Originally posted by: 090909as
ok i am done hmm yup me too..thus em givin the edit..
loved it so much here's what i loved the most: okies...hmm first lng comment from hala..me impatient to read..
1- the convo between shera and abhi wow abhi is tooo cute loved it when he said: "Aise sharmaogi, toh uss bandar ka kya haal hoga?" he said pointing towards Veer who was half hidden behind a tree? i wish had a bro. like him i have a stupid boring bro. lolllzzz..evry young sibling sounds evil n badmaash kinds..buh boring..mah sis is naughty she teases me a lot..pure samay she keeps calling me jungalli billi so tht I get irritated the reason she gives..she says i luk mre beautiful when em angry..evryone says so..n I hav a real bad temper..so it becums all mre easier..he doesn't annoy me he's soo boring!! lollzzzz.. the day he'd start annoying u u'd start praying for having the same boring bro...
2- veer's undivided attention he was letting things just come out of his mouth like when he said: Yup me too loved the way he cudn't keep his mind n tongue guarded in front of her.. "afreen" or
" Dekhiye..hum yahan sirf apke liye aye hai.."
it was soo cute... and shera's non stop blushing 😳 yh..actually it wasn't jus blushing..it was also sumtimes for embarrassment and also as she was angry..
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" Kyun..kya burai hai hum mein.." he demanded.. haan veer main kounsi burai hai? yh..abhi batati hoon..well humein bhi koi burai nahi dikhi..
" Umm? Voh burai toh batoa?..pata nahi kya?..app khood hi..dekh chalo scan yourself veer..humara matlab sungh lijiye.." ooh sorry i can't smell him.. lolllzzzzz tht's gd na..warna u wud hav fainted smelling him..
"HUH!!" He made a popat awww😳 kinda face..n then when toofan had walked away a bit, he smelled his under arms.." " Chhhhhhiii..Ewwww" he so wanted to puke tht time..gosh it was smelling too bad, ek ladki ke peeche, voh bhi aise.." n he made an utterly disgusted face. madhu i am in splits!!! LOL me toooooo
4- the stream scene kuch jaldi no? actually I jus wanted the sword fight, and I wanted it to be vry passionate..buh then I thought it wud be too much..afta all they dn't knw each oder..buh the stream scene was needed warna Veer ki smell hala tak pohonch jati..lolllzzzz... they don't even know that much about each other ke tumne tu shower scene daaldiye ashoka se liya hai kya i hate that movie no yaar..not at all..me too didn't find ashoka as gd..buh they didn't knw tht they both were their..voh toh sirf tab pata chala when he sensed motion behind him..
5- "Kyon chandani raaton mein dariya par nahate ho,
Soe hue pani mein kya agg, lagani hai?.." i really like poetry wowie...me too..but i stink at it lollzzz..em em a poetess..like i write poems n shayari's n all..I hav mah own collection..i really love it how you putted as a poeter or whatever he's called Shayar.. i have very bad vocabulary in all 3 langueges :( lollzzzz.. n I hav a real gd one..😉 well I knw hindi, eng, urdu ( a bit..), a lil french n Thai..
6- He quietly held the shirt for a moment then blushed shera ka dewanaa hai kuch toh aadate milte honge!! .😆😆😆.he wasn't wearing his shirt shame on you 😳n was till then obliviously standing around wiv his bare front towards her veer put on your shirt already!!.. he blushed slightly..
( aww nonu blushing..cute na..)
She giggled chalo at least she didn't blush yh,...😉 seeing him lowering his head holding the shirt..She wasn't goin to leave the scores unsettled ..He had made her blush so much she too was goin to make him embarrassed atleast..( lollzz kiddish they seem so childish that i am 12 and they look very childish lolllzzzz...hmm buh they r like tht..They r kiddo's.. Shera is 17 and Veer is 19...na..humari Shera hai hi bachi..waise she can get him pink by embarrassment but not blushin coz aisa karne ke liye..U knw..*wink wink*) what the hell are you talking about what would make veer red?!?! well wht wud make shera red...n If she has to make Veer Red..then she herself wud becum a tomato first.. u knw.. while seducing and romancing...7 - i loved it how shera won speacally when she started teasing so cutee 😳😛
8-" Ahhh!!!" He moaned lightly and held his back..he wasn't very hurt buh still it did give a lil pain the first time..
"Kya hua.." her naughty n haughty expression was replaced by concern now.. aww kitne jaldi sab kuch hora haa hai she's kinda getting to be his friend... no no..It's in her nature to help..not getting to be frens..like suppose u dn't knw sumone buh tht person gets hurt n it's by u'r mistake..wn't u help him..even If I rilli dn't like sumone n tht person gets hurt..I wud hav helped..so in the same way...
" Ahhh!!" he pretended tht he was vry hurt.. "voh bohot joorrr se lagg gai.." wah veer buhut aachi acting kar lete hoyhhhh😆😆😆
" Ohhoo!!" as she started moving towards him..he stopped her..
" Rehne dijiye mein khud aa jaunga..Aap chale jaiye.." ok bye.. i'd do that LOL😆😆
" Arey!! Aise kaise..apko humara wajah se lagi, humein apko pakad lena chahiye tha..humein sachi nahi pata tha ki apko lagg jaegi.." she was genuinely feeling sorry for him..
Seein tht she's buyin the story, he felt sumfin fuzzy..the way she showed concern made him feel tht..He liked the way she herself was comin to him..he smiled " Sab apke saath jane ke liye hi toh kar raha hoon.."? awwwwwwwwwwww😳😳 this is what i was talking bout in point 2 😳😳 awwwieeee.. I too didn't notice it till now..tht's why a writer needs a reade to point out mistakes n sum gd tins too..😳
9- the horses were atractted to each other they had a horse to horse eyelock🤣 that was great i perfer toofan cuz i love black horses well yes me too..n yes well both r beauties so jus thought of trying...lolzzzzI knw wierd buh u may get bored readin human romance..so will give u Horse romance too.. (JK)..
hope u liked my response,,,,Jus loved it hala..thnxie for tis sweet a comment....waitin for u'r comment on prt Five...Love ya loads deary.....t.ccccc-Ur's Ever Madhu😳
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