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Senny

@Senny

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Posted: 15 years ago

#151

hey mahak,

i commented earlier but i guess it didn't get posted. Your update was sooooooo damn romantic, i am still blushing and blushing soooooo hard man.

It was wonderful, i simply lovee the way you write and present your work.

Excellent, keep it up!

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Nikki

@dmgmjht4ever

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Posted: 15 years ago

#152

WARNING: THIS REPLY WILL BE LONG

Mahi it was toooooo romantic

In this reply, I will say my favorite line in each part (it will be italized)

So let's start this long reply

The morning after the wedding-

Too good

Loved how Mayank wouldn't wake up

With Mayank putting his arms around Nupur

my heart melted

beautifully written

and described

and how Nupur shuddered

just shows how shy she is

favorite line: no one could disturb this peaceful love bird couple

that line was the best

In the evening-

as it first started out saying how Mayank shuts the door,

I knew it was going to be romantic

loving the romantic Mayank

afterall, they are married

just an fyi, my heart melts like wax

so when Mayank held Nupur by her waist

my heart was melting

then it was so sweet

how Nupur told her that she wouldn't eat without him

that was chooo cute

favorite line- pehle tum meri kuch nahi thi par ab tum meri ho'.tum meri sab kuch ho

My second favorite line was: jab tak aap nahi khaate main kaise kha sakti hoon?

About the first line

that was too sweet

I fell in love when reading that line

Second line-

Like I said earlier,

that was too cute!

In the morning-

Nupur wearing a pink saree

I knew Mayank would instantly fall in love, again

Of course, the dori part was sweet

but Mayank starting to kiss Nupur

*faints*

this part was so well described

I can imagine it in my head

the passionate kiss

was the best described

you showed both of their feelings really well

I loved how Nupur stopped it

and tried to run away when he asked

if she liked it or not

really good

Favorite Line: Mayank- I didn't got my answer..
Nupur releasing his hand and rushing out of the door ' yes

Very well written

Wow, I just realized that this reply took me 10 minutes

but it was worth it

cause your fan-fiction is so good!

I like writing long replies on everyone's

but I have never written a comment this long

so you are very lucky!

and since you said write a huge comment,

that's what I did

even though I most of the time do that

but this is so long,

my fingers are feeling a little tired

but your fan-fiction is too amazing

so I kind of have to write long reviews

now since I've told you litterally everything,

that popped up in my head when reading this

you probably figured out

how much I love your fan-fiction

Continue soon!

EDIT

I just realized that this is too short

well at least for me

lemme tell you what's in my mind

as in what I thought of the part overall

when I read this part

I was hoping for some romance

and you did that perfectly

with each scene,

I knew that this couldn't get any better

The best thing you did:

The dialouges

I cannot tell you enough how much they were good

What Mayank and Nupur said

was so neatly well written

moreover, I just loved how decribed the whole scenes

the imagination in my head was endless

I can think of the scene in my head,

that's how well you wrote it

you wrote down the words exactly the way it should've been

I would write more but I still haven't gone through half of my pms

because I spend a lot of time on this

now I have counted

this comment took me exactly 18 minutes to type up

so you should be happy

for such long replies

afterall,

you do deserve it

Continue soon....

Edited by dmgmjht4ever - 15 years ago

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Srishti but I prefer being called Mishu

@~*mishu*~

Inactive

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Posted: 15 years ago

#153

i knw i knw im late, so i guess ur allowed to throw chappals n belans at me lol
coming to the updt it was great as always
very sweet n cute n romantic
loved it completely
btw ye present wali nupur ko hosh kab aayega??
its sad cuz mayank is there crying n remembering this stuff
anyways waiting to read ahead!
continue soon

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Aakriti Mehta

@lil_desi_goddes

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+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#154

such a romantic part! very well written! please do continue soon!

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455394

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Posted: 15 years ago

#155

Sorry for commenting late dear

OMG Mahak wat a romantic update

the whole time i was blushing like anything

i had goosebumps reading it

hats off to u

u r an amazing wriiter

and the kissssssssss

Awwwww it was so passionate

i loved the update

and it was longer too

do continue with such cute moments

luv u

Nidzy

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Nikhila Chandran S.S.

@Nikki_Titli

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+ 6

Posted: 15 years ago

#156

awesomeeeeeeeeeeee............romantic update.........lovdddd d passionate romantic mayu to d core...thnxx a zillion ton for finally fulfillin our wishes.....🤗