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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: rupzloveu

Hiii, firstly u r nt coping any ones idea sooo plzzz do say sry...n secondly its ur wish where u feel writing. N its obvious i m always there tooo read n thirdly i loved ur all ff...



Aww Thanks.. Yeah i 've not seen or heard my ff being copied... and i actually prefer writing on here... its much easier for me... Thank you... i love them too lol :P

Originally posted by: maansi007

i didnt fount n e thng being copied in ur ff n abt ur Q. n e thng would wrk wid me blog or forum as far as i get pm😳



Thanks ... Yeah i guess... wanted to know what would be Convenient for you lot...

Originally posted by: lovelycutietedy

you can do as per your convenience dear.



Thanks x :) it would be easier on here really ...

Originally posted by: ssch

i know that's the problem theses days. but you keep on writing if any body has problem he stop reading it. why are you worrying yourself there are enough descent fella on this forum who appreciate our fictions😉



Yeah there has been a lot of going around about copying... i just wanted to make sure no-one thought ne of my work was copied off someone... i really shouldn't as i know all my readers would tell me... i am defo going to carry on writing... :)

Originally posted by: sindu555

hey nazmaa ... I dont think i've seen any similarities in your FF ...


I wud advise you to keep writing on IF ... if someone wants to copy they can do it from ur blog too .. so why leave IF and distort ur reader base ..

waiting for the update

love
Sana




Thanks sana... Yeah i thought so too.. as i am getting my ideas from my MILLS AND BOONS Books and turning them around lol :P thats true that can copy from the blog too...
i prefer updating on here as it is not too much hassle...

The Update is going to ,mighty BIG...

hope you guys are ready for a twist ... :) thank you all for your comments... i appreciate the suggestion and will in fact stay on IF... If Anybody Wants to copy it then go ahead as i know my ideas are orignal and infact that good to copy lol :P


Not Giving Permission to Copy though lol :P D
if you would like to use my ideas i prefer you ask me first...
thanks guys x
Nazma <3




Edited by Nazmaa - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
yaar dont break our heart
ur FF different from other writers
so pls update soonnn
we luvvv yu
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: softly_spoken

i dont find any similarity with all those few ffs that i read... and please i m just piss off of that copy fiasco already... i so much like that ff... and just coz of this hassle poor writer is so much hurt that i dont think she is able to write for some more days...

plus ffs on blog is difficult for readers and writers as well...i suggest you to make blog and update both at the same time. and if wouldnt be managable then its your choice.. you are already on fb and you can send messages via fb too. do what is more feasible to you...



Yeah i know mee too... when i heard she was going to stop i was heartbroken

one of my favourite FF's and people just really upset her...

x
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: simi91

yaar dont break our heart

ur FF different from other writers
so pls update soonnn
we luvvv yu



Yeah im staying on FF... But your going to have to wait till 11 to get ur Update today x :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
hi dear
ur ff is completely different.
pls continue it here.
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Posted: 14 years ago
plz ... dont stop writing ...

its upto u ... wer u wanna write .. on blog or IF ...

just send us d link n will follow ...

but IF would be easier n better option ...


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Posted: 14 years ago
i don't know how to read ffs on blogs...anyhow i prefer indiaforums...u may change as according to ur convieneence dear...
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Posted: 14 years ago
Well u know u haven't copied so I think
IF is better well it's ur choice but I prefer IF :))))
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey Guys...
I Have Decided To Update On IF...
As it is more easier for me and for you...

Wll i did promise a twist but i'm not sure if you think its a twist... maybe Rather the Start of the twist or it is indeed a twist...
This is most probably my longest ... Scrap That it is my longest update So Far,... Eight Pages On Word... :)
Anyway... Recent Pictures have been put up on the character sketch.. thoses who couldn't see some pictures may now see them...

Now Enough of my Bak Bak...
Here is the update...

hope you enjoy it...



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Chapter 13

They all rushed into the house' the walked through the hallway and saw vases scattered on the floor with all the contents spilled. There was soil spread all over the floor and the beautiful flowers broken and damaged' Not liking the look of the house they all looked at each other'

Slowly they made their way in to the lounge' They saw that cushions were ripped apart and wool was all over' they immediately thought of Geet' All they kept thinking was that, they were watching the CCTV camera in the outhouse'.

How could they have missed it'. They made sure someone kept their eyes on the screen' Maybe it happened when all rushed to the house' it could have happened then'

Radhe Panicked' He Shouted At All The Staff'. He Didn't Let Them Touch Anything' This Had To Be Sorted' He Ran Up The Steps'. He Was Followed by the rest of the boys and they all ran to Geet's Room'.

They pushed the door open but it was locked' it wouldn't move' Rahul Went to the Window and Tried to open that.. but that wouldn't move either'

Radhe ' Darwasa kyun Nahi kol raha' Radhe Yelled as he banged on the door..

Taken back by the anger Sameer spoke ' Bhai Geet Ne Baand kiya tha'

Maan ' darwasa khola ga kaise?? Maan questioned '

Rahul ' We will break it down' he said'

Sameer quickly stopped them' - No.. Yeh nahi ho saktha'. Geet jab utte gi aur dekha gi ' tab usse bohat gussa aayega'

Maan ' phir andar kaise'

Sameer -Maan balcony se chaltha hoon'

Radhe's Eyes Lit up'

Radhe ' arre haan' tumhara karma tnext door hai' aur aap dono ka balcony ek hai'. Aur chota bhi nahi bara bhi hai'

Sameer - haan bhai.. aap ruko ham dekhtha hai'

Saying this Sameer left the boys and entered his room'. He opened the balcony door which was locked with a key' and not just any key a black fob..

(Details For those who don't Know what a Black Fob is'Black Fob -this is used on a scanner which will scan the fob when it has touch the scanner only then will the door open... No-one Can enter without a fob..)

Sameer got on to the balcony and used the black fob on the scanner outside the door for Geets room. This let him enter the room' he looked around as he saw her room a mess' her clothes were thrown on the floor' she was not anywhere in the room' suddenly he heard aloud bang'.

Radhe was banging on Geet's door' Yelling'

Radhe ' SAMEER' OPEN THIS DOOR!!!!!!!

Sameer jumped on hearing the loud voice' he ran to the door and opened the latch' he moved back a little and opened the door wide' he let the boys enter the room'. They all looked around but Geet was nowhere to be seen... they were all shocked to see all her clothes thrown on the floor...

Radhe ' yeh kapra yaha kyun hai??

Rahul ' bhai Kapra ko chodo... Geet kaha Hain...

Sameer ' bhai yaha kahi hogi...

Maan ' hum Dekhta han..

Radhe was just quiet... he had no idea what to do... he picked up her favourite Teddy and hugged it tightly to his chest... whispering his Baby Sister's name over and over again...

Rahul Was Stood In front Of the big picture which hung on her wall of him, Radhe, Sameer and Geet... Sameer and Rahul were hugging her from each side and Radhe hugging her from the back. And Geet laughing her head off with a vimto lollypop in her mouth... Rahul wiped his tears that escaped...

Sameer was just looking out at the balcony... he knew Geet was in the room... he just had to find her...

Sameer went into the bathroom... looked around she weren't there... he went and sat down the floor near the bed.. ...

He suddenly started thinking about the times they used to play Hide and seek...

Flashback..

Geet ' 9 years old..

Radhe 18 years old...

Sameer and Rahul 13 years old...

Geet was young when her parents passed away.. she was only Three... She Had no mum and no dad... but she had her three princes... Her Brothers... since they were young and Had no parent Radhe, Rahul, Sameer And Geet Stayed With Maan's Daadima...

Till Radhe turned 18 they stayed with daadima... as soon as he turned 18 he left Khurana household to live in his family home which his father had left him.. as Geet was young they never let her miss their mom and dad.. they always made her laugh and if she cried they always cried with her...

One day Geet wanted to play hide and seek... since she had no friends she played with her brothers.. she never needed anyone else apart from them.. they meant a lot to Geet and she would do anything to have them with her...

She Looked around in her room... She Had A walk in closet...she had a big bathroom but was too scared to use it unless her brothers were in the room... she use to always make her brothers sit outside on her bed while she closed the door to the bathroom and went in... she never use to like being on her own in the room.. since it was big she always used to make sure while she fell asleep there was someone there...

She loved her room...

Veerjiii ' She yelled as she ran as fast as her little chubby legs could take her.. she ran into the kitchen... there in the kitchen was her veerji...

Radhe was stood in a apron with flour all over his face and hair... Geet took one look at him and started laughing...

Geet ' Veerjiii. Yeh apne kya lagaiya ha apna chehre par??

Radhe ' Arre Geet... Yeh flour hai..

Geet picked up a little bit of the flour and went up to Radhe... she tugged at his shirt indicating to him to bend down a little... as he bent down Geet kissed his cheek slowly and with her other hand put the flour on his head rubbing it...

she moved back quickly and ran off.. she stood at the kitchen door as Rahul and Sameer joined her.. seeing Radhe Full of Flour they both laughed... Radhe Got up slowly and as he moved his head bit of flour fell on his face...

Looking at Geet he realised her motive for kissing his cheek was just an excuse...

Knowing she just got caught She Smiled and ran off...

As She Ran She Yelled ' I Love You Veerji' And Ended her sentence With a innocent Laugh...

Radhe was Smiling at his sisters playful behaviour and Decided to join in... Taking his Apron off and throwing it on the floor out of the way he ran after Geet laughing ' Chutkii... I'll Get You Back For This...'

Both Twins Stood There Realising what had just happened.. they both joined in with the chase..

Geet ' Veerjiii, come And Get Me... she shouted as her voice faded away...

End of Flashback... (For Now)

Sameer just started laughing... Everyone just looked at him.. Radhe looked at him noticing his tears as he laughed...

Sameer looked at Radhe... He Smiled and put his head on Radhe's shoulder...

Radhe 'kyun haas raha tha??

Sameer ' Veerji apko yaad hai.. jab hum chote thay aur humne iski ghar meh vapas aaya thay...

Radhe ' Haan Yaad Haan...

Rahul Moved Upto them and sat beside Radhe on the other side...

Rahul ' Haan Aur aap Kitchen meh thay... Aap ne apron pehna tha...

Radhe Laughed.. Aur us Geet neh Mera Head par flour penka tha ...

Sameer ' and she ran.. and Yelled Come and Get Me Veerjii...

Radhe ' haan aur khud aapne karma mein chali gayi thi...

Flashback Continued

Geet ran into her room... she heard her brothers coming.. she ran to the walk in closet and hid behind a special hole she found... this hole had a door which was opened and allowed her to hide in it... as she hid in it.. it was big enough that she walked into Sameer's Walk in cupboard...

Radhe and Sameer ran in to their room...

Sameer ' Chutki Kaha hai tu...

Geet hearing her Bhai Calling her she Yelled...

Geet ' Bhaii Come And Find Me... she giggled softly...

Sameer heard her voice.. it was coming from his room...

She moved out from the hole and stood in her room again...

Radhe Checked his room but she weren't there... Rahul had checked her room but he didn't see her there either,...

Rahul ' Geet he said.. Getting A little bit Scared...

Sensing the Fear in his voice she Said...

Bhaiyaa... I'm Here... and Giggled Again...

Hearing their Footsteps She Hid Her Self Back in her special Space...

The boys Entered her room but she wasn't anywhere to be seen...

Radhe ' Geet .. Aab baas hogaya hai...

Geet ' Veere... I'm Here...

Sameer ' Kaha?? He said irritated...

Geet ' Uf ho... She Said a s she playfully hit her head... Bhai.. infront of you...

Rahul ' Geet. Yaha tho closet hai...

Geet ' Bingooo... she said,...

All three looked at each other... they walked to the closet but she wasn't there...

Radhe ' GEET... he was angry now..

Geet ' Bhai...

Sameer ' Haan Geet..

Geet ' I'll give you Clues okay??

Rahul ' Clues...??

Geet ' To find Me... she said...

Radhe ' Geet...

Geet ' Please Veerjiii...

Radhe ' Fine...

Geet ' wahoo... okay Walk into the closset..

Sameer looked at the others and walked in..

Sameer ' ab kya..

Sameer could see nothing but clothes.. no Geet what so ever,..

Geet Giggled..

Sameer ' Tum Yaha Ho...

Geet ' Hmm Aur Bhai vo Darwasa Dekh Raha Ho. Vo Choti si... in there..

Sameer looked around and saw the door...

As Sameer was walking towards the door Geet made herself go through the other door which led to Sameer's room.. she got out of the closet and went inside his room... she walked through the door,... and into the hall way...

Sameer ' ab kya?

Geet ' Walk inside... she smiled...

Sameer ' what...

Geet ' Do It...

Sameer ' okay baba.. he gave up and walked through the door..

After a couple of minutes Sameer got fed up and walked back out... he went to Radhe and Rahul and said bhaiya she not there... hearing this Geet walked up to the boys and stood behind Radhe.. she tapped his shoulder...

Radhe turned back...

Radhe ' ek minute chutki hum Geet ko doond raha hai... and his attention went back to the boys... just then they turned around and saw Geet stood there...

Geet ' hiii.. she said so innocently...

Radhe ' Geet--- He hugged her straight away...

Rahul ' where were you...

Geet ' Hiding bhai...

Sameer ' Kaha??

Geet ' Closet mein...

Rahul ' Kya ??

Geet -haan bhai its amazing... i went through that door and went through another door that led me to bhai's room and then i came out... .

Sameer 'what??

Geet ' haan... She went To Sameer And Held His Hand.. Come na ... i'll show you... an she led him through her secret hide out...

Then she looked out at the balcony.. it was raining.. this was Geet's favourite time of the year...

she ran to the balcony and yelled... Veerjiii as she spun her self around with her arms opened... she laughed as her three Princes joined her... spinning them selves in the rain with her... getting lost in the moment...

Flashback Ends...

Sameer then realised where she could be.. he got up and ran to her closet... he opened the little secret door and walked in.. it was dark in there and he couldn't see...

Using his phone he unlocked it and used the phone as a torch... suddenly he saw her lying down... in a ball... cuddling her self... he ran out and told his brothers... all three brothers and Maan went in... Radhe saw Geet and went to her.. he lifted her up and walked out of the closet...

Putting her on the bed he saw her clutching on to something... slowly he tried to grab it off her but she held on to it tighter..

Geet ' bhai... he's going to kill me... she mumbled..

Sameer immediately sat down next to her... his hand on her forehead...

Ramu Came up to the room... he went to get Radhe but seeing Radhe with Geet he went to Maan...

He tapped Maan on the shoulder and whispered something into his ear...

Maan looked up at him and nodded.. he followed Ramu down to the kitchen... there on the kitchen table in Red Paint it Said...

She's Going To Die...

I'll Get Your Most Priceless Possession...

She's Mine Soon...

Maan was shocked... he then walked into the lobby...

There on the floor was a brown envelope.

He picked it up.. he went up to the boys and whispered something in Radhe 's Ears...

Radhe Got Up And Walked Out.. Rahul and Sameer knew something was up.. leaving Geet on the Bed they went to Maan and Radhe and looked at them...

Maan ' Yeh Dekho... he opened the envelope...

And inside was pictures of Geet with her friends pinky and meera...

All three Girls Had A Red Cross Over their Face...

There were about 15 Pictures of them three,,

Some on their own and some with each other... and every picture had a cross over their face...

Radhe sank down to the ground...

He Whispered... 'Geet' ... and a tear ran down his face...

... precap ...

Geet and her friends being watched...

Radhe And Kajol Meeting

All three Girl Kidnap...:) :)


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XXX

Edited by Nazmaa - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
hey thanks for the pm
will coment tommorow
love ria

fdited
that was the gr8 part
you were the gr88888
writer
nice ff
this is not coppied i never herad sotory like this
plz continuee soon
love
ria
Edited by Riarai2346 - 14 years ago

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