Retake of temple scene, an analysis or a FF? Maybe both!

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Ok, first of all I want to say that I am NOT happy with what is happening with EMA these days. The temple and the sindoor scene was total crap that the cvs dished out to us!
Having said that, I also want to say that these two buggers, Ashish and Rachana are so damn good at what they do, ie, acting, that I could not stop myself from writing that scene all overe again! šŸ˜† I have changed it a bit to add in what I would have liked in that scene and what as an audience would have clicked more to me!

So here you go!

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Temple

She entered the temple with a heavy heart. She had come here knowing that if she didn't come, he would do something very drastic. Even though she knew she had lost him the moment he walked into the chawl with paakhi as his bride, she wanted him to be safe. She understood why he married her. It didn't matter that she did not agree with his decision, she knew that she still loved him with every fiber of her being! And she would die a thousand deaths if anything were to happen to him.

Her hungry eyes wandered everywhere, scanning the surroundings to look for him. She knew she was late but also knew that he would wait. He would not give up so easily. It never occurred to her that he would not show up. He would never do that, specially not after that fateful night!

She called out, "I know you are here raghav, please don't test me anymore. Come out, we need to talk". With every word she was speaking, her resolve to stay strong was dwindling.

On the other side of the temple wall raghav sat crouched in despair and guilt to face the love of his life! The circumstances had changed drastically in the short span between the delivery of his message and her arrival at the temple. A part of him just wanted to forget everything and go envelope her in his arms. Oh, how his arms ached to hold her! But his guilt would not let him move. Suddenly the great raghav singhania had no courage to walk to his beloved. But her breaking voice broke through all the barriers. No matter what happens, he did not want to be the cause of anymore anguish and tears for her. He got up and came out of hiding.

The minute their eyes met, time stopped! Nothing mattered. Not the fact that he had abandoned her at the alter. Not the fact that he was now married to another woman. Not the fact that she had vowed to never meet him again. And definitely not the fact that she thought she would forget him and move on. When their feet started moving towards each other, closing the distance between them, neither realized. It was the magnetic pull of love beyond their control. They stopped just a step apart from each other. Neither spoke. Words were not needed. Their eyes were drinking each other. Conveying way more than words could have!

No one can tell who moved first to close in on that last bit of distance left in between them. But before either knew, they were home, in each other's arms, in a bone crushing hug. It was a thousand emotions each was going thru holding each other for dear life. Relief, contentment, fulfillment, completeness, a purity that none can describe! It was seconds, minutes or hours, none knows. Nothing else existed, nothing else mattered.

But alas, reality had its claws ready for as swiftly they had embraced each other, the reality struck faster! The image of him with another woman came before her eyes like a blow of a thousand hammers on her face! She used all her might to push him off. He was flabbergasted! His life was rejecting him. He looked at her in disbelief, how could she? Then his head bent down in shame. "I know I have wronged you. You know why but you have every right to be mad at me, but please don't turn yourself away from me. You know that my heart beats just for you. It will stop beating if you turned away" he said ever so slowly. The pain in his voice evident of his misery.

Hearing that the cords of her heart constricted further and she slowly made herself turn around to face him. "Where was I wrong in all this?" , was all she could manage to say. "No sweetheart, not you, it's me and my damn revenge that came in between us" he muttered, helpless, lifeless at the irony of life! "I didn't see life throwing this curveball at me...and it hit you".

Slowly he reached out to hold her face in his hands. He had barely caressed her cheek and the jolt that it evoked in her made her step back. He felt another blow to his heart. "Just hear me out sweetheart. I want, I NEED you to know what you mean to me. You are the blood that runs thru my body, you are the beats that my heart beats. You are the air I breathe. You complete me. I can only live if I know that I can die in your arms!" He paused. And completing his thought process she said questioningly, "But?"

He looked at her intensely, remorsefully, then with a resolve, he looked down at her hands and grabbed them, grabbed them tight and brought them up to his heart. He didn't want her to shake him off yet again. She didn't even try for she saw the intensity in his gesture. He took it as his cue to continue. "You know mom tried to kill herself today when I told her that I wanted to forget revenge and focus on getting my live back. She wants me to stay in this torture of a life for another year till she feels that she had her revenge. You know she has suffered enough in her life and I don't want to loose her again. I know neither one of us will be able to live happily if anything were to happen to her! I know it is asking for a lot, but I "need" you to wait, wait a year for me. Suffer the torture of separation for a year with me. After that there will be no you, no me. It will be just us!"

Although her heart believed every word he said, she responded, "Why, why should I trust you, why should I believe that at the end of one year, you won't abandon me again?"

"Because I love you...and you love me." He stated with so much depth and conviction that she just stared at him. Coming out of her stupor she said, "alas, this love was not enough for you to stop you from taking the step you did! Even though you knew that the day I decided to come back to your house after our fight over the party, I had considered you as my husband. What makes you think that I should believe you now?"

"Because that day, when you entered my house, you entered as my wife. So long before this so called marriage on paper happened, you were already my wife." Not knowing what overtook him that moment, he stepped back, turned around and walked back to God, all the while holing her hand with one hand. He stopped near the alter, grabbed a handful of sindoor, turned around to see her shocked face and before she could react filled her hair with sindoor. "I have completed the one ritual that marks you as mine even though you were mine from that day on. There was or is no other woman in my life. And there never will be. The day I even accidentally look at another, should be the last day of my life. I have put enough sindoor on you as I would put for you in a year. After that I will do that every day for the rest of our lives." He paused and looked deeply into her eyes. She slowly lifted her hand to feel the sindoor on her head and then brought it down to look at it. He continued, "now tell me, will you wait for me, for us, for a year? ". He looked at her imploringly. Like a beggar, begging for his lifeline. Her slight node and a faint smile was all he needed to feel he could breath again! He hugged her for dear life. He felt proud and content looking at her head adorned with his mark. He couldn't help but kiss her head over and over again muttering "you are mine and no one, not even God can separate us now!"

A thousand emotions were churning in her heart at the same time. She had accepted him as her husband a long ago, but today he had taken the ultimate step and branded her as his. He was her husband now and she is wife! Oh how wonderful that sounded! Even though it may not sound right to the world, she was his, and he hers. Feeling his kisses was pure bliss. She smiled and said with authority, "and you are mine. And don't forget that even for a split second when you are away from me. Always remember that your wife is waiting for you at the other end of this one year!"

Very reluctantly he broke the hug and grabbed her by the shoulders and gave her a passionate look that had pain written all over. Her face reflected the same emotions. He slowly bent down and kissed her forehead and said, I need to leave now as mom is unwell but keep my heart and my wife safe!"

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I would love to see some likes, comments, feedback!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#2
The way you showed it made the scene even more beautiful.😳
I wish it had that same amount of depth in the serial. You have great writing skills. Keep it up!😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Pookhi

The way you showed it made the scene even more beautiful.😳
I wish it had that same amount of depth in the serial. You have great writing skills. Keep it up!😊


Thank you so much! You are really kind! šŸ˜›
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hmmm get on!!! That was awesome! I love it!! You're hiding your talent!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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It is beautiful... Wow... You described the Mandhir scene perfect to a t...
Oh I must your reasoning for the ek mutthi sindoor was perfect... Beautiful explanation...šŸ‘

You are a beautiful write... Can't wait for you to write more😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beautiful ...analysis šŸ‘ Awesome
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Yellowdiamond

Hmmm get on!!! That was awesome! I love it!! You're hiding your talent!!


Thank you! I am truly humbled!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Great depth and I am sure if this was the scene then Ashish and Rachana would have breathe life into it 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: angelpureness

It is beautiful... Wow... You described the Mandhir scene perfect to a t...

Oh I must your reasoning for the ek mutthi sindoor was perfect... Beautiful explanation...šŸ‘

You are a beautiful write... Can't wait for you to write more😊


Thanks my dear! I write when the heart calls out! šŸ˜‰
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Jaymaa

Beautiful ...analysis šŸ‘ Awesome


Thank you!

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