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Originally posted by: -Edelweiss-

@ Sookie:

This comment is for NJ's request. This is definetly one of my favourite amongst the few that I have had a chance of reading from you. Most of what I have read of your work have been the one shots on AR and this is a complete contrast from those in terms of writing and flow. Most of those have always seemed to have had a bit of a cynical edge to it, with a sort of gothic touch to it. I don't know if that makes any sense, but it sort of reminded me of this book I read a while ago 'shadow of the wind', not the concept or writing as such. Just one of those things I drew parallel with your writing. I think I should write about this one, I seem to digress a bit too much, so coming to this one. It was one of those writing, that you know its very unlikely to happen, though you wish it would have happened in reality.

Huma! I think you have summed up my work pretty well. Yes, this work is very different from my usual writing and I wanted to, for once, write in a way without a cynical touch or a darker touch to it. Its not that I purposefully avoid this kind of writing. Its just not natural for me to write what I wrote here. But am really glad that it turned out well. (At one point I felt it was way too sappy. In a way, it still is for me!) I have not read the book you have mentioned, but will definitely see what its about.
This story is far from reality. Aren't most lover stories are that way? But the whole concept was based on little amount of fantasy and semi-lyrical writing. I cannot believe that a horror movie inspired me this type of writing. 😃

It was absolutely beautiful, the main protagonist was a lot more emotional than all your other characters. This is one of your work which was easy for me to visualise and it actually did transport me back to an unknown village. I say easy to visualise, because I was just going through a photo album of a mate of mine, who has just been on a recent exploration. I wish it had been me instead..oh well.

Yeah. It was an emotional piece. The request itself was something that drove me to write this. When we talk about places, its important for readers to visualize what the author is talking about. If you were able to do so, I give a mental pat in the back or will ask my mom to do it for me. :-)

I don't know if you've read William Dalrymple's work, but for some reason the dairy entry really reminded me of some of his work. I think that may be due to the fact that most his work is about travels to India and the Mughal empire. But seriously this is my absolute favourite for now, may be till I manage to read other work from you or who knows this might remain as my favourite.

I have read his work but he writes with a certain amount of detachment. I just finished White Moghuls and that's what I feel about his writing. And I am glad you liked this one enough to make it a favorite from me.

Thanks to NJ for requesting and to you Sookie for writing this.

Oh yeah! Thanks NJ. I definitely would not have written this if not you asked for it :D

Huma

Thanks a million Huma for your comments.

@sookie*
Audience of one:
great part it was....u r stories always seems to be so unique for me..
he loved her more than "his music" ,but she left him only to find someother he left his music too,at the end he found her n also his passion for music again..
wow!!thanks for giving us a beautiful story..

To Eddy :D 😆

the title is just perfect with everything, the musical piece..and them...reminds me that movie...and I couldn't help but compare with it- at some level...may be that's just me ...

WOW! You should write more, if this is how you write, I'm tempted to read some of those biological reports.😊 You know, I've come to hate airport terminals because it's so annoying to sit there and wait, feels like a complete waste of time. And still you can't help but wonder with all those people walking around, aimlessly or in this mad rush, that each one has a story, just like everyone else around them. And it's true, this is the third one I'm reading on this request and each are so different from the other two, there is that underlying similarity but so different in many ways.😊

Ajeeb dastaan hai yeh.. kaha shuru kaha khatam...

Ye manzilain hau kaunsi.. na woh samajh sake na hum...

Bet they had no idea what was about to come...

So you already got hang of my madness on that song! I paused at the end of the first Para...nearly spilt the cereal...and blah blah...you already know the rest of the story, so I won't bother you with that again. Ok that song, it's not exactly a happy song...but you can still interpret it in different ways...and it makes sense every time. Like it did here, the words took you through their journey, back and forth, and brought you to that point where they were standing at the end. The literature references for me brought out their yearning to find out the other's perspective more, says so much without any words.... Me thinks the end was inevitable then..so I wonder, do you think, these chance encounters are really a chance or something that was bound to happen? I know this just one of those silly questions, I couldn't stop thinking as I came to the end here

Ajeeb dastaan hai yeh.. kaha shuru kaha khatam...

Ye manzilain hau kaunsi.. na woh samajh sake na hum...

. And it was AR all the way :D

Sensing someone's eye upon himself, he turned just to see those same green orbs staring back in to his grey ones. The same soft green but the liveliness was missing; she seemed to be trying to search for something in the grey, but time seemed to have formed a cloud and those once confident eyes now seemed to be glazed over with uncertainty. He couldn't help but glance her once over expecting to see her usual disarray of colours, looking like a rainbow had threw up on her. Instead he found that her choice in clothing had toned down from her garish dressing style; dressed in a black summer dress; he idly noticed that it was a Gucci exclusive. He raked his eyes over her again, and saw that her wrists were adorned with many colourful beads; like always- some things just never change and for that he was grateful. He saw her struggling for words; another rarity, he sighed

And they notice all the little details, and changes too, my fav from this para was this - He raked his eyes over her again, and saw that her wrists were adorned with many colourful beads; like always- some things just never change and for that he was grateful.

She glanced at the piece of literature she was holding, and then pointedly stared at the book in his hand, eyebrows raised. He raised the book and smiled softly, reminiscing back to the time when he had sworn never to read it. How times have changed...

The bond they share...

She heaved a silent sigh and looked through the collection to find that particular record missing...A whisper broke the silence that hung in the room.

"Are you looking for this?"

I loved it here.

Yeh roshni ke saath kyun, dhuaan utha chiraag se...

Yeh khwaab dekhti hoon main, ke jag padi hoon khwaab se...

that was so apt where it was, Needless to say, I loved reading this :D

Thank you!😃

hugs A

Originally posted by: spln

that was a good read huma... for someone who claims a sole proficiency in bio reports, that was mighty! :) i can't deny i like the enigma about it all... the selects of lit n music were in great taste to!! ... actually the entire flow of it was... i only wished, and maybe you had wanted it not to be hence, that i culd link the three references into greater certainty from the author's input... but then, this has left me ample scope to speculate! ... u should write more... other than the reports that is! ...

cheers,
nj

ps: forgot to say, the title was a winner! specially in the multiple ways i could employ it with respect to the piece :)

Originally posted by: olive_green

To Eddy :D 😆 Olly G..😆 Dont ask why and how?

the title is just perfect with everything, the musical piece..and them...reminds me that movie...and I couldn't help but compare with it- at some level...may be that's just me ... Thank you, thank you..like I mentioned to NJ..the title took me a while, it just wouldn't come. You're talking abou Dil apna aur preet parayi right? Or am I being a complete dim here..if you are then I can see why to some extent..that is quite an interesting take..never thought of it that way.

WOW! You should write more, if this is how you write, I'm tempted to read some of those biological reports.😊You are being way too nice A, and I am not sure you would want to read those reports. Even I wouldn't want too, and I've written them. Hogwash... You know, I've come to hate airport terminals because it's so annoying to sit there and wait, feels like a complete waste of time. And still you can't help but wonder with all those people walking around, aimlessly or in this mad rush, that each one has a story, just like everyone else around them. I know exactly what you mean, I use to absolutely hate terminals..for me the only good thing about waiting there was so that I could read without any disturbance..but then after a very weird trip with my friend where we sat there trying to decipher stories of people around us and what their destination would be. Its sometimes easier to read and make up a story for a person who is alone than with a family..I actually feel a sort of fondness for them now...by the way before this piece came about I was considering writing something along the lines I mentioned above. But this just popped up when I was listening to Ajeeb dastaan..And it's true, this is the third one I'm reading on this request and each are so different from the other two, there is that underlying similarity but so different in many ways.😊 True to that Aria..

Ajeeb dastaan hai yeh.. kaha shuru kaha khatam...

Ye manzilain hau kaunsi.. na woh samajh sake na hum...

Bet they had no idea what was about to come...

So you already got hang of my madness on that song! I paused at the end of the first Para...nearly spilt the cereal...and blah blah...you already know the rest of the story, so I won't bother you with that again. Yep yep.. I am already aware of your craziness for this song..but then I cant blame you..its just such a beautiful track..Ok that song, it's not exactly a happy song...but you can still interpret it in different ways...and it makes sense every time. Exaclty, its one of those songs that you can relate to in many situations..

Like it did here, the words took you through their journey, back and forth, and brought you to that point where they were standing at the end. Damn, that is exactly why I had used this song in the piece..you got that bang on..I am glad you mentioned it..thanks. This song was sort of used as a narrative to take the story further, more so the first two verses..

The literature references for me brought out their yearning to find out the other's perspective more, says so much without any words.... Me thinks the end was inevitable then..Yep that is exactly why those literature references were mentioned, specially Armaan's line about the flaws..it was an indirect way of communication and they were both aware of it...the end actually had been decided there and then, them going back to the place was for their closure. so I wonder, do you think, these chance encounters are really a chance or something that was bound to happen? I know this just one of those silly questions, I couldn't stop thinking as I came to the end here That is an interesting question, for me when I sat about writing this..I never saw this as a chance encounter, it was an inevitable that was waiting to happen. As a writer I had envisioned him already having spotted her and hence knowing her habit led to a pre planned encounter from his side..I sort of did hint towards it in the lines below, but again I didn't want to dwell on that matter, just thought of leaving it to the readers discretion. I am glad you mentioned it though.🤗

"No, this is not the first, I have read it before. Needed a read and this is the first I found." He said sipping on his coffee; she didn't need to know the full truth he mused.

Ajeeb dastaan hai yeh.. kaha shuru kaha khatam...

Ye manzilain hau kaunsi.. na woh samajh sake na hum...

. And it was AR all the way :D That it definetly was...there is no one else I could imagine apart from them..

Sensing someone's eye upon himself, he turned just to see those same green orbs staring back in to his grey ones. The same soft green but the liveliness was missing; she seemed to be trying to search for something in the grey, but time seemed to have formed a cloud and those once confident eyes now seemed to be glazed over with uncertainty. He couldn't help but glance her once over expecting to see her usual disarray of colours, looking like a rainbow had threw up on her. Instead he found that her choice in clothing had toned down from her garish dressing style; dressed in a black summer dress; he idly noticed that it was a Gucci exclusive. He raked his eyes over her again, and saw that her wrists were adorned with many colourful beads; like always- some things just never change and for that he was grateful. He saw her struggling for words; another rarity, he sighed

And they notice all the little details, and changes too, my fav from this para was this - He raked his eyes over her again, and saw that her wrists were adorned with many colourful beads; like always- some things just never change and for that he was grateful.

She glanced at the piece of literature she was holding, and then pointedly stared at the book in his hand, eyebrows raised. He raised the book and smiled softly, reminiscing back to the time when he had sworn never to read it. How times have changed...

The bond they share...

She heaved a silent sigh and looked through the collection to find that particular record missing...A whisper broke the silence that hung in the room.

"Are you looking for this?"

I loved it here.

Aru...thank you so much for mentioning all the little nuances too. Really appreciate it..

Yeh roshni ke saath kyun, dhuaan utha chiraag se...

Yeh khwaab dekhti hoon main, ke jag padi hoon khwaab se...

that was so apt where it was, Needless to say, I loved reading this :D Those lines have always been my favourite in the song..

Thank you!😃

hugs A

Thank you for making me want to write..and for leaving a detailed comment.

🤗H