~*~*~FATINY~*~*~(RN/RM FF)Ud- PAge 146--9/1/2010

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Dhara Singh

@Dhara_s

Dazzler

Posted: 16 years ago

#611

Hey Tina...Thank u for updating...!!!😊
Naina remembering her promise to her dad...!!! Such promises are hard to keep...!!!😭😭
I loved the way Raj said ' jana' 😳 or was it meant to be 'jaan'😕😆
Perfect excuse given by Rahul for riding haule haule...!!😆😉
Haiiii Muskaan blushing...a must watch scene....!!!😳😳 U knw I hv fallen in love with RM as well (of course not as much as I love RN....😛 but i try to watch DMG just for RM....😉)
Aalekh tricking Muskaan was very funny..😆😆
Loved the line..." kuch nahi hua my foot.."😉

The Muskaan-Aalekh-Yudi-Huda thing was very funny...!!!😆😆 If Raj wouldn't have been in a tensed situation, things cud ahve becum funnier...!!!😆😆😆
The whole Raj-Sheetal thing went over my head...!!! As to why Raj had to do what he did ???😕😕 All I can say is that it was extremely emotional...!!!😭😭

Edited by Dhara_s - 16 years ago

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nidz n

@nidz n

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Posted: 16 years ago

#612

wow...entry f sameer in nainaz lyf...hmm sumthing fishy.....i luv alekh n muskaan too....well i want to thank u 4 including my name in yor last list...i waz not able to thank coz ma net waz not working since many dayz n thank god u did not update last week n m late but den conratz 4 6 months completion f ff..da whole journey z jus gr8....da update waz gr8....
but diz tym i did not get any mail regarding ur update but az i kno sat ud so came n checked.....now waiting 4 more twistz...now ur examz r over so plzzz ud more oftenly na......take care

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Sumi_162710

@Sumi_162710

Rocker

Posted: 16 years ago

#613

Gr8 part. Gud dat Sameer is here. And even I was thinking dat its high tym u didnt include Sameer n Sheetal in the UDs. But now I guess u brought a nice plot. Raj is in a fix now. He is fulfilling his frnd's duty. And I hope everything will be gud in the end.

I luved Aalekh n Muskaan's parts. They wer lovely. Even RM phone convo was nice. The precap seems very interesting. W8ing 4 dat eagerly. PLS CONTINUE SOON.

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fanatic 21

@fanatic 21

Inactive

Posted: 16 years ago

#614

awesome part.............rm wer damn cute......

hope to see rn back 2gether soon

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Prerna

@prerna1

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#615

that was damn cool

but i hope Sheetal will agree to Raj's condition

plz continue soon

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Pinka

@pinka28

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#616

actually speaking
upadte is good but looked lil dragged sorry to day this .. vo hota hai na kuch scene irrelevant lagte hai like alkeh raj and muskan scene, so much of argue between sameer and sheetal for goin to kma , but overall update is good i think some update are mean to be lil dragged so that they can become the base for next upadte jaise ki ye vali lag rahi hai....
and yes one request RAHUL aur muskan ka rishta vaise hi rahene do jaisa hai ... i like their ph convo but i like them as they are ... i mean "tu kaisa hai jyada" acha "tum kasie ho so " kuch rishto ka sirf roop badle to acha hai unka ahsas nahi .. jaise rm ka
but yes
precap is more interesting than updtae...precap padne k baaad ;ag raha hai why did ypu stop tune vo precap mei kyon diya hai use directly update kyon nahin kiya hai

plz plz update ker jaldi
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pinka

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Vertika Srivastava

@Vartika07

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#617

Nice update. 👏 👏 👏

Raj ne accha kiya ki vo ab Sheetal ko sab batana chahta hai.😃 😃 😃 Par Naina bhi na kyoun kabhi simple se baat ko itna senti bana deti hai. Raj Naina se itna pyaar karta hai kya kam hai ye?😛 😛 😛 Sheetal bhi ek baar Raj k bulane par ready ho gayi Ambala aane k liye bina lanslide ki parwaah kiye.😲 😲 😲 Is ko kehte hain dosti.😃 😃 😃 Raj us k liye bahut maayne rakhta hai na.😊 😊 😊

Sheetal to fauan jaana chahti thi but thank god Sameer ne rok liya us ko aur dono ne ulti pulti kahani sunai aur nikal padi Raj se milne Sameer k saath.😆 😆 😆 Vaise Sameer ka tab Raj k behavior se us k liye pareshaan hona obvious tha 😕 😕 😕 but this time Raj greeted him normaly that's good.😉 😉 😉 Raj ne sahi kaha ki ab time aisa hai ki un ko zindagi me aage badhna chahiye. Sheetal ka itne jaldi ye change accept karna itna asaan nahi hai but i am shure vo maan jaayegi.😊 😊 😊

update soon.

Edited by Mahak Sinha - 16 years ago

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varshita

@varshita

Voyager

Posted: 16 years ago

#618

Sorry yaar par,

mujhe lagta hai ye fic kuch boaring hoti jaa rahi hai. Pata nahi kyoun aisa lag raha hai mujhe.😕

Mera intetion tum ko hurt karne ka nahi hai but jo mujhe lagta hai maine bataya.

Ye waala part thoda ajeeb tha mujhe bahut accha nahi laga.😛

par aage mai wait karoongi acche ud ka.😉

Edited by varshita - 16 years ago

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Rituka

@rituka7

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Posted: 16 years ago

#619

waiting for the update
update soon

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Tina

@-Tina-

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#620

Ok firstly loads of things happening aftr last weeks ud...sme ppl loosing intrst....sme finding it long...sme findin it borin..

Alryt let me frankly tell u last week i was in a mad mood....life was completely messed and that has shown...lol...i really tried nd made sme experiments....i thght ppl wld get bored of the regular fatiny stuff so was going to brng in sme masala twists..but i guess i better shut up nd stay to the regular stuff..😉

Also last weeks update was kinda long i agree...i thght i shd make up for the absence of an update previously...

Nonetheless...i have a task now..to brng back that lost intrst....nd i'l try my best....most of u were kind nuf to go on wid da same positive comments.....while sme came up wid da -ve ones as well...which i appreciate....

Scrap last weeks precap....al that was heading for newer twists....lets not even get there....so those scenes wont be here...bringin in a change..

Heres the Ud

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Naina and Sameer went back in...things had to be sorted out..

Raj-Sheetal....woh i am sorry..maine kuch zyada hi...

Sheetal was silent..Raj looked at Sameer for help..

Sameer nodded..

Sameer-Sheetal.....dekho...

Sheetal gave him one glare..

Sameer fell silent...Raj was laughin within..

Sheetal-I dunno Raj...yeh sab kya ho raha hain..i really donno..

Raj-I doono either sheetal....main bas chatha hoon tum khush raho...kuch galat chatha hoon kya??...Aur tumhari khushi is zindagi main nahi hain sheetal..

Sheetal-Raj dekho.. Raj i still need time Raj...maine sameer se baat ki hain....and i need my own time Raj....main keh rahi hoon na...i will defi move on but when its the right time....abhi nahi..

Raj was silent..

Raj kept a hand on his head....and sheetal was seriously sitting silent...sameer was nervous ..

Raj-This is so messed up..i am sorry sheetal...yeh sab meri wajah se..its all so messed up!!..

Sheetal-Raj...its messed up because your making it messed up...just keep it normal...tum khush hoon na...lets just leave it that way...dont ttry to interlink our lives Raj...our lives are different...tum hi isee itna messy bana rahe hoon....

Raj was silent..

Raj-Ok!!....

There was a sudden enthusiasm in his voice..

Raj-I am not doing anything...if this is how it had to go then fine!!....fine..lets celebraate...mere aur naina ke liye!!...aur tumahrey future ke liye...i trust you...aggar tum keh rahi hoon you will....then i hope i will...

Sheetal smiled....Sameer was relaxed and naina was happy!!..

Sheetal instantly hugged Raj................

Sheetal-Thankyou!!...thankyou for understanding!!..

Raj smiled..

Sameer-So lets party!!..

Naina-Hmm...Raj...Rahul ko bhi bulatein hain....

Raj-Thats sounds perfect!!..

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Sameer sheetal Raj Naina and Muskaan were ready to party...For muskaan it was always great to be hanging out with her seniors!!

Rahul zoomed to KMA..

Rahul-Well...Naina tum mere saath kyun nahi aati..😉....ohoh ok..tumhara boyfriend....sheetal tum....oh oh ok...tumhara best friend....ah muskaan tum mere saath chalogi??

Muskaan blushed...she sat behind him..

The rest of them came in Raj''s jeep..

1 hour later....at the same place where Raj and Naina danced for the first time!!.. Remember they were supposed to go the pub?...thenwent to 5 star before freshers ball!!

Rahul and Muskaan enter..

Raj-What the hell...Rahul...tujhe itni dair kyun lagi...i mean kahan kanyakumari jaakar aaya kya??

Rahul-Relax buddy......traffic dekha hain....aur hum toh lambein raste se aaye...

Raj-Ohh gawd....tumhe bike par humse zyada waqt laga...sach sach bata kahan gayye the tum logg...muski tu bata...koi problem?

Rahul looked at Naina and signaled to help...she was like why??...he gave her a glare..

Suddely something striked her..

Naina-Raj...tum kya police inspector baney baithey hoon....aagey na...baith jao.

Half an hour earlier!!

Muskaan-Rahul dekh humein wahan pahunchna hain...bhai itney saare sawal puchengey..

Rahul-I dunt care..

They were sitting by the same rocks where the confessed.!!

Rahul-Muskaan..yeh jagah meri zindagi ke sabsi important jagah hain.

Muskaan blushed...

Rahul cupped her face...

He kissed her forehead...

Rahul-I love you Muskaan!!...

Muskaan smiled..

He took ker hands into his...

Rahul-I love you sweety...

Muskaan smiled..

Muskaan-Pata nahi yaar rahul..yeh log itna extra pyaar kartein kaise hain....matlab haat pakdna hug karna kiss karna....tum bilkul aiseye hoon!!....aur mujhse bhi wahi expect kartey hoon na?

Rahul laughed!!

Rahul-Woh sab ladkiyaan karti hain....tujh jaise tomboys nahi!!..

Muskaan-Oyye Rahul...tomboy kisey bol raha hain..main ladki hoon samjhi...puri ki puri ladki..

Rahul-Pakaa??..

Muskaan-Oyeee!!

Rahul-Acha mujhe sabit kar ki tu ladki hain.....dekha mujhe..

Muskaan--Oyee saboot matlab ky...

She stopped...she was such a blaber mouth.....think and talk muskaan!!.

RAhul-Matlab kya....ab tujhe woh bhi sikhana padega kya??

Muskaan blushed!!..

Rahul-acha ki gal nahi...main abhi RAj ko bata deta hoon ki main uski behen ko sikha raha hoon aur nahi aa paonga..jab woh pucheyga main kya sikha raha hon toh main toh keh donga ki

Muskaan-Chup RAhul!!..

Rahul smiled..

Rahul-Tu jaisi hain waisi reh....badalney ki koshish mat kar...main terese pyaar karta hoon.....samjhi....

She smiled..

Muskaan-Abb aggar hum yahan se nahi nikley toh bhai humarey body ke shape ko mar mar kar badal dengey!!..

They laughed and left...

Rahul sat there smiling on the incident...jus then they all decided to dance..

Raj and Naina did a bit of romancing ...no dancing..

Raj just kept looking at her........

Her low neckline...her beautiful face..her hair open...everything was simply perfect to blow him off....why did girls do this??

Raj was lost in her innocent yet beautiful face...

Naina just looked down and kept moving thoda thoda.. :)

Naina saw Rahul smiling in a way to pull her leg..

Naina-Raj..

Raj-Mmm....

Naina-Raj........

Raj came out of his trance..

Raj-Kya hain naina...raj raj kar rahi hoon..

Naina-Raj..sab humein dekh rahe hain...tum dance bhi nahi kar rahe hoon..

Raj-Naina...tum lag his itni khubsurat rahi hoon...i cant get my eyes off you naina...you look simply stunning.

Naina blushed..

Naina-Raj!!.. (she hit him playfully)

Raj moved a step closer....she had her cheeks to his ear...they were that close..

Raj-I luv u..

Naina blushed..

Raj-Aaj raat...mere kamre main....sirf tum aur main....thoda timepass..

Naina nodded..

Raj smiled..

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Sameer and Sheetal were dancing together..

Sameer-Tum mujhse baat nahi kar rahi hoon...gussa hoon kya?

Sheetal smiled..

Sheetal-Nahi baba...tumse gussa nahi hoon..

Sameer-Umm ok..

Sheetal-Sameer..please yaar....aise behave mat karo..kuch bhi toh nahi hua....

Sameer nodded..

Sameer-I dunno sheetal...aaj kal..not just here but 10 din se dekh raha hoon...there is some problem....i dunno what....but we are just drifting apart..

Sheetal-I know..i feel the same...We need to work out stuff sameer....lots of it..

Sameer-Aaj raat ko.....achee se baith kar baat karein?...Just you and me??

Sheetal nodded..

Sheetal-We need it..

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Rahul who was dancing with muskaan kept glancing at raj-naina...they looked cute..

Muskaan-Oyye..main idhar hoon..tu idhar udhar kya dekh raha hain..

Rahul-Acha baba sorry....tujhe hi dekhonga......

Muskaan smiled..

He moved a step closer..

Muskaan-Oyyee no badmashi..

Rahul smiled..

Muskaan-Rahul..

Rahul-mm...bol..

Muskaan-Main soch rahi thi..ki humein bhai ko batana chahiye hamarey barery main.

Rahul was silent..

Muskaan-Kuch bol ..

Rahul-Muskaan...

Muskaan-Rahul aggar main bhai se gussa ho sakti hoon mujhe unkey aur naina ki baarey main na bataney ke liye toh woh bhi ho sakte hain na...😊

Rahul nodded..

Rahul-Par woh manega ya nahi..uski guarantee main nahi de sakta..😆

Muskaan-I know...bhai bahut possesive hain...but i guess with you...shouldnt be a problem..😉

Rahul smiled and winked..

Rahul-Pata nahi muskaan....raj kaise react karega......He wants a moneyed man for you....he had told me once....and sorry but i m not that rich yaar.......main hamesa isii main khush raha hoon muskaan....maine khud kamaya aur khud lutaya...papa ke paisoon ko maine kabhi haath nahi lagaye....raj knows that...

Muskaan-Kitney peg piye hain tumne?

Rahul smiled..

Rahul-Lets see....we'l tell him..

Muskaan-Rahul.. (she placed a hand on his cheek)....dekh..main tujhe pyaar kart hoon....tere pasioon se nahi samjha...aur tu jitna bhi kamayega na...hum usmein khush rahengey.....papaji ke paisey ko koi haath nahi lagayega samjha!!..😊

Rahul smiled..

Rahul-Oyyee tu kyun papaji keh rahi hain..

Muskaan-Ab tere papaji mere papji huye na..😊

Muskan blushed!!..

Rahul-Muskaan...

She looked at him...

Rahul was looking at her with awe!!...

He leaned in to kiss her....muskaan's lips parted...but they were in the wrong place...

Naina saw this movement...she was shocked first...but smiled later....shit what if raj saw...she tried to keep raj on the opposite side....

Raj-Main ek drink lata hoon...

But suddenly raj was about to turn...naina had to do something fast..

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PRECAP

Naina-Balai ka toh zamana hi nahi raha..main tumhe raj se bachaya aur tum ho ki..aggar raj dekhta toh kya hota??

Muskaan-Ah..thankyou bhabs!!..

Naina-Oyye chup reh bhabs ke bachi..

Muskaan smiled..

Naina-Hmmm...yeh sab cheezin room main kartein hain...samjhe...aise nahi...rahul...kya yaar..tujhe sikhana padega kya..

Rahul ruffled his hair..

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Rahul lifts a hand to wipe out little coffee left over on her lips...

Muskaan shivers by his touch...

Rahul smiles..

Rahul gets a little naughty....he pulls her mug from her hand and keeps it away...and moves little closer to her.....she moves a little to the other side of the sofa...

Rahul moves almost sticking to her..

she moves again this time time rahul pulls her up close to him..

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Ok i hope now that was back to normal stuff...lukin 4wd to ur comments...plus just one more thing...i jus relized that i m cut out 4 ryttn medium sized fic....neither short ones nor too long ones whch make it boring....so i'l b sending raj quickly for their mission nd den happy endings!.. :)

Sorry for the messed up ud!!....hope this one is better!!..

And thanx for alwyas being there and supporting me!...and criticzing wenever required...it helps me grow as a writer....i get to know my flaws and have the chance to correct them!!...thnx guys!!

Luv

Tina!!

Edited by -Tina- - 16 years ago