Rahul-Muskaan & Atul-Anjali Collections updt pg 51

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Komal

@AshiYuvi4life

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Posted: 16 years ago

#101

GOOD LORD! Do my eyes decieve me???? No! It really... it's VEERU! Kyun smarty? Disappearing act khatam? ROFL! I'd like to point out one thing before I rant on and on that... you said I wouldn't have the patience to read ur LONG comment... might I remind you Veeru dearest, that Gabbar lives off of your HORRIFICALLY long comemnts! They're my drug. rofl! In order to recieve more written pieces, a deposit of a long essay size comment is required!

DUUUUUUDE! I wait for your comments you IDIOT! Hurr it up with Morey Saiyyan. I already have a whole new concept running thorugh my over-active mind and it's going to be an A-A R-M one-shot type thing. Keep a check on the tears. It's not going to happy happy. rofl!

You better pray that I don't kill you for not commenting like you normally do for the next part. SAMJHI KYA?! Apne ko koi lafda nahi karna mangta. Lekin tu apun ke bheje ko khiska daalegi! Lamba comment post karne ka nahi toh tereko utthvaa doongi. Kya samjhi? Nahi samjhi? Teri toh....!!!! rofl!

love ya!

Gabbar

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Surbhi_rox

@Surbhi_rox

Voyager

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Posted: 16 years ago

#102

nice part..

i luved ur writing style!!

damn gud!!
so very innovative...and oh! creative too!!

lovely..kudos to u di!!

thnx a lot for taking the pain for pming me the part...luv u!!

thnx for the pm...

update dis as well as rishta soon...hmm??

i m eagerly waiting for ur updates!!

-Sanjana

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Nadz_YuNalover

@Nadz_YuNalover

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Posted: 16 years ago

#103

Hey havent been able to read your short stories... I've read the first one and reli liked it! The new one looks damn interesting will finish and comment!

Luv
Nadz

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sonam

@sonam_26

Beginner

Posted: 16 years ago

#104

heyyy
that was such a nice part...it was really good..pls continue soon..and dont forget to pm me😊
love sonam

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Mansi bhatia

@-Mansi-

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 16 years ago

#105

Awwww...I finally finished reading all the 3 parts:

The first one was similar to Yaadien..but it was simply beautiful..Thw colour white you potrayed in the story..n d form of snow..sadness..peace..everything..was amazing!! I love your emotional stuff. They actually touch my heart.

Suno Sasurjee!!

ROFL🤣 🤣

What is this Komal? Tumhe ye idea aaya bhi kahan se? OMG! It was hilarious! I didnt stop laughing for a minute. Imaging Rahul as a gunda is soooooooo cuteeee!!! Awwwww...my darling!!! ❤️

My fav. parts:-

Apna jo pehla ladka hoga na, usse main top ka Bhai banaoonga yaar. 4-5 saal Tihaar Jail mein rahega. (bright smile) Baap ka naam roshan karega.

Awwww 😳
Rahul- Abbey nahi re. Dekh, kya hai naa ki, asal mein Ameerchand eik number ka Fakirchand hai. ROFL

Rahul- (bites his tongue) Nahi, main keh raha tha ki subha subha kitne MAHAAN aadmi ka naam le liye. Jiski tu ik lauti beti hai. (fake smile and then covers the mouth piece of the phone) Saala buddha meri shaadi rukvaa ke behata hua hai.

Muskaan walked down a long hallway and ended up in front of door which was being guarded by 2 extremely large men. As they saw her approaching, their strict expressions turned into big smiles as they bent to take her blessings.
Both men- Peri paina Choti Parjaai ji.
Muskaan- (gasped and jumped back again) Uh… (nervous smile) Rahul andar hai naa? (she heard a man yelp in pain and she understood that indeed Rahul was there)
Man 1- Ji. (opens the door to let her in)
🤣

Muskaan- Biji?
Rahul- Apni daadi.
Muskaan- Oye, tune toh kabhi nahi bataaya ki teri daadi bhi hai. (picks up the glass of water sitting on Rahul's night stand)
Rahul- Haan. Woh… pichle hafte jail se chooti thi na issiliye.
Muskaan- (spits the water out) Kya?!

Lolz

Part 2: OMG!! This was just THE BEST!!

Hayeee.....My Rahul comes dress in designer stuff! Uff! I can imagine..him in black..he would look jus SO HOTTTTT!!☺️☺️

Loved all of the shopping parts..extremely cute..also whichever store he goes..everybody knws him..haha 😆 😆 😆

My FAVVVV. part:-

Pappa ji- Vekh hanste hue kitna sona lagta hai. Ainwaiyee chachundar vargi shakal banaayi hoyi si. (Muskaan laughs silently)
Rahul- (smiles at him and turns and makes a face while whispering to himself) Buddhe ne mereko chachundar bola? Muskaan ke liye kya kya sunn na padhta hai!
Pappa ji- (taps him on the shoulder) Chalein puttar?
Rahul- Hein jee? Haan jee chaliye. (looks in the mirror before leaving as everyone else walked out) Oye… apni shakal chachundar jaisi hai?
Salesman- (bends closer to his face) Nahi Bhai. Aap toh bohot handsome dikhte ho.
Rahul- (looks up slowly and glares at him) Tereko toh main chodoonga nahi saale! Shaadi hone se pehle talaak karvaayega tu! Aata hoon raat ko band bajaane tera! (hits him on the back of his head and walks out cursing him under his breath)

🤣

I just love you Komal for writing such FANTASTIC stuff! Hats OFF! 👏

-Mansi

My long comment due..done! :)

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Komal

@AshiYuvi4life

Rocker

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Posted: 16 years ago

#106

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! I was waiting for this Manu! ROFL!

Yaadein and Morey Saiyyan were VERY similar and I realized it after I finished reading it. But... it was too late to make changes. Already over-due tha friend-ship day gift. rofl!

Suno Sasurji.... Uh don't ask. I have no clue where I got the idea from. I can tell you one thing, I get my best ideas in the shower. Log nahaate time gaate hain, main ideas nikaalti hoon. rofl!

I knew it would be too easy to imagine Muskaan as a ghundi because she's already pretty ghundi-ish! rofl! But someone as focuse and organized as Rahul, it would take a while to digest. Don't worry he's not the unhygenic type ghunda. They are top class people yaar. He's a stylish ghunda. Whether it's an everyday look or meeting his future in-laws. ROFL!

Thanks Manu! I love long comments!

Komz

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Mansi bhatia

@-Mansi-

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 16 years ago

#107

Haha..same here! I get ideas in the shower too..:D But not such gunda types! Yes. Yes. Hes a very stylish gunda..Lolz.

Im waiting for the next part..update soon:)

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Anjali

@Born-star

Inactive

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Posted: 16 years ago

#108

awesome Abhi I am still on Page 1..
I will read rest tomorrow...
I must say very well written.
I didnt feel as I am I am reading any Fan fiction ,I think RM scenes is better then DMG one.CV should Hire you hahah...

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rapi_c

@rapi_c

Rocker

Posted: 16 years ago

#109

OMG, komal rahul as in rahul bhai.. this has to be one of d most hilarious mini FF that i ever read.. 🤣🤣amazing idea yaar and with ur perfect execution it has become a marvellous work.. and have to admit that reading this all rahul is easier to imagine as Bhai but atul!! still can't, maybe if u give him something to speak then would believe that too.. 😛

rahul's talk r so cute.. can't imagine him beating d crap out of his victims.. kidnaping suits him more.. 😆 and d way he proposed to her.. muskaan must have an eye for real character.. otherwise wonder which girl could agree to such an innocently scary proposal ..Theek se kidnap bhi nahi kar paata kisi ko. Dhanda behata jaa raha... 😲
and so shockingly straightforward.. "Dekh chamiya, mereko terese pyaar hogaya hai, kya? Main jaanta hoon ki tu bhi merese pyaar karti hai. Toh phir koi lafda hi nahi hai. Bol daal." 😲

each and every bit of both d parts is so riotous that i'd have to actually reproduce ur story here to let u know what exactly i was laughing at.. 🤣 so just let it be.. waiting to see how it ends.. 😃
thnx for d PM