Short Story-Take my Breath Away 2 -Upd 12/10 pg87!

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Posted: 14 years ago

#481

Vru,

fab job .. 2 updates .. you really are spoiling us .. so thank you for that!!

great storyline .. sad how the brothers have had to out up with so much emotionally with their mother ..

liked the way Zeno calmed Vicky down!! ha ha .. hardly .. bechchare ka pulse to sky rocket ho gaya ho ga!!

thanks again .. brilliant reads ..

Uzma xx

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njc1107

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Posted: 14 years ago

#482

very emotional and beautiful update... u have shown so beautifully the imp. of mother.. not only girls but men too at ne age always need the support and care of their mothers... u have really improved in writing too...

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Posted: 14 years ago

#483

Whew ! Vrush....that was some reading i did ....read it from the start .....kya likheti ho tum yaar ...bahut acchey !!!!thanks 4 the pm , cudnt comment b4 as i had not read it ....as usual it was amazing ...pls continue 😊

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Posted: 14 years ago

#484

Originally posted by: deniac
awesome vrush... the mother sons reunion brought tears to my eyes... awesomely described scenes in both updates.... i can actually visualise everything that u wrote..... keep writing gal....

thanks gouri i wept when i was writing...i know..might sound strange..but vicky and maan move me..

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Posted: 14 years ago

#485

Originally posted by: MaaneetDD
Vroom,
I thought I will read and then come back to comment.. But u being u ,u ll write such mind numbing updates and then my fingers automatically choose Post reply!!!!

So a little short comment but I LOVE IT!! Ab aayega mazaa... Like Nargis said - Raw emotions at their best.. I know u had given a small spoiler but the story still had unexpected moments..

Maan is more forgiving - maybe because he was older and in a better position to understand..

I loved the way u have portrayed Vicky inner turmoil here - Yes he appears to be a happy go lucky person- but u had hinted at the dark currents that flow beneath..And even though the mind rationalizes, there is always a part in the sub-conscious that would be emotional and rejection is stamped to the psyche!! I see the same in Vicky.. Beautiful writing Vroom... No wonder I call u Ustaad!! 👏

darling...ustaad is only as good as the shargird makes him..out to be..so without shagird like you all what am i...
but then i am a bit emotional right now...and yes...like i said..there is so much more to Vicky than the play boy he was..

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Posted: 14 years ago

#486

Originally posted by: uzmam1
Vru,

fab job .. 2 updates .. you really are spoiling us .. so thank you for that!!

great storyline .. sad how the brothers have had to out up with so much emotionally with their mother ..

liked the way Zeno calmed Vicky down!! ha ha .. hardly .. bechchare ka pulse to sky rocket ho gaya ho ga!!

thanks again .. brilliant reads ..

Uzma xx

hmm Uzma glad you like it..this one is way different from the maaneet scenes...and the play of characters is different even though names are from the serial...

i love the diversity it offers to my writing ability..here my imagination is totally at play rather than inspiration from the serial in Maaneet scenes..

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Posted: 14 years ago

#487

Originally posted by: njc1107
very emotional and beautiful update... u have shown so beautifully the imp. of mother.. not only girls but men too at ne age always need the support and care of their mothers... u have really improved in writing too...

njc thank you so much...yes...every child needs a mother.. and yes..this is just another aspect to delve into in terms of characterisation..life is not just romance is it?

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@Hot_Indo_Chilly

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Posted: 14 years ago

#488

Originally posted by: rushtrip

Ah some fireworks..can be expected..and with Vicky and Nargis..they have mastered the art of communicating..not just with their bodies but with words too..they have a unique understanding..

i hope to see that between you and Maan as well...

Hmm, I think the body part is waiting for pundit Vrushali....though there may be a lack of communication n certain topics (you know which one I mean), the trust and conviction they have for each other is stronger than fevicol!😆 And as long as that doesn't break, nothing can set them apart