Under the Moonlights Lake~MayUr+SaJan FF - Page 4

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Posted: 14 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: -afsha-

At last ur string ur FF

Thanx a lot sweetheart
Loved the strt
Mayu directly asked Nups out for Date crap n how he knws her name
Sajan strt convo was sweet but end it becum shocking one
Gun was rude but really aggressive abt that braclet i feel
Update soon
N im in ur Pm list for sure

awwww thankzz a lot na Affi
realli realli sweet of u to think that na🤗
umm I agree with you =P but you will see Gunjanzz a totally differ person than she appearzz to b na =D
thankzz a lot for liking na
love ya
-Lina-
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 2
It was near evening, I got on my bike and drove to the area we all were suppost to meet by the lake. No one seemed to be there yet, but I was used to be the first one arriving. I get off my bike, and wait a little until Samrat arrives. We greet each other, of corse we are best friends. We continue talking a little, and setting the place. A lot of people arrives, and finally in the end Dia and Benji, but she was not there. Nupur wasn't there at all.
I feel so dissapointed at this moment. To tell the truth, I was really expecting her to be here tonight. Should I ask Dia? Without thinking much, I walk up to her.
Mayank- Hey Dia looking great as always.
Dia- Thanks Mayank you too.
Mayank- Umm Dia I was expecting you cousin Nupur to be here tonight, woh nahin aayi kya?
Dia- No she was here, Uday ke saath, paata nahin where she is right now, sorry dont know.
Mayank- Oh no dont say that, infact thanks for telling. Catch you later.
I look around, there are more poeple here than I expected.
Curse my luck! I pick up a rock and throw it in the water. Why god? Why do you hate me so much? Why does my life have to be so heard? Please make her stop hating me, I cant see the pain in her eyes when she sees me. You know it hurts me as much as it hurts her. And him, I ruined his whole life. Today, after such a long time she was looking happy, at least happier walking with Uday bhaiya, and then when she saw me, her face expressions totally changed. I hate myself for changing those expressions, hate myself for making the saddness visible on her face. I close my eyes standing on the bridge, and think about what just happen a few minutes ago.
Flashbacks
Shit! This stupid car just had to stop in the middle of this dark road. I get up, checking the tank. Empty. "Great." I look around and realize there was a lake down those trees and bushes. It looks so dark, but I could care less.
I climb down slowly, being careful not to get hurt. And that's when I hear someone coming.
Nupur- Uday bhaiya I told you not to play with my bracelet, look now we can't even find it.
After seeing her, I hide behind a tree, so she couldn't see me. A big smile appeared accross my face. I just knew it I was smiling like crazzy. How can I describe this feeling, hearing her voice again. I just feel like jumping and hugging her.
Uday- Nupur I said sorry na, plus why are we finding it? It's so dark, I know we will never be able to find it.
Nupur- No Uday bhaiya we have to, you know what that bracelet means to me. I can't live without it.
I feel as if I stepped on something, I look down, it was the bracelet. I smile again, so this is the bracelet she is looking for. I continue staring at it. Touching it. Feeling it. It's so special. Then a thought came to my mind, she still has this bracelet. She still cares for this bracelet. Cares for me perhaps. I pick it up, and go up to her and Uday bhaiya.
It seems so dark, the only light coming from the one long pole.
Gunjan- Hiiiii*Smile on face*
I try to sound less excited, but how can I? I look at her, she was not at all happy to see me. In fact, the little happy expressions on her face before, dissapears.
Uday- Hey Gunjan, tum yahan?
Gunjan- Yeah actually, this bracelet.
I said showing the bracelet.
Nupur- No thanks, I dont need it anymore. Uday bhaiyaa app wapis chali ja yi e, I want to go back home.
Uday- Par-
Nupur- Uday bhaiya please, I'll walk.
Saying this she leaves.
Uday- Thanks a lot Gunjan.
He too leaves. I just stand there, almost wanting to cry, and sometime later, I walk over the bridge.
~Flashback ends~
I know, this part is very dissapointed, no Mayur no Sajan together, but I promise will deffi put them together in next part na. To continue this FF, this part was neccessary. Em so sorry if have waisted your time. Do comment/critize.
And haan thanks a ton everyone for commenting na
all your comments means a lot to me na
dil se thanks
🤗
-Lina-
Edited by rkmnsg - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#33
res and angry
why u didnt pm me part 1 also
******EDITED *****
lina nice part
par main na thodi si navigation se confuse ho agyi thi
but its ok
cont soon
and dont dare to forget me next time ok
Edited by arunabehere - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#34
gr8 updat lina looking forword to it
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Posted: 14 years ago
#35
Hi LIna, really interesting story. Please PM me next time
Nivi
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Posted: 14 years ago
#36
hey lina..nice part..

gunjan comes to a place in lookout for nupur..but she isn't there..n she's disappointed..

gunjan sees uday n nupur searching for the bracelet she gave nupur..n she finds it herself..nupur does care for her, that means..but when she came back to return it why was nupur so rude?..thats really sad for gunjan..

thnx 4 d pm
update soon


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Posted: 14 years ago
#37

Daddy ki beti 🤣🤣

Nahi, on a serious note Linny 🤗
Both the parts are just fabulous! and the concept seems amazing!
Very well written jaan <3
Keep it up!
And continue soon!
Love ya <3
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Posted: 14 years ago
#38
awesomeee updt loved it contineu soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#39
Amaaaaaazzing!!!
Love it loads and loads
Hmmm no Mayur and Sajan scenes?
I don't mind, trust me, I get enough 😆
But brilliant part jana. Just one tip: You may want to proofread your story again just for spelling errors. Just saying 😳
Continue soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#40
Wow.. nice ff... it was relly sweet at least the MayUr part rocked...
Soo sweet mayu missed Nupur... how adorable... 😍
Btw whats up with GuNur... I hope it's not something serious... Anyways do continue soooon.. I rlly can't wait for MayUr to meet again.... And if ur sending Pm's do send me one... or else i will be checking this ff regulaery...

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