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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesome.cont soon.......

[/QUOTE]..thanks..and of course ..I will continue soon..


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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Too good!!!!!Awesome!!!!!==thanks a lot..

Naina ke dil mein darr ghar kar gaya hai jab se woh phir se pregnant huyi hai!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 ==it is very natural

Aisi haalat mein woh Raj ko dhundhne gayi hai!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲Ab uski ankhon ke saamne adhera hai aur pata nahi woh kis taraf chali gayi!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 😔==Naina ki khisak gayi hai..😆

Ish haalat mein aise yahan waha jana nahi chahiye tha usse!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒==Haa..par Naina ko kaun samjhaaye??

Raj bahar gaya tha aur phone karta hai toh Naina kehti hai agar shaam ko nikalte toh aa jata!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊==Naina ne sach hi kaha...

Lagta hai Naina chahti hai ke Raj uske paas jaldi se aa jaye!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳==Isn't that obvious??😛

Raj bhi yeh baat samaj gaya tabhi toh pucch raha hai!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊==hmm..Raj Hero hai..uska dimag toh tez hoga hi..

Ritu ne Raj ki banayi huyi tasveer ko dekhkar gusse mein usse patak diya!!!! ==Normal baat hai..

Ish Ritu ko sab kuch pata hai!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒Woh kitni asani se ghar mein ghus gayi!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 ==She is the Vamp...Kultaaahhh..hee hee hee hee..😆

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Ritu ne Naina ko pakad rakha hai aur koi kuch nahi kar paa raha hai!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲O no!!!! ==Naina normal ladki hai..koi superwoman nahi..

Yeh jab tak hero nahi aata koi kuch nahi kar sakta kya??😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡==aisi baat nahi hai..Naina ko hostage banaya tha Ritu ne...

Ritu ne Naina ke haath par khanjar chala diya magar Naina daur bhi toh nahi sakti ish haalat mein!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭==yaa..very sad and horrible..

Police for a change time pe aayi hai magar kuch kar nahi rahi hai!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒 😒Useless!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡==yaar..Naina hostage thi..upar se pregnant.. Police risk kaise leti??😕

Ab police kuch nahi karegi toh Raj ko hi goli chalani padegi naa!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡==Raj k aane ka andaza Ritu ko nahi tha..Raj ne peeche se fire kia Ritu par..

Naina ush haalat mein bhi court gayi!!!!!!!!😔 😔 😔 ==kyon nahi jaayegi?Uska pati case me fansa hai..zaroor jaayegi..

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Raj ne bhi kabool kar liya!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔Kya zaroorat thi aise bolne ki ke woh Ritu ko marna chahta tha!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒==Raj ne kuchh socha hoga..I don't know..

Kam se kam Ritu ki maa ne toh favour mein gavahi di!!!! ==haa..best part..

Naina toh Raj ko chhodna hi nahi chahti thi!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔Poor Naina!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭==yes..Poor Naina😭

Naina toh ush waqt mein wapas chali gayi hai jab Raj usse jungle mein mila tha!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲 😲==haaaaaaaaa😛

Naina waha se bhi gayab ho gayi aur Raj usse dhundhne gaya hai!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 😔 😔==Raj Hero hai..usiko dhoondhna hai Naina ko..

Ab kya hoga??😕 😕 😕 😕 😕==Main kyaa jaanoo??





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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: fanatic 21

bahut hi badiya part tha.................


ritus part ws very exciting 1



thanks a lot...I will update soon..


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Posted: 16 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: Mahak Sinha


Sorry mai late ho gayi Anu.==It's OK..nor problem..

Ye raha is update ka reply.==Thank you..
Naina ne Raj ko sach me lagta hai apne paas aane nahi diya kabhi🥺, us ne apne charon taraf ek khol bana liya hai jis ki wajah se dono k dilon me itni doori aa gayi hai.😔==Naina toh uneasy feel karegi hi..jis situation me dono ki shaadi hui..normal hai..

Raj us ko ye yakeen dilana chahta hai ki vo humesha us k saath hai😛 par Naina apne khalayon se bahar hi nahi aana chahti hai😒, pata nahi kyoun.Abhi bhi us ko lagta hai ki Raj ne ehsaan kiya hai 😲us par agar aisa nahi hota to vo kam se kam Ritu k baare me Raj ko batati jaroor 🥱ki Ritu ne kaise sab k saamne insult ki us ki.😳==haa..Naina abhi tak raj ko sab kuchh bejhijhag nahi bata paati..


Accha kiya Raj ne ki Ritu ko clearly samjha diya ki jaisa vo soch rahi hai aisa kuch bhi nahi😉 , na hi vo Ritu se pyaar karta😃 tha na hi shaadi karna chahta tha to Ritu sab k saamne Raj ko sanam bewafa dikhana bund hi kare ab sach me she is brat.😈==Raj ne sach me achha kia..Ritu ki akal theekaane shaayad aa jaaye..


Naina bhi bus ansoon bahaye jaa rahi hain kuch bolti nahi hain.😕==Naina became so helpless..
Bolna chahiye na kuch ladna tha Ritu se aur us ko us ki aukaat to yaad dilani thi kam se kam.😡==Actually..Naina Ritu k temper se darrti hai..shaayad..
Raj ne realise kiya Naina ka dard aur console bhi kiya us ko.😭==😳Raj Hero hai..usko aisa hi karna chahie..
Phir apne pyaar ki muhar bhi laga di Naina par🤗aur Naina ne pehli baar Raj ko vo realise karaya jo vo dekhna chahta tha Naina ki aankhon me.☺️==hmm..bahut maza aya hoga tumko..really..I am screwed
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Naina dubara maa ban ne waali hai too good.==tujhe bahut maza aa raha hai..kyaa baat hai??😆


Raj ne Naina ko us ki banayi hue Naina ki hi painting gift ki vow g8.😛
Ab pata chala na Naina ko ki Raj pehle se pyaar karta tha Naina se aur us ne Naina par koi ehsaan nahi kiya hai.😉==Arre..yaar ..Raj Hero hai...aisa kuchh hi karna chahie usko..

Ab ki kuch na ho aisa jaisa last time hua tha.==I hope so..
superb update darling.👍🏼==Thanks again..




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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Mahak Sinha

Pata chal gaya ki Ritu kitni badi kameene thi 😡shuru se hi Naina k peeche padi thi aur bus chalta to pata nahi kya kya karti aage 🤢aur,accha kiya Raj ne jo maar diya us ko.👏
Raj ko kam saja Ritu ki maa ki wajah se hue na kyounki un ki gavahi
Raj k favour me gayi.==Ritu mentally ill thi.Main stream society me rahne laayak nahi thi,uska rehna baaki logo k lia khatra tha.Raj ne usko maar dala..sahi kia yaa ghalat main kuchh nahi kahoongi..par Raj ne kanoon ko apne haathon me lia..jiski saza Raj ko mil rahi hai..aur Court bhi samajh chuki thi k Raj ne haalaat se majboor hokar aisa kia hai..jaisa k Ritu ki Maa ne kaha..
Ye achanak Naina ko kya ho gaya?😲==Naina ki satak gayi hai..😆

Kahan chali jaa rahi hai aise vo kisi ko bina bataye?😕==bata kar jaati toh sab ko pata hota..k kaha gayi hai.,..😉

Paagal jaise behave kar rahi hai par us ne Tourist ko pata to sahi bataya tha na.🥱==haa..pata sahi bataya..shaayad..

Raj bhi kamal hai ghar aaye bina jaise hi pata chala ki Naina nahi hai ghar me seedhe chala gaya us ko dhoondhne.😛Naina ko kahin aisa to nahi lag raha hai na ki is baar fir se kuch aisa ho jaayega aur Raj fir se us se kahin door chala jaayega.😭Us ko abhi bhi lag raha hai ki 3 saal pehle ka waqt chal raha hai beech ki baatein bhool gayi hai vo.😔Ab jab vo aadmi ghar jaane k liye arrangement karne gaya hai to vo vahan se bhi gayab ho gayi, ye ho kya raha hai?😕==Naina is suffering from a big trauma..physical and mental ..both.She is not being able to overcome her horrible past..but..Raj will make everything alright..this time nothing bad is going to be happened...
update soon.==sure..




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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: yyyy

Interesting update...continue soon



thanks a lot..I will update soon..


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Posted: 16 years ago
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SAFAR (THE JOURNEY)
PART 5







2004,15th December..


"kyon aai tum yehaan??"

Raj k is sawal se Naina chauk gayi.Usko dekh kar Raj khush nahi??

Raj--kuchh poochh raha hoon..

Naina--Shaadi k baad ..yeh mera pehla janamdin hai..jab main tumhare saath nahi..

Raj--toh..?yeha par party karna mumkin toh nahi hai..kyon aai yeha?

Naina--RAJ..!!!

Raj--Naina..bahut mushkil se maine apne dil ko samjhaya hai..k mujhe 3 saal tumse door rehna hai..ab meri mushkilen aur mat badhao..


Naina ki ankho me ansoon bharne lage..

Raj--Humesha..yehi kar sakti ho..rone k ilava aur kuchh nahi ata tumko...

Naina--I am sorry...

Raj--Naina..yeha mat ana..3 saal dekhte dekhte guzar jaayenge..



Naina chali gayi...uske jaane k baad..Raj apna muh apne haathon se chhupa kar rone laga..

Naina ki utri hui shakal woh dekh nahi sakta..isi lia Naina ko jaane k lia kaha usne.Police Lock up me tha jab khabar mili thi,Naina ki mari hui bachchi k baare me..Raj ki bhi bachchi thi.Raj nahi jaa paya Naina k paas.Fir jab Court me Naina ko dekha..jis Naina k pyaar me Raj giraftar hua tha..woh Naina nahi thi..woh toh kahi kho gayi thi..Naina usko dekh kar ro rahi thi..buri tarha ro rahi thi..hospital se aaye hue kuchh hi din hue the usko..aur fir aisa jhatka..


Raj ne socha Naina se door rehna hi behtar hoga.Naina ki woh baat.. "shaam ko kaam khatam hua toh tabhi rawana hote..toh..raat tak pahuch jaate.."..Raj bar bar yaad karta hai.Sach me usdin Raj se bahut badi ghalati ho gayi thi.. kyon woh Kalka me rook gaya us shaam ko?Ghar lautne ki jaldi kyon nahi thi usko?Agar waqt par us din Raj pahuch jata..toh Naina k saath itna sab kuchh nahi hota.Apni is ghalati ko Raj maaf nahi kar pata,waqt par Raj pahuch nahi paya tha..Naina ki jaan toh bach gayi..par Naina jee nahi rahi hai ab..sirf zinda hai.Raj buzdil nahi tha..bas waqt ki keemat ko nahi samajh paya ..bahut der ho gayi thi..sab kuchh barbad ho chuka tha..Naina ki khushi..Raj ka sapna..sab kuchh..



Raj khud ko maaf nahi kar pata.Ritu ko kuchh ghalatfaimi toh hui thi jis wajah se usne samajh lia k Raj uski personal property hai..kahi naa kahi Raj bhi zimmedar hai is baat ka..Raj ko mauka mila tha Naina se shaadi karne ka.. varna yeh mumkin tha k Raj ki shaadi Ritu se hi hoti..aur shaayad Raj kar bhi leta usse shaadi..yeh toh Raj ki kismat achhi thi..aur Naina ki bhi..yeh ahen
mauke par pata chal gaya..k Naina ka honewala dulha paagal hai..Court me Raj ne apne dil ki baat keh di..k sach me woh chaahta tha k Ritu uske aur Naina k beech m naa rahe...


Par jab Naina rote hue chali gayi..tab Raj ko laga..k woh bahut kathor ban gaya tha..zyada hi bol dia Raj ne..aaj Naina ka janamdin bhi hai..peechhle janam par dono ne bahut aalishaan jashan manaye the..is bar sab kuchh barbad hai..achanak ek bawandar..aur mohabbat ka woh gulshan ujad gaya..


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Naina ne ghar aakar khud ko kamre me bandh kar lia..aaj Raj ne jo kaha..sahi kaha..shaayad..Naina ko dekhega aur Raj disturbed hoga..Raj ki yeh haalat Naina ki wajah se hai..Naina hi nahi ladh paai haalaat se..usko ladhna chahie tha..paas bahut se flower vase the..night lamp tha..ek bhi chees agar utha kar Ritu ko maarti toh aaj yeh sab nahi hota..par us pal me Naina k haath paaon thande pad gaye the..kuchh nahi kar paai Naina..



Waqt beet raha tha..apne hisaab se,par Raj k lia ek ek din jaise ek ek yug the.. aur Naina k lia..usko waqt ka koi hosh hi nahi tha.Ritu k Parents Shimla chhod kar jaa chuke hain.


Rohini ne kaha.."Raj ki ghairhaziri me kaam kaaj kyon nahi dekhti?"


Naina--Jee...

Par Naina ka dil hi nahi lagta..log baatein karte hain..Ritu mar chuki hai..har koi usike bare me baat karta hai..aur Naina kabhi Raj k bare me baat nahi karti..sab baatein karte hain..k kaisi patthar-dil ladki hai?Bachcha mar gaya.. Pati jail me hain..isko dekh kar pata hi nahi chalta..aur Pati se milne bhi nahi jaati..dil hai k patthar???!!!!!!!!

Naina sab kuchh sunti hai..chup chaap...Raj ne khud hi usko milne se mana kar dia hai..yeh baat kisise nahi kehti Naina ..Rohini bhi jab Raj se milne jaati hain..tab Naina ko chalne ko kehti hain,,par Naina nahi jaati..Rohini naraz ho jaati hai..Naina kuchh nahi kehti....

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Udhar Raj bhi intezar me rehta hai..sochta hai..aaj Naina milne aayegi..par Naina nahi aati.,..Rohini jab batati hai..k Naina ne aane se inkaar kar dia..tab Raj kuchh nahi kehta..woh jaanta hai ..Naina kyon nahi aai..Naina se ek baar milna chaahta hai Raj..bas ek baar...

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Jailer ne bulaya..Raj ko..usko 15 din k Parol me chhoda jaa raha hai...Chachu k antim sanskar aur shraddh k lia..


24th May,2007


Raj ghar aaya...aur aate hi usko shamshaan jana pada..antim sanskar k lia.. Raj k Vakilon ne pahle se intezaam kar lia tha..Chachu ki tabiyat k bare me Doctors ne bata dia tha..k unke paas zyada waqt nahi hai..isi lia Vakilon ne Parol ki application pahle hi kar dia thi Court me..application granted ho gayi.



Antim sanskar ho gaya....



Raj ghar aaya..Naina se mila...ab tak dono me koi baat nahi hui thi...raat ho chuki thi...shamshaan me zyada waqt lag gaya..Raj ko Naina se bat karni thi..
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raat k 11 baje....

Naina chup chaap balcony me baithi thi..achanak darwaza bandh hone ki awaz suni usne..Raj kamre me aa chuka tha..aur darwaza bhi bandh kar lia tha andar se...dono ko koi disturb nahi karega..

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Raj ki Car ki tyre puncture ho gayi...jungle k saamne...mazdoor waapas jaa rahe hain..lakdi kaat kar..andhera ho chuka hai..Raj ko aisa laga..k Naina jungle ki taraf jaa sakti hai..Naina pahle bhi jaa chuki hai..par doosre pal me yeh khayaal aya..k is haalat me Naina nahi jaayegi..andhere me..jungle k andar..

par aise waqt par..is mushkil waqt par..jis chees ki ummeed nahi hoti..asal me usi chees ka mumkin hona zyada mumkin lagta hai..Raj Saw Mill ki taraf gaya..uska shak sahi nikla...Naina aai thi..par uske baad uska koi pata nahi chala..








Edited by yakkudimag - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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As you all know..this fic is my Durgapuja Special Fic..so I have an announcement.

I started SAFAR ( THE JOURNEY ) on 4th October,2008 which was MAHAPANCHAMI..

Part 1 on Mahapanchami,Part 2 on Mahashashthi,Part 3 on Mahasaptami,Part 4 on Mahashtami and Part 5 on Mahanavami.


Part 6 aka the Last Part will be posted on Vijaya Dashami aka tomorrow..


SAFAR is about to concluded..rather ,about to be completed..


Edited by yakkudimag - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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too good
u portrayed their feiilings so well
ab bas jaldi se dono ko mila do
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey dear..

this fic has been so interesting!!!!
waiting for tomorrow....
nd wish u a happy dussera for tomorrow!!!!

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