Who do you think you are ?

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OK Di ...here I am taking ur advice/solution u gave me in my 'can't get out of my head' post ! πŸ˜›πŸ˜‰
Now this is written not by the writer mariee but the fan-girl mariee who has literally fallen head over heels for chickee's first novella & obviously my all time favorite saanjh's new ss (grrr...though she isn't updating now😑😭). Inspired by the kalpi of these 2 stories , here comes a song fic presenting kalpi's POV from a different perspective in a bit different story (the concept ...I know is pretty old , but yet I wanted to try a hand on itπŸ˜ƒ)

Warning - The OS is gonna be very very small , so no complaining !! As also I amnt responsible if any of u suffer from a brain hemorrhage ... Telling u in advance !

Plz play this song in the bg ...warna os ka koi effect Hi nahi aayega ...here's the link

https://youtu.be/3H21fj0hQRM

Who do you think you are ?


"Main majboor hu kalpi ...main majboor hu !!" Her blood boiled at those words as she got the green dupatta closer to her chest. Her eyes hadn't shone out of joy like they had 5 years back when she did that & neither were they moist like the time she had returned all his gifts after the marriage fiasco. Why would they even be ? She had stopped feeling stuff a long back. Besides he was no more than a fistful of regret & majboori stories.Such a fool she was , to ever believe him that he'll accept her after his year of revenge. He had a past where he blamed his mother to not keep her promises ..he was no different either !


Looking down at the box that arrived in her small lil world that morning , she started at the things ...yes , they were just things & nothing else. There was her (broken)engagement ring ,a calculative abacus, a fake plastic rose & some other THINGS.What the hell did he want from her now , after 5 long years ? Why was he sending her all these stuff...

I know I can't take one more step towards you
'Cause all that's waiting is regret
Don't you know I'm not your ghost anymore
You lost the love I loved the most

I learned to live half alive
And now you want me one more time
That's when she felt something fall at her feet. Throwing the dupatta back in the box she bent down to pick up the piece of paper. Staring at it as if it were the world's most interesting piece of white , she stood still for a moment ...her eyes shutting automatically.

5 years is a long span , but the scene was still a fresh in her mind. His fingers that bore down into her upper arms , the bruises had now vanished ...but now with her eyes shut she could feel it , all of it !!!

And who do you think you are?
Runnin' 'round leaving scars
Collecting your jar of hearts
And tearing love apart
You're gonna catch a cold
From the ice inside your soul
So don't come back for me
Who do you think you are?
"Don't you dare speak to my mom that way Kalpi ! And besides , what wrong is she saying ... DNA test ! What's wrong in it ? Its just a confirmation that the baby in your womb is mine ..."

She couldn't believe her ears , tears rolled down her face. The man whom she had trusted with all her heart , mind & soul was questioning this to her !! He was the one who had actually brought up this love thing between them ...he was the one who had come to her house and asked for her hand ...he was the one who had refused to listen when all she said that she wasn't ready to get physical yet & that they should wait until marriage ...he was the one who had then left her at the altar for ppl to make fun of her .. And he was the very one who had asked her to wait for him ... Every single memory , every single question made her cry even more. But now ?? When she stood there with her baby bump , the question was , did she really want to wait for him... There was an immediate yes from her inside being as she cursed herself for loving raghav to that unimaginable extent. Afterall what was she , a mere 20 year old standing in a situation she might have never dreamt of in her life ... With a hope that the Raghav she had loved would somehow take over this inhumane person standing in front , she questioned ...

"Raghav ...do YOU want me take the DNA test ? "

"Listen kalpi ...its for mo..."

"Do YOU or you don't ?"

Silence

"Ummm...Maybe ...I mean , why not ! "

There was an escapade of the much alonged breath as her chest shuddered coz of the same. For soem reasons the tears had now stopped , she realized the same when she saw Raghav's face clearly. The man she saw disgusted her. She wasn't hurt , she was scarred ...scarred for life.

She nodded with an expressionless face ...& LEFT !

Kalpana opened her eyes. The memory of the day had always been painful ... She noticed the letter in her hand again. What can he even say now ?? Nothing... He had nothing to say then when he was majboor , he had nothing to say now !

I hear you're asking all around
If I am anywhere to be found
But I have grown too strong
To ever fall back in your arms

And I've learned to live half alive
And now you want me one more time

And who do you think you are?
Runnin' 'round leaving scars
Collecting your jar of hearts
And tearing love apart
You're gonna catch a cold
From the ice inside your soul
So don't come back for me
Who do you think you are?
The very next second she had opened the door & box was outside her house near the trash...

"Kalpi ..." She stiffened. She looked up ...yes , it was him !

The kalpi , the one she was 5 years back ...she would have just ran back to him , in his arms & would have agreed to another of his majboori ...but now ...

"Momma , momma ... Come here soon ! Stallion is running with my homework ...shooo...bad doggie ,shooo ..Arghhh...mommyyy " the voice that came from within , somewhat got control in her. She was a mother...she can't be marching onto people like she used to in the past whenever in anger ...

And it took so long just to feel alright
Remember how to put back the light in my eyes
I wish I had missed the first time that we kissed
'Cause you broke all your promises
And now you're back
You don't get to get me back

She wasn't the only one who had been affected by that voice , she saw Raghav step forward as well. Instinctively she had blocked his path by standing in between ... What right did he have ? None ! Wasn't her son just a piece of DNA proof for him ?

"Kalpi .. don't do this to me. Please come back to me... I love you ... And now I know he's my son .. "

There was an hysteric laugh moment ... So he's here for his DNA ! That only added to her hatred ...naa ...we hate people whom we love ...Raghav only disgusted her now !! She didn't even wish to speak to him ...

"Kalp..." He stopped midway when he finally saw some sort of movement on her part.

Kalpana got Raghav's letter from behind her back as she held it up to his eye level ... And Tore it ... TORE it to pieces. Who did he think he was ? To just stand at her door & suddenly go about claiming he loved her ... She no longer wanted to make him a part of her life. He didn't deserve it ...

Once the paper was tattered in the smallest pieces possible she flung them in the air. The entire scene seemed dramatic , she could see Raghav's face getting paler ...his confidence washing away with every tear she gave to the paper...yes he had underestimated her & maybe even thought that she would go back to him. How wrong could he get ?

Highly uninterested in seeing his face even for a millisecond more , she slammed the door shut.

And who do you think you are?
Runnin' 'round leaving scars
Collecting your jar of hearts
Tearing love apart
You're gonna catch a cold
From the ice inside your soul
Don't come back for me
Don't come back at all

Who do you think you are?

Who do you think you are?
A second passed by ... 2 ...then 3 ... For reasons unknown she thought she felt better but was also on the verge of crying !!

"Mommy ..." That squeak got her out of her reverie as she tried shunning her breaths. She can't be crying now, not in front of her son as she straightened her shoulders & wiped the tears at the corner of her eyes.

"Coming dear ..." She finally spoke before throwing a final glance at the door.

Who do you think you are?

So that was it ! It was my first time writing an anti Raghav story ...and I felt I sucked at it !!! Hahahaha .. I think I'm better off with my happy happy stories πŸ˜‰πŸ˜†
Nonetheless I thought likha hai toh upload Hi kar deti hu πŸ˜†


Now the song ...do ull like it ?? I do ...the line
"You're gonna catch a cold from the ice inside your soul !"

Is my favorite πŸ˜³πŸ˜ƒ You have any other ..then lemme know !

MARUSHKAA


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Edited by maarushkaa - 9 years ago

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snacky thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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uhfff!!! back after a long tym on ema forum... nd the os was a bang on one... that was great... loved it
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Posted: 9 years ago
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πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘...very well written... Bravo Mariee I love how you incorporate such a beautiful song choice into an amazing OS ...All the words & lyrics fit perfectly...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Really u hv written anti raghav story...😲
Loved it he deserves this...wonderful...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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There is still always a reason to like the story.. even if its Anti Raghav.. wonderfully depicted emotions. ..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hmmm so fan gil marie πŸ˜› umm Marushkaa. I actually don't like to call you Marie πŸ˜” Marushkaa sounds beautiful rather uniquely beautiful. πŸ˜‰ Though I Haven't read the OS yet, like button has already been pressed for I know tune likha hai to mast but mujhe jealous krne wala hi hga πŸ˜›
Res
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Ja mai nhi karti comment πŸ˜›



Isko short nhi maha short bolte hai. πŸ˜† Ok this was something different than usual concept where kalpi's heart always melts in front of The Majboor Singhania. No girl with high self respect would want DNA test to proove her loyalty or chastity. She made the right move. There is no point in waiting for a Moron who can never stand for his love. You know I dont write ragna os based on original EMA story and thats the main reason for doing so. I hate to the core what Raghav did with Kalpi and her family. I dont really like Vitthla but they spent all their saving on their daughter's marriage and got nothing but the shock of their lives. 'Meri duniya tum ho Kalpi sirf tum' aise pagal insaan ki duniya hone se better insaan mar jae🀒

All in all it was nice. πŸ˜ƒ



Edited by ban18 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Way to go Marie!! applaud!! First of all the song is so appropriate for your concept!! So tell me, do you get inspired from these type of songs :))?!
I love the same part of the song you love!! Such strong words!! Full of meaning!!
Ok wud I be to bold to ask you in your own words, continue where chickee left of?! In Marie styling!! Wat say?! Still waiting on update for MMA!!
Oh!! and as usual you always impress me with your writing!! Whatever the story!! Hats off ;)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ban18

Hmmm so fan gil marie πŸ˜› umm Marushkaa. I actually don't like to call you Marie πŸ˜” Marushkaa sounds beautiful rather uniquely beautiful. πŸ˜‰ Though I Haven't read the OS yet, like button has already been pressed for I know tune likha hai to mast but mujhe jealous krne wala hi hga πŸ˜›

Res


Hahahaha ...impossible bansal ...u call me Marushkaa ...big deal πŸ˜‰
Tune res kiya toh samajh jaane ka ...ke yeh unres hoke ek line ka hoga ...afterall tu bhi toh meri tarah Hi aalsi hai πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: maarushkaa


Hahahaha ...impossible bansal ...u call me Marushkaa ...big deal πŸ˜‰
Tune res kiya toh samajh jaane ka ...ke yeh unres hoke ek line ka hoga ...afterall tu bhi toh meri tarah Hi aalsi hai πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

Upar dekh upar 4 lines to maine already likh di hai πŸ˜† kamla fan hu I believe in bachat πŸ˜†
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ban18

Upar dekh upar 4 lines to maine already likh di hai πŸ˜† kamla fan hu I believe in bachat πŸ˜†


OK ...lemme be honest !! I was shocked ...like mega mega shocked when I saw 4 lines ... I mean FOUR lines !!! πŸ˜²πŸ˜›πŸ˜†

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