Manzil (AR FF) Discontinued! - Page 53

Originally posted by: arluver15

simmi
if one is cute for you then here are some more............i hope that this leds you to updat sooner...............

i am glad that at less you have started on the next part................

i hope you update soon

lods of love
nruti

Originally posted by: prettyasjen

OMG that was beautiful! Armaan has obviously fell in love with her, but isn't aware of it, whereas Riddhima is aware of her feelings n is scared to lose him, yet she can't keep herself away from him!
Really you think Armaan is in love😆 well he might be or might not be but, yea Riddhima is in love😃
Awwww.... dying to read the next part!
Please update soon... I know im being a little selfish, u've only just updated, but yaar... its ur fault, u write too well!😉

thanks, next part will be up tomorrow😳

Originally posted by: Suvarna....

Hey Simran, first of all, thanks a bunch for the update. Yep, loved the part for its romance rather than the association, as Armaan termed it.

You are welcome! Yea I see a lot of people liked the romance, thank god for me

Glad that Riddhima has accepted her feelings for Armaan. But feel bad for her coz she is all prepared to let go of him :(

Yes Riddhima has accepted but Armaan is no where near such a big step

Kahani mein twist??? Who is this gal affecting Armaan so much to actually make him cry and get drunk? Well, glad though that Riddhima supported him and both have got over the initial need with which they got started. Its now deeper and hopefully will turn stronger as well.

Hehe..everyone is curious about this "girl" we all have skeletons in our closet, Armaan did too. In part 13 I have cleared the confusion about the girl

Please keep updating this fic. Thanks again!!!

No, no Thank you!!

Originally posted by: bloodline

this one has to be THE BEST part till date...it was so good...like i hae no words to describe the beauty and simplicity of this part...continue soon...and this time, dont take so much time in updating! update really really really soon! =)

Thank you that is a huge compliment since I was so worried. Everyone was so used to the x-rated parts that I was a bit hesitant about this one.

Originally posted by: spln

n yes, im done reading this one too now! phew! some gap that was, i didnt go back to read nothing assuming id recall stuff, and amazed i was that i did remember most things needed! and yeh,i ditto u sim, the subtle romance bit really did it! - wonder who this she is, possibly someone who turned him to the playboy he is? oh well, we'll wait and watch ...
good that you remembered Nj and glad that you enjoyed the part. As for the mystery girl well she is revealed in the next part.
so erm, u didnt say and i have to ask, how quick can we expect parts on this one?

*cough cough* what was that 3 months or 4?

cheers,
nj

Originally posted by: seert

Hey Simran,
This is such a good fan fiction. I'm a little surprised at the title though, but are Armaan and Ridhhima supposed to be each other manzils that they have been unknowingly trying to reach all their life (based on their tumultuous pasts )?
Anyhoo, both the characters are quite different from the actual show. I mean I don't think the DMG Ridhhima would ever take such a decision in her life.
Really looking forward to the next updates, and I'm so glad that I read it today....lol got to read alot of parts all at once

Seert, the title well how do I explain it, it's basically 2 people involved in a relationship that basically has no destination hence, manzil. Ah, the DMG Riddhima is eons away from this Riddhima.

Originally posted by: one_ashi

Wow I had completely lost hope of you ever continuing this! I had read this a little while ago and loved it and i still do! It was great reading the previous parts again and the latest chapter seems to have brought another opening into ar's relationship which is always good to see. Please do contiinue soon! and thanks for continuing this!! :)

Yikes, lost all hope?? But, am glad you came back and hopefully will continue coming back.

Originally posted by: sweet_mittal

hey dear finally u r back with long part

love the whole part and AR conversation and love

i wonder who is she and what armaan is talking about

i hope he don't leave ridz other poor ridz has nothing to live for

pleaseeeeeeeeeee continue soon with more romantic parts

love ya

mittal

continue very soon we all r waiting from ages

Mittal thanks for the lovely comments. The "she" is revealed in the next part so, no more guessing.

Originally posted by: repercussion

Hey....i had been following ur ff for quite a while nw...bck in the day i chose to stay silent but u really deserve some laudablecomments lol! u , as a writer have tremendous scope fr making it big....no blarney...the subtle veracities and circumstantial descriptions u make leave me in awe! it's gr8 to c u bck ....nw dat all hopes of an AR reunoin have been mercilessly crushed....we understand the fact that all writers, including u, have a life other than IF and possess the right to take a break once a while, so i guess u don't have to apologize for ur dissapearnce rather try giving us updates at ur ease....u don't have to meet deadlines nd rush through things...just write when it feels right....u don't have to expiate fr the sin of abandomning ur extremely awesome ff (nw nw, i have learned just one lil wrd throughout my residency on the planet sardonic lol), anywys jokes apart keep writing....wud u pls consider including me in ur pm list...i promise nt to commit any delinquencies anymore....hope to hear soon frm u....have a nice day!

I must say your comment was indeed very humbling. Honestly, I don't think I am anywhere near a "good writer" but, it is something I enjoy nonetheless. I also wanted to thank you for coming out of hiding and leaving me with such a heart rendering comment and also a big thanks for understanding my predicament of not updating on a timely basis. I am not only a FF writer but, a reader as well and can understand the frustration readers go through when writers don't post on time but, life can have many twists and turns sometimes. Thank you for reading and commenting and I hope you will continue with the latter.

Originally posted by: missypatel

Simzzzz!!!! I read the part even before "hush hush" :D ...and oooh i agree with yah! me likey the romance....and the edge u give them along with that...!! I've forgotten who i liked more in this one...but reading this one...i say armaan...! he wants her..doesnt want to hurt her...cares for her and hence wants to stay away ...hes still got a organ that beats for some1 other that that "her" he mentioned!

Look fwd to more...muahh sim!

~nij

Awwww Niju!! So good to see you. Personally even I like Armaan in this so am glad that at least I have you on my side. As for the her, she is made known in the next installment!!

Originally posted by: Tahmina96

hey Simran that was a long and much awaited update!

Yes I agree this part was looooong over due and so is the next one J

the part was fantastic! i can see the development of AR. poor Ridz she is so scared of falling for Armaan bcoz she doesnt want to be hurt wen she loses him wich hopefully she wont..... Armaan cnt seem to stay away frm Ridhima even after he reminded himself and her of the 'rules', he starting to fall for her but im sure it wil tke him time to realise that

I am glad you enjoyed this part, it was a personal favorite. The slow progression of their relationship was a welcoming change.

anywayz thank u soo much for the long update after a long time and tnx for the pm - im addin u as my buddy so nxt time it wud be easier for u to pm me so plz accept

Yaar I don't do PMs but, if you this FF floating around do check it out!

update soon

Tahmina

Originally posted by: prettyasjen

OMG just read ur latest update again, I luv the ending! It's so adorable n cute, yet romantic! Loved it... can't wait for the morning when he relised he stays the whole night cuddling her! Hoping for some romance blossoming between them =)
Again? It's ok I do that too with some FFs. Glad you were able to read and enjoy this part again.
Update soon yaar!
Please pm me when u update!

I apologize because I don't PM but I hope you are able to spot this FF here and there and leave a comment.
x

Originally posted by: Laila.N

WOW ! A part worthing the wait.
I simply loved it ! It was the best part so far. Like you said the romance was more present than the lust here.
AR were just so cuuuuuute ! You're doing a great job with this fanfic' and especially with this part. Please do continue as you're doing it very well.
Aww thank you, I loved writing this part too and because I was having such a good time writing it, it turned out to be the longest part till date. Well at least something good came out of it.
I'm looking forward to the next part to see the development between AR and who is this so called woman Armaan was talking about. Many ideas came to my mind but I think I'll just keep waiting to know the answer
the woman mystery is solved in the next part and I have only kept you guessing for what 3-4 months hehehe, sorry is a small word.
Thanks for writting. And if you're doing it, please pm me for the next part.
will update the next part tomorrow.
Love,
Laila

Originally posted by: Robin_M

hey simran! so happy u updated this one after a long time! i was really missing it! very sweet and beautiful part! looking forward to more, continue soon!

Robin!! Did I tell you that it's always nice to see you! Yes, this part was much delayed but, I am here again. Glad you liked it though and I hope to see you again soon.

Originally posted by: ARianSamm

woww mann..i juss read dah hole fing n i mustt sayy gurll yur a wikd writer..hope yu will carry onn as it is dahh onlii fing dah gts us goinn..loll..tcc n hope to gt an update soonn..

Sam xx

Thank you so much!!

Originally posted by: angullgrl91

omgggg!! that part was really amazing!!!
and i agree with you...the subtle romance did make it awesome! ive really missed this fan fic! and i cant wait to read more!!
i think love it more than others cuz its so different...like the sleeping with the guy first then falling in love with him...so untraditional but so fun to read!! LLOL

Untraditional is correct but, hey it can happen. Life can be unpredictable at time can it not? I am glad you are enjoying this FF and thank you for commenting.

Originally posted by: gk_fan

hi just read ur ff

must say u r a superbe writer

d way u potrayed such a issue so beautifully is

really comendable

plz pm me if u pm

and plzzzzzzz..... continue sooon

cnt wait

plzzzzzzzzz.....

Thanks for the lovely comments and I am sorry because I don't PM, I hope you find this FF and read it at your leisure

Originally posted by: nikki2996

i just caught up with all the parts and i must say, amazing FF

i absolutely love it sim

please do updaate soon

and pm me when you do

Thank you for reading and commenting nikki.

Originally posted by: Nikhi...

I posted a comment on your other FF, but I'm not sure how I forgot to comment on this one!

Oh well, I'll do that now! This is truly a fantastic FF, and it's storyline is very different from most. You're simply a great writer; please update soon!

Nikhita xxx

Welcome Nikhil and I am so glad you chanced upon this FF and left me a comment. Thank you so much!

Originally posted by: Armaan-KSG

I just read your entire ff and it has left me SPEECHLESS. and i dont think ive read anything like this so far, so please doo continue soon!
and i hope Armaan soon realizes his love for riddhima, update soon :D and please pm me!

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, it means a lot to me.

"Reckless words pierce like a sword.."

- Proverbs 12:19

PART 13

He woke up around 6 am and found himself sprawled over her petite frame. He backed away immediately and felt her stir, unhappy by the sudden loss of warmth his body had provided. Realizing his blunder he moved closer and gently pulled her back in to his arms, she sighed finally finding that comfort again and nestled deeper in his chest. He should leave, was his first thought but it was still raining and there was not even a hint of light out. His body begged for more sleep while his mind scolded him for staying, he would regret this it told him but he would worry about that later, for now he just wanted to sleep, with her in his arms.

It was 10 when she awoke; surprised by the fact that she had slept for so long. He was still in a deep slumber and the last thing she wanted to do was wake him. She had quietly showered and dressed in the outside bathroom and was now standing in the kitchen watching the coffee come to a boil. She heard the shower go off and abruptly stiffened at the sound. He was using her shower, which means he would use her soap and her towel. This little gesture seemed so intimate to her. This act of him using her things made her heart flutter.

She had just placed the breakfast on the table when he stepped out. He was buttoning up his shirt when he spotted her.

"Are you leaving?"

"No" but he should

"umm would you like some breakfast, I made pancakes"

"Yea, I'd like that"

Breakfast was a quiet affair; it lasted under an hour with both simply exchanging smiles and nothing else. There were certain moments, such as the one presented before her today, which made her long for a family just to share a meal with. She never had the luck of having brothers and sisters to run around with or even a full set of parents to complete her family. A part of her always wanted and perhaps still wanted to have a loving husband and some children, yes definitely some children that would cause such a ruckus that she would never have a dull moment. It was too late for that now but, adoption was always an option.

As her eyes wandered over to him again several things ran through her mind the first being the man needed a haircut, bad. Though he looked absolutely delectable with his dripping mane it was just that they were too long. It reminded her of their first meeting at the coffee shop, his "pony tail" had inadvertently caught her attention and caused her to giggle out loud. She had gotten used to his long hair but that didn't mean she liked it.

The next thing was of course about his breakdown last night. She couldn't ask him about it though, no matter how much she wanted to, truth was she really had no right to ask. Each had no right to the others personal life and it was only fair, for she hadn't told him anything about hers. It was better this way she concluded, the less they knew about the other the better.

"What?" he asked finally annoyed of her staring. He knew the question that roamed in her mind and it was not the question itself that he dreaded, it was the answer. It was suddenly like that night again; a part of him didn't want to leave while the other was screaming at him to run.

"you need a haircut" there I said it

"excuse me?"

"I said you need a haircut, bad"

"I just had one two days ago" he defended mortified of her comment

"well, either your hair grow at the speed of light or your stylist missed a spot"

"she did not"

"hmm, your right she didn't miss a spot, she missed your whole head, I can call my stylist and see if he can squeeze you in today, he's really good"

"Wait, firstly my hair are my biggest asset, chicks dig my look so there is no way I am letting you chop them off and secondly where the hell did my hair come in to the picture anyway?"

"Firstly, the ponytail looks bad, it reminds me of Amitabh Bachchan from Cheeni Kum and secondly I have been thinking about your hair for a while now"

He sat agape dwelling over her comment about AB in Cheeni Kum, did it look that bad? And of all the things about me this woman thinks of my hair?

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"I hate you for this!" he retorted sitting in the chair ready to be worked on

"Trust me when we walk out of here, you are going to love me for this" After an hour of bickering back and forth she had finally coerced him into going to the salon. He had whined and complained like anything, she had been taken a back by his behavior, it was not everyday that the great Armaan Mallik acts like a child.

"I hate this, it looks so, so bad" he screamed looking at his reflection in the mirror. His long locks lay chopped on the floor while the stylist smiled wide, pleased with his work.

"Armaan, you look great!!"

"I look BALD!"

"you don't look bald, look at all that hair, James I still think you should've gone shorter"

"No way!" yanking the cape from his neck he ran for the door before Riddhima or James could lay another finger on him.

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"Armaan where have you..? Your hair? Where did it go?" Padma inquired the minute she opened the door to his solemn expression

"I cut them" he mumbled passing by her

"Armaan, your home, I am so happy to see you"

"Slow down Big D, why do you always have to run? You're not in a marathon you know"

"Armaan, did you drop something?"

"No" he checked and double checked his pockets and didn't remember carrying anything in his hands

"then what happened to your pony tail?"

"HA! HA! HA!"

"We're only kidding Armaan, you look great, we have always wanted you to chop that terrible thing off, but what made you decide to finally have it cut?"

"Uh, just thought I needed a change, change is good you know"

"yes, change is good" Padma replied amused as she watched him run to his room.

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The hotel work was mostly complete and in another week the hotel would have its grand opening. She was happy and looking forward to it but, it also meant that they wouldn't be working together anymore. She recounted the past six months with a smile on her face; so much had changed, for the good of course. She almost felt like a completely different person. Yes, she mulled it had been a great transformation. Love, it seemed can do that to a person. There was no point in denying that she was in love with the man. The arrogant, ruthless and rude Armaan Mallik had swept her off her feet. However, she would have to keep this to herself; her smile faltered remembering their deal, the six months would be up next week and after that she would probably never see him again or rather he would never want to see her. Didn't he do that with all his woman?

He rinsed his face rigorously with chilling water to wash away the dream he had just a moment ago. It was not a dream he told him self, it was a nightmare. He had fallen asleep in an attempt to help his hangover but, what he had got instead was even a bigger headache. He was dreaming about her now. The woman had slipped in to his dreams so effortlessly that it petrified him; he had woken up in cold sweat, panting. While wiping his face he stared at his reflection, who was this man? It was not the Armaan Mallik who stood in front of this mirror six months ago, no, it was not. The old Armaan Mallik was callous and fearless and this Armaan Mallik, the one staring back at him wide eyed was scared and he was beginning to care, for her. He wouldn't be able to relax at home; he would feel better only at the office he told himself as he threw the towel away in anger.

Ignoring his mother's and grandmother's pleas to stay at home he had come to the office seeking peace and solitude however, even here he found little comfort. Her scent it seemed had nearly engulfed his office and it was driving him mad, the woman was driving him mad, he bellowed. He would have to watch himself, she was getting under his skin, no woman and I mean no woman had ever been able to affect him the way she was affecting. She was becoming more like a drug and addiction was never a good thing. One more week and then it would all be over. He jerked remembering that the hotel would be open to public in another week, which meant they would not be working with each other any more and he would not see her on a daily basis. It irked him this thought of not having her around but, he dismissed it quickly.

*TRING TRING*

Who the hell was calling his office line on the weekend? Looks like the whole Mumbai knows that I work on the weekend. With another annoyed expression he barked in to the phone.

"Hello?"

"Armaan? Armaan Mallik is that you?"

It was her again, he knew that voice from anywhere. "Did I not make myself clear when I told you to stay away from me?"

"Armaan please listen to me" the lady pleaded on the other end

"No, you listen to me. Do not ever and I mean ever try to contact me again you here!" he was about the put the receiver down when she begged him to hear her through

"I promise I would not take too much of your time but, I really wanted to meet you. I promise the meeting would be very brief and after that you will never see me or hear from me again. Please just one meeting"

"Fine, I am at my office as you are already aware. Meet me here in 30 minutes"

The lady arrived right on time. She looked nervous and remorseful but, he wasn't going to let her rued expression get to him.

"I, don't know where to start and what to say.."

"Then you should leave"

"Armaan, I am sorry" he looked straight in to her eyes, the woman his father had left them for and could tell her apology was not a sham. "I have been wanting to apologies to you and your family.."

"NO! You must never go near my family. Leave my mother and grandmother alone"

"Yes, I promise I will. That's why I came to you. I.." she paused hesitant to continue, afraid of the young man who was old enough to be her son and looked exactly like his father; the man she loved. "For years, I have tried and tried to repent my mistake. There were times when I would spot your mom and all I wanted to do was run up to her and beg for her forgiveness and I just couldn't do it."

"Then why are you here now?" his voice was cold, so very cold

"Because I couldn't live with my self, my conscience is gnawing at me everyday. I loved your father Armaan"

"Please just stop" he looked away disgusted

"But, I never told him to leave his family. I was just happy knowing that he loved me too. That night of his accident I had begged him to work things out with his wife but, he just didn't listen and then he died." She fell quiet then and let the tears roll.

"are you done?"

"Yes, yes I am but, before I go, I wanted to return this. I can't keep this with me any longer, it was never mine to begin with." She laid a ring on his desk which Armaan immediately recognized as his mother's. It was an heirloom passed on to her by his grandmother so, that's where it went he mused. His mother and grandmother had turned the house upside down looking for it when it didn't turn up in the bank locker. Now he knew why. "Thank you for setting me free Armaan and I am sorry for the pain I have caused." Giving him a grateful smile she gently shut the door behind her.

He leaned back in his chair and eyed the ring with venom, cursing his father for the umpteenth time in his life.

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She had called him 5 times already and had left 3 voicemails but, the man had yet to respond. Since they only had a week left she wanted to spend as much time with him as possible but, it seemed that he was already getting bored of her. She was about to try again when she heard the loud bang at her door, it sounded as if something fell outside.

She contemplated opening the door at this hour, though her neighborhood was considered a safe area you could never be too certain about goons. With trembling fingers she finally unlatched the lock and an intoxicated Armaan tumbled at her feet.

"Armaan? What happened to you? Here come in side" grabbing his shoulders she all but dragged him inside. He was mumbling something she could hardly decipher and like the night before, he was crying.

"she came to repent, can you believe her Riddhima, after all these years she came to say she was sorry, like her damn sorry was going to fix anything and that man, the nerve of him to give her my mother's ring. I hate him and I hate her. She said she wanted forgiveness, well I don't forgive her and I will NEVER forgive her" he rambled on as Riddhima held him and tried to hush him which only led him to cry more fiercely now. She tightened his hold when he began to shake and sob hysterically. She didn't know what could have caused this outburst again but, she was determined now to find out.

It seemed like ages when he finally calmed down, he still held her though, his grasp on her tighter than ever. It was his small kisses on her nape that had jolted her, his lips traveled next to her jaw line and grazed it with his teeth causing her to shiver with pleasure. He stopped abruptly and stared in to her eyes with a passion she had never seen before. His eyes swollen and red bore in to hers with such depth that she felt like he could read her soul. She was about to speak when he lunged in to claim her lips.

The question she was about to ask retreated back to where it had originated, for now all she could feel and think was him. It was he who lifted her off the ground and took to her to the bedroom. Did he know that each time he touched her he awakened something new in her? She didn't know if she could ever get enough of him and that was the part that scared her. It was different this time she noted, it was more tender. There was no rush, no desperation no want, there was only yearning; a yearning to feel and devour.

As he dove in to her she felt herself slipping away like sand beneath him. His gaze; refusing to waver intensified with each plunge, it seemed as he were asking her for something, her heart went in to an aflutter just thinking of the possibilities. Could he be asking for her comfort? Her companionship? Or maybe just maybe her love?

In the hour that followed after, he lay in bed holding her. There was such a need in his embrace that to an outsider, it might have seemed that he never wanted to let her go. He didn't utter a word though, and it was the quiet that was troubling her.

It was she who broke the silence but, before anything could be said further he got up and began to dress.

"Armaan"

"I need to get going Riddhima"

"Armaan, wait, I need to talk to you"

"not today, please"

"then when? Next week is the inauguration and I am assuming that.." she didn't say that it meant the end of their 6 month contract. He was angry and she could see his jaw twitch. "Armaan, what's wrong? This is the second time this week that you have.."

"It's none of your business" he ignored her and continued dressing

"but, I am making it my business, Armaan I can't see you.."

"Just drop it Riddhima, we had an arrangement you wouldn't question my personal life and I wouldn't question yours, we had set limits and you are about to cross them"

"I know Armaan but, don't I even have a little right.."

"no, you have absolutely no right to question me" he cut her off, anger rising from the pit of his stomach and rushing straight to his head.

"Armaan?" almost in tears she stood up to reach out to him only to see him turn away.

"Stop it, I have never asked you anything about your past, your divorce and your hus.." he shut his eyes in frustration when he heard her gasp. Perhaps he had gone a bit too far.

So he knew, all this time he had known yet he still played ignorance and here he is telling her SHE had no right to question about his personal life. Disgusted by him and by herself she slumped to the ground. "I think you should leave now Armaan and I think it would be better if we don't see each other for a while"

"Yes, you are right and I think it would be better if we don't see each other ever. Good bye Riddhima."

He didn't turn back like she had so direly hoped he didn't come to her and comfort her or apologies; instead he walked away. He never even turned to look back at her and she knew then that he never would. With the image of him walking away from her etched in her mind, she finally broke down.

That was the last time she saw him.

He knew what he had done was wrong and he knew he would chastise himself for it later but, it was necessary. He had to put Riddhima in her place, the feelings he had been having for her lately had become a major cause of concern for him.

If only he would have left her past out of it then perhaps he wouldn't feel as bad. I will apologies and make it up to her he told himself, not that it was needed but, he had really hurt her. Yes, he would make it up to her, right after the inauguration of the hotel he will whisk her away and beg for her forgiveness and if possible ask for her hand in friendship. They could at least be friends after all they had shared so much in the past six months. Come to think of it she had been his longest girlfriend no he scolded himself; she was not his girlfriend, never was and never will be. She was only an alliance.

Yes, they need to spend this week apart to sort out their lives and then he would make things better. Little did he know that as he drove away from her apartment he was driving away from her life. Little did he know that the meeting they had today would be the last time he saw her.

Okie folks here's part 13. I hope I have cleared up all confusions about the lady in question from the last part. No it was not some girlfriend of Armaan's, rather it was his fathers. Not sure if most of you remember that Armaan had a pony tail which I have finally chopped off. I hope you guys will forgive me for the ending and continue reading to find out the end.

I also want to thank all of you again the PMs and messages and pleaseeeeee remember that I don't do PMs when I update.

Love you all,

Simran