Pablo's Muse [I] -AR- Pt. 25/Pg 143 May 9, 11

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belle_moi

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1081

That was simply awesome! Believe me, it was so good Ariya... That was lovely and so is your story and the style of your writing and everything. Man, it leaves me breathless. Thanks for updating...

Love.

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Sookie

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1082

Originally posted by: spln

WOOT A, I knew I could count on someone, unlike someone else *sniff*

Btw, it wasn't a pure reserve, I did say some quick things - and I'm going to do the quoting tonight... pinky! 😃

Night passes on treading and drudging through the darkness
Her raspy voice echos at the witching hour
First ray of sunshine falls on her eyelashes, singing lullaby
and NJ ignores her proclamation on Pablo's Muse

😆 😆 😆

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@spln

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1083

^^ A's night is still around (all dark hours constitute 'night' no matter the 12AM rule).

I was talking in context

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Edited by spln - 14 years ago

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@-Aria-

Dazzler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1084

why

Originally posted by: -Sookie-
*Ctrl C*

I have discovered that each part can be read between two bites of my lunch and I eat very fast. So I think I can read two parts during lunch tomorrow. 😆 😆

The above part doesn't really exist.😛 *Ctrl C*

I think you need to create at least a dozen IDs on this forum and hit "Like" button for my comments. 😆

No comments😆 *Ctrl C*

Reserved for tomorrow. - X and XI.

~ Part X ~

What's this? The last part when Armaan paints was explaining your siggy :😆 I liked the bit where he imagines Riddhima to be there in that aspect of life which he admires and the one which runs on pure instinct. Its hard to accept someone this easily into our most deepest instinct driven act, no? But the casuality in which he explains how he sees her, its almost mind blowing.

Honestly, I skipped the entire part where Armaan takes his sketch book back from her. (He does right??) I honestly did not expect it and it kind of deviated from the pace and the mood I was in which you had initially set in. I was anticipating something else - a little brooding or a little emotional but definitely not what you have written.
Atul is one smart cookie. The first guy to figure out that something is missing or is present between Armaan and Riddhima.

PS: I am still not convinced about hug being cure for nightmare. Let's see if it cures Riddhima's apparent failure at work too 😆

Alrity! so I thought about going back and re-reading part X to figure out what exactly you were talking about up there but took the sensible decision ;) Do you blame me? <lol> Yes , yes it was basically the siggy or shall we say, a frozen moment from the so called "salsa" dance between the pearly-eyed doc and his Riddhima (see how much of a freak I am :D) *Ctrl C* you know...may be I should re-read it !! We need to chat about this.

I am not really that surprised you skipped that part, what surprised me more is that you actually read this and commented!! And given what you told me the other day... okay coming back to this, umm...brooding... or a little emotional? vs cheesy, 😆 really!? not to hard a choice to make given this was still early days, now I can't revert to cheesy so quicky at this point in the story..sigh! what was it...since its all darkness yet... :P *Ctrl C*

Work!? I guess she hasn't had any major issues after that point so may be...yeah! *Ctrl C*

~ Part XI ~

I liked this part. A lot. Because there was more of talking and less of description. I am not sure what I have to make out of it yet. Because the chapter is incomplete and I have a record of stating and reading things totally wrong. (Actually that's one of the reasons why I don't read drama's which are work in progress. I totally don't get the subtle hints and stuff. But thrillers are whole different things...)

Is Armaan reading a little too much into Riddhima's actions? He was a stranger before so its possible that she wasn't as curious as she was now. He knows that she is attracted to him and that automatically makes her more interested in know about him.
But the whole conversation was extremely good. I could picture them driving (btw, why didn't Armaan drive? I get a vibe that he is lying...)
My favorite part in this - him influencing her decision by squeezing her hand. Totally amazing ⭐️

S

You really hate all the description don't you!? I don't blame you, I can't read too much of that either but...this the part where he takes her to Pablo's Muse for the first time, I'm guessing...and yes! you he is totally lying about his car thing, nothing's wrong with his car ;) I wouldn't say he is reading too much into Riddhima's actions...but then again doesnt that happen occasionally and since he is attracted to her as well...kind of makes sense... Did you ever get around to reading the next part?? It would be awesome to read what you make of that one...My response may seem a little distracted but blame that on this delay! Thanks a lot Sooks :)*Ctrl C*

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Sookie

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1085

Originally posted by: spln
^^ A's night is still around (all dark hours constitute 'night' no matter the 12AM rule).

I was talking in context

😆

**to be edited**

Days go by and her absence ricochet on empty reserves
juxtapose of day and night, her mind interchangeable with a fauvist.

Come out, come out wherever you are;
Pablo's muse (and me) misses your soliloquy.

S

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@spln

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1086

Dear A,
You need to get your super star stalker off my case. You know who she is, as does she, as does half the world on this thread by now, I reckon - bad bad bad for my rep! :|

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Aite - so I'm laughing now cause I didn't make it to the ICU, when my HD gave me minor attack day before - which is the real reason for my delay.

Here I am now, with my selects - an you know, the not so brief nothings 😆

He had hoped his first big painting exhibition would be a happy event, not a dark moonless night like this one, forlorn and dejected, like stray autumn leaves discarded, discolored and slowly disfigured too.

So I don't just like the metaphorical sense of this thread - which of course is pretty neat by itself - but I also like the general mood around this part. He's into a double let down case at the point. Her, and his exhibit - two things that give him a sugar hit kind of high, are about the only ones that could make him so utterly, defeatedly gloomy. One, for being a let down. Two, for consequently falling flat in the face of al its preceding anticipation. The moment is so real - the absolute lack of control in one snap of a moment where one accepts a spade for a spade. Somewhere in the dialog above this he asks her if she admits they have issues - and I suppose partly rhetorical or not, her answer to it is the shift. Even if she attempts to bear the greater blame - cause he's not really concerned with the blame game at this point. So anyway - I like this section, especially those lines.

But his patience was wearing thin giving away to a frustration at being shunted, the feeling of not being trusted – he was beginning to feel like this relationship thing wasn't his calling. May be he had been knocking on the wrong door, or just had too much faith in what he thought they shared? Simply put, he didn't know what else he could do, to make things differently.

And here comes the ultimate self confession. Put anywhere else, such a loud self claim of defeat might have been more than a little whimsical and over reacting - but this was just the place. For a while now, they've swayed to and fro - between high and low with much intent to hold firm and let the rough pass. But its evident how the 'hot and cold' as you used somewhere before, of her character isn't easily comprehensible. He's having a hard time dealing with the 'break thing', then the comm gap, then she keeps pulling off surprising obliging/cooperating moments - clearly, she doesn't leave room to let the man understand their situation in a monochrome - but then, it really isn't a monochrome =)
I think this was one of the few parts where I was more on Armaan's side. Not to disagree with Ridhima, or not get her point - but he's getting it harder, without wanting to. She on the other hand is at least partially responsible for self imposing the crisis. Running away is classic Ridz. Every now and then!

Noticing the hesitancy in her eyes, the caution in her steps - he stepped forward to break that awkwardness; she had taken the first step, and he respected that immensely, he wasn't going to turn vile and make her feel bad at the least.

Oh I love this bit. Mostly because of how unorthodox it is. He's not playing the alpha male ere - cause he's to beat up for that just then - and he's not just retreating into a shell. Cause one second of the latter at such a point would have made alot more mess than where the situation stands. It's what I heard at a very young age - about how, in a fight between two, one must keep their head... I'm not taking away Ridhima's credit to make the effort. But she does it from the subconscious fear of losing him. Bluntly, that is it, what brings her there - she might have still kept the diner appointment if for a moment she was assured Armaan would come around, or she'd make him later - but I reckon Armaan's admittance of self defeat has been reflected enough for her to know salvaging needs to be promptly done. And yet, Armaan takes the scoop. Cause Ridhima was not the one making self confessions of doubting what they have in the way he is. His giving a chance, still, is different, to me.

"Listen to me…Riddhima, please look at me. I would never want you to do something you don't want to do, please go home if that's where you need to be now. No one deserves pity"

And again - no alpha male to the rescue. I like like like this Armaan - who's not trying to save the day, wants to, but doesn't strive to be a super hero. He's in that phase where he needs her t do her bit too, with him, so they both figure this out - and yet, he needs her to do it, because she needs its as much. I think Armaan got as real as it gets in this chapter. More than any of the previous parts. He wasn't the namesake lead protagonist who inspires this character - he was just another person, who happens to be at the center of this story =)

I'm not going to go into quoting the bits where she arranges the paintings - and where he realizes the pattern - they were the high points of the chapter. For all the multiple meanings they implied. Their moods, their introspection, his mindset as an artist even... it's not hard to see the guy he is going by those sections - even if there was nothing else to go by. Just like anyone else - a blend of many facets, made by many experiences. Which reminds me, I sort of miss their first meeting - the plane crash and all that. Somewhere to me, this end of Pablo's and that, are not one - maybe they have come round in a full circle yet, or maybe, I haven't found a closure to just that chapter in their story. It's like another story you were telling another time, and left incomplete... which makes me wonder how you plan to tie the threads around here..

Aite - that's really long now. But the chapter was a great read. I was happy to find I didn't have to go back to refresh my facts and actually remembered things vividly enough ...
Wil you be posting anytime soon? Or is it IoL next, first?

cheers,
NJ

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-Aarya-

@-Aarya-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1087

Originally posted by: esquisse

Edited by night13 - 14 years ago

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ahenseven

@ahenseven

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1088

Hey !! .. I really really loved your update .. Thanks a lot for coming back to writing this .. I took so long cause I actually re- read the entire fic .. Sorry I just don't don't have the time to leave a longer comment .. In short you really write well and I love your fic .. Eagerly waiting for your next update .. Take care and loads of love neha :)

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Sonia

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Posted: 14 years ago

#1089

hey Aria!

I hope you still remember me, it wasnt long ago that i was bugging you to update! hehe. anyways so it has been a few days now, n i am running out or control over my craving for an update, so what are the chances? when are you hitting us with an update again?

till then, take care

cheers

sonia