Tanha Dil-AR Mini FF [Last Part pg 82) 17/09/09 - Page 64

hey rucha. i noe m takin forever to read this one.. but thoda sa aur time.. n i want to read it in ful concentration.. jab koi mujhe distrub na kar sake 😆
after all its the last and special part rite..

wil cum bak for comments tonight..

luv yaaa

pretty cute part..........👏
loved it to bits......😳😳
awesomely written and ending is beautiful.......👏👏👏
i am sad that i cant read more parts of this ff.....😭😭
plzz write another ff sooooon...😉
thnxxxx.....😊

Hey Rucha

heyy

it was really good but i am feeling so sad you ended your ff but plz give an epilogue atleast just love the end cute nam for the baby

Originally posted by: vienna

Hey
Im soooo Sorry...
I couldnt comment earlier...
Overall, A very very very cute update....
Really liked it.... Thanks alot for ur appreciation..

But somehow, I had this feeling like you just wanted to get over with writing this FF...Yeah somewhere even I thought of this.. Yar the truth is ki agar main yeh FF abhi end nai karti to yeh incomplete rehne vali thhi.. Maine iss FF ko aise hi plan kiya thha.. aur isse drag karne ka mera koi mann nai thha.. I wanted it to be very simple nd light.. agar main aur parts likhti to bulkul bina mann ke likhti jisse padh kar aap sab ko koi mazaa nai ataa..

I mean the entire last part was written in such a fast forward with minute descriptions....
Im not saying it was bad...
It was certainly a treat to read but you could have broken it into alot more parts trying to express every ounce of every scene...Description issliye zyada nai thha coz firstly their honeymoon was cut short coz of the adult content thing going on IF.. nd secondly agar main pregnancy ke baare mein likhti to it would have been similar as My Love My Life.. Jaelousy vala factor maine vahan cover kar diya thha.. to yahan vo repeatitive ho jata..

U had a complete chance of adding alot more twists in the future of this story like Ahana getting a lil jealous of the little one as she saw Ridhima taking care of every little thing about Aashna and then Armaan making her understand and Ridhima giving her an explanation...maine yahan Aahana ko ek understanding bachha dikhaya thha.. why would she be jealous jab usse khud ek chota baby chaiye thhe nd besides i had written AR had never let her realise ki vo itne din apni Mom se dur thhi..

Ridhima could have some visa problem due to which all of them would have to go to India...Yar If Ridhhima has married Armaan who is a citizen of Canada to phir uske Visa problems nai ho sakte.. vo to automatically citizen ban gayi na vahan ki.. nd showing rest of the formalities was out of question..


Then confront the gang... I mean Armaan has a right to be angry with them but Ridhima doesnt... They were there for her when she was in pain, rite? They were not with her as friends.. Rahul aur Ridhhima ki ladai aur unke conversations mein maine dikhaya thha.. they were not with Ridhhima.. they were just against Armaan.. nd both things are different..

Shashank's health declining or Shashank's death or something...meri last Ffs mein I made shashank positive in the end.. Lekin to be logical yahan maafi ka sawaal hi nai hai after what he did..

If I was in your place, I wouldnt have ended this FF...A LOT can happen...I know my explainations are not that valid coz your POV is correct on your side.. nd you might think that I'm defending my self.. but try nd think from my POV aswell.. I ended it coz I Never wanted it to be INCOMPLETE or DRAGGED TO RUBBISH PARTS IN FUTURE.. cozyar mind mein imagine karna easy hota hai.. main agar vo future tracks follow bhi karti na to itna impressive nai hota.. coz mujhe na jab bhi koi similar situation likhna padta hai, jaise maine pehli kisi FF mein likhi hai to mujhe time lagta hai.. just like the end here.. My Love My Life ka end bhi thoda thoda aisa thha.. where Ridhhima was pregnant nd stuff.. to likhte waqt mere dimag mein vahi ghoom raha thha.. I need to make it different..

But overall, truly, this FF was a masterpiece...
I would rank this first compared to all your other FFs....
Keep going....
All the Best!
😊
I'm realy glad.. HONESTLY yar.. I mean kisi ne to mujhse aise end karne par sawaal poocha.. nd got a chance to put forward my POV aswell..

P.S.-Again, honest opinions... Plz dont mind! thaNX ALOT FOR THIS..


😊

Originally posted by: frnd.of.frndz

<FONT face="Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif" color=#ff0000 size=5>I hope I'm able to explain my part well..</FONT>

If u really didnt want to continue it, its good that u put an end to it...
But about Ahana getting jealous, it is obvious....
I mean any 6 year old would get jealous in normal situations also...But here, it wasnt a normal situation...
Ahana lived 4 years of her life without her mother...
You can show a kid very understanding but an insecurity comes under any circumstance...
And she is just jealous about the fact that her sibling never had to wait for her mother and she had to...
And at some point of time, she will ask on a serious note about why her mother left her when she was born...
And, if Rahul and RIdhima had an argument, big deal, all friends have arguments...
Thay all blamed Armaan because they thought he left Ridhima. rite?
So they were there with her during her time of pain...
I still do not agree with that point...
And when it came to Shashank, well, if he dies, you could show something related to his property like he gave all his property to Ahana in order to try and rectify his mistake...
I mean these are only suggestions..
BUT BREAKING NEWS...
THE STORY IS OVER!!!! 😛

Anyways, I appreciate ur hardwork! 👏

Congrats Rucha on completion of another successful FF.
It was great reading this ff 😊 though i have been a silent reader for most of the time.

But couldnt stop myself from sending my words ur way on the completion of this ff .

I think My wish come true might be ending soon, so its time for another FF .

We will be waiting for another ff .

Thanks for this ff .

Lots of love to this writing.
Kehan