The Ordeal Of Karma AK,AR,KA Pt 4@Pg 20 06/20 - Page 9

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Posted: 17 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: ~*shaili*~

hey its a really nice part! everything is so well co-ordinated and its a pleasure reading it! it mus have required alot of effort! anyway i am personally looking forward to ka parts!

thanx for appreciating the effort shaili it is great to know that readders know how much harwork goes into it...and i hope i don't disappoint you.

Originally posted by: someanshu2008

hey hi

i liked the nest on the whole
bt i would have imagined a more rugged look with stones that resembles mystery
anshu

i did think of that but it was too hard to find pictures but then again they live in high-tech world so i decided on this backdrop and thanks a lot anshu...u r a great reader

Originally posted by: yamnovbloom

wow yaar can't wait for next update yaar marvellous well describedthanx a lot u just took me to that place and i could feel it, that now is a great compliment...thanx a lot wonderful let custodians and preservers act as protectors .

thanks for Pm just waiting for ur next Pm claiming ur next updatecoming right up

and i think i deserve longer replies than that when i do that much hardwork... bas ek lambi si reply chaiye jeene ke liye

Originally posted by: samijan

hey,

gr8 part. continue soon!!!!!!!!

thanx a lot dear

Originally posted by: luv_pavi

hii di yaaar awesummm fic i justt readdd nowwww everythingg luvedd it continue asap :))))


saba

saba dear, how r u??? and thanx a lot for liking it

Originally posted by: afshaa!!!

plzzzzzz continue soon

cant wait nemore..
plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
afshaa

relax afshaa i m doing it

Originally posted by: sujalangad_rock

fab part thanx a lot deat

just loved it....thanx again
the gangs surely hate each other....not for too long
will really love to see them work together...
still waiting 4 ur to update dance & hot as ice....those are not mine ff's sorry that is another amneet but i have to admit they are great
continue soon

thanx for the wonderful replies guys
Asever
Amneet😉
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Posted: 17 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: Catwoman

cool sweeet can wait

okay...now i m doing jumping jacks and happy dance...di is that really you???

Originally posted by: aarora

hey amazin ff..was a silent reader..bt cudnt cntrl 2 comment nw..

n plz add me 2 ur PM list..
tk cr..

as i always say it is a huge accomplishment for a writer when a silent reader reply...thanx a lot dear and i hope u won't go silent again...and considered yourself added to the list
Asever
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Part-2
"It seems right now, that all I have ever done in my life is making my way here to you."
-The Bridges of Madison Country.
It surely is the best day of his life. Three very beautiful ladies were having dinner with me thought Alex, the room keeper of the Prince of India thought sitting in the penthouse of this very expensive hotel. They were smiling at him, all three of them. There was something mysterious about their smiles. Though the smiles were enchanting, he did not like it. There was something ominous about their smiles or them.
"So, what do you do for living," asked one of the girls.
"I am a royal servant," Alex answered proudly.
"Really," said the same girl looking very pleased as she slipped his wand out of his pocket.
"Oh! Come on Chaaya... don't tell me you believe him... I mean he is smart and all that but he is boasting about his job," said the other girl with pure evil in her eyes.
"No Pia... I don't think he is lying," said the third girl trailing a finger on Alex's jaw seductively which made him close his eyes in pleasure.
"Not you too Ashleysha... please," said the other girl.
"Don't be rude Pia... he is too sweet to lie," said Chaaya almost purring the words out of her mouth.
"Okay tell me what are your duties as royal servant," asked Pia challenging him though she very well knew who he was and what were his duties.
"I take care of the room of the prince," Alex replied proudly and all three girls grinned at each other, congratulating for hitting the target.
"Really... that is total bluff... no one have seen the prince and I thought no one was allowed in that room" said Pia instigating Alex more.
"Yes, no one is allowed... but you can't let the room turn into a ruin... some cleaning is necessary," countered Alex.
"I don't believe a word you say," said Pia pressing even more.
"Come in Alex sweetheart tell her that you have seen the prince," said Chaaya using her talents on him now but she frowned when she found that he had been shielded.
"Yes, I have seen the prince's photograph's that are in his room... no one actually sees him in person besides their highness the King, the Queen and the princesses." At least this was the right target that was confirmed. By this time Pia and Ashleysha understood that he was shielded otherwise with Chaaya's charm he would he blurted every single feature detail of the prince. So, they have to take the hard way. Poor guy was so handsome and now he has to go through sheer torture.
"I think it's time for the desert," said Ashleysha and ringed the waiter. Within a minute there was a knock on the door and on the other side stood Manthan dressed as a waiter. Pia went and let him in signalling him that the target is right and he has to take it from here. Manthan grinned and entered. Pia securely shut the door behind her. Manthan rubbed his hands together and touched Alex with just his fingertip. As soon as the acid touched Alex's skin he screamed in pain which was excruciating. Before Manthan can do anything else, the roof of the penthouse shredded open and Angad stepped in his warrior form, wearing a crisp white shirt with black waist coast and leather pants.
"Hello ladies and a very not so gentle man... don't you think it's unfair four against one," Angad said smiling politely.
"What are you doing here?" hissed Manthan.
"Just helping this poor guy," Angad replied helping Alex to his feet.
"Angad darling you are alone here... you don't want a fight with us now... I would hate to hurt you," said Chaaya.
"Don't worry sweet heart... I am not here to fight today," with this Angad put his arm towards Alex's waist and got ready to launch himself out of this place. Just before Angad could get out Manthan launched an acid ball towards Alex. Angad took the blow which touched his left forearm but he managed to get out of there at blinding speed.
Chaaya sighed heavily when Angad was gone, "he is so handsome... why he isn't a conspirator." All other rolled their eyes at her.
WHEN ALEX was being saved by Angad, Guru Drona has left the nest. Armaan was worried and mumbling all kinds of swear words and then he yelled Anjali to come to the living room. All preservers were wondering what was going on here. Here comes another freak Kaavya thought but when he saw Anjali he felt like he was frozen at his place. Her beauty and her simplicity just blew him away. But there was a frown on her forehead. He didn't like it. She was a royalty. It did not take much of the time to understand that she was the youngest daughter of King Om Khanna. She was very visibly worried now. And her elder sister was equally worried too. But of course they would be worried. Their brother was in trouble. But the words that came out of her mouth astonished him.
"Oh! He is so stupid, Preet can you please get me some flare herbs... I am going to need them; I don't have enough for two people." Anjali said and as soon as she finished Preet was out to the door and gone.
"Do you mind telling us what happened," Armaan roared, "is he fine... how much hurt he is?" Anjali remained quiet. She did not seem to hear anything, "For heaven sake Anjali! Tell us something."
But Anjali stood there looking at door. Her anxiety seemed to increase minute by minute. Tears were already rolling down her cheeks. This scared Riddhima and she turned to Prem, "You tell me...please," Riddhima asked in a hoarse whisper.
Prem concentrated, "He is on his way... his left forearm is burnt and there is a man with him who is the room keeper of prince's room. He is injured too... that's all I can see and now he is on door step along with Preet...they are in the elevator and now they enter living room."
As Angad entered, Anjali ran into his arms. It pricked Kaavya's heart and stabbed when Angad handed Alex to Preet and hugged her back. Anjali was crying hysterically in Angad's arms and he was hushing her. For some odd reason Kaavya wanted to be the one holding and hushing Anjali. All in all Kaavya did not like this Angad very much. Riddhima froze on the earth under her feet when she saw how badly his arm was burnt.
"You are a fool" Anjali thought.
"No I am not," replied Angad.
"Angad what on the earth were you doing?" Armaan thought.
"Saving an innocent man's life," Angad said politely still hushing Anjali.
"What was the lifesaver up to this time?" Preet mocked at him in his thoughts and then smiled to himself. Angad just glared at him.
"Riddhima is going to explode... handle her as soon as possible...her mood is not at very bests," Prem told Angad through his thoughts.
"You never think about us when you put your life in danger do you... and what is wrong with Alex? Did you notice how badly your arm is injured? Anjali have been going nuts and not telling us anything. Tell me what happened...NOW," Riddhima asked him through her thoughts.
"Well, he," Angad pointed at Alex, "was taken into a trap by conspirators and they were asking him about the description of the prince when Chaaya, Pia and Ashleysha discovered that he was shielded they called Manthan to do his gig." Angad decided to tell her the truth because he knew he owes that to all of them.
"Well you know that he would not have said a word even with the world's most excruciating torture," roared Armaan.
"I just couldn't leave him there to get tortured by Manthan when he is at no fault... this is total unjust and dishonourable... why would he suffer for the prince he has never known or might never know?" Angad defended.
"Softy," thought Armaan.
Angad scowled at Armaan and then answered Riddhima, "And I do care about you all. You know that so don't you dare question that again... and Anjali do you care to patch me up, believe me it burns like hell." Anjali nodded and then broke off. She took Angad's hand to take him with her but when he did not budge she turned to see him. There was a totally amused expression on his face. She noticed his eyes move from one preserver to other. There was no doubt that he was listening to their thoughts. He was so taken by his friends that every other thought was not registered but now everything was clear. He was grinning like crazy. And then his eyes stopped on Kaavya and that was the time she noticed him. He was handsome and had a caring look to his face. But right now it was all rigid. His eyes seemed to converse in their own mystical language. Angad roared with laughter and that brought her back to the earth.
"That is really rude," Anjali commented.
"Anjali sweetheart," Angad said purposely and seeing Kaavya flinch a little gave him immense pleasure, "you know I can't help it and you have no idea how amazing their thoughts are. I never knew they called Armaan a chameleon... how come I didn't think of that?" Angad gave Armaan I-got-back-at-you look to Armaan to which Armaan scowled, "They think Prem is meddler and Preet as a disaster." Prem just bowed in acknowledgement mocking at preservers and Preet stood there as if he hadn't listened to Angad, "There they get another point for that. And Miss Kripa Nanda thinks I am freak though she hasn't even met me which I find is presumptuous and a very bad habit. Again she thinks Riddhima is crazy just because she is marrying Armaan which again is totally unfair and to top it all they hate the fact that we call our home nest."
THE PRESERVERS just stood there wondering what has struck them. Their eyes were set on Angad, the man who knew all their thoughts. Kripa loathed him. How dare he comment about her? Riddhima and Anjali were furious. They can tolerate anything but if it was against their house that was not acceptable.
"Angad this was very impolite and ungracious... I know you can't help reading other people's thoughts but you shouldn't have embarrassed them in such a way... they are part of family like others. You are bred better than that. I think you should apologize," reprimanded Riddhima as she was too well bred to do something like that.
"Yes, Your Highness, I think you are right as they will mind unlike my friends to have listened to their thoughts," Angad realized what he has done. Such thing was not at all acceptable from him he turned to preservers and apologized sincerely and went straight to healing room. As Riddhima explained them about Angad's powers, Anjali nursed Alex and Angad in the healing room. She had started healing Alex first on Angad's request and she knew better not to negotiate even though he was more injured than Alex. She what he was thinking, Riddhima has taken her anger on Angad in this way. Everyone make mistakes once a while. They may think Angad is prefect but that doesn't mean he actually is. He also has a right to make mistakes. Angad mentally was beating himself for doing such a disgraceful act. Never in his life he had used his power in such rude manner and discomforted some one. What made him loose control over his conscience? What made him speak all those words? He knew the answer but he will never admit it. The realization has scared the daylights out of him. It was a big complication for him. And he planned to stay away from it.
NOTE: All the words in itlaics from now on will be the thoughts of the characters
Hey guys,
I am back with second part and please do tell me how you liked it. So, I have introduced a bunch of conspirators in this part. I know you all want o read about the powers of preservers but you all have to wait till next part as the protectors will be starting their first project. Any questions regarding anything are welcome. I am really sorry about the delay. I was caught up by university. Please guys give me detailed comments so that I can make improvements in next parts. And long replies means long updates too. PLEASE do reply. Silent readers please do reply to appreciate my hard work. If anyone doesn't want to reply just send me a PM. Guys! Any guesses who prince is. You guys don't seem to wonder about that at all.
Asever❤️
Amneet😉
Edited by amneet89 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
#84

nice update..thanx fr PM dear...😊

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Posted: 17 years ago
#85

nice part

their thought reading was nice but i think u should either change the colors put their thoughts in bracket
cant really makeout which r the thoughts and actual conversation.
when r the preservers going to use any of their powers its only custodians using the powers.on the whole it was fabulous.
waiting for the next part continue soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
#86
hey amneet
thanks for the pm sweety
awesome dear
this was one rocking part
esp the way angad read each one's thoughts was hillarious n kavya getting jealous hmmm
amzing
actually my net was not working for a fornite so now im filled with pms so have to read all of them n have to reply to each ff to the replies will be short for now but a big reply from next part onwards pucca
sorry for now
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Posted: 17 years ago
#87
hey excellent part.had been really anxious to read it! again its wonderfully written..i luv d bro-sis relationship btwn angad-anjali..kavya jealous was damn cute..n it was d best part for me! angad is really entertaining..!! really swt of him to save alex! it was hilarious wen he commented on odaz thoughts..n the way he responfded to kavyaz thoughts ..lol..over all wonderfully written..onderful expressions and a very interesting part! plz continue asap
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Posted: 17 years ago
#88
hey hi
thanx for the pm
u asked who i think is the prince, i have this weird feeling its angad
now as for the update
i liked
1. the conspirators and their way of extracting things, before manthan came into picture that is.
2. kavya- anju scene, though i think it cannot be called that b'coz anju was not involved.😆
3. angad's kindness. i think next will be angad-krips track coming up.😉
actually i liked it all👏⭐️
i find krips really cute, though she is mentioned only once and plz add a preet scene in the next update 2.
and update soon.
anshu
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Posted: 17 years ago
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amazing part sweeetie
i loved it sooooooooooo much
toooooo gooood
i will comment later
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Posted: 17 years ago
#90
great part
angad was very sweet

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