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Very good update and good to have u back on writers desk..

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Happy Valentines Day people. Im sure some of you are in a very romantic mode. well jst watch out for this update because it is one of the high points and since its such a romantic day celebrating love- u all are getting double dose- yes you read it right TWO updates =) i hope you like it
and here it is ---enjoy and do comment

Chapter Ten

The next day was Shivratri pooja and Shaan was asked to go with the Gujrals. Khanak came down wearing a white lehenga(the one in the SR scene) with her hair open(her hair is usually in a pony tail) he walks down the stairs and Shaan is awestruck. Cant even move. Khank walks past him but does notice how good he looks in a kurta. She stands next to her father and they proceed towards the temple. After the pooja and aarti is done, Khanak goes to pray to the shivling. (where you put milk and water- if you dnt know dnt worry bout it) Shaan follows and someone pushes him and his hand touches khanak's and the milk gets poured over shivling( this is an indiactor of them being couple as only husband and wife do it together) Khank steps back astonished at what happened which Shaan doesn't realize. She decides to ignore it and goes near the bhang. Without realizing its bhang, she drinks it. Shaan follows her and sees her drinking.

Shaan: yeh kya peerahi hoon

Khanak: diktha nahi hai burthal, bhang bhang peerahi hoon, bhang, tumme uthna dum nahi ki tum peo

Shaan: yaar yeh kaise baat howa, lo- he grabs a glass and drinks it.

And they drink for a while and a song starts as Shaan starts to sing

Shaan: Hey Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Hey Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya picks up another glass

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi trips and Shaan holds her

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi

Shaan: Hey Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi points towards Shiv murti

Khanak : Ek Ke Do Puts one finger then two fingers out

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Do Ke Chaar puts two fingers then four

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Mujh Ko To

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Dikhte Hain

Shaan : Aisa Hi Hota Hai Jab Do Dil Milte Hai He grabs Khanak and hugs her and Khanak pushes him

Khanak : Ek Ke Do

Do Ke Chaar

Mujh Ko To

Dikhte Hain

Shaan : Aisa Hi Hota Hai Jab Do Dil Milte Hai

Khanak : Sar Pe Zameen Paanv Ke Neeche Hai Aasmaan Ho

Sau Rabadi she sits down

Shaan : Sau Rabadi he sits down

Khanak : Sau Rabadi she stands up

Shaan : Sau Rabadi he stands up

Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya Shaan drinks another glass

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya Khanak tries to take the glass but stumbles and hangs onto Shaan

O Sau Rabadi

Chorus : O Bansi Bhaiyya..He He He..

O More Raja Bade Jatna Se ki Chune teri phulwaari ke ri..

Khanak : Kandhe Pe She puts her head on his shoulder while sitting on the stairs

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Sar Rakh Ke

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Tum Mujh Ko

Shaan : Hmmm

Khanak : Sone Do

Shaan : Masti Men Jo Chahe Ho Jaye Ho Ne Do Shaan moves her shoulder so Khanak's head slips and lands on his lap

Khanak : Kandhe Pe

Sar Rakh Ke

Tum Mujh Ko

Sone Do

Shaan : Masti Men Jo Chahe Ho Jaye Ho Ne Do

Khanak : Aise Men Tum Ho Gaye Ho Bade Beimaan Ho Khank pulls his ears

Sau Rabadi

Shaan : Sau Rabadi

Khanak : Sau Rabadi

Shaan : Sau Rabadi

Brrrr Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi Main Mar Jaoongi

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi

Chorus : He He He..Kya Kya

Shaan : Raste Mein He pretends he is driving while Khanak holds onto him

Khanak : Hmmm

Shaan : Hum Dono

Khanak : Hmmm

Shaan : Ghar Kaise Jayenge

Khanak : Ghar Wale (ahh)Ab Hum Ko (ahh)Khud Lene Aayenge he picks her up

Shaan : Raste Mein He starts walking and stumbling with her in his arms

Hum Donon

Ghar Kaise Jayenge

Khanak : Ghar Wale (ahh)Ab Hum Ko (ahh)Khud Lene Aayenge She jumps down

Shaan : Kuchh Bhi Ho Lekin Maza Aa Gaya Meri Jaan Ho Shaan looks her naughtily

Sau Rabadi She runs and plops down

Khanak : Sau Rabadi

Shaan : Sau Rabadi Shaan plops down with her

Khanak : Sau Rabadi

Shaan : Jai Jai Shiv Shankar Kaanta Lage Na Kankar

Ke Pyala Tere Naam Ka Piya

Khanak : Ho O O Gir Jaoongi (Aye) Main Mar Jaoongi (Aye)

Jo Tune Mujhe Thaam Na Liya

O Sau Rabadi

Khanak started to dance towards the exit and soon she was gone. Shaan rushed to look for her and found her sitting on hay.: Jai jai shiv Shankar, khatta lage na khankad..she was screaming the song rather than singing it. Shaan knew she had had way too much

Shaan: Khanak gadi main betho

Khanak making a cute face: nahin

Shaan: nahin?

Khanak stands up and puts her nose up: nahin, nahin, nahin, nahin aur she stopped and asked for Shaan's ear -NAHIIIIINNN!

Shaan: acha bacha abhi batata hoon He picks her up and puts her in the car. She struggles at first but then looks at Shaan lovingly

Khanak: Shaaan! Shaan looks at Khanak surprised. It was the first time she had said his name and he felt his heart jump but then his face fell as khanak grabbed both of his cheeks and pulled it saying: Tum itne CUUTTTEE hoo!! Aur tumhara yeh chotta sa nak aur itne baaaddii baaddi ake aur tunhara Bandar jise kan. She laughed like a small kid.

Shaan stops the car. Acha tho main Bandar aur tum, tum kya ho pari? and it started to rain as if god was approving it. Khanak stepped out of the car and started to dance in the rain twirling. Her slim body teasing Shaan's intentions. (Oh btw guys white transparent. Hehehehe!)

Shaan: OHHH NOO!!

Shaan tried getting khanak but she just ran and finally getting her he put her in the car. And put the keys in the engine but it jst wouldn't start. They were stuck.

He saw a cottage and carried Khanak there .

Shaan: Hello, koi hain?It was empty. He put khanak down but khanak wasn't willing to let go, she was drifting off to sleep and was shivering. Shaan took off his jacket and put it on her. He then prepared a fire and stuffed hay together to make a bed for Khanak. He sat there staring at her. Her beauty jst drew him towards her as he slowly put his arms around her to check if she was cold. But she was fine and he went to sleep sitting beside her as the night drifted away.

Khanak woke up the next morning and looked at her surroundings. She remembered all of yesterday and her eyes widened as she saw Shaan next to her. She pushed him, making Shaan grab her waist and pull her down in his sleep. She was surprised with their close proximity. SHAAANNN

Shaan woke up to her eyes. It was the most beautiful morning for himIf only every morning was this beautiful. He then snapped out of it and left her.

Khanak got up and paced around: Ohh god papa kitne worried honge. Shaan please chalo and a sleepy shaan followed her and they started walking( no im not going to magically make the car work)finally reached the temple where all were sitting worried. They looked at the two as Khanak ran towards her dad and hugged him. He was soo happy to get his daughter back.

YG: chalo beti, ghar chalo.

One of the people from the crowd: ROKO!

Precap: why did they stop them. Wats going to happen now. Wat do u guys think? Next one is a short update with a hard impact.

Chapter Eleven

Recap: One of the people from the crowd: ROKO!

YG : kya howa bhaisab

Person: Aapki beti abhi abhi ek raat ek ajnabi ladke ke saath guzaar kar ayi hai aur aap use ghar lejhrahe hai. Uski halath tho dekhiye, na jaane kaha muh kala karke ayi hai

YG: aapne zaban ko lagam dijiye. Hame apni betiyon par pura bharosa hai. Khanak has started crying and Shaan is shocked

Khanak: papa main Shivji ki kasam khathi hoon, aapki aur ma ki kasam khathi hoon, maine kuch galath nahin kiya. Aap Shaan se puch sakthe hai

Shaan: Ji sir kuch bhi nahin howa, gadi kharab hogayi aur barish horahithi aur. But YG had put his hand up.

YG: hum jante hai, hame tumpe bharosa hai aur sabse zayada aapni bethi par. He joined his hands to everyone: Namaste hum kal milthe hai, chalo Khanak, Shaan.

Person: aap aapni bethi ki glathi chupasakthe hai par hum is kalangani(I dnt know how to say it in English but the best word would be impure) ko is mandir main per bhi rakne nahi denge. Hum sanatini(religious) logo main sanskar jaisi bhi koi cheez hai jo aapne shayat apne bethi ko nahi diye. And everyone started chanting,: nahin aane dege! Khanak was crying, YG was disappointed with the people and Shaan. Well Shaan was furious. Furious would be an understatement. How dare they point a finger at Khanak. His khanak!

Shaan: BAS! Bas hogaya. He gives a fake laugh and claps. Wah! Kya duniya aagaya hai jahan ek ladki pe sab ungliya(fingers) uthathe jarehe. Khanak ne kuch galath nahi kiya aur na kabhi kar sakthi(khank looks up). Khanak jaise pavitra ladki aaj tak nahi dekhi maine. Uski sirf charitra(character) hi nahi, par man(heart) bhi pavitra hai. Ispe ungli udhane se pehle aap aapne ghar mein dhekle tu phethar(beneficial) honga. Kya aapki bethiyaan aab bhi salwar kameez pehenthi aur aapne badho ke samne kayide(manners) se rehthi hai. Acha yeh tho dur ki baat hai, kya aap ki bethiya aab bhi aap bhulthi hai yeh tum? Kahiye. Jawab dijiye? Pause and silence.Maine thik socha tha, sawal sab ke paas hai par jawab ek bhi nahi. Aur agar Khanak bhi ungli udh rahi hai tu kyun udh rahi. Yahi na ki mere aur Khanak ka kya rishta hai aur main inke ghar mein kyun rehrahaho. Hain na? aapka jawab mere paas hai. He walks inside the mandir and gets a handful of SINDOOR and FILLS KHANAK'S MAANG!!!!!(party party!!!! Woooohhh!!! Are yaaro zaara nacho tho, shadi hai aur hum baraat im sure hum shaan ke taraaf se hai aur uski chothe bhi churayege. Wat say? Aur shaan yeh muka kese chodtha, ladki bhi yahi thi aur mandir bhi- yeh tho free shadi hogaya!!lol)

enjoy people and comment kashish is signing off now..over and out =)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#83
omg!!...shaan is soo spontaneous!...doesnt think at all!!...but i love him too much! ;)
shanak rockd!...thnx for two epis fully on them!....
Maan is gonna murder shaan....but prithvi shld help him as usual! :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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dear kashish....
loved it.... shanak ki shaadi... wow.. i am also coming for the baaraat... and ya free mein shaadi....
talli shanak and rain is yet another superb combination,.... loved it..
pls continue soon... pls add me to ur pm list...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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loved it arre shaan ko toh free mein biwi mil gayi aur badla lene ka moka
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Posted: 14 years ago
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wowwwwwwwww shaan itna kanjoos hai nahi pata tha free mein shaadi karli isne🤣
awesomeeeeeee
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Posted: 14 years ago
#87
hi
it was really nice, please update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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nice ff.............
3 diff love story...............pl update more on maaneet..............
when will the truth come out..................

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awesome update..
pls cont soon ....

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Guys I am so sorry that I havent updated for soo long and i so have reasons. Firstly I had one of my really important exams and I didnt want to get distracted so I stayed away from the internet and then there was Ram Naumi and I didnt have any time. but I have finally written an update and it was really hard because of the whole Maneet separation at first and I had no inspiration. Anyways here is the update. Im sorry guys

Chapter Twelve

Recap: He walks inside the mandir and gets a handful of SINDOOR and FILLS KHANAK'S MAANG!!!!!

Khanak is shocked(u know what they do where they freeze the screen on their faces, yeah that's it)

Her hand goes up slowly to touch her mang and feel the sindoor as her tears dry out.

Shaan: mill gaya aapka jawab.yeh aur koi sawaal hai. And he grabs khanak's hand and walks out. YG walks behind them. When they reach home, Khanak walks to their room and looks at herself in the mirror.

Khanak: yeh kya hogaya, ek hi pal main, meri zindagi aise phalti ki, main Khanak Gujral se Khanak Kandelwal hogayi. Main kisiki patni hogayi. Jis insaan ko main 2 din pehle mili who mera pati.

Shaan is standing with his hands folded in front of YG.

YG: nahin beta aaj tumne phir mujhe bachaliya. Us bhar jaan bachayatha aur is bhar izzat, mujhe tumse acha damad nahin miltha and he hugs him.

Shaan: thinks to himself: haan aapko mujhse acha damaad nahin milta aapki bethi ki zindagi barbaad karne ke liye, aapko thodne ke liye. Aap rowege(cry) tho anso bhi aapka saath nahin denga, aise halath main choddege aapko.

YG : jao betha rest karo. Shaan obliged and walked to his room and went in the shower(blush)

Shaan thinking: yeh maine kya kardiya. Par jo hi howa thik howa, Khanak mere pyaar ke jaal main phas bhi nahin rahithi aur mere paas waqt nahin tha. Par is thara mujhe uski zindagi ke saath. Nai Shaan! jo howa uske pita ke wajarse howa aur shayat uperwala bhi yahi chahtha tha.

He got out of the shower and decided to go meet Khanak. Khanak was still standing in front of the mirror with sindoor over her forehead and dried tears over her cheeks. She was clearly in shock

BG Music: tum mere kaun ho from yahan main ghar ghar kheli in Zee TV

Teri meri raahe saari milthi hai

Tere mere aahu ka bhi mel hai Shaan stands at her door

Jaane kesi haatho ki hai rekhaye Khanak looking at her hands with sindoor,

Jaane kese rekhao ka khel hai

hum haste haste rone lage camera focuses on her smiling picture and then her

Tum milke humko khone lage

Tum mere kaun ho she turns around to find Shaan

Maine yeh na socha tha ki aise bhi

Zindagi leyagi is mudh pe Flashback of the sindoor scene

Tere mere haatho ki rekhao kho

Jese bhi rakhthiki jodh ke

Koi mane ya na, dil mantha Shaan moves towards her

Koi jaane ya na dil jantha

Tum mere kaun ho

Shaan: Khanak… Her name sounded so good from his mouth but why?

Khanak: Shaan mere paas mat ana, Kyon ? Kyun Kiya

Shaan moved towards

Khanak: NAHIN! Wahi rehna mujhe chune ki koshish bhi mat karna, kya samjthe ho tum apne aap ko. Huh? Meri zindagi ko ek pal main hi.

Shaan: Khanak sab thik hojayega

Khanak: Nahin thik hoga Shaan(crying) Kaise thik hoga. Na tum mujhse pyaar karte ho na main tumse toh zindagi bhar ke yeh rishta, Kaise? KAISE SHAAN?

Shaan slowly closed in on Khanak and khanak started hitting him with her fists and finally gave in as Shaan pulled her in for a hug. They both felt at ease, complete.

Khanak cried for long time as the sad version of RBO title went on. And shaan patiently held her, hurting inside. Isn't this what he wanted. YG came to check on Khanak and smiled as he saw them together. His first promise to his dead wife was fulfilled. Khanak had found her love.

Next morning Shaan had to leave, he wanted to stay with Khanak, he was pinning yet went to take YG blessings and Yg hugged him and wished him a safe flight when they heard a thud. Both looked up to find Khanak in a light pink creamish saree with hands full of chudiyan, hair open and pined with her mang with sindoor holding a suitcase. She came down and hugged her father. YG understood. He was proud of her daughter and somewhere Shaan felt at ease but now was dreading going home and facing his family. She looked at him as if asking him if he would take her, if he would accept her, if he would do this favour on her. Shaan patiently moved towards her and took her suitcase." Main gadi main rakh detha hoon" Her eyes filled up with tears and relief. Shaan knew she was going with him for her father and his respect in society. After crying hugging her father, she sat in the car waving until she couldn't see him anymore. They got to the airport and while waiting he sat next to her.

Shaan: Khanak hum dono jante hai ki hame pyaar nahin hai par dosti zaroor hosakthi hai, hai na.

Khanak simply nodded.

Precap: Damini and Prithvi- wats going on?. Maaneet moments

So here it is guys. Im so sorry again and hope you enjoy this update. Please do comment and read on =)

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