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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Riasa

it's okk any body can make twist 😉, it will help me to improve my story writing skill 😆...... soo it's group story 😛 this is the real fun of the group story yaar


I know, right? I LOVE group stories. LOL, I can't think of all the twists on my own..So yeah I write a small part and whoosh, some one else adds their own great ideas! 😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
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😉

Originally posted by: Akanksha0701


I know, right? I LOVE group stories. LOL, I can't think of all the twists on my own..So yeah I write a small part and whoosh, some one else adds their own great ideas! 😃
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yaa it will be vry interesting.......group story😉

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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey its a great idea...but i have one consern...so my question is that does the story have to have vampires in them??i mean cant we just write something totally opposite from wat we actually are watching...??cause i get bored reading about vamps and abhy and piya in the same situation..lol.let me know wat can be done..
❤️MONA
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Posted: 14 years ago
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awesome idea! i am in😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey awesome idea Akanksha!

Count me in. 😉

Hey, how about one of us post an intro of the story and we will start..?
Edited by Sameena_.Mayur - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: .:.MONA.:.

hey its a great idea...but i have one consern...so my question is that does the story have to have vampires in them??i mean cant we just write something totally opposite from wat we actually are watching...??cause i get bored reading about vamps and abhy and piya in the same situation..lol.let me know wat can be done..

❤️MONA


You can write any story you want. The characters can work in a office, in a pub ( 😆 ), in college, best friends, whatever you want. But it should be a AbhIya story. And there needn't be vampires. 😊

Originally posted by: ka7eela

awesome idea! i am in😊


Yay. I LOVE your writing style. You'll rock. 😃

Originally posted by: Sameena_.Mayur

Hey awesome idea Akanksha!

Count me in. 😉

Hey, how about one of us post an intro of the story and we will start..?


Thank youu. 🤗

And, anyone can post the intro. You can, if you have a idea for a great opening. 😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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I think its an awesome idea!! And I think I'll be the reader ;)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Okay, so since no one is writing a opening ( which I'm sad about. I hoped a better response ), I shall do the honours. 😃 But..I expect you all to be a little bit creative here? 😊

PART 1

''Mom, please. Im gonna be late for my first day.''

I sighed, for the umpteenth time. Mum wouldn't listen. She wouldn't even bulge. She wants me to eat the kheer means she wants me to eat the full kheer.

''Mama, please. It's-'' I checked the watch. ''- I only have 20 minutes and I need to rush to get a bus.''

''I am not listening to anything. I made this kheer for you and I want you to eat it. Now, hurry up and get going.''

''Mamaaa!'' I moaned. But there was no point. My mum is like a little kid. She wants something, she gets it. so I quickly finished the kheer.

''Here mama, here's the kheer.'' I placed the empty dish in her hand. ''Now I am going.'' I kissed her cheek. ''Goodbye mama.'' And I ran out of the door.

''Goodbye beta. Arre dhyaan se.'' She said when I stumbled on a rock. ''Pagli kahin ki.''

I turned back. ''Mwah mama, love you.'' And I ran for the bus station.

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AT THE BUS STATION

''Phew. Just on time.''

The bus was late, thankfully. And I was here just on time, a minute till bus arrives. I sat back and smiled as I thought about mum. She's so innocent, so loving, so caring, nobody would think she's been betrayed by her own husband for a younger girl. She never lets anything get in her way, and she's as strong as ever. She's supported me through thick and thin, and it's my time to pay her back. To go to college, get a degree, and get a job.

I jerked back as I heard the loud music of a car approching. I gritted my teeth. People these days...

I saw a small puppy on the road, right in front of the car zooming towards him. Without thinking anything, I jumped in the way and rolled over the other side. I looked back, my shirt covered in mud, bruises all over, and the puppy was gone. The car skidded to a halt in front of me. And a young man in a black shirt, blue jeans, and designer shades got out the car.

I am gonna update this on the first page. And anyone who continues, Im gonna edit the first post and add the story to it with credit to the continuer. That way, it'd be easier to keep track of the stories. 😃


Edited by Akanksha0701 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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brilliant start Akanksha0701👏 you kept it open, i love it, and here is my update😊

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Part 2

I was still shaken by the incident, looking around for the dog! and my whole body was aching, especially my arms and legs when the boy walked towards me with fast steps, and grabbed my bruised arm with his hand, and pulled me up in one jolt, like I was nothing but a rug doll "ouch" I screamed, as I felt the pressure of his strong hand on my arm, but he didn't let go of me and snapped at me angrily :" are you crazy!, if you want to die then go and jump off a cliff or something, why jump in front of my car and cause me problems "

I looked at him stunned from his arrogance, he continued "do you know that I can put you in jail for this?, suicide is a crime by law"

Suicide! What the hell! what a jerk!, I thought, my head still spinning, he thinks I am suicidal!, I tried to push away his hand from my arm but it didn't budge "let go of my arm, you are hurting me!" I said in pain, to my surprise he chuckled:" seriously! Why do you care about little pain when you with your full senses threw your self in front of a speeding car!, or maybe you thought that it would be fun to be hit by a car!, and the procedure of getting killed will be pain free? And what makes you sure that you will die on spot, maybe you would only lose an arm or leg or both or worst get paralyzed for the rest of your life!"

I looked at his smug face; he thinks he is smart lecturing me about the consequences! DUH I know!, and I felt an itch to slap him hard:" I am not suicidal ok!, I wasn't trying to kill my self" I said in anger

"really then I assume you were just trying to do aerobics early morning in the middle of the road, in front of a speeding car instead of attending your classes like a good student" he said sarcastically

"I was just trying to save a puppy ok!" what an insensitive man I thought, instead of asking me if I was ok he is taunting me!

"What a lame excuse! you should do better then that!" he pauses and let go of my arm, thank God," so tell me what exactly went wrong in your miserable little life that makes you feel it's not worth living, have you flank your stupid exams or maybe you got dumped by your Bf" he says, continuing with his taunting

I felt an outrage of anger bursting inside of me, although usually I am a very calm person, but this boy was getting on my nerves, the way he was talking to me irritated me to no end!, finally I snapped: "What the hell! Who do you think you are? Judging me like that!, are you deaf or something, I told you that I was not trying go kill my self!, I just was trying to save a puppy"

He looks at me amused by my anger, he takes off his shades and for the first time I could see his intense grey eyes, as he looked at me I felt his eyes were like hypnotizing me, as I couldn't take my eyes off them, in an skeptical tune he says "really?! So where is the invisible puppy that you were suppose to save?" there was challenge in his eyes

"I don't know!, but it was there in the middle of the road, I am sure it was when I.."

Then we were interrupted by a middle age man: "excuse me!, i am looking for a small puppy, i lost it a while ago, have you seen it?, it has white fur " thank God, I sighed in relive and looked at the boy with challenge, some one now owes me a big apology! I thought, but to my surprise things didn't turn quite the way I expected them to be!

Edited by ka7eela - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#20
OMG Ka7eela, AWESOME part. 👏

I love Abhay in this one, too. LOL, It's so like Sid and Tamanna's first meet scene! 😳

Thanks for the quick update. 😃

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