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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: MaaneetDD

👏👏👏...i logged in after a day and see so many updates! from u! I was sooooo engrossed in reading that I forgot I had to go to sleep. It is 5:30 AM here, so u can imagine!! .. The story is soo gripping that at times I forgot to click on like button😳😳(ll go back and do so)..I just kept clicking at the hyperlinks!!

Amazing job Opti.. I loved how u took care of the pregnacy track.. I loved the way u brought the point subtly that love is unconditional. But u just left us hanging at the cliff.. What will Maan do?? What will Geet's reaction be?🤔..
Loved the twists.. Waiting eagerly to see where these twists would lead!!
Its good that u ddnt make Dev a villain in this.. A very matured and out of the box writing.. Loved it!!
Eagerly waiting for the next update!!




Thanks. So you skipped sleep or what? Sorry if I made you do that! Glad you liked the basic message of this fic- love is unconditional.

Yes, it is easy to make Dev the villain but in real life we do face situations when it it difficult to classify a person or a deed as good or bad, isn't it? It all depends on one's circumstance and perception.
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Posted: 14 years ago

Thanks. So you skipped sleep or what? Sorry if I made you do that! Glad you liked the basic message of this fic- love is unconditional.

Yes, it is easy to make Dev the villain but in real life we do face situations when it it difficult to classify a person or a deed as good or bad, isn't it? It all depends on one's circumstance and perception.
Dont worry about the sleep.. Ab toh aadat ho gayi hai!! 😆😆... Dont be sorry, I brought it up to say how beautiful the story was😊😊.. I just lost my sleep!! Exactly - deeds are mostly circumstance and perception. Loved that u update so quickly.. The story moves forward in a brisk pace!! hopefully there would another update pretty soon ☺️
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: MaaneetDD


Thanks. So you skipped sleep or what? Sorry if I made you do that! Glad you liked the basic message of this fic- love is unconditional.

Yes, it is easy to make Dev the villain but in real life we do face situations when it it difficult to classify a person or a deed as good or bad, isn't it? It all depends on one's circumstance and perception.

Dont worry about the sleep.. Ab toh aadat ho gayi hai!! 😆😆... Dont be sorry, I brought it up to say how beautiful the story was😊😊.. I just lost my sleep!! Exactly - deeds are mostly circumstance and perception. Loved that u update so quickly.. The story moves forward in a brisk pace!! hopefully there would another update pretty soon ☺️


This story was originally written as a fanfic for Michi. I merely changed the names and a few things here and there to make it suitable for Maaneet. So the story is already done. It is only a question of spacing the updates so that people can keep up with it. I'm planning to put them all up in the next couple of days. (There are still 4 more parts to complete this story and 5 parts to complete the sequel). Maybe I'll post the balance 4 parts today and keep the sequel for tomorrow.
Edited by Opti - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
OHHH FRIG...what a twistt :|
That was NOT expected...especially the fact that Dev's NOT negative...man...intense to say the least :|
This is getting so so good, looking forward to more!
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Posted: 14 years ago
Ahhh....what a cliffhanger...finish it fast please

:-) (Detailed comment once this is finished...)

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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: sweet cherry

plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz i dont want her to leave maan

plzzzzzzzzzzzz continue plzzzz



Thanks. We'll see what she does. All I can promise you is that I don't like sad endings.
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: shockalot

OHHH FRIG...what a twistt :|
That was NOT expected...especially the fact that Dev's NOT negative...man...intense to say the least :|
This is getting so so good, looking forward to more!



Well twists are to be expected aren't they?!😉 Glad you like the story inspite of it.
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: -Sookie-

Ahhh....what a cliffhanger...finish it fast please

:-) (Detailed comment once this is finished...)



Thanks Sookie. I'll post the remaing four parts of the main story during the course of the day. The 5-part sequel (with a teenage Sahana) will be posted tomorrow.
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: Opti



Thanks Sookie. I'll post the remaing four parts of the main story during the course of the day. The 5-part sequel (with a teenage Sahana) will be posted tomorrow.



So I can't bribe you to post them faster? as in right now? 😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
Well, my will power is not too strong! I'll post one part now.


Part 15

Geet reached Hotel Le Meridien well on time. As she got off the cab after paying the fare she was surprised to see Rehana with the kids going towards the hotel. Seeing Sahana and her, they came hurrying towards them. Aamir, Aarif, Amaan and Ayaan circled Geet and pulled at different parts of Sahana's little body in excitement. Sahana herself was more interested in Asma who was in Rehana's arms. The two girls reached out from their mamas' arms and caressed each other's chubby cheeks in admiration. Geet noticed a young teenage girl by Rehana's side.

"This is my niece, Farzana," introduced Rehana. "She is doing her first year B.Sc zoology in Nagpur. She's here on vacation."

"So how come you are here?" asked Geet, a little puzzled.

Rehana was surprised to hear this question.

"For the same reason that you are here - to attend Neelima's daughter's first birthday party."

It is only then Geet remembered that Neelima, Rehana's best friend had invited her as well to the party when she had gone to Rehana's house the previous weekend. Somehow in all the emotional turmoil she was going through since the previous day, she had forgotten about the party. Geet hit her forehead and apologised to Rehana, saying that she had completely forgotten about the party.

"Then what are you here for?" asked Rehana curiously.

After hesitating for a couple of seconds she said, "One of my friends from London is here on a short visit. I came here to meet him."

"Oh...Where is Maan? Your friend must also be his friend, wouldn't he?" asked Rehana perceptively.

Geet felt that Rehana had caught her in the act of lying. Quickly composing her thoughts she said, "No. Maan does not know him well enough. Since he was my class mate in college, he was much junior to him."

Rehana was not convinced by Geet's story. She wondered whether Ali finding Maan drunk the previous night had anything to do with Geet meeting this 'friend' of hers. Anyway she was not one to pry into her friend's life unless she was willing to share things with her. Clearly Geet did not want to discuss this issue further. So she let things be for now. Although she had seen very little of Geet, she knew her well enough to be sure that she will not betray her husband.

Seeing that their daughters were getting along famously, she suggested that she take Sahana to the party.

"She will have more fun with the kids there than be forced to listen to her mother go yack, yack yack with her old friend," she said light heartedly.

"But how will you manage so many kids?" asked Geet sceptically.

"Don't worry. Farzana here will take care of Asma and I'll look after Sahana. Sahana darling, you do like your Rehana aunty, don't you?" she asked and handing Asma to Farzana, she stretched her arms to Sahana who gladly leaped into them.

Geet was relieved that she did not have take Sahana in, for she was not too comfortable letting Dev see her. She thanked Rehana and promised not to be too long with her meeting. She then realised she had not bought any gift for Neelima's kid. She asked Rehana to wait in the lobby area and went to the gift shop inside the hotel to quickly pick up a large teddy bear. Handing it to Aamir, she asked him to give it to the birthday baby on behalf of his little friend Sahana. Aamir nodded his little head and held the teddy tightly in his little arms. Patting his cheek she took leave of them. Sahana kicked her legs in glee at being in the company of so many kids and waved her mama good bye.

While Geet went to the hotel's lounge, Rehana and her little troop turned into the adjacent banquet hall of the hotel where the party was being conducted. Geet looked around and spotted Dev sitting in one of the plush sofas waiting for her. The minute he spotted her, he rushed to her and held her hand tightly in his.

"How are you Geet? Am I glad that you are still alive!" he said warmly. He tried to put his arm around her but Geet ducked away and took the seat opposite to his. Dev could sense her discomfort and did not press on.

"What do you mean that you are glad to see me alive? Did you anticipate that I will commit suicide after you ditched me? If you did, then you are some man to still go ahead and leave me in the lurch after asking me to abscond from my home. Was the lure of the money your boss's daughter could give you greater than your so-called love for me?" she spat out in anger.

"I understand your anger Geet. You are perfectly justified in feeling this way but you do not know the whole truth. Please listen to what I have to say in my defence before passing a judgment on me," pleaded Dev.

Geet looked at him with a mixture or confusion and scepticism.

Dev then recounted the chain of events since that fateful day when they landed at the VT station but could not meet each other. By the time he had finished his story her eyes were streaming with tears. She could not believe that her family could go to such lengths of viciousness. She remembered seeing Mr.Malhotra's men at the station, and getting into the nearest train to avoid them. This corroborated Dev's statement that he was hit by Malhotra's men. It was appalling to know that Brij or some other person had sent the SMS from Dev's cell, giving her the impression that it was he who had sent it. The news that he had ditched her had pushed her over the edge and made her consider ending her own life, a decision she regretted to this day.

How can people be so cruel to their own kindred, she wondered. More than what happened to her, what pained her more was the fact that Dev was made to bear the brunt of their anger against her for absconding on the wedding day. The guy was not only put through physical torture, being laid up in hospital for six months as it were, but was also put through the emotional trauma of being made to believe that his lover had killed herself. She can well imagine Dev's guilt of feeling responsible for her death as he had impregnated her. As she sat sobbing her heart out, Dev bent forwards and tried to console her by holding her hands in his.

*******

Back in Khurana Mansion, Maan woke up with a pounding headache. He cursed himself under his breath for having binged on too much alchohol the previous night, especially on a half empty stomach. Trying to shake off his hangover, he looked around and found Geet missing. He then looked into the cradle and found Sahana missing as well. Presuming them to be down in the hall having breakfast, he staggered to the bathroom to brush his teeth and have a quick shower. As he was getting dressed for work, the events of the previous night slowly dawned on him. He remembered Geet talking of leaving the house and asking for an annulment on the grounds that she was pregnant by another man. That hurt real bad even now. Then he remembered landing in the bar and trying to numb his pain by drinking heavily. He vaguely remembered the conversation with Dev asking him to accept Geet and the baby. At this point he started sweating profusely. What has he done? He has gone and handed HIS wife and HIS baby to her erstwhile lover, virtually on a platter. How can he do that? What was he thinking? He suddenly felt like kicking himself hard. Could Dev have called her by now? What would have been her response? Forgetting his headache he rushed down calling out to Geet. Bua informed him that she had gone with Sahana to meet her friend from London. Hearing this, he panicked more. Has she left him for good after getting the call from Dev, taking away his daughter? Has he lost them forever?

"Did she say where she was meeting him?" asked Maan, his heart pounding by now.

"Yes, she said she was going to Hotel Le Meridien," answered Bua.

"I'll be back," he said and rushed out even as Bua and Baba shouted after him to have his breakfast first.

"What is wrong with our children?" asked Bua to Baba. "First Geet rushes out without having her breakfast and within minutes Maan follows her skipping his breakfast too. What is more important than the first meal of the day?"

Baba shrugged and said that this generation gave scant regard to both their health as well as advices from their elders.

*****

Maan hit the accelerator as soon as he got into his car and drove like a mad man. He had to stop his wife from leaving with her ex-boy friend, come what may. He cannot afford to lose the two most precious beings in his life. Geet may not love him right now but he will make her love him. He just needed more time to make her see and realise how right they were for each other. He is not giving up on them so easily. He wondered whether she wanted to leave him because she thought he did not love her. After all they did have a deal that she will leave after the baby was born. Maybe she thought she had to fulfil her end of the bargain and leave him for good. But then could she not feel his love? Did she not realise that his life is meaningless without her and Sahana? He cursed himself for not confessing his love to her before. Why did he hesitate? Why did he have to wait for the first anniversary of their meeting to bare his heart? He was never shy of revealing his feelings or to speak his mind. Then why was he dumbstruck whenever he was in her presence? He will never be able to forgive himself if she leaves him thinking that he does not love her. She needs to know that he loves her with all his heart before she makes her choice.

He soon reached the hotel and jumped out of the car. He ran into the hotel and looked around for her. He heard the loud singing of the birthday song in the nearby banquet hall and turned in the direction of the sound. Through the open doorway he caught sight of his daughter in the arms of Rehana. She looked so happy in the crowd and clapped her small hands when the song was over, mimicking the kids around her. His heart tugged at the sight of his beautiful angel. How can he give her up? No he will not. He will get her back at whatever cost, he thought. He was about to enter into the banquet hall to find Geet when he overhead her unmistakable sobs coming from the lounge area. He turned around and saw his wife sitting opposite to Dev in one of the sofas, her hands held in his and his head bent towards hers. Something snapped in him seeing his wife so close to another man and being touched by him. Blood rushed to his head and he scurried to them. He caught Dev by his collar and dragged him up. Dev stared back at him in shock. He then balled his fist and threw him a punch under his chin. Dev went sprawling on the marble floor. Geet's eyes widened in shock and she screamed out "Maan.......".


Part 16:=>Here


Edited by Opti - 14 years ago

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