FF MJHT....Do read n comment

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Posted: 15 years ago
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I was a silent reader .. i have no idea if this is the place to write FF .. i would like to write one.. so if this is not the correct place please do let me know.. i ll give a brief sketch of what i want to write please let me know if i have to continue....
All the characters are the same as mjht.. except that mayank has a younger sister studying in 12th.. her name is mehak ... played by riddhima.. and also that samrat stays with mayank from the time he was 10 years old and considers mayank s mom as his own mom and even mehak considers samrat as her own bro.... pleas do let me know if i hav to continue
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Posted: 15 years ago
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please continue soon and add me in your pm list!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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i m starting as one person has encouraged me n than you so much
PART 1
mehak cald as guddi by her dear protective brothers
shilpa is their mom n gunjan nupur and shilpa are in the kitchen .. they hav jus come dere for a casual visit...
Scene
mehak: mom sirf do dino ki hi tho baath hain...
mom: nupur beta tumne ise aaj subah kya khilaya jo iska dimaag kharaab ho gaya hain..
mehak : mom !!!!!!!!
mom : arrey tum mujhse kyun kah rahi ho .. mujhe tho koi aitraaz nahin hain ... jinse permission milna hain unse jaake poocho na..
nupur n gunjan r smiling...
mehak: mom aap mera help tho kijiye na
mom : paagal ho gayi ho kya do din who bhi miilloon door... mehak interrupts sayin its oly 5 hrs mom... aur who bhi akeli.... mehak again.. akeli nahin mom dosthon ke saath... mom .. ha wahi.. aur who bhi overnite campin...
mehak: lekin mom yeh meri last yr hain school mein..
mom : arrey mein ne kahan na mujhe koi problem nahin hain..
mehak: gunjan di pleassse aap bhaiyya se baath kijiye na ...
gunjan: guddi mujhe isme bilkul math gaseeto ... tum tho jaante ho na samrat kabhi nahin maan ne wala.. aur pichli baar us movie dekhne ke liye permission mein ne dilwaya or tum ne school bunk karke gayi .. aur saar daant mujhe mila samrat se... tho is baar bilkul bhi nahin
mehak makes a face n says thanks for ur encouragement....
nupur di aap to.. nupur starts laughn ... akdu mayank se... aunt mujhe lagta hain ise zaroor kuch hua hain.. haan lekin mein tum he tip tho de sakthi hun.. woh DDLJ jaise kajol apne sadu bauji ko manathey hain ... waise tum bhi try kar sakthi ho...
mehak: hmm wahan to sirf ek sadu they pataane ke liye.. lekin yahan do hain .. lekin mein phir bhi try karungi..hey bhagwaan kaash aaj rakshabandhan hota.. mamma har din rakshabandhan hota tho kitna achha hota na .....
k guys pleas do let me knw if u lik it den wil continue.. dis is my first ff... n i knw dere wil b lot of mistakes.. pls criticisms n suggestions r welcome
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Posted: 15 years ago
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THANK U SOOOO MUCH!!! WILL CONTINUE SOON

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Posted: 15 years ago
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PART 2

mehak: nupur di agar mein kajol ki tharah bhajan whajan gaungi na tho i assure u they ll get a heart attack.....

mom: waise yeh dono hain kahan.....

samrat: comes down the stairs wipin his hair with a towel .. followed by mayank... mayank is in his early dressins not lik shirts he wears nw..

samrat: oh wow kya scene hain apni hone waali daughter in laws ke saath kitchen mein .. app bahuth hi khushnasseb ho mom ..

gunjan blushes....

mehak: mom tho khushnaseeb ho hi .. unhe aapke jaise bete jo miley hain...

samrat luks at her n has a naughty luk.. : chasmish.. lagtha hain guddi ki tabiyat teek nahin hain ( n he tuches her forehead)...

mehak: bhaiyya!!!

mayank: he comes n hugs his mom from behind... waise gunjan ka tho patha nahin lekin nupur tho yahan superwise hi kar sakthi hain... uske alaawa tho use kuch aata hi nahin hain..

nupur.. points her finger at him .. mayank tum!!

Then shilpa turns n smiles.. so nupur calms down….

Mayank: waise yehan kya baatein ho rahi thi hum dono ke baarey mein…

Nupur: who mayank guddi tum dono se kuch kehna chaahthi hain

Mehak was drinkin water n she spurts it out..: Mein!!

Nupur: haa tumhe tho .. mehak cuts in : haan bhaiyya mujhe appse poochna tha ki who coachin class kahan pe hain.. aap ne kaha tha na models ke pehle ek week agar who attend karega tho it will b gud…

Mayank: lekin tum tho bahuth against thi..

Mehak: Haan pehle thi.. lekin jab baadh mein socha tho laga ki mujhe attend karna chaahiye…

Mayank & Samrat luks at each other n thinks Kuch tho baath hain…

Shilpa khaana tayyar hain sab logh aa jao

When nupur was keepin the dishes mayank winks at her and she blushes…mayank s mom teases him sayin mayank tumhar aankon ko kya ho gaya .. kabhi ek hi bandh ho raha hain…

Gunjan was about to sit when samrat slowly shows her action to sit beside him…

N she goes n sits dere

Mom : gunjan beta .. zara who kheer pass karna

Samrat and mayank together: wow mom kheer who bhi meve waala.. u r the greatest mom ..

Mom : aaj tho tumhari pyaari behen ne banaayi hain tum donon ke liye

Both mayank and samrat have a shocked n surprised expression

Mom : gunjan zara pass karna..

Samrat: holds her hand frum underneath .. n she s lik al blushed n askin him to leav …

Mom : gunjan…

Samrat: gunjan mom tumse kab se pooch rahin hain who pass karne ke liye .. tum pass kyun nahin kar rahe ho… ( he makes an innocent face) n gunjan jus winks at him…

He becomes totally surprised n let go….

Mayank: mom guddi kahan gayi …

Mom: who ghar ke mandir mein hain beta..

Mayank : unable to control laugh use kya hua .. xam hain kya aaj

Nupur: bahuth badi xam tho hain uske liye

Mayank : kya

Nupur : kuch nahin // lo who aa gayi…

Guddi gives prashad to evryone…. N den fone rings

Guddi

Hello baath ki bhaiyya se…

Nahin ishika abhi tak tho nahin…

Ishika: Kyaan yaar kal jaana hain aur saari thayyari bhi karni hain ..

Guddi: hmmm

Ishi: Aur mujhe nahin laghtha tumhara khadoos bhai manega..

Guddi: hmm

Ishi: yeh hmmm hmm kya laga rakha hain .. bhaiyya paass mein hein ?

Guddi: haan mein tujhe baadh mein fone karthi hun….

Mayank and samrat : kiska fone tha

Guddi : my boyfriend

M and S : kya ????

Guddi: oh god .. mazaak kar rahi thi.. ishika ne fone kiya tha..

Den dey go n sit on de sofa….. nupur signals guddi to talk ….

She kneels down in front of wehr her bro s are sittin ….

N dey luk at her luvingly

Kya baat hain guddi…

Guddi: she takes a deep breath n she s lik who .. hmm who.. den gunjan shows her a best of luck sign n asks her to continue

Bhaiyya jab thak mein poori baath na kahun please don react…..

Bhaiyya who actually mere frens sab log ishika ke farmhouse pe jaa rahen hain overnite…. Samrat cuts in … kya?? Who tho kitni door hain… mayank cuts in…who bho ivernite….

Guddi : pls bhaiyya ..poori bath sun lo.. n gunjann jus touches ssamrat s shoulder… n nupur luks at mayank pleadingly.. so both of dem keep quite

Guddi continues: bhaiyya mein ne aaj thak kabhi bhi aap dono ki baath nahi taali.. mein jaanthi hun jo kuch aap log kar rahe mere achayi ke liye hi kar rahe hain.. mein hamesha party ke samay bhi 7ko return karti hun.. tabh tho bahut samay party shuru bhi nahin hothi… aur aaj thak pub ke parties bhi nahin attend kiya.. mujhe is sab se koi shikayath nahin hain.. nujhe patha hain yeh sab mere bhale ke liye hi aap kar rahe hain

Bhaiyya yeh meri last yr hain school mein.. aur aap to jaante hain ki ishika , priya neetu sub log abroad jaa rahe apne studies pursue karne ke liye .. aur mujhe patha bhi nahin mein kabhi in logon se mil paaog bhi ya nahin….bhaiyya .. kya mein apni zindagi se do din bhi nahin maang sakthe aapse…. She s almost on de verge of tears..

Nupur, shilpa n gunjan hav their eyes filled….

There is silence…..

Both don say neting…

Dejected guddi turns to leav..

Samrat asks.. kab chodna hain ishika ke ghar…

Mayank : abhi hi jaan hein kya..

She turn s n runs towards them n hugs them : thank you bhaiyya!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I luv u .. U both r de greatest.. n all r happy… mayank kisses on her forehead…..

Nupur: tum tho simran se bhi kamaal kar dhikayi n she smiles n hugs her…..

K guys dats it for today

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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey dear,
nice part.
plz continue it and pm me ur next aprt
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Posted: 15 years ago
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gr8 start..!!
do continue soon...
plz PM me....
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Posted: 15 years ago
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I am feelin soooooooooooo happy.. dis is my very first n u guys hav been really encouragin.. n thank u for pressin de like button....
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Really nice .Please update soon...
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Posted: 15 years ago
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nice start dear 👍🏼
plz continue soon

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