of Geet...i did see ur answer to one of the comment post...saying that there won't be another love making in the FF...i hope u were joking😉 ...but i have to say that u wrote the whole love making scene in a decent manner...so no fear ur good at it

...i wasnt joking 🤣. i RLY dont want to hav to write this crap again . *shivers*. but i cant guarantee my words. wherever the story flows, i will let it go. so who knows. i may b completely wrong.
decent yes. lolz. i was trying to make it subtle for most part. 😛

waiting for chapter 29