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Posted: 12 years ago

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Hey girl, thank you so much for your comments I can't explain them.

Ashamed, it might not be the right word, but it is what is suited. She ashamed that it happened her. But for anyone they would wonder why it happened to them. What did they do that they deserve it? Everyone else wishes to help but that pain inside of her cannot be described.

I like adding in little things, but there not always fully developed. Don't worry about the SS, when you get time. Btw which SS, I've finished two now. I will surely let you know when I write stuff, I'm been a bit active as it was the holidays but we will see once school starts up again.

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: romanticgurl070
nice one
but at actually happeed to jeevs n y is she ignoring viren n manvi

Thanks for liking it.
She's hiding away as she trying to deal with what has happened.
We can't always articulate what we feel, it's easy to keep a distance.

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delete1234

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Posted: 12 years ago

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It was How Thing's Change if memory serves correct. I hadn't realised you'd had another one! Will look for that :)

I hope your holidays were fun, I know I'll be dreading going back to school on Monday, and I'm guessing you would be too after two weeks off :L

And I couldn't agree more; in my opinion, possibly the worst thing that could happen to a person. No one can understand, or start to understand. Jeevika's reactions were portrayed beautifully, and you did justice to that.

Good luck with school and all Teacher-ji :)

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-Pj-

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Oh ok, I have How things changed and How life goes on. I personally don't like my SS How things but you might like the first one.

I think I should change my name to Teacherji. I know two weeks off, don't wanna go back but life must go on.

Thanks you for liking the SS and am glad it can't off well. I didn't want to made it to over the top as its something that is so hard to feel.

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vishwa patel

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Posted: 12 years ago

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brilliant update👏 loved ur OS

all emotions were beautifully described

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-Pj-

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: Kryan4ever
WOW , this is yet another truly amazing OS ,
All the emotions were portrayed perfectly and the story as a whole was just a treat to read !
Thank you for this ,
Please write more os's or ff's , you seem like a very good writter 😊

Thank you for your comments. I will try to write more but it just depends. I'm glad you liked this story and could relate to the emotions for them. As writing emotions can be difficult to express clearly.

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Aashima

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Posted: 12 years ago

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A kindly request can you please continue :) its really awesome the way you have said, it really touched mine heart. N if you did continued(you have to lol) please send me a pm.

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-Pj-

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: nadianadyne
Amazingly written os:)
Love how u potray everyone emotions
Do write more:)

Thank you for liking the Os.

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: urmilsalve
as usual again a brilliant piece of writing...ur writing skills r really gr8...the way u potray emotions of every character is marvellous...hats off..

Thank you for liking this Os.

Thank you for the complement of my writing skill, I actually think I'm not that great, I try just to make sure it is all coherent.

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Priya

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Pj, Sorry m late, I did read it the same day you posted :)

One of your best works I'd say & very much on a right time when we are going thru a phase of change on large...

Everything was brilliant ...Jeevika's situation, Virat's restlessness , Viren's helplessness & Manvi's worries, Penned really nicely

Jeevika not wanting to disturb her loved ones even more & somewhere deep down scared of Thier reactions Kept every pain , trauma to herself, which is natural. Viren's frustration of not being able to be there for her...the question as to why it had to Their small happy family...Very realistic

I especially loved the last part , Manvi's words

"Di You didn't have control over what happened to you, But you can Control NOW "

Again Jeevika 's " She told you "...& her pulling away But Viren's emotional but still firm assurance...I loved this because neither Manvi Nor Viren Were over reactive...She would have hated sympathy in Their eyes But it was Just an assurance that it was not your fault & that you have every right to be happy , to be safe & To live ...Yet Again

& yeah Jeevika being paranoid for a while was nicely described !!

Really Awesome ...Loved it

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