Adolescence of Love - Chap15/Pg136 (11/29) - Page 34

Hey NJ!!!!

Had quite a fun weekend that extended itself to Tuesday afternoon! Finally back and having read the part and penned down my comment read your pm for the new update! Eessh! I actually considered reading the 7^th and commenting together but ah well…. since I had already written my comment, have posted it anyways! :D Sadly I don't think I'll be commenting timely for most of my fav fan fics till at least diwali; I am sure you know it's the most socially hectic time of the year in India :)

And…. Back to the update before I start on about the inevitably hectic time in the coming week,

I actually smiled knowingly after reading that bit on LB and LW. I could see the parallel you had drawn and the reason for it coming up from Ridhima. The dream and the whole chain of Ridhima's thoughts the only predictable thing in the entire update and that too after having read the script bit, otherwise not surprisingly you remain a pro at springing surprises! :)

Anjali being miffed, understandably so but again it isn't as if we intentionally exclude our friends from personal matters, its just a natural occurrence where the others tend to get hurt at being the last to know! :)

Boys will be boys will be boys…! That's the first that crossed my mind after reading the interaction between AAN. And actually so will girls! :) Niki surely is miffed about Abhi's apparent interest in Ridz :D

The Ridz car scene reminded me of my visit to IIT Kharagpur last year where my friend and I were stared at as if we were aliens by virtue of us being girls! It was an experience in itself especially after DU, my college being co-ed! I mean even if we stopped a guy to ask directions we'd see him pass smug looks to his friends! * rolls eyes*

Ridz reaction to Sumit's sudden appearance was quite cute! Impulsively cooking up a false story – natural and something we don't think of, as I said its just impulsive! But Sumit huh, I wonder where this is heading… Why the constant appearance of him in AR related scenes? Like Ridz I sincerely hope Armaan gets to know of her coming! :)

I absolutely loved your portrayal of Armaan's reaction to losing the match. To him as a guy it was difficult to admit that a part of him had believed that she would turn up. Her coming might not have made him jump up with joy if you know what I mean its more her absence that distracted him. And it doesn't really help when you are trying to escape the obvious and your friends come up and state the truth blatantly! :)

Gr8 part! You really had me surprised with Ridz return from the gates. A pleasant change from the obvious yes or no! In a way I am glad that I have the 7^th part ready for me to feast my eyes on!😉

Sigh! Have finally commented! :) I hope I am able to review the 7^th before the 8 arrives! Will get down to reading it in a while :)

Thanks for the patience hun!

Love

Smriti

reserved..n ths tym i m gna comment..

res.

hey nj

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Wow nj!! Almost all dat i wanted 2 c happen , did actually happen in this part! How did u do it?? Legillimency eh?? :P

I wanted 2 c how niks & abhi'll b lyk after all dat fiasco...

U made them go for coffee :)

I wanted ridz 2 atleast feel how wrong she had(unknowingly)done with poor armaan smhow....

U made her wait for him for more than n hour than apologize followed by their cute chat!!

How anjy'll 4giv the others....

U made them get her 2 wat she loves...art exhibition

I wanted 2 c how atul & anjy's meeting will b lyk....

U made it out 2 b the best!

I wanted 2 know wat arman's reaction will b lyk after he comes 2 know dat ridz did come & leave her bestwishes...

U made him run out 2 his room & lock it up(uff my heart thudded painfully at this cz this wz such a true& beautiful scene as realization struck armaan hayeelaaa)!!

No doubt this wz ur longest update & had alot of cute& funny stuff wich i highly enjoyed! Ridz going 2 da same spot again n again 2 get a chance 2 meet armi, bumping in2 dat boy & thinking dat arman wud b as naughty & adorable, text msgz from frndz, ridz recognizing armi's laugh & getting all hyped wen its confirmd, ridz waiting & arman finaly turning up, their arguement on the gender of da bug!(sheesh), abhi niki's silly banter on wether or not he's n artist, atul's impression on anjy(i loved it more than anything...& his brush name DIEU wz kind of thoughtful), friends late nyt hangout with pizza, taunting eachother silly, atul blushing, abhi eating last piece& finally arman shokd out of his wits by sumits revelation!! it wz all just AWSOME!! Big BIG round of aplause for u girl! U really know how 2 bring out true emotions in ur fics. This part z my fav REALLY! unt tha yaaar! the extent 2 wich u describe each scene & emotion is lyk vr actually ryt there seeing it all through n thru.

too good naseem :) well done :)

dying 2 know wat happens next!!

very hapy& satisfied,

Alia

PS: dntwory no reservations for a month atleast owing2 my fractured foot :P & my only refuge being books& laptop...cya!

oye yar tune update bi kar diya
wah wah!

reserved and hoping to be back very soon (for real)

muah!

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didi ? hahahahahaha
nautanki hai sachi me tu

oh Henry the VIII cracked me up,tell u why soon
or rather hear it from Hiba :D


lovya

re-edit :

i love you!

ha haan tune thik suna
man i heard so much abt the update before reading it
nij took forever commenting (which made me wonder ) then bp was talking of it over the call
and i had the page on my screen for almost three nights :) finally yes i got to read and i'm so very glad i did tonite ,just when i needed it!
i know my reserved on the other parts are long due but since i'm here at part 7 (thanx for making it special btw ,i love u more fot this ,muah! ) i might as well give u my much delayed views

the update yar nj was super fantab
i could see it all and the best char was Atul the AA bit was awesome,u've made them so interesting and lovable ...
Nikki Abhi was another delight,a fresh approach to the wasted couple ,i've started to like them too :)
AR were undoubtedly the best ,the mall part ,i cud see Armaan in that kid before u mentioned later
her impatience i enjoyed lots
her wait outside the gates ,the bug bit i loved :D
and the guys at last :) :) :) their scenes r so much fun ( did u watch wake up sid then?)

loved it lots nj
had to ...

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c u on the chat ... kabi to soon,kal kidar disappear ho gayi thi yar?
ping me jabi bi
muah!

Hey nj..loved the part..freaking long bt awesome!

reserved :)

Go check and give me a fake "faint act" over it! 😆

edited my comment on page 44 :D cheers!!