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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: ruchimayur

Kanks..!

U know what .. i am reading P&P again !
Lol..just that i am too addicted to that novel..
N ..i can imagine everyhting more that depicted !..Lol..
But why are u planning to chnage the story ?>?.....Hmm..but i guess, its good to experiment ! N i can trust that , u wont change the theme..
I am lovin this Mayank [ Darcy ] ..he seems more attractive..Lol
But truely Amazin update yr.. !
N i m really sorry , i cant comment regularly !..U know , Hostel n stuff
But Keep Rocking Darlin !
-Ruchi



I read P&P again and again too! I am planning to deviate it a little, not change it totally. There is no man I can see beyond Darcy and Mayank! 😳

Don't be sorry, I understand. Thanks! 😊

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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: dua_adil

wow kanky another wonderful update

m totally intrigued to your ff

this is my most fav line......this proves that mayank is so enchanted by nupur

she was the only object of admiration of the chief guest

gosh....i love this line so much

good uday is not interested in nupur.....the person who should be....is more than interested

mayur scenes were marvelous

continue soon n thanx for the pm




Thanks so much, Dua! I hope I live up to your expectations! =]
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: meggs

sory for not replying to any of ur pms or commenting. belive me i had problems. but now i am going to read thios whole thing in onw go and thanks for all the pms dear.. 🤗

as for the comments..
i read pride and prejudice the unabridged version when i was in 6th and frankly.. didnt like it a lot.. shud have read a kiddi version i guess..
any ways.
as for ur story ..
CHAPTER 1
now the intros were all nice and u aded an angel of ur own when nupur sat in the car and smelled a shirt with grief.. i wonder who she is mourning..
i liked there father and liuke the book i find thier mother slightly annoying. but she cant be helped i guess..
now the party.. i didnt like it when the mother calkled nupur ugly.. she may not be beautiful.. but simploe isnt ugly.. she sadens nupur even more..but the scene of here coliding and anf falling i agree total filmy😃
my fav part and line:
"we have danced enough."my god!!!! so cold and oh i dont know.. i dont know what the guy is feeling but to dance silently like this for so long and end liuke this. even nupur didnt realise the time.. i liked it👏

CHAPTER 2
ohh now nupur is takinbg shots at samrat caling him jobless and stupid and gujan dfending him cute..
oh samrats an addict too? or is it just for tht night.. he is too mesmeised by gunjan's beauty.. and mayank denying liking anyone.. well to cal it tolerable.. i think he plays his cards very close to his chest.. to not even admit nupur being pretty....
heheheeeee so mayanks a man of very few words and nupur better learn tht the vain man doesnt like lies. and doesnt bother with ppl who lie.. to leave her like tht..hheeehee

"Four days in the neighborhood, two face to face encounters and one strong feeling! " oh so he isnt totally so indifferent as he pretends to bee..lol.. oh mayank is going to have it bad when he finds tht she doesnt like his proudy mannerism much..👏

CHAPTER 3
ohnow even nupur is getting all dressed up.. hmm i hope she can help gujan wiyh expressing her feelings if the need arises..and mayank wantsto talk yp her!!! approached her 2ise and allowed beinhga called a "stalker.." heeheee 😆😆

now the asking of dances.. nupur only ses mayank's pride.. doesn she realise her own pride? to have refused when he had asked her so nicely and tried to talk to her too...
and he has now been forewarnedf about his mother in law..heehee
great part and perfect writing ..moving on to next part..
CHAPTER 4

awww nupur cares so much for all her sisters.. they have such a nice sister bond.. i fight with mine all the time.....lol
and then there is mayank falling a bit deper for her all the time even after thinking of not crassing her agian.."She was a beautiful soul" lovely line dear

the charming scene b/w gujan and samrat..
he thinbks she's and an angel and compliments her even when she is looking like a mess.. how sweet

ohhh she changed in mayanks room!!!😆😆 poor mayank.. he has no idea whant nupur is going to do to the the peace of his mind..lol
and causinh him sleepless nigts too..
gr8 part luved it dear..
CHAPTER 5
so nice of mayank to stay back for gunjan perhaps he can gain some good grace in nupur's eyes now..
and the whole paragraph of shani reading sam ebook as mayank and chukling along with samrat was very nice👏👏👏.perhaps my fav part in the chapter

"seemed just about tolerable to him, however now he'd become most willingly ready to tolerate her all his life. "
if only nupur knew mayank feels like tyhis and the rude shock is awaiting him in mumbai audi.. well i am reday for a few fireworks now.
he even remember th epatter of the dress she wore? WOW!!
CHAPTER 6
ofcourse now behaving differently with him even if less pleasent means she feels something for him and isnt totaolly indifferent, as she wud be to a stranger.. and she now knows tht mayank likes her. i dont really see though why she finds him so disareable.. yes he wwas rude to her in the begining but he had always been nice to her lately.. think nupur is running away from her own feelings and i guess she is just prejudiced..lol
poor uday.. he doesnt know tht he CANT handle nupur or dia even if he had liked them and true.. who is he to marry now?
thnakgod they they are atleast talking now and laughing together is too good !!! i hope things dont take a decline for them..
and her last comment about his eyes was my fav line in the this chapter.~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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it wqas great reading this ff, u wrote everything so well it had a touch of old times to it,yet being a mordern story😃
i enjoyied reading this a lot..👏👏👏
👏👏please do keep pming me and i may not be regular with my comments but i'll read whenever i can..😃😃
😃meghna



I am sorry for not replying in particular, Megha but I've gone through the whole comment and am really grateful! 😳 I don't have words enough to thank you, I am glad you took some time out for my works as you promised. Thanks a lot. 😊


Alright then, I would keep PMing you and wait for such lovely comments. I like it this way! 😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
And to everybody else, thanks a million! You've all been my extremely loyal readers and all my thanking comes straight from the heart: 😳


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Posted: 14 years ago
Hello everybody! 😳

Here is the rest of chapter six, it does not have much of MN. In fact, it is extremely short but it is like a milestone for the rest of the story. And next chapter onwards, it's going the P&P way with my bit of deviation, not as dreadful as this is.

I have replied back to your comments, people. They are on this and the previous page, have a look. Thanks a million! Do leave in your feedback this time as well. I would be up with the next part in a day or two. Lengthy one, ha!

Scroll to the next post!

-Kanky
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Posted: 14 years ago

(Credit: -Aish129-)

Chapter Six (B)

They walked the way inside silently. Mayank reflected on what passed between the two that day and very firmly decided that he need not speak sugar-coated words with her, he wanted her to know and accept who he was. However he knew she liked the superficial side of him more!

While Nupur had thoughts regardless of this subject, another man and exceedingly melancholic thoughts had taken over her as they reached the entrance after which, only she was allowed to proceed.

'This is it, Nupur.' He said, bringing her out of the reverie.

'It is," she replied. 'Thank you, for everything.' She added.

'You're welcome.' He said solemnly.

For about five minutes, they stood there and silence prevailed again however he quite easily made out her changed mood and thoughts. Not only could he read the strong-headed lady's mind but he could very well understand that there definitely was a reason behind her being so. He had witnessed the childish and fragile side of her as well during her and her sister's stay at Ambala and was quite certain and intrigued beyond words to discover the truth that she managed to hide really well.

Breaking his own chain of thoughts, Mayank glanced at his wristwatch and realized he was getting late. He quickly bowed and bid farewell to her before vanishing into thin air. Nupur stood there itself, trying to make out what made him leave so fast. She had forgotten that he mentioned to her about the meeting as she had a lot bombarding her head already. The vain man is back in action, she thought and passed the terminal to board the bus which took the passengers to the aircraft.

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Gunjan's extremely stretched long and tiring day ended with a coffee on the couch with a book. It had been plenty of days and weeks and months that she had even thought of reading one, because she did not get the time to, lately. And yet again, her peaceful me time was disturbed by her ringing cell phone and she was forced to pick it up. The number flashing on the screen wasn't known.

'Hello, who's this?' she questioned.

'Suhaani this side, Gunjan," she mouthed. 'How have you been?'

'Oh! Hi, Suhaani! I am perfectly alright. How are you?'

'Well enough. Since we are leaving for Mumbai day after, we've organized a small get-together for our entire new acquaintance. And we're hoping to see all of you tomorrow at seven in the evening.'

'Sure.'

And she hung up, abruptly. She met Samrat only a while ago, how come he didn't even mention about his leaving the city. Gunjan was absolutely disheartened and lost all possible hopes of his returning, ever!

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Nupur was back home, after a long and tiring day. She left at six in the morning and arrived at ten at night looking more exhausted than ever. Though, she felt as glum as she felt a few hours back, she was more bothered and frightened of being bugged up by Uday Bakshi, again!

And to her poor and ill fate, he only welcomed her in opening the door.

'Good gracious! Look at your hair, Nupur. They need adjustment, badly!' he said, looking disgusted. 'I believe, a lady reflects the best out of her with a proper appearance.' He continued.

'Uday, I think this can be done later. What do you think?' Dia joined the one-sided conversation.

He replied with a nod toward Dia while she whispered, 'You go to your room, I'll handle him.'

Dia appeared like a life-saver to Nupur and without wasting anymore time, she headed to her room straightaway. As soon as she entered the room, she could feel something was wrong, for Gunjan never slept before cleaning the room whereas that day, she slept without even changing into her night-dress. She neglected the ill thoughts as she was sure, it was just her hidden pessimism taking over her but soon she found her instinct right.

She noticed Gunjan's wet pillow and swollen eye lashes, tears dried onto her cheeks and a drop still lurking. Nupur decided not to disturb her sister and made way to the balcony. She sat heavily at the bench there and kept her cell phone on the table in front. Looking at the picture, she placed on her lap of hers, Gunjan's and a guy's about their age she wept. She cried all along, not wanting to stop. In between her sobs, she smiled remembering the guy. In between her sobs, she cursed herself for the repercussion she was dealing with after he left. She cried bitterly, she held the picture to her chest and cried, and cried all night.

As usual, Gunjan woke up first in the morning and struggled in the bed. She felt like her head would burst open of the pain. She could barely see as her eyelids just wouldn't open when she noticed Nupur lying in the chair like a clay dummy with her head titled toward the left.

Gunjan ran up to her irrespective of her own situation and was horrified after she witnessed her sister in that dreadful a state. Nupur lied their motionlessly with her eyes wide open. Her hair actually needed adjustment and the kohl in her eyes had messed up, big time. She dint seem to realize Gunjan's presence and kept staring the railing like before.

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In the living room, at seven in the morning Samrat was very much up and held a glass of whiskey in his hand.

'Have you been drinking all night?' Suhaani asked in disbelief, getting seated on the couch.

'Something like that," he replied in a whisper. 'I don't wanna go.'

'We've had many discussions over this, bhai. We're going and that's final! Don't you understand, she and you aren't meant to be?'

'I understand, but you get this clear in your head ' I am not gonna attend the get-together tonight. I'm leaving right away and I don't wanna see any of you.' He declared and slammed the door of his room real hard.

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Edited by -Kanky- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Interesting ...

I wanna know what is it with Nupur ... Samrat and Gunjan are going away, why? Sorry for these questions but I haven't read the novel ... so eagerly waiting for your next update ...
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: -jaee-

Interesting ...


I wanna know what is it with Nupur ... Samrat and Gunjan are going away, why? Sorry for these questions but I haven't read the novel ... so eagerly waiting for your next update ...



Jane And Bingley (Gunjan and Samrat) do go away in the novel but Nupur's state has nothing to do with the book's protagonist, Eliazabeth. 😳

Thanks! =]
Edited by -Kanky- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

Okay so Edit:

Hey Kanks,
This was a short update (I know wt u r thinking....look whos talking,right?😉)
Anyways you are changing the original story line and I am totally cool with it. I read P&P when I was 12 or something and I loved it but I am always up for a change.
So usually I dont comment here but now I will.I really love the way you deviated from the original story.I mean that its fine by me if you want to keep the basic story line same,but the way this story unfurls can totally be your creation.This was just my suggesion.Ignore it if you think otherwise😛
Edit 2:
So you did write a different P&P earlier but left it unfinshed.All I can say is been there and almost done that.My first FF was Fairy tale in the middle of my life and right in the middle all I wanted was to drop it but somehow within 4 updates I finished it.I was not at all satisfied but I did it for my readers.So here is another doze of unwanted advice,finish this one whatever happens finish it😉
PM and I will tell you all about it😆
so long then,
cr
Edited by crazilycrazy - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
I'm so sorry for not commenting twice Kanky *holds ears* 😳

Damn. Awesomeeeeeee! I love Pride & Prejudice but this FF too is addictingg! & you have actually changed teh story sorta, right?
Samrat & Gunjan, whats the matter? :S This FF is really addicting Kankyyy, you write amazing! 😃


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