How things change... - SS updated pg 20

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Posted: 12 years ago

#111

Originally posted by: Amii90
About time I commented- I was almost about to logout forgetting that I came here only to comment! So before I forget again, here it is:

Finally got the background story- Viren's clash SB and everything else that led to their moving out of the Vaderamansion! Makes sense! Past and present are beautifully written and projected! With the last part, I loved the part where Jeevika says how she hates names like Chutku or Chutki lol cuz thats what we were discussing in the AT when Mannu said it, rem? Even in one of the scene Viren didn't use the words either!


You definitely need 2-3 or parts for a proper finish, looking forward to those and hopefully those will be updated soon so I don't have to read old parts to refresh my memory lol (not ur fault, just memory fails me at times)! But shaped up well and once u finish it all, I might just read all of it again to get that continous flow of reading!!!


Apologies for late comments but I did read it the very day you updated it!!! Write soon :)

You don't have to apologise, life is busy I know that. I love reading your comments otherwise I wouldn't ask. (Just being selfish) Glad the whole story worked for you, as I said I had a hard time writing that as I never planned it out. Which is also the large delay in the update. As long as it worked! I kinda of wanted to tell that part and be done with it. Not dwell on the past issue but simply explain.

I remember us saying we dislike the names, Chutku and Chutki and I hated it as well. Plus it reminded me of Krystle and Nia's interview about baby names - well the baby names in the show. Viren didn't use the words either? Uh I'm confused?

Did you read it all again this time? God. It's long. I am aiming to update over Xmas, I may ask you to pm for me if you would be so kind.

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Priya

@nobo

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Posted: 12 years ago

#112

That was amazing pj...Lovvved itt
But did i missed any part in between.😕 when did mannu got pregnant

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Amii

@Amii90

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Posted: 12 years ago

#113

And thats a WRAP and what an interesting one!!! I quickly skimmed over the initial parts just to have a proper closure and reconnect those dots as the story completed the full circle! "How Things Change"- You took this concept and narrated it beautifully and the "change" was explicit in your writing and it progressed beautifully as each part was updated! Brilliantly executed cohesive story- never a dull moment!

The last part was unreal; the pace did seem a little fast; however, I also understand your part about not dragging it to extremes either but having said that, the pace didn't have an negative impact on the story! Again the suspense in the last part kept me on my toes as I thought you might be finishing this story on a serious note but glad to see it otherwise. Again your story maintains that balance of happiness and saddened emotions which works amazingly in totality!

The incorporation of the last note (Smiled at the 9th June part lol as that is my birth date- just had to mention that) was something that gave it a proper final touch- reconnecting dots, tying the ends, and thats really what shows how you have managed to make this theme work in a way it did!!! Jeevika reading and erasing those old messages- BEAUTIFUL scene and like you said, she deleted them but certainly didn't let them delete from her memory; they became invalid but that doesn't take away the fact that those messages were significant at one point of time! Person doesn't really forget their old thoughts, just learns to move on with them!!!

It was a pleasure reading this SS, Pj and its been a beautiful reading journey!!! Always awaiting your next :)

Edited by Amii90 - 12 years ago

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pinky.padda

@pinky.padda

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#114

cant believe this has finished absolutely brilliant

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vishwa patel

@-vish-

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

#115

beautifully written!!👏

amazing ending

thanx for pm

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SJ6...

@SJ6...

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#116

wooow im shocked for words loved the pdate babe and loved this whole story

when u write anything on virika or both the jodis do pm me..

xxx

<3<3<3<3<3<3

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Ashima

@sweetdollashita

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#117

awesome ending

loved this whole ss...

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urmil

@urmil

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#118

loved the way u ended it...with special mention to ur line "though all those emotions were valid at the time, they have no place in her life"...well said...this is life which make us laugh when we think about the time we cried in past...thanks for pm...i am happy to have a buddy lke u