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here's the next part....sorry for the mistakes.....plzz comment.....critisisms welcomed!!!
Part-6
mayank made nupur sit on the sofa and sat beside her!!
M: nupur apni aankh band karo...
N: kyun??
M: karo na plz....surprise hai!!
N: acchha theek hai...
she closed her eyes......mayank fished his pocket for the payal.....but then nupur slightly opened her one eye( in a winking position)....to see what he was doing.....mayank looked up towards her and saw her opening her eyes.....made a face....
M: nupur!! aakhein band rakho!!!
N: mayank wait nahi ho raha aise hi dikha do na....jab mere liye hi hai to phir chhupa kyun rahe ho???
M: nahi...and he raised his hand a little and kept it on her eyes and sweeped it down her face....
M: bas do min.....acchha ab apna pair upar laao...
N: kyun?? pair dabaane waale ho kya???....and giggled...
mayank gave a "shut up" look
N: par mayank....kya karne waale ho??
M: shhhhhh!
nupur brought her legs up and stretched them in front of mayank....folding them from the knees(not crossing the legs).....and sat quietly.....
mayank gently picked up her one foot and slightly feathered his fingers under her foot( talwe pe)....tickling it......
nupur started getting butterflies in her tummy....she laughed and tries to shake her foot off from mayank's hand.....but in vain.....
then mayank slightly pushed up the bottom of her chudidaar to expose her ankle....brought out one of the payals and tied it around it......nupur knowing what he was doing opened her eyes to look at a very beautiful, heavily designed, antique payal round her ankles.....
tears of joy rolled down her cheeks.....she looked up at mayank who was lovingly staring at her to catch her reaction.....
nupur was so spellbound to see the payal that she could hardly speak....but then she spoke stammeringly with a lump in her throat....
N: ma...ma...mayank ye...!!!!????....m...m....mere liye???
M: kaisi hai????
N: bohot sundar hai....par mayank tumne mere liye itana mehenga gift kyun liya???
M: tumhare liye nah ito kya tumhare uday bhaiya ke liye leta???.....(they both giggled)......waise bhi maine kharida nahi hai...maa ne diya hai tumhare liye....khaandaani hai....
N: par...
M: shhhhh!! koi parr warr nahi....
nupur suddenly hugged mayank tightly....and said-
N: thank u so much.....i love u....
M: thank u kis baat ka maine to bas tumhe tumhari hi cheez di hai....
they broke apart.....mayank still holding her by her shoulder.....
M: i love u too!!!....more than u!!
mayank then cupped her face and came closer n closer to her....till he was a centimeter away from her lips.....nupur blushing hardly....suddenly she leaned back and stood up.....was about to run away....when mayank held her hand from behind to stop her........
he got up and pulled her towards himself....and this time he desperately went closer to her lips to kiss......nupur gave up and closed her eyes....she was scarlet red.....blushing hardly.....
he was just about to touch her lips when suddenly nupur's phone buzzed!!!!!
they broke apart.....both were red....nupur red b'coz of blushing and mayank red out of anger......
M: kya timing hai!!!!.....kis mahashaye ka phone hai???
N: uday bhaiya ka hai....!!!!
nupur ran off with the phone to the other corner of the room to avoid eye contact with mayank....
M(angrily to himself): agar ye uday ka bachcha nupur ka bhai nahi hota, to iske daant tod ke haath mein de deta!!!!!
then her turned round and went furiously towards nupur......
(note: plz read " who said to whom carefully" ...coz there's a confusion scene)
N 2 U: hello...hi uday bahiya....kaise hain aap??
U( munching an apple) 2 N: main acchha hoon behena tum batao kaisi ho??
mayank came near nupur and held her from the waist from behind.....
N 2 M: badmash...
U 2 N: badmash!! wo mujhe pata hai ki tum badmash ho...apna haal batao??
N 2 U: nahi nahi uday bhaiya wo to main....
mayank winked at nupur...
N 2 U: mera matlab main theek hoon....kaise phone kiya??
by this time mayank had started playing with her hair....
U 2 N: aise hi...busy thi kya???
M 2 N(whispering in her ears): kya hua uski tabiyat kharaab hai kya...(he asked with a sparkle of happiness in his eyes)...
N 2 M: nahi....
U 2 N: busy nahi thi....gr888....chalo is baar maine tumhe disturb nahi kya...
nupur hit her head with her palm....with a " oh no!!" look....
U 2 N: to kya tum mujhe miss kar rahi thi??
mayank started rubbing his nose against her hair....holding her as before.....and was lost in the aroma....
M 2 N( teasingly): tumhe mujhse zyada apne uday bhaiya ki fikar hai...
N 2 M: nahi nahi...aisa bilkul nahi hai...
U 2 N(deeply hurt) : kya???....tumhe meri yaad nahi aati??....main kuch din tumse door kya gaya tum to mujhe bhool hi gayi....
Nupur highly confused.....with an irritated look...
N 2 U: nahi nahi uday bhaiya aapse nahi keh(then realizing that she was about to tell that she was alone with mayank)...matlab mujhe aapki bohot yaad aa rahi hai...itani aa rahi hai mann kar raha hai ki daud ke aapke paas aa jaoon...
Mayank not liking it at all....
M 2 N: khabar daar jo tumne aisa karne ki socha bhi....
N 2 M: main aisa kuch nahi karoongi...par bolna padta hai...
U 2 N: nahi nupur...ab tumne bol diya hai...ab to tumhe yahan aan hi padega....
N 2 U: kya???? par kyun???
U 2 N: wo kya hai na taauji (nupur's dad)...ne kaha tha ki tumhe yahan bula lein....kuch kaam hai....
mayank was wondering what were they talking about....but was continously playing with her.....
N 2 M: kya kar rahe ho...
uday stopped munching.....
U 2 N: kya?? apple kaa raha hoon....mujhe bhook lag rahi thi....
N 2 U: nahi nahi....kuch nahi....haan haan theek hai....
U 2 N: matlab aa rahi ho na...
N 2 U: haan....aa rahi hoon....
Mayank was shocked to hear this.....was very angry....
nupur disconnected...and turned to face mayank....with an irritated look....
M: maine kaha tha na ki jaane ki sochna bhi mat!!
N: mai kahan jana chahti thi.....par bauji ne bulaya hai...jaaana to padega hi.....sorry...
Mayank made a puppy like face....but then cheered up again...and said...
M: koi baat nahi.....jaldi aa jaana...par tab tak ke liye adhoora kaam to pura kar lein....
and a naughty smile started playing on his lips....
Nupur realized that he was talking bout the kiss!!
she gasped and then showed a thumbs down....and started runing away from him....saying....
N: abhi nahi...bhool jaao!!!
mayank chased her.....caught her but then tripped and fell down.....nupur below him...and he on the top!!!!
i hope it wasn't very cheesy...or boring.....tried desperately to create a telephone convo....hope u all liked the update.....plzzz do comment......
Part-7...Pg-18
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