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abxetz

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Posted: 10 years ago

#31

O god ye kammo mardalungi mai usse meri kalpi 😭 😭 thank god ki rags hai vaha kalpi keliye.its interesting dear please continue 😃

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angelpureness

@angelpureness

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Posted: 10 years ago

#32

Oh mini... Thank you for convincing me to give it a go... Just coz of the dreaded I... I would have missed out on such a fantabulous prologue...

The setting was beautiful... Curious to learn more about Kalpi's relationship with her mother... Is she harsh to make Kalpi strong 😆 I feel like there is more to Kamla's attitude... Maybe the harshness of life.

I like Kalpi... A girl who is curious and aware of the differences in the world... Wanting something different and better... She is going to be ambitious... I like that she is comfortable with herself... Is not apologetic about being poor... I like that when she wore Pakhi's hand me down... It was with positivity. Oh she is a beautiful character... And cute... Liked her shyness.

Ragav seems like a centred guy... Not obnoxious. He was kind, considerate and caring. It was a sweet gesture to get Kalpi a chocolate... A luxury every child loves. I see him as Kalpi's guardian angle. He will always look out for her.

Let me stop my imagination from wandering... Looking forward to the next update... And I am breaking my rule... Please update soon😳😆

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angelpureness

@angelpureness

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Posted: 10 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: _Mini_

I am trying not to make Paakhi the vamp but I am not sure.😉

Nnnaaahhhiii... My darling Pakhi... A vamp😭

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Saumya

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Posted: 10 years ago

#34

Suprb update Mini.. Sorry to late swthrt... What an emotional update dear.. Rula diya re tumne.. 😭 and this Kamla.. 😡 dear plzz update nxt chappy and thnx.. U kno for what...

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Minnie

@Illuminatus.

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Posted: 10 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: chahat4u
Hey mini, so good to see you updated.Officially welcome to the writer's club of this forum. 😆 😃 😛 Sounds interesting and yes, already serious. But tell me, do you really hate Kamla so much? 😛 😉 Kalpi sounds so cute and Raghav is so sweet. 😊 😳 Waiting for next part.

Hi Chahat,

Thank You yaar,

SO glad that you could take out time to read my creation. 😊

I am worried about the serious part. Hope the readers decide to stick with me... Coz if I can do the justice with my words, to the plot that is stationed, in my mind then this should be a meaningful ride.

Kalpi is just 11 in the prologue. Rags is 17. 😉

Already, plotting the next.

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Minnie

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Posted: 10 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: akshara82
😭 😭 what an emotional prologue..
i had tears just reading the prologue..
Eagerly waiting fr ur 1st Chapter.. 😉

ThanQ Akshara,

Thats a great compliment to a writer.Particularly this plot that I am trying to develop here.

Appreciate your support.

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Minnie

@Illuminatus.

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: Jaz_
Wonderful start. Loved how you've set the stage and the depiction of Kalpi. Already I've formed an emotional connect with the character. Kamla - that wretch..talk about child labor or more like slavery! I know it's a bumpy road ahead for Kalpi and more emotional setbacks for the lil girl, curious to see how she handles it. Her thoughts of how a mother ought to be..tugged at my heart. Loved how you showed the interaction between Raghav and Kalpi. The pen is mighter after all.. Please continue soon and thanks for the PM.

Hi Jaz,

You are right Jaz... more like slavery... keep reading!

Be with me and let me know what you think.

I am also trying to develop my writing so let me know what sounds effective and good to you.

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Minnie

@Illuminatus.

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: _Santhi_
😭 ethna pain i felt as if some 80's story bichari kalpi
i hope she grow up strong
nice story beginning is very pain full 😭

Hi Santhi,

There is still a lot of poverty, lack of education and injustice. And its not 80s but the current times.

The prologue is painful? That just tell you what the theme is about. 😭

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Minnie

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Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: abxetz
O god ye kammo mardalungi mai usse meri kalpi 😭 😭 thank god ki rags hai vaha kalpi keliye.its interesting dear please continue 😃

ThanX. for the support.

But, Rags hai Kalpi ke liye? How do you know? 😉

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Minnie

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Posted: 10 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: angelpureness
Oh mini... Thank you for convincing me to give it a go... Just coz of the dreaded I... I would have missed out on such a fantabulous prologue...
The setting was beautiful... Curious to learn more about Kalpi's relationship with her mother... Is she harsh to make Kalpi strong 😆 I feel like there is more to Kamla's attitude... Maybe the harshness of life.

I like Kalpi... A girl who is curious and aware of the differences in the world... Wanting something different and better... She is going to be ambitious... I like that she is comfortable with herself... Is not apologetic about being poor... I like that when she wore Pakhi's hand me down... It was with positivity. Oh she is a beautiful character... And cute... Liked her shyness.

Ragav seems like a centred guy... Not obnoxious. He was kind, considerate and caring. It was a sweet gesture to get Kalpi a chocolate... A luxury every child loves. I see him as Kalpi's guardian angle. He will always look out for her.

Let me stop my imagination from wandering... Looking forward to the next update... And I am breaking my rule... Please update soon😳😆

Darling Fuzz,

Thanx so much for reading yaar. I really appreciate it. Inspite of not liking 1st person narrative you did this for me.

But this is where it ends. dont ya worry.

Kalpi is a sweet thing. She is fine with her situation coz she does not know any better.

Rags is a wonderful man but wonderful men can have wonderful flaws like... we will see. (majboor is not one of them😉)

Love You!!

ps- You know I like Paakhi. But I am not sure how this one will turn up. Just remember she is a sweet soul but also a smart and rich brat with a poor best friend.😉 She knows how to take advantage of situations.

Edited by _Mini_ - 10 years ago

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