SS - Hamesha Ke Baad Bhi - Part 2 page 9 (03/02)

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Posted: 12 years ago

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awesum update neha di... we all know no one is bettr than you when it comes to JeeMan... and as ususal you rocked the update... i am very excited to read.. plzz continue soon 🤗

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Srivani

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Posted: 12 years ago

#52

so beautiful and awesome!!

love the dialogues!!😃

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Amii

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Posted: 12 years ago

#53

Reminds me of lines "Mainu ehne hi saah chahide jo tere naal guzaare jaan" so apt for Jeeman :) (atleast it makes sense in my head)

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Shaza (Atma My LifeHeart)

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Posted: 12 years ago

#54

Excellent updates and yes mujhay samajh a gai hay hahaha plz pm me next time plz

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Posted: 12 years ago

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nice dear. plzzz pm me???????

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Biya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#56

awsum,to gud,waiting eagerly fr the next,thanx fr the pm.

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NEHA KASHYAP

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Part 2

"Viren, sambhaliye apne aap ko… iss waqt baaki ghar walon ko aap ke support ki zaroorat hai… aap aise karenge toh un logon ko kaun sambhalega…" He stood, his eyes sad, and stepped toward Viren.

"Toh kya karun main Dr Manan.. Mujhe kuch samajh nahin aa raha" he looked at Dr Manan with pleading eyes..

"Main samajh sakta hun Viren… humari special team yehi koshish mein hai ki Jeevika aur bacha dono thik rahen.. Par jeevika ki body bilkul bhi respond nahin kar rahi hai.. Kaash Jeevika us time Manvi ke paas naa hoti toh shayad use ek dum se itna bada shock na lagta…" Dr Manan said cursing that time..

Suddenly something stuck to Viren's mind and he looked at Manan." Ek min Dr Manan… aapko shayad jaan ke hairaani hogi.. Kyunki main khud nahin samajh paaya hun abhi tak… Jeevika ko toh pata hi nahin ki yeh sab ho gaya hai…" Viren said still thinking about that incident..

"Kya matlab? " asked Shocking Manan, " I mean, mujhe toh Jeevika ki haalat dekh ke yahi lag raha tha ki iski wajah Manvi ki…"

"Main khud hairaan hun Dr manan par sach yahi hai"... Viren replied.

"Viren mujhe detail mein bata sakte hain ki exactly hua kya tha?? Kyunki jo Jeevika ki condition hai iss waqt usse yahi lagta hai ki use bohat bada shock laga hai.." Dr Manan asked confusingly..

"Sure… Uss din dinner ke baad Jab sab sone chale gaye toh Main Jeevika aur Virat wahin Manvi ke paas baithe baatein kar rahe the kyunki Manvi ko neend nahin aa rahi thi… bohat mushkil se Jeevika ne use sulaya.. bas uske baad main Jeevika ko dusre room mein le gaya taaki woh bhi thoda rest kar paaye... par achanak ghante baad uth ke usne yeh bolna shuru kar diya ki Manvi use chod ke jaa rahi hai aur yeh kehte kehte woh behosh ho gayi aur Udhar Manvii... " Viren sighed and closed his eyes tightly as not wanting to remember those things..

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Dr Manan was still in shock after he had a conversation with Viren… He stayed there, still, for about an hour after Viren left, thinking deeply, about everything.
he thought to ask about it to Purohit ji.. So he made his way towards Ganga Ghat and told him everything…

"Beta jab hum kisi ko bohat pyar karte hain na tab usse door hona bohat mushkil ho jaata hai.. Jaise jaise humara pyar badhta jaata hai, humari aur saamne wale ke dil ki rassiyan majboot hoti jaati hain aur majboot hoke woh ek dusre ko iss tarah jakad leti hain ki uss janjaal se nikalna asambhav ho jata hai…
Aur Jeevika Maanvi ko toh poora Hrishikesh jaanta hai ki woh dono do hoke bhi ek hain…Unki jaan ek dusre mein basti hai… unka pyar pyar nahin hai…pyar toh hum bas insaan se kar sakte hain.. Jab pyar hadh paar kar jaaye toh woh Ibaadat ya Bandagi ki jagah le leta hai… aur woh ibadat ya badagi sirf Bhagwan se hi ho sakti hai… unn dono ke liye woh hi ek dusre ka bhagwan rahi hain…Ibaadat karti hain woh ek dusre ki...Unn dono ka rishta aisa hai ki unhe ek dusre ke baare mein jaan ne ke liye saath hone ki zaroorat nahin padti... unhe lafz instemal nahin karne padte...woh jitna ek saath hoke paas hoti hain usse zyada kareeb woh ek dusre se door hoke hoti hain.. Insaan mar ke bichad sakte hain par Aatma aur Parmatma ko koi juda nahin kar sakta Manan…Tum doctor ho, iss baat pe yakeen karna tumhare liye shayad mumkin nahin hoga.. Par vigyaan se upar bhi ek cheez hai aur woh Bhagwan hai.. Ab tak toh iss baat ko tum jaan hi gaye hoge na… Tum log insaan ke shareer ka ilaaj kar sakte ho.. Par sirf tab jab uss shareer ki aatma chaahe..."

"Aap hi batayiye na purohit ji main kya karun ab? Jeevika 6 mahine pregnant hai… us ki jaan ke saath saath uske bache ki bhi jaan ko Khatra hai…"

"Tum bas apni koshish karte raho aur hausla rakho… jo hoga ache k liye hoga aur baaki beta anhoni ko toh koi ni taal sakta na… "

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Mannu jab tak baby ka janam nahin ho jaata.. yeh decide nahin ho jata ki woh chutki hai ya chutku.. tu apna poora dhyan rakhegi.. apne khaane peene ka..apni davayion ka.. sab kuch.. bhagwan kare usse pehle tujhe apna donor mil jaye.. lekin agar naa mila toh promise kar ki tu cancer ko apne upar haavi nahin hone degi.. tu cancer ko apni muthi mein band karke rakhegi..

Reminding those lines of Jeevika, Manvi came to ganga ghaat... and sat on their fav place, feeling much close to her parents.

" mamma papa aap batao main kya karun? main di ka promise nahin nibhaa paayi aur jo ab sharat woh rakh rahi hain woh bhi main nahin maan sakti.. batao na main kya karun? Di ke sath main reh nahin sakti aur unhe apne saath leke jaa nahin sakti... Par di bhi toh meri baat nahin maan rahi naa...Kyun woh nahin samajh rahi ki... She stopped when she heard Jeevika behind her...

"Mujhe pata tha tu mujhe yahin milegi", She said stepping down to the stairs of ganga-ghaat where her Manvi was sitting...

Listening to her she suddenly got up and turned back. She was shocked to see her Di giving her angelic smile. She smiled back at her but that smiled couldn't stay more than 1 second as again reality took over it. She moved towards her Di and tried to touch her face slightly.

"Di aap meri baat kyun nahin maan rahi hain.."

"Mannu phir wohi baat.. Abhi maine tujhe kaha thodi der pehle? Tu meri shart maan le… main teri baat maan jaungi…"

"Diii yeh mumkin nahin hai…"

"Haan toh phir main bhi teri baat nahin maan sakti"

"Di dekho idhar.. Main aapki baat samajhti hun… par aapne kabhi socha hai ki aap is ek promise ke chakkar mein apne baaki vaade tod rahi hain.. apni zimmevariyon se bhaag rahi hain... mere saath dhoka kar rahi hain..."

"Mannu tu aise kyun keh rahi hai...tu kyun nahin samajhti hai ki main nahin reh paungi uss duniya mein tere bina...baad mein marne se acha hai ki main tere sath hi chalun"

"Aur mera kya? har baar aap apna kyun fayda sochti ho? meri mannu meri behan.. sab mera mera karke aap hi kyun apni baatein manwaa leti ho?? Mera kuch nahin?? Meri di nahin hai kya?? meri behan ka koi wajood nahin?? uski zindagi koi zindagi nahin??? Hamesha ke baad bhi sath rehenge iss ek vaade ke chakkar mein aap baaki saare vaade kaise tod sakti hain Di??? Meri har baat maan ne ka vaada... meri har wish poori karne ka vaada... Hamesha khush rehne ka vaada... aur agle janam mein meri Maa ban ne ka vaada... par aap... agla janam toh chodo isi janam mein palat gayi Di...Jab tak main uss shareer mein thi aap uska khyaal rakhti rahi.. ab jab main saath nai de paayi, aap bhi chod ke aa gayi? Kaun muktiii dega mujhe??? KAUNNN??? Hai kisi mein itni shakti??? Jawaab do?? Bina aapke chuye Meri Aatma ko shaanti mil jaayegi?? Yahi chahti ho ki main aise hi tadapti rahun??? kabhi isse mukt naa houn?? bolo di?? Naa main kabhi yahan se mukt houngi aur naa hi agla janam le paaungi... Di aap apni ek zidd mein meri saari khwahishon ko maar rahi hain...Saying this Manvi stepped forward, bent downplacing her hand on Jeevika's bump. Then she looked straight into Jeevika's eyes and mumbeled "AAP SIRF MAUT DEKH RAHI HAIN AUR MAIN APNI AGLI ZINDAGI DEKH RAHI HUN"

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Sorry for the late update guys... But next one i'll update soon... tilll then keep commenting😊
I dont know ifthis story is making any sense but I seriously wanted to write this since so long... I apologise if i waste ur time by making u read this crap... And a biggg thanks for the commentsss u guys did after 1st part... Do tell me if i should continue or not...thankuuu :):):):)

Love,
Neha...

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-Pj-

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Posted: 12 years ago

#58

Hello!
I may have to re comment after I read it again. However if I don't comment now then I will most definitely forget to.

They are ghosts on Ganga Ghat! Well you know I would love that. I had told you what I had first thought about your story and I was half right in one being dead. But enough about that.

It was really well written and so clear in what you wanted to get across. Viren describing and filling in the back story of Maanvi's demise and it link to Jeevika. We know and have always talked about them dying together but you added in the extra trauma of Jeevika being pregnant at that time. The family don't just lose their girls but the possibility of another life. Loved the last line. All you are seeing the death and I am seeing new life. The life that is within her. However as you most clearly pointed out can she live in a world where her sister does not.

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rinish

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Posted: 12 years ago

#59

neha u dnt knw me par i knw u yushna alwayz tell me abt u and ur stories. i was a silent reader but dn yushna ko jhinjhorna parta hai for updates so i joined it.. i have read ur tu meri zindagi hai and it was really good.. u write sooo well ky apnay yushna ko bhi peechay chor dia hai *runs before yushna beat me' one common thing between neha and yushna ap dono rulatay bht ho. dnt ever say it a crap yushna will get hurt she is a big fan of jeevika.. amazingly written an full impact wala update.. plz write soon and pm me plz..:-)

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Amii

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Posted: 12 years ago

#60

Update reminds of these lines:

Kiye jaa raha hoon sajde par sajde
har baar bas yahi khata kar raha hun
bas ek tere jeene ki khatir
main apne jeene ki dua kar raha hun.

Edited by Amii90 - 12 years ago

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