My heartbeat - epilogue pg68 - 01/03

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sampa79

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Posted: 10 years ago

#231

Read all chapters

awesome

update soon next part

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laavanya4u

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Posted: 10 years ago

#232

HI Angel dear.

Long time that we have communicated with each other.

You are currently incorporating two sensitive subjects in both of ur new ff's.Whether we like it or not,

these subjects are still a part and happening very commonly in the society.

Good,u are trying very hard to make us realise to be sensible,affectionate and understanding to those affected by these causes in the society.

U have taken so much pain to visualise this subject and planned an outline for this ff.Then why should you re-write the ff.Instead,give the required clarificaions at the right time/

Certain threads are loose to be tied up faster== Like how Raghav met Kalpi for the first time and what made him to realise his love towards her.etc.

Though selfish at that moment,What made Neetu to select Kalpi as the surrogate mother for Rag's child?????????Does she want Kalpi and Kamla to repay and help them as they did when she lost her husband or did she ever find out Raghav's love for Kalpi or Kalpi in love with Raghav??

Once,the much needed clarifications are given,the story will come in its path and pace automatically.

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MagicalMadness

@MagicalMadness

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Posted: 10 years ago

#233

Angel please update this or broken wings waiting. 😛

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zindgidilse

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Posted: 10 years ago

#234

Originally posted by: angelpureness

Thank you for believing I am capable... After reading your comment... I have figured out a way to bring about Ragna marriage that just might work in redeeming the story. I am actually liking the plot that has come into my mind.

A big hug... Mwah.

there is no point for not believing ur capabilities. U have ur own capability that come up with new idea, new story nd at top presenting them in every different way.

i m glad that u found a plot for ragna marriage after reading my comment. Thank god my comment was helpful to u though it was in a smallest help.

will wait for ur update.

a big hug to u too dear.🤗 Muah.

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pyardil

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Posted: 10 years ago

#235

Today I read all caps its awesome plz update next part soon and pm me 👏 👏 👏

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laavanya4u

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Posted: 10 years ago

#236

Dear,

Is Angel ur real name??????

Pls update sooonnn.

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savariya

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Posted: 10 years ago

#237

Angel dear please

I completely trust ur writing skills and is in love with all ur ragna ff's

Please update soon😊

Edited by savariya - 10 years ago

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angelpureness

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Posted: 10 years ago

#238

Originally posted by: laavanya4u
HI Angel dear.

Long time that we have communicated with each other.

You are currently incorporating two sensitive subjects in both of ur new ff's.Whether we like it or not,

these subjects are still a part and happening very commonly in the society.

Good,u are trying very hard to make us realise to be sensible,affectionate and understanding to those affected by these causes in the society.

U have taken so much pain to visualise this subject and planned an outline for this ff.Then why should you re-write the ff.Instead,give the required clarificaions at the right time/

Certain threads are loose to be tied up faster== Like how Raghav met Kalpi for the first time and what made him to realise his love towards her.etc.

Though selfish at that moment,What made Neetu to select Kalpi as the surrogate mother for Rag's child?????????Does she want Kalpi and Kamla to repay and help them as they did when she lost her husband or did she ever find out Raghav's love for Kalpi or Kalpi in love with Raghav??

Once,the much needed clarifications are given,the story will come in its path and pace automatically.

I have tried to show that Ragav avoids situations where he feels helpless. He has not expressed nor shared how he really feels about not being a father. There are small situations I mentioned, he hugs his mum, says he is fine and walks away. Another where he avoids the discussion with his wife and goes to the office.

Had I not rushed the chapters to bid farewell to Pakhi, I would have elaborated on it. How while both were hurting, dealing with the pain no one knew... It brought him closer to Kalpi. How Pakhi was so focused on her pain, his was neglected and how the situation led them to part ways.

So the side effect in rushing was that I did not get the opportunity to let's you see Ragna's journey towards each other. This is why I kept mentioning that focus on the characters journey and where it is leading. I always write Ragna stories. Readers could not get past the fact that Pakhi and Ragav were married. I understand and respect their feelings.

When writing it is important to keep the interest. I have to make sure information is not given too much too quickly. The story will get boring. In upcoming chapters you will find out what and why Neetu did what she did. A setting has to be set, there has to be a reasonable situation for the information to come out and use it to weave the story forward.

I can easily write A monologue where Neetu is explaining to her conscious why she did what she did. But it will be just a one off scene... For it is too early for me to use the information in Ragna's journey. And when the time comes for me to use the information, it will be a repetition and the element of suspense will be gone.

In upcoming chapters I will create sub plots and give the Ragna the depth. I will create situations where Ragav reflects on how he fell out of love and in love with Kalpi... How she became important.

Kalpi will reflect on her battles over her feelings for a married man.

Sometimes readers need to be patient, because if I rush to give all the information, the story becomes boring.

Edited by angelpureness - 10 years ago

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premap

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Posted: 10 years ago

#239

Good story, but it seems to take a lot of turns. Rags seems to show glimpses of our EMA 'Majhboor ' Raghav ! Agree with one of your comments, you started the story as your story but you had to cater to RagNa fans ,half way through ! The pure dislike and hatred for Paakhi will not be erased from our memory, No wonder all the RagNa fans were 'cheesed off ' to have Rags/Paaki married in your story . So you have turned your story into a comedy ! We do enjoy comedies, for your information, so carry on in your own way ! Keep up your spirits. [ Request , Kindly keep Paakhi off your story, if you want more readers to continue enjoying ].

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Minnie

@Illuminatus.

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Posted: 10 years ago

#240

Originally posted by: angelpureness

Don't you dare complain...😆

My original script was for Kalpi to leave... But you all were fixated on getting rid of Pakhi and wanted Ragna together.😆 Nobody was patient for the story to flow its course 😡😆

I would have loved the original concept. but this one is good too.

But If Raghav and Pakhi stayed married and have deep conversations and loved each other and Kalpi would have gone away to make a life for herself I would have enjoyed it more. I think that would have been a more deeper n mature fiction. More real life.

Its difficult to move out of a marriage. Its just not easy. Even if you hate them ... habits are very difficult to shed off.

Marriage, life together, sharing a house and relationship is very difficult to break in an instant.

But this is good too. Lets see what the characters have to say.