' Two Wheels Made Us One' Part XVIII (story ends)

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Bhoomi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#91

Originally posted by: ssh57

Hi Bhoomi,

I can't even afford to cry on my own mistake,

Can't get weak as can loose the strength it takes,

To walk ahead and get things to be properly done,

Not get emotional be strong for hurdles to overcome..

Very beautiful lines. As I always say your verses add to the beauty of the story. The practical approach of this story is wonderful. Awaiting to read the next part.Love ssh57

Hi Shardha,

Aww feels so nice to know u liked those lines.. it were there to

add some insight and so happy that u felt it could.. thanks for ur

lovely encouragign words dear..hope u like it till the end.. will

post next soon..tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: mjhtnupurmayank
Part 5 was amazing..!! Perfect...!!
Truly Awesome...!!

I liked many things in Part 5....
Firstly, another nature of Mani apart from his maturity and caring nature i.e. his ability to get along well with the child... You have described that very beautifully....

'He would not accompany her at night time till her house door but assure her he is here down waiting.'
I really liked his nature here - his maturity, his caring nature, his respect for her and his understanding...!!! Very nice....!!!

The last part was a bit surprising!!.... I just did not expect that Akshaya will forget her house keys...
But, I actually really really liked that... Normally, everyone tries to make things happy and the characters perfect but the best thing about your stories is that the characters are realistic and your writing absolutely perfect....!!! Even though Akshaya was responsible and mature, she forgot the keys in this tensed situation where she had to urgently and quickly go home....Thats practical....!!

The verses were nice adding beauty to the already wonderful update....!!

Oooh.... How could you leave at such a point???!!!!! Here, I am getting eager to know what will Mani and Akshaya do now....
Pls Pls update soon with a longer part....!! Looking forward for the next update....
Waiting eagerly for your update.....

- Pooja

Hi Pooja,

Yes not only maturity but also a carign warm person.. and when a

girl starts relating a man to his dad ..its a very very positive

note what say..lol..glad u liked the whole bit situation in this

story .. though its not very detailed..

Ya dear i wanted to brign here some very common but usual scene

where the personality of hte man can come out and how little things

can make u feel for the guy.. feels good u all liked those small

segments and his matured approach though its not romantic..

Ya here also u r right, she is human afterall and can forget..

there are no perfect people but people who work towards it and who

accept when they go wrong.. and here she is strong and in a

difficult situation as well.. guilty on urself isnt easy to come

out of it..

awww so happy that u liked those verses whcih i added.. it assure

me they are enjoyed reading..

ahahhaha Oh.. what can i do. i have kept it one part a day..and see

what will happen that takes another part..waise kuch action

hoga..lol.. So u want to read fast fast. ahh i will try and post

soon... gettign busy from couple of days warna woudl post more in a

day.. tc

Bhoomi

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ShwePoo

@ShwePoo

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Posted: 15 years ago

#92

Heyy... You online??? Are you updating now???

- Pooja

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Bhoomi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#93

Originally posted by: sun_423
bhoomi tumne part post kiya aur hum chale aaye...comment dene hum chale aaye...ohhhhooo...hehehe... i'am back with my comments dear... part 5... well iske baare mein kya kahun.. akshaya is being the rational mind one & she is looking after everything with utmost care... akshaya is also thinking about mani.. this is a good progress.. this shows that whatever the situation is mani & her first meeting with mani inperson has left a mark on her.. it has surely left some amount of impact on her heart & mind... yes i agree that it is too soon to say that mani & akshaya have fallen in love... the bond which is forming between mani & akshaya is not lovr but they are on the understanding path, the path of trust which in turn leads to the path of love.. because in love the most important thing for the two people is first thay should understand each other, understand one another with the unspoken words.. & secondly they should trust each other, trust should be as such they can trust their partner blindly with their life... i think that though akshaya & mani have not reached their final destination of love but still they have taken the road to love & slowly but steadily they are travelling in the path of love... this is what i think..... akshaya has to go home to get her fathers reports & she says she will go with mani... this first of all shows that akshaya has started to understand mani, she knows he would be somewhere around & akshaya deciding to go with mani also shows that she has started trusting mani, a complete stranger for her at this time of crisis...hmmm.. goodd. these things are very vital to take a relationship forward... now next coming to mani.. he is so very sweet.. the way you described he was playing with a kid uske dekhkar tho mere mann mein bas ek hii khayal aaya aur woh yeh kii mani bas ek anjaan bachche ke saath itna pyaar jata raha hai, tho woh shaqs apne kudh ke bachche ko kitna zyada pyaar dega... i'am sure atleast for a second akshaya ke mann mein bhi yeh baat zaroor aayi hogi.. akshaya is worried... awww... i'am sad for her.. hope her dad gets well soon.. because i cannot see her pain... you know i feel even mani is at the path of love, because as soon as he sees akshaya he knows she needs him, even though she did not say anything, but yet mani understood the emotional turmoil akshaya is going through.. & seeing akshaya in that state i'am sure atleast ek barr mani ke mann mein yeh baat aayi hogi that he should console akshaya & ease her out of her pain...i liked the way akshaya ka mood badal ne kii koshish karr raha tha mani asking her the speed he has to drive in.. & that works, akshaya gives him a proper reply & that too with a smile.. awww.. these two are just too good... they are the perfect match for each other.. again i'am telling mani is a true, perfect gentleman... may be he has certain imperfections too but his perfection surpass the imperfections.. he tells akshaya that he would wait down & she goes & gets her dad's files.. this shows mani is taking care of akshaya's name in the society.. this shows he respects women... lekin yeh kya akshaya keys bhool gayi... ohhh... no... i can't really blame akshaya for it because she is also human aur usne jaan-bhoochkar aise nahii kiya.. she just forgot the key in worry & hurry.. now they are going back.. i'am glad that akshaya is not panicking at this state & mani is by her side.. waise i think that instead of taking akshaya all the way back to the hospital, mani will get a taala (lock) opening person.. so this will save them some time too... i'am sure if mani had not been by akshaya's side then she would have got more worried.. but i think that mani presence is calming her down... & now i feel that akshaya's parents & mani parents will try & get mani, akshaya together, that is once akshaya's dad id better....very nice dear.. the story is progressing well... keep it up...👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏Bhoomi dear continue soon... try posting more than one part a day na pleaseeee..😊😃😊

Hi Surya,

Tum ney comment kiya aur main chalii ayii hooo khushi sey

chaliayee.. :Dyes she is takign care of so many things and here

kitna kuch uski life mey ho raha hai na.. it does happen with us as

well.. many things happen at a time when we cant handle all..bnut

we have to somehow.. and MAni has surely left a mark.. she can

understnad him trust him and is assured that her trust on him isnt

wrong..

About love..hmmm two wheels tak story hai..i hope u get to read the

one bit wala scene..but abhi usmey time hai..lol..

Oh u cant see Akshaya in pain and am sure there will be a point

where Mani will want to go and ease her pain out.. but time will

tell when.. he does feel for her already somewhere but dont want to

push himself..warna adkiyan kuch aur sochey abt them. he is a

gentleman u see..:)

They look like a perfect match for each other na Surya.. now i hope

they do get together..and u all know they will na.. ya phir kahani

yehin khatm hogi ..and if they will how things will go that

direction.. chalo how i proceed hope u all enjoy that part.

Surya i have to thank u ..u know everytime i see those ff doc in my

inbox i am so very assured that i have them too with me all becoz

of the effort u have taken..and thank for that heaps and

bounds..dear. tumney for me took so much effort soooo sooo thankful

to u dear all the wya..:D

and u were wondering na lock todna ya bulana lock waley ko..ab Mani

ka dimaag kahan bhakta hai just read in the coming part..and hope u

enjoy it dear.. ur amazing comments detialed ones.. so so very

sweet..thanks for takign tiem to read and write ur comments.. i am

too lucky to get them i know.. thank u luvu ..tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#94

Originally posted by: Divya_kaldivya
Bhoomi... that was an awesome duesome update.👏👏👏.. sometimes it so happens that we forget the smallest thing in such a big and serious situation that we do hold ourselves responsible for not carrying out any task properly.. Poor Akshaya, too had to go through the same thoughts... and Mani, a superb support system to rely on...And the way we handle situations, gives us an insight about the kind of person we are...

HI Divya,

Awww feeling awesome that u liked this part too.. and ya yeh hota

hai.. soemtimes we cna handle biggest things in situaiton but miss

small things and we cant even curse ourselves .. and also human so

error kahin to hosakta hai.. Yes MAni is a superb support

system..but he may have some other trick to get out of this

situation.. hope u like how he supports her for this situation.. U

r so right all the insight into personality nature comes from the

wya people handle such tense situation and how much they care for

others..

thansk dear for ur comments luvu to have them and get to know how u

feel reading..tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: sakura_mayur
Heyyyy bhoomi
Awsome update yaar
Loved the simplicity of this ff
Loved both the characters
Do continue soon

HI Seema,
Aww u like simplicity, aur yehan main yehi sochti hoon..kii itna

simple hai kahin bore naa hojaye.. chaloo feels wonderful that u

all r enjoyign reading the simple story this is.. and u love the

charcters.. thanks dear for these lovely comments.. luvu tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#95

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool
lovely part cont soon

Hi Jyothi,

U enjoyed this 5th part as well.. feel nice that u feel like

readign more of this ff and have enjoyed reading uptil now.. tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur
http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1399783

Di!

hmm......so aakhir phir se use mani ki zaroorat pad gayi!

i love people who love kids.....cause i am very fond of kids.....i love their cute faces and their childish acts......and their non sensible talks.......haaye! i need to go to my other house and hug my niece....i so love him.....he is so cute and chubby and young that u can;t resist kissing him.....and when he calls me bhuuuuuua.......he never says bhua.....he stretches it deliberately to make me kiss him! and then i make sure that he kissses me back!

u have so nicely explained the maturity level of mani..........by bringing this kid affair into the story....

and di i loved the way he played with that kid......and the poetic verses add the beauty to ur story....

and i loved how he understood without her saying and she asked him.....

i loved how he didn't accompanied her to her house at that time of night but made sure that he was down waiting.......this is perfectly maturity!

i loved the update!

tension sab kuch bhula deti hai........

she was responsible.......par tension mein sab kuch bhool gayi......

and those verses were more than just being beautiful!

di plz continue with a bigger part plz.....

love,
Mahak

Hi Mahak,

haan she needs him by her side na.. and see he is such a sweetheart

he is all ready to help her out..

aww u love to be with kids na.. they r halla type .. but they give

u energy as well and a life complete beautiful u feel with them..

Mani is a carign warm person na.. seeign him with the kid made

Akshaya recollect her father to woh ussey kitna pyaar laga hoga to

compare him t his father loves for her.. how much genuiine felings

he might have shown to the ll;ittle kid..dekho Akshaya to feel kar

rahi hai.. ab agey inka kya hoga...

Feels good to know u enjoyed the maturity aspect though they are

very little or small bits of it.. but they r highlight and so nice

to knwow most of u here have felt that and liked the same..

aww poetic verses enjoy kiya.. feel assured and hapy now that i

included them..

yup understnading withotu saying.. mazaa hai na.. they are becomign

more like friends now..

ya she forgot this small thing but for her this is sooo big a

mistake.. now what will Mani do.. he has somethign on his mind..

read it for the next part.. hoep u liek that too.. thanks dear for

ur lovely commenss..and ur comments make me feel special

evrytime..luvu tc..

Bhoomi

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ShwePoo

@ShwePoo

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#96

Originally posted by: mjhtnupurmayank
Part 5 was amazing..!! Perfect...!!
Truly Awesome...!!

I liked many things in Part 5....
Firstly, another nature of Mani apart from his maturity and caring nature i.e. his ability to get along well with the child... You have described that very beautifully....

'He would not accompany her at night time till her house door but assure her he is here down waiting.'
I really liked his nature here - his maturity, his caring nature, his respect for her and his understanding...!!! Very nice....!!!

The last part was a bit surprising!!.... I just did not expect that Akshaya will forget her house keys...
But, I actually really really liked that... Normally, everyone tries to make things happy and the characters perfect but the best thing about your stories is that the characters are realistic and your writing absolutely perfect....!!! Even though Akshaya was responsible and mature, she forgot the keys in this tensed situation where she had to urgently and quickly go home....Thats practical....!!

The verses were nice adding beauty to the already wonderful update....!!

Oooh.... How could you leave at such a point???!!!!! Here, I am getting eager to know what will Mani and Akshaya do now....
Pls Pls update soon with a longer part....!! Looking forward for the next update....
Waiting eagerly for your update.....

- Pooja

Hi Pooja,

Yes not only maturity but also a carign warm person.. and when a

girl starts relating a man to his dad ..its a very very positive

note what say..lol..glad u liked the whole bit situation in this

story .. though its not very detailed..

Ya dear i wanted to brign here some very common but usual scene

where the personality of hte man can come out and how little things

can make u feel for the guy.. feels good u all liked those small

segments and his matured approach though its not romantic..

Ya here also u r right, she is human afterall and can forget..

there are no perfect people but people who work towards it and who

accept when they go wrong.. and here she is strong and in a

difficult situation as well.. guilty on urself isnt easy to come

out of it..

awww so happy that u liked those verses whcih i added.. it assure

me they are enjoyed reading..

ahahhaha Oh.. what can i do. i have kept it one part a day..and see

what will happen that takes another part..waise kuch action

hoga..lol.. So u want to read fast fast. ahh i will try and post

soon... gettign busy from couple of days warna woudl post more in a

day.. tc

Bhoomi

Hiii,

One part a day??? I am sure none of us will complain if you update more than one part in a day....!!
Pls continue soon...

Waiting for the next part....

- Pooja

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#97

Originally posted by: mjhtnupurmayank
Heyy... You online??? Are you updating now???

- Pooja

i have updated part 6th

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ShwePoo

@ShwePoo

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#98

Hi Bhoomi,

Awesome update as always..!!

Mani thought very quickly and smartly....
Akshaya had the guts to say that she will climb even though she does not know climbing!!!!!
But seriously speaking, it potrayed how Akshaya was ready to take responsibility for her actions - Thats a very beautiful quality indeed..!!! Also, liked how Akshaya eased Mani's nervousness and tension rather than getting tensed herself in this complicated situation..... So, now Akshaya is quite comfortable and can joke and also show her tears in front of Mani - a step ahead for a good relation....

Mani assumed those prizes to be of singing while those were of sports precisely badminton...
I observed how in every update you are nicely proving how wrong Mani was when he rejected Akshaya...

Also apart from their first awkardness, they have never tried to insult each other or behave rudely especially Akshaya as she was rejected.... Ya, she needed his help but still how cordially they get along with each other... Mani proved himself to be trustworthy while Akshaya trusted him without any fear.... WOW!!!!

Loved the Father - Daughter bond which you have described so beautifully....
I really liked the sentence that shows that tears are not to show weakness but to show the immense love.... Lovely!!!

Met as Strangers, felt awkward to go along,
Walked and sailed through situation for so long,
It made us realise life is an ocean deep and wide,
Waves were hitting and together we are side by side,
It's not embarassing to be together at this time,
It's actually helping and things look better and fine..

This verse describes everything that maybe a whole essay may not have potrayed.....!!!!! Seriously, I just loved this verse.....

Overall to just sum it up.... Perfect Writing, Beautiful emotions, Amazing verses and truly wonderful update...!!!!

Waiting for more of Mani - Akshaya understanding and hope Akshaya's father recovers soon....
Pls update soon...

- Pooja

P.S. You know what, the previous comment that I had typed just got erased off and I sat to write another one which is much much longer than the previous one....!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Edited by mjhtnupurmayank - 15 years ago

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seema mittal

@seemamittal

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Posted: 15 years ago

#99

Heyyyy bhoomi
Fab update yaar
Loved the way they supported each other
Mani is such a nice person
Loved akshayas love for her father
Hope her father gets well soon
Do continue soon