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Posted: 15 years ago

#391

after meeting Maan Geet is a changed person....

Originally posted by: Newdime
Goshhh...finally, for bit I thought here we go again, back to square one. But then bang. Geet stood for herself and said the words that I wanted to read...do update soon.👍🏼

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Posted: 15 years ago

#392

thanks darling

Originally posted by: Love14
loved this part, its awesome.😛😛😛
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Posted: 15 years ago

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Geet's family na... i am honestly dying to move back to Delhi... cant handle this family... hope i end this once and for all...

Originally posted by: Starry_night
What an interesting update, yaar! Amazing! Geet's family is full of dimwits......they don't get things easily ever.......and Darji.......what did he say....umar ka tajurba.....my foot! I have more tajurba at this age than him.....hmph! 😆😆😆........Lolz......they are irritating and Naintara......hope the gaonwale beats her up as well.....lolz......oh, I loved Geet's confidence.......way to go, girl! Hmm.....I loved Maneet store room moments.......nice! 😉.......Can't wait to read the next part....do continue soon.

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Posted: 15 years ago

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thanks ... thats a huuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuge compliment....!!! lekin i dont have the limitations of the creatives.... so i can write anything... !! i can make them do anything... bechare... they have their majbooris na ...

Originally posted by: charmed ones

<div align="center"><font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">u tally taken my words....lol😆😆😆...well its great update👏👏👏....yaar tum tou Cvs se bhi acha liketh ti ho⭐️⭐️⭐️....i just luv it...i hoping 2 c more frm u soon....n that would be long with twist n masala😳😃😛..... bt i dont understand y NT came and did Maan shaadi ki baat?😕😕😕</font></div>

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Posted: 15 years ago

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woooo hooooo!!! guess who'z here.... ni mitrama... ni snehama.... !!! occhisaaav...!!! 😉
nee laga naaku point wise cheppatam radu ( idi ma love serial lo dialogue... ) kaani cheptunna vinu...

chandrakala ... i liked tht too.... while writing the name taking scene i was wondering if i should let her say it now or not.. then i left it for the "sah-jeevan ki pehli raat" 😉 where he calls her Geetey...!! blanket ...err... i dont remember.. anyway.... Maan and geet love playing hide and seek...ikkada abbayi... akkada ammayi...yes.. i tried making that pasta actually after writing it... tastes pretty nice.. and with lassi.. aint a bad combo papa try it sometime... 🤣

mera bas chale... toh i will make him bungee jump with her in his arms...!!! 😃 lastly the twist with studies ... you have sookie to thank.. we discussed it .. hence i put it there....

btw... i am sooper happy today... two of my close friends are reading this stuff.. feels awesome... kaani ma amma kooda chaduvuta antundi... bhayam vestundi ... naa kooturu cheyi jaarigipoindoi ani anukuntadi... par kya kare ... Maan hai hi aisa.... choopulato maana bhangam chestunnadu ... 🤣

Originally posted by: bhavi20_s
Darling🤗
At a stretch i read 8 parts, here are the points i loved the most.

Part1- I loved the "Chandra kala" too much oye.🤣

Part2- I so wanted Geet to spell out Maan once shyly😳

Part3- I loved the covering her face with the blanket and
Maan shaking his head. sooooo sweeet😛

Part4- Nice suspense from the beginning till the end. The
restlessness of maan and geet avoiding him.😃

Part5- "kya main tumhe sach main villan dikhta hoon😍" n pasta
with Punjabi tadka and lassi😆😆😆 " aur har
roz tum mujhe aise hi hug karogi " 😉

Part 6-" yeh ladki
secretary ki secretary hi rahegi.. kya karoon main iska…"😆😆😆

Part7- couple of cms away😳 …..btw 20 stairs 😲

Part 8- I liked many things in here, geet says she was
missing him and an angry Maan melts away hayeeee 😍and the twist abt studies istoo good. 👏
I am sleepy now , will read the rest of the FF tommo.😊
Lub
Bhavi😛

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Posted: 15 years ago

#396

Thanks Rani sahiba !!

Originally posted by: queen_ali
👏WELL DONE - GEET

NIHA LOVELY UPDATE

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Posted: 15 years ago

#397

omg wonderful update... thanx..!!

write soon..=)

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Part 16:

punjabi lines and typo check: Navyanka Varma!
Everyone is shocked….
Mom: yeh tu kya bol rahi hai? Pagal ho gayi hai kya?
Geet: aap sab ne sahi suna ma… Main Maan sir se shaadi karoongi….
Moh: Geet…. !!
Darji: Geet! Tu ussey shaadi nahi karegi… main abhi zinda hoon.. aur hun tu aithey he rehegi..samjhi?
Geet: aap log samajh nahi rahe hai….
Aunt: hum sab samajh te hai… sheher main rehti hai, iska yueh matlab nahi hai ke tujhe humara khayal nahi hai… tu aaj vi Saadi choti si Geet hai…Saadi apni...
Geet: aap log meri baat sun lo please…
Darji: humhe apni galti sudhaarneka mauka nahi dogi geet putar..
Geet looks at all of them helplessly….
Darji: ab iss bare main koi kuch nahi kahega... Geet de khushi sabse zyaada mayne rakhdi hai..…. Sab apne apne kaam pe lag jao… aaj ke liye tamasha kaafi hai… they all return to their kaam… while only one person notices Geet's face, that still looks anxious …she wanted to talk.. and no one had let her do it….
Geet walks into her room totally disappointed that she couldn't tell them anything. Her mother follows her and places her hand on her shoulder .. Geet turns around and says…
Geet: mujhe aapse aur bauji se baat karni hai…
The father also follows… He had seen his wife walk inside…
She makes her parents sit on either side… and says….
Geet: mujhe aap logon se ek bahut hi zaroori baat karni hai…. Apne bare main….
The parents look at one another as Geet stands up to talk….
Geet: main kisi se pyar karti hoon…
Both the parents are left open mouthed….
Mom: kya wo tumhare bare main sab jaanta hai….
Geet: Haan maa… wo sab jaante bhi hai.. aur jab aap bhi mere saath nahi the… unhone ne har kadam pe mera saath dia….
Moh: kya hum ussey jaante hai….
Geet: Haan bauji… Maan sir….
Mother: who ladka … jo aaj aaya tha… dev ka bhai?
Geet: haan! Lekin ma, bauji… wo Dev se bahut alag hai…mera yakeen kee jiye…
As they are talking all this, Geet's aunt is listening to all this and makes a face and says… " itna kuch ho gaya iske saath, aur ayde sar pe ishq da boot hai...
Once again… a meeting is summoned and the truth is out… and everyone is looking at Geet… The parents are ready to explain.. but Darji only wants to hear from geet…. He talks to her pleadingly….
Darji: dekh puttar ( hehe that's the only word I know ;) ) , pichli vaar vi humne tere bhalayi ke bare main socha tha… hume tujhe bola tha ke Dev ladka nahi hai…par tu fir bhi usey dhoondne chali gayi… aur iss barr phir tu keh rahi hai,....tujhe fir se usi ghar main bhej de jahan pew o din raat tere aage peeche ghoomta rahe?
Aunt: Darji sahi keh rahe hai Geet… unke baat pe gaur kar… hum samajhte hai ke tu kisi aur naal pyaar kardi hai… lekin har waqt wo tere saath toh nahi rahega na? aur fir… tu humari bacchi hai….Saadi dil da tukda...
Geet: maaf kariye ga… lekin… tab kahan gaya aapka pyar jab main itne mahino se aapke paas nahi thi… kya aap main se kisi ne mere bare main pata karne ki koshish ki? Jab mere paas koi nahi tha… Maan sir ne mujhe sahara dia… naukri di… meri dekhbhaal ki… aur jab unhe pata chala ke Dev ne mere saath ye kia unhone usey bhi nahi choda… maa … tum toh mera yakeen karo ma…
Uncle: tu nahi samajhti geet… uske saare parivaar waale miley hue hai… wo tujhse shaadi iss liye kar rahe hai take Dev pe kiya hua case hum waapis le sake…
Geet doesn't know how to explain herself She goes all quiet… Finally she says…
Geet: Darji … ( with tears rolling out of her eyes) …main Maan sir se bahut pyar karti hoon… hum dono ke shaadi ke liye raazi ho jayiye… main aapke aagey haath jodti hoon…
Darji strokes her hair affectionately and says… " tu thak gayee hai geet, hun jakar soja … kal baat karengey "...
Geet smiles a little and feeling a little hopeful… she walks into her room…
No sooner does she enter her room, and locks it Darji summons his daughter in law and tells her…
Darji: pichli baar jo nahi hua, iss baar wo ho jaana chahiye… kal subah… jab wo nashta karen.. uss main yeh dawa mila do, fir hum usey palle gaon le jayengey …aur haan… ghar de saare darwaaze aur khidkiyan band kar do... Iss baar koi bhool nahi honi chaheye...
The aunt nods…
In the meanwhile….
Maan is in his room and he is thinking of all that happened… he is scared for once… what if Geet backed out … He couldn't even think of a life without her… He didn't like the tone in which she had spoken to him…
Maan: yeh ladki kyun nahi samajhti ke main ye sab usi ke liye kar raha hoon… aur uske parivaar waale usey kabhi nahi samjhenge….
He is so restless… He starts doing push ups to cool it off…. Just then there is a knock at his door… Maan doesn't respond… he continues his push ups…
Rajji walks into Maan;s room and says… " please… geet di ko bachalo… meri Geet di ko bachalo…"
Geet sits up and wears his shirt and worried asks Rajji what happened…. While Rajji narrates everything to him…
Maan wants to go and help but his anger in him says … " lekin shayad wo wahin rehna chahti hai.. apne parivaar ke dabau tale…."
Rajji: nahi… geet di aapse bahut pyar karti hai….
Maan: yeh baat usne tumhe batayi…
Rajji: mujhse hi nahi… sare parivaar se ladh padi wo aapke liye… aap aayenge ki nahi?
Maan: tum ruko.. main abhi aata hoon… itne raat gaye.. tum akeli kaise jaogi….
Rajji: aap please jaldi aana …kahin der na ho jaye…
They all drive to the haveli… that looks all shant from outside… But Maan thinks... to himself… " having the name and the prestige … is so misleading… expecially when you are so hollow from within…."
He kicks the door open… and shouts out geet's name…
Maan: Geet! Bahar aao…. Geet!
Geet who is sleeping gets up and thinks she has heard Maan's voice… but she cant open the door.. cos it is obviously locked from outside…
Maan: kahan hai meri Geet! Kahan chupaya hai aapne ussey…
Rajji points towards the door to her room.. and says… " bahar se band hai…."
Maan runs towards the door… and opens it…. He looks at geet and cant contain himself… He hugs her… " tum theek to ho… kahin tumne koi khaana ya paani toh nahi peeya hai na?"
Geet is surprised…. " Sir aap iss waqt… yahan…"
Maan: (grips her hand tight) chalo mere saath…. Abhi….
Geet: sir sab so rahe hai.. aur main kal unse aapke bare main bat karne waali hoon…
Maan: main sahi tha… koi nahi hai tumhara iss ghar main…chalo mere saath…
Geet: nahi maan sir…! Main aise kaise!
Maan: Geet… tum chal rahi ho ke nahi….
Geet: ( loosening the grip over her hand) chodiye.. mujhe dard ho raha hai…
By now everyone has woken up with all the noise….
Aunt: yeh humare ghar main kaise aaya…
Darji: shareefo de gahr main koi waqat hai ,aane ka ...
Maan: Shareef…!! Huh!! Aise shareef log, jo dubara apne hi ghar ke beti ko dard poucha ke bare main soch rahe thy...
Geet is shocked…
Maan sir… "yeh aap kya keh rahe hai…"
Aunt: Geet maine tujhse kaha tha na.. yeh ladka tere liye theek nahi hai… dekh kaise tujhe humare khilaaf bhadkaane ki koshish kar raha hai…geet tu apne kamre vich ja...
Maan: oh! Toh main issey bhadka raha hoon! Ek minute…. Rajji Geet ke kamre main jo pani ka bottle hai usey laana zara…
Darji and the aunt exchange looks…
Maan looks at Geet and says… " geet tumne yeh… " as he says this he notices she is turning all tipsy… He rushes to support her…. " Geet main tumhare saath hoon.. tumhe kuch nahi hoga…main tumhe yahan se le jaane aaya hoon…"
Darji: kahin nahi jayegi Geet….
Geet is feeling even more dizzy now… "Maan sir… mere haath"
Before anyone can say anything… " maan pulls out a talwar that's hanging aside and says… khabardarr… jo kisi ne aagey badhne ki koshish ki…."
Geet's father: yeh tum kya kar rahe ho beta.. humari Geet…
Maan: galti kar di maine jo geet ko apne saath le aaya… aaj ke baad aisi galti kabhi nahi hogi…
Geet: sir mujhe kuch samajh main nahi aa raha ( feebly)
Maan: tumhare ye parivaar log… tumhe ye pilake kahin le jaane waley they…
Uncle: dekho hume police main complain karna hoga.. tum humari ladki ko aise nahi le jaa sakte….
Maan looks at them as though he doesn't care and then he takes his phone out… dials a number….
Maan: main Maan Singh Khurana bol raha hoon… Chaudhary Handa ke haveli… abhi abhi… hume pata chala hai ke … unhone ke unki beti ke khaane main zeher milake usey maarne ki koshish ki… main unki beti ho hospital le jaa raha hoon…
He hangs up and says… " aur jab tak police ayegi main ja chukka honga… aur… aaj ke baad fir kabhi humare zindagi main aaner ki koshish mat karna.. kyunki Geet ke haalat ko main aakhri baar bardast kar raha hoon.. wo bhi iss liye kyunki wo iss gahr main paida hui thi…."
He walks away carrying Geet who has fainted by now…
He puts her into the car and drives to a hospital, but there is no staff… he is mad… he has no option… he starts driving at great speed….he sprinkles water on her face and tries to wake her up on the way… He calls up a doctor and takes instructions and does whatever he can… After a while geet opens her eyes…
Maan: ghabrao mat Geet… hum jald hi pahunch jayenge… iss sab se door… humari duniya main….
Geet is holding onto her tummy crying…..
Maan: kya hua Geet…
Geet: mere … pet.. main… bahut…. Dard ho raha hai… maan stops the car puts her on the back seat… tries to make her comfortable… but she has unbearable pain…..
Precap: will Geet's baby survive with all this?

Love,
Niha

Edited by -honeydew- - 15 years ago